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saggitarius687

@saggitarius687

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Posted: 13 years ago

well, with the comments in my previous post...i thought of continuing it further...

Jeevika Maanvi hug...
Viren:Jeevika tum yaha ho...???maine poore ghar mein tumhe dhoond liya...aur tum yaha...kya kar rahi ho tum...aaj Virat ka din...oops Virat ki raat hai...usse thoda enjoy karne do...tum mere saath chalo...(Jeevika still stands)...Jeevika please ab tum thoda mere bhai ko entry marne doge...aur khud exit maroge...
Maanvi:Jiju aap bhi na...
Jeevika:aaye haye Maanvi tujhe toh ab sharmana bhi aa gaya...
Maanvi:Di...!!!
Jeevika:Maanvi zyaada stress mat lena...aur jaldi se so jana...
Maanvi:Di!!!
Viren:Jeevika ji ab chale???
Scene shift
Shlok:Virat bhaiya Virat bhaiya...aap har roz raat ko mere saath chess khel te hai...aaj bhi kheliye na...
Virat:Shlok please aaj nahi...aaj mujhe bohot neend aa rahi hai...
Inder:acha Virat tujhe neend aa rahi hai...chal phir tu sone ja...Shlok beta Virat bhaiya ko sone do aaj...
Virat:thank you chachu...
Inder blocks his way as he tries to go to his room...
Kadambari:Hai ni Jeevika...Maanvi so gayi kya...main soch rahi thi aaj hum poori raat phir se dhamal masti kare...
Virat:nahi chachi...Maanvi ko rest lena hai...woh bohot weak hai...
Viren:tune sahi kaha...Virat Maanvi ko rest lene de...hum log dhamaal karte...hai...
Virat;aise kaise bhai...hum yaha masti karenge aur Maanvi...waha akele...i mean usse kitna bura lagega...
Kadambari:nahi nahi Virat...Jeevika rahegi na usske saath...kyun Jeevika...
Jeevika:haa theek hai main Maanvi ke saath ruk jati hu...aap log...Virat ke saath...
Virat runs to Jeevika...
Virat:bhabhi kyun meri zindagi aap log kharab karne par lage ho...please in bedardi aatmao ko samjaho na...
Jeevika:acha ab Biwi kya aa gayi aapko apne bhai...chachu chachi bedardi lagne lage...
Virat:bhabhi please...
Viren:chal Virat...
Inder:ha ha chalo...
Jeevika:koi kahi nahi jaayega...Virat chalo apne kamre mein jaao...
Inder:kya Jeevika tumne toh poora mazak hi kharab kar diya...
kadambari:kya mazak kharab kar diya...kal aapka important case hai...chaliye...
Viren:Jeevika tum bhi na...
Jeevika:Viren ji...kya Jeevika tum bhi na...waise meri tabyat theek nahi lag rahi hai...main jaati hu...room mein aap aa jaiye...
Viren:Jeevika tum theek toh ho na...kya hua tumhe...
Jeevika:ha Viren ji main bilkul theek hu...woh bas thakan ki wajah se...
Scene shift
Virat enters the room...
Maanvi is looking outside the window...
Virat wraps his hand around her waist and rests his head on her shoulder...
Maanvi:kya kar rahe ho tum Viraat??
Virat:kya...??
Maanvi:mat karo yeh sab Virat...
Virat:kyun ab toh haq hai mera...
Maanvi:Viraat...
Virat:Maanvi...
Virat picks her up and makes her sit on the bed...he moves close...she moves away...Maanvi:virat mujhe sharm aa rahi hai...
Virat:acha chaudhrayin ko shrmana bhi aata hai...tum chaudhary se vadhera kya ban gayi tumhara toh jaise punarjanm ho gaya...wahh...Maanvi...
maanvi:Virat mujhe sona hai...
Virat(scratches his head): ok...
Maanvi:kya ok...(she does not like Viraat's answer)...
Virat:tumne hi toh kaha tumhe sona hai...
Maanvi:toh...toh tum mujhe rokoge nahi...??
Virat:pagal ho kya...tumhe rokunga...koi sherni ke mooh me haath dal ta hai kya...??
Maanvi:Virat...
Virat:toh tum chahte ho main tumhe roku...
Maanvi makes a face giving the answer "obviously"...

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Adenah.NiShal

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Posted: 13 years ago

I like it😊Do continue and pls pm me

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Pyaasi Chudail

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Posted: 13 years ago

it was sooo nice specially the last part was lol

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Andrea

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Posted: 13 years ago

Thank You so much for continuing your last OS!

This was even better especially the last part! VirMan all the wayy..

PM me once you update! :))

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shona v p

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Posted: 13 years ago

Thanx for continuing:) Hehehe virat is so sweet may be he thought Manvi is really tired coz docter also said she is weak... Awww Manvi so cute khud nhi bolegi bt she is expecting virat to stop her... Cute update thanx 4 pm:)

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shaimah

@shaimah

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Posted: 13 years ago

nice update

continue soon and do pm me!

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saggitarius687

@saggitarius687

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Posted: 13 years ago

Maanvi:Virat samjho...ladki...ka na ka matlab ha hota hai...
Virat:acha...aisi baat hai...
He moves close...Maanvi moves away...Virat moves close...Maanvi moves away...
Virat turns back...
Maanvi:Virat...
Virat:itna kya tevar dikha rahe ho tum mujhe...ha...?
Maanvi (comes closer)...acha Virat...suno...(she rests her head on his shoulder...)...Virat turns back...and hugs her tight not to let go off...
Maanvi:choro Virat..
Virat..Maanvi ab main tumhe kabhi apne aap se alag nahi karunga...
Maanvi hits him...tumhe itna devdas ki tarah dialogue bolne ki zaroorat nahi hai...main ab hamesha tumhare sar par mandraungi...partner...sorry life partner...
they hug again...
Next scene...
Virat and Maanvi is sitting on the bed...Maanvi is resting her head on Virat's chest...
Maanvi:Virat...acha tumhe pehli baar mujhse milkar kabhi yeh laga tha ki hum kabhi life partner...acha life partner choro kabhi partners bhi banenge...
Virat:zindagi mein kaai baar aisa hota hai ki hum sochte kuch aur hai aur hota kuch aur hau...
Maanvi:waah Virat tummein kitne hidden talent hai...pehle toh tum achanak se aapne gayiki ka hunar dikhaya...ab tum philosopher jaise baatein kar rahe ho...am impressed...acha Virat tumhe humari pehli mulakat yaad hai...
Virat:one minute...
he takes out the photo album...which has Jeevika-Viren's wedding pics...Holi pics...Maanvi's bday pics...
Virat:hum kitne ladte the...ek bhi baat pe agree nahi karte the...
Maanvi:sab kitne pareshaan ho jaate the...nahi??
Virat:ha yaad hai...jab main doosri baar Hrishikesh aya tha toh tumhara woh special pet far chai...
Manvi:aur kaise diwali mein tumne jaan bujhkar mujhe rocket jalane ke liye kaha...aur buaji aur dadaji kitne naraaz ho gaye the...
Virat:ha tumhe toh ulta kam karne mein maza aata hai...
She sees the joota chori pic...
Maanvi:thank you Virat...tumhare wajah se main Di aur jiju ki shaadi attend kar payi thi...
Virat:le...thank you ab bol rahi ho...waise tumhara haq tha shaadi attend karna...
they see the holi picture...with Maya in it...
Maanvi:kaise chipak chipak ke dance kar rahe the tum...holi ke din Maya ke saath dekho...
Virat;acha main chipak ke dance kar raha tha...woh tumhari aur bua ki mili bhagat thi...
Maanvi:toh tum door bhi toh hat sakte the...
Virat:acha tumhi toh usse mere paas bhej rahi thi...yaad aya...(Maanvi gets a flashback)...waise you know what mujhe Maya ko call kar na chahiye...
Maanvi:kyun...tumhe sharam nahi aata...tum shaadi shuda hokar itni raaat ko ek parayi ladki se baat karogi...
Virat:mujhe usse thank you kehna hai...woh aggar wapas nahi aati toh mujhe kabhi ehsaas hi nahi hota ki mujhe ek bandariya se pyaar ho gaya hai...waise Maya buri ladki nahi hai(in a teasing manner)...
Maanvi:tum sahi keh rahe ho Viraat...tum Maya ko abhi call karo...thank you bolo...in fact mein bhi yahi soch rahi thi...ki mujhe toh kabhi ehsaas nahi hua ki mujhe tumse pyaar hai..
Virat:matlab...?
Maanvi:nahi mera matlab yeh hai ki...jaise Maya ke wajah se tume realise hua ki tum mujhse pyaar karte ho...waise mujhe bhi...koi chahiye na...Maya ka male version...jo mujhe tumse pyaar hone ka ehsaas dilaaye...
Virat:badi besharam ho yaar tum...bhartiya naari ke liye uska pati parmeshwar hota hai...aur tum mere hi saamne doosre mard ke baare mein baat kar rahi ho...
Maanvi:ha tum toh jaise doodh se dhule huye ho...tum ab tak kya kar rahe the...
they start with their cute fight,...
Next scene...it's morning...
Maanvi is resting her head on Virat's shoulder...they are sleeping...
alarm rings...Maanvi wakes up startled...
Maanvi:Virat...uttho...uttho Virat...subah ho gayi hai...
Virat still sleeping:Maanvi raat ke baad subah hi hota hai...sone do...
Manvi leaves Virat in bed...she enters the washroom...and comes out struggling with her saree...
A knock on the door...Maanvi somehow mangaes to hold the ^ yard cloth and moves towards the door...and...
Maanvi:kaun hai...
Jeevika:main Mannu...tu taiyyar nahi hui hai...
Maanvi:di main woh saree...
Jeevika:acha tu darwaja toh khol...
she opens the door...and Jeevika bursts out laughing on seeing her little sister in a mess with the saree...
Maanvi:di...
Jeevika:(helping her wear it properly)...Mannu maa ne kaha hai...ki jo rasoi mein bahu ka pehle din ka rasm hota hai...woh hum baad mein karenge...kyunki tu abhi kamzor hai na..toh zyada der tu agar kitchen mein kam karegi toh teri tabyat bigar sakti hai...
Maanvi:kyu di...mujhe aaj hi woh rasm nibhani hai...
Jeevika:Mannu baat samajh...meri...
Maanvi:nahi...nahi di please...
Virat wakes up...on listening to all these argument...
Virat:bhabhi aap bhi kisse behes kar rahi ho...actually is bandariya ko koi rasm nibhane ki shauk nahi hai...usse toh bas buaji se inaam milne kshauk hai...ap dekh nahi rahi ho...kitni besabr hai woh...
he winks at Jeevika...
Maanvi:ho gaya apna bakwaas...chep ke chep hi rahoge tum...she throws a cushion at him...and leaves with Jeevika...