Originally posted by: forever_young
Lovely concept Jazz!! looking forward to it!! Pleasee PM me whenever you updatee 😊
Thanks a ton Krupaa!! PM will shortly reach your Dabba :)
Originally posted by: forever_young
Lovely concept Jazz!! looking forward to it!! Pleasee PM me whenever you updatee 😊
looks really interesting , continue soon please...i dont know why but I'm excited about this story
Before moving ahead, I want to make 1 thing clear, I dont want a one line comment saying "Nice, Continue soon, Pm me whenever you update". It simply irritates me! I have typed such a lengthy Chapter for all of you to read, i would appreciate if you give me a detailed comment about the Chapter, your doubts and if you guys want something to be added in my next chapters.
I have no problem with HOW many people comment on this FF, but the quality of the comments matters for me, and you never know, I might give regular updates for this FF, and that will happen only when I am happy with the response!
Just before i let you all read the first part.. here are the main Characters which make an appearance in the first chapter!
Maanvi
Jia Younger sister of Maanvi, a naughty girl of 10 loves her sister a lot
Ankur Youngest in the family, loved and adored by all, aged 6
Sunaina A housewife, fully dependent on Maanvi for running the house.
-----------------------------
Today's fast life, ever increasing competition and pressure of surviving in this world has made every one blind and dumb. They follow things just because the others do it and not because they want to do it. All that matters to them is their status, their bank balance and their individual life. Come, lets meet Maanvi Chaudhary, General Manager of the Chaudhary empire, a girl with a high head, strong heart and a very low profile. People know nothing about her nor her family. For them she is their saviour and a God sent angel.
A beautiful girl in her early twenties sitting in the chair of a GM is very shocking but hats off to this young, determined lady who saved her dad's company from a very big loss after he dies two years ago.Since then, Maanvi is a dad, a mentor for her siblings and a support for her helpless mother.
"Jia, get up fast, I am getting late for office.. After leaving you at your school i have to rush for an urgent meeting.. Jia, Ankur hurry up and get ready else i will splash chilled water on you both.."
"Ma, please wake them up else i will leave them here. Your love is spoiling them, Mom."
"Maanvi, Its just 6 AM in the morning and you have to reach your office at 8, so let them sleep for a while and you in the meantime can go for your walk and have breakfast. I'll help them get ready before you come back home!"
"I love you Mom, I will be back at 7, please make sure they are ready by then!"
"I love you too Maanvi!"
Maanvi left for her morning walk and her mother sat on the chair admiring a few photographs of a prospective groom for her darling daughter. Scared of the verdict of Maanvi, she decided to hide the photographs and tell Maanvi just before she leaves for her office.
Waking up her kids, Sunaina fed them, and asked them to get ready before Maanvi comes and scolds them for not listening her.
Jia and Ankur rush back in their rooms, get ready and just to irritate Maanvi put a blanket over a pile of pillows and hide behind the doors.
Maanvi returns from her walk and rushes into the room and blasts off at Jia and Ankur assuming that they are still asleep.
Maanvi, after panicking a lot, finds them hiding behind the door looking like a prince and a princess in the white school dress, nicely ironed and neatly made hair Her anger flies away after seeing the magnificent smile on her darling angels. She embraces them in a hug and rewards them with kisses and wishes them for a good day at school.
After leaving them, Maanvi sat with her mother, reading newspaper and sipping a cup of tea.
"Maanvi, at what time will your meeting get over?"
"Mom, this meeting is very important for me, If we get the deal, I will have an awesome opportunity to enhance my architecture skills. The initial schedule was of 4 hours, but i don't know anything if it gets stretched or starts late. You had some work?"
"Err. Nothing,You get ready, I have some work to do, so i need to go. "
"Mom, I know you can't lie or hide things from me.. so its better to spill the beans now"
"Okay, You are insisting so much, so i think i should tell you. But before that promise me you wont say no to what i would say."
"Yeah, I wont say no, but speak fast.. I am getting late."
"Maanvi, a boy along with his family is coming to see you in the evening and i want you to be back at sharp 6 PM to get ready and prepare food for them."
"But, Mom..."
"You wont say no!"
"This is ridiculous Mom, You very well know, i don't want to marry right now, but still you won't stop looking boys for me. What do you think, the other 4 boys rejected me because of some fault in me? No, mom! I rejected them simply because i don't want to marry. And now see how i will reject this Guy whom you have invited here but he has no idea, its Maanvi Chaudhary he would be dealing with"
"Maanvi, dare you do that! After your dad has gone, I have just wished to see you married and settled in life. Won't you do this much for your mother? Not that i will marry you off within a week, but at least lets have talk with the boy's family!"
"Ah! Now please don't start your drama about Dad! Okay. I give up! I will have talk with them but in my style! and please don't chip in for something which i don't know! I don't want to lie with any one ! I am leaving for the office, will try my best to be back by 6 pm! Cya, I love you"
"Yeah bye Cya"
Maanvi reaches her office just in time and gets busy with her clients and meetings that she forgets about getting back home a bit early. On the other hand, Sunaina decorates the home and prepares different cuisines for the Groom's family. She panics when they arrive before Maanvi. Sunaina excuses herself and tries contacting Maanvi but gets worried when she doesn't pick up any call.
There, in the living room, a handsome guy aged 27 with a muscular build up, nicely dressed up in a formal suit is admiring the numerous awards kept in the showcase! He moves backwards and bumps into a pretty girl who looks at him angrily!
Lame ending, I know.. but I have something in store for you guys which is why their interaction will be in the next update :)
Chapter : Melodious Encounter https://www.indiaforums.com/fanfiction/chapter/52348
144