ArHi Bytes [OS]: Never Gone

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Posted: 12 years ago
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Based on the current track, where it looks to be headed.

Khushi finds out the truth about Garima being the other woman after marriage, and ASR hides it from her, because he knows what will happen if he doesn't. Her desire to set him free of this conflict...he can't come closer and neither can he let her go.

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Never Gone

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And I slipped like the sands of time out of reach, far away from your prying eyes and that relentless grip; I fell deeper into that bottomless pit - deeper and deeper with each passing second.


I know now I am lost, lost to you and to myself. Memories like piercings to my fragile heart take me on a tangent to a different plane, to yesterday and all that we lived, it's gone now just like we ceased to be. Eternity is overrated and we were never meant to be.


I saw that pain reflect in your eyes, the mirror to your soul, and that silent musings that you thought were hushed, I heard them all, and felt the pain that bore your soul, and saw your struggle to just let me go. I was angry and deeply hurt that you shunned me again while I waited on a bed of roses, you chose to tread on a path of thorns, and still I felt each prick even as they hurt your soul. And yet, you struggled to let me go.


A dawn for new beginnings was never what we'd hoped it would have been; instead we got tears and pain. It was that unnerving silence between us, your words that the night had somewhere drawn, a veil of mixed emotions, as you stole glances, and refused to let me in. I saw those tears that you wiped away, I saw them all, even those unshed and I knew, darkness had crossed our paths again.


And yet, the heart is such a beast, I knew, we'd get through this as well. Love was like a curse that kept us alive, and kept us still. So I hoped, and prayed, that that new day would come to us again, but I was wrong. For each day, you died a silent death, and our love, was killing you. So I had to let you go, set you free, and so I let the sands of time slip away and plunged myself in silence obscurity hoping that would give you a new lease of life, away from me.


It's a new day again, and I see the bright sun through these blinds, you must be awake, and I hope there is a smile in your lips, and a certain happy song in the air. I wonder if you still get up and search for my face, do you still frown today. Do you still miss me, like I've missed you every single day?


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-PoisonIvy thumbnail
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Beautiful and poetically so! It does seem like they are heading for separation again eh. If not physically but at least emotionally.
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Posted: 12 years ago
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"The heart is such a beast" ... you had me there OG :-)

Mesmerizing and lovely...

S
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: -PoisonIvy

Beautiful and poetically so! It does seem like they are heading for separation again eh. If not physically but at least emotionally.


Thank you PoisonIvy :)

It does look likely, a separation of some kind.
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Why hasn't this got more likes?

There are very few OS's floating around that manage to capture the essence of the track right now, and the feelings of the characters.
You, have done that job perfectly well.

The last few lines had my heart twisting in pain, but you kept that small hope in my alive, that maybe if life is kinder to them in the future, they will meet again and this will have a happier end.

These few lines immediately got my interest captured, and sucked me right in:

I heard them all, and felt the pain that bore your soul, and saw your struggle to just let me go. I was angry and deeply hurt that you shunned me again while I waited on a bed of roses, you chose to tread on a path of thorns, and still I felt each prick even as they hurt your soul. And yet, you struggled to let me go.

Amazingly well-done! :)

~K
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Hello!!

Wow...um usually I am not a fan of first person narratives but this was astoundingly well written. I love how the entire OS feels like one person talking to them-self/their subconscious.

In fact to mention things I loved, I normally dislike colored font's but yours was very muted and not glaringly bright, giving it enough color to pop but not enough to bring on a migraine.

In other words the presentation was perfect, the wording was beautiful. Brava!!👏
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: -Sookie-

"The heart is such a beast" ... you had me there OG :-)

Mesmerizing and lovely...

S


It is, isnt it?

Thanks a lot S!!
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: Krani

Why hasn't this got more likes?


There are very few OS's floating around that manage to capture the essence of the track right now, and the feelings of the characters.
You, have done that job perfectly well.

The last few lines had my heart twisting in pain, but you kept that small hope in my alive, that maybe if life is kinder to them in the future, they will meet again and this will have a happier end.

These few lines immediately got my interest captured, and sucked me right in:

I heard them all, and felt the pain that bore your soul, and saw your struggle to just let me go. I was angry and deeply hurt that you shunned me again while I waited on a bed of roses, you chose to tread on a path of thorns, and still I felt each prick even as they hurt your soul. And yet, you struggled to let me go.

Amazingly well-done! :)

~K


Hi Krani, good to see you here.

@the bold, i see that happening you know. an emotional separation that will kill them from the inside, to have to stay apart. Glad you highlighted this part out., as much as i'd dread to see it happen, it is perhaps better than most other scenarios.

As for the likes, guess I am taking leaf out the 4Lions book of poor publicity..., seems like i need a promo. ;)

Thank you Krani for the lovely comment.

cheers!
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Omg...This was so Poignant ..so beautiful and so poetic...

Your OS seems to have captured v well the inner turmoil that they are gonna face once the truth has been unleashed on them...
Beautifully Written !!

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