new FF--Radev ke nai prem kahni part 28 on p- 54

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Posted: 12 years ago
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will change the topic later .This is just how cb2 could have gone .Have been thinking about this for some time now.
Just want u guys input should i continue or forget it .


heres the precap


the story of Radev saga ---starts after barkha has maybe killed Radhika and Dev starts looking for Radhika

About 2-3 days since Radhika has been gone from the prohit house Dev is searching for Radhika he is really getting worried.One day he is looking for radhika in the village and a young boy starts tugging at devs pants ---trying to get devs attention

dev bends down and says aapko mere se kuch kahana hai--do you want to say something to me ?

little boy -- main aap ko kahni le jaana chahto hoon--i want take you some where

dev--ok lets go

after walkingfor a little while theboy points out to a big building wich has a big sign Kahna Ashram

the little boy takes dev behind the building to a small cottage there a woman is tending to a girl lying on a cot ---the girls body is bruised all over and has bruises around her neck .

Dev sees her and says Radhika !!!!!!!

ok guys if i get a decent amount of likes and responses will continue


this is my first attemt at wrting a story --never done anything like this before ---hope you all will like

it .


thanks
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chayya55 thumbnail
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Yes pls keep writing--diff cb could have been
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Yes please continue I always wanted this to happen in CB2
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thanks guys will update soon
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Part 2
dev is shocked to see Radhika lying on the cot with bruises all over her
Dev --yeh kaise ho gaya
lady --aap ise jaante hain ?
Dev --haan (thinking what should i tell her that radhika is my wife no i cant do that --every one knows she is not the rajprohitian)
dev --she lives in the prohit sadan --aap ise kese jaanti hain ?
lady-- on the day of the navraatri pooja --i think it was just before noon i had to go and get some firewood so went to the jungle i was halfway up the hill and heard some one moaning and groaning.
went there where the sound was coming from and saw this girl lying in a pool of blood
With help of some peaple i brought her to my cottage
and have taken care of her --abb to eske zakhamo mein kaafi farakh hai oos din to eska boora haal tha --mathe se khoon bah raha tha aur garden pe nishaan thae as if some one was trying to choke her
Dev--kya ?some one was trying to kill her ?radhika has been missing from that day --we thought she was angry with us and gone away --dev thinking about what happened that day (radhika saying barkha poisend her own food and cut her hand herself so the blame falls on radhika and i saw radhika pushing barkha down the stairs )
dev still thinking o my god on the nav raatri pooja day I forbade any one to go look for radhika if this lady had not found her radhika would not be ------dev shudders thinking what might have happenned just because of him...
lady-- haan ek aur baat kal se she has been mumbling every so often Dev babu --thats how we knew she might know u and Nandu said dev babu is the raj prohit --thats why Nandu went and got you
khabhi khabhi she also mumbles --nahi ma maine chanda ko kuch nahi kara mera vishwas kejeye and then sometimes she says dev babu aap bhi mujh per vishwas nahe kae rehe hain ---and when i try to wake her up --she has been like this since that day has not opened her eyes --not even once -- she does not wake up i dont know what to do ---lagta hai ese koi gehara sadma pohncha hai
dev ---let me take her back to the prohit house
lady -- i dont think that is a good idea she should not be moved around too much her wounds might open up again -- i will take care of her and pls dont tell any one where she is and what has happened to her ---who knows the person who tried to kill her might come back and try again
Dev --can I stay here for a little while
lady -- dheek hai
Dev sits near the bed just looking at Radhika ---thinking Radhika i love u so much pls get well soon
time passes and dev just sits and stares at radhika
lady --aap jaaye i will take care of her
Dev leaves when he reaches prohit house Padma says where were you ? dev was about to tell chote ma about radhika but then remembered that ladies words about not saying anything
he says he was busy with muth work and he is going to his room and does not want to be disturbed
Dev in his room thinking about eveything ---theres is a knock at the door
Dev who is it ? I told chote ma i dont want to be disturbed
dev its me Barkha
Dev go away I dony want to talk to any one esp. you
hmm looks like dev may have realised stuff about barkha or not
pre cap
Dev overhears Radhika talking to Kanha
oops sorry dont know how to post like a continued story --should it be under the "quote " or new topic --help !!!!!!!
Edited by seema12345 - 12 years ago
ekta15 thumbnail
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Posted: 12 years ago
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nice one seema...
good work !!
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Like the story the way it's moving. Waiting to see what happens next.
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Your lines are interesting!!! Waiting for more!!!
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Posted: 12 years ago
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So will Dev realize whatever has happened to radhika is because he chose to believe Barkha--Barkha is the one put ideas in devs mind waiting to see what happens next
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Posted: 12 years ago
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def.a diff. take on what dev did after he did not go to look for radhika on the nav raatri pooja ---glad u are showing his thinkings unlike the cvs who just ignored dev while letting barkha hog all the thoughts sayings etc

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