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Jalebi Jane

@JalebiJane

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Posted: 13 years ago

I am wary of making suggestions to writers (!) but I almost wish you would continue this into a multi-part story. I feel there is more here. You create beautiful mind pictures. And, it IS SUCH a pleasure to hear Arnav's mind. His tenderness and his complexity. That gives it the depth. Thank you for PMing.

Maya

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Kalyaani B Rao

@Kalyaani

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Posted: 13 years ago

Originally posted by: Inked
I am wary of making suggestions to writers (!) but I almost wish you would continue this into a multi-part story. I feel there is more here. You create beautiful mind pictures. And, it IS SUCH a pleasure to hear Arnav's mind. His tenderness and his complexity. That gives it the depth. Thank you for PMing.
Maya

Thanks Maya,

This was the first piece I wrote, and didn't bother to send PMs to anyone. You could say I was testing waters to see if I could really attempt writing. Left it there and got down to write TPOL. I too feel I can add a bit more here, let's see if I can do justice to your suggestion.

Cheers,

Kalyaani.

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CravingKhana

@CravingKhana

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Posted: 13 years ago

Hi Kalyani

I read the story just because of Scarlet and Rhett...and realised that i loved the way you write...

I hope this is only the biggining...

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anvixoxo

@anvixoxo

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Posted: 13 years ago

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ISensedYou

@ISensedYou

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Posted: 13 years ago

it was lovely...

it was nyc to read arnavs pov

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vittoriA Giardano

@kbtr

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Posted: 13 years ago

This is sooo sad! You should make another part to continue where she forgives him and they are together again. After he suffers a bit, of course! tfs😊

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RasgullaSP

@Rasgulla_sp

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Posted: 13 years ago

I loved your analogies of paratha and shiny coin. Brilliant. I always felt that Khushi forgave him too easily. Always wondered how could she simply move on after everything he did to her. Your portrayal of Khushi is more realistic to me than the on screen version.

Edited by Rasgulla_sp - 13 years ago