Poem: Unnamed, Unjustified

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Posted: 13 years ago
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hey all...again 😆...so i've written a poem on manveer...well mostly on UV...actually it's from UV's POV about M...well never wanted to write one on them since i always write sad poems and i didn't want to write a sad one on them...and happy ones don't work fr me tht well so...but i wrote one though it has turned out to be li'l sad as well but not fully sad so...well it's not exactly similar to the current concept in the show but a li'l bit similar...UV is hurt by M betraying him by going to meet akash again and again and he knows abt it but has stopped saying anything and he also sees tht M loves him as well but doesn't know it...or doesn't wanna admit...bcoz she cares a litlle bit too much wen it cums to him wen she should be not if she doesn't love him...so at one moment he's hurt and at the other he's hopeful...so it tells abt his confused state of heart...ok itni badi to meri poem bhi nhi h...lol...sry fr blabbing so much...here's the poem: (and if someone has a better idea for the title plzz tell me)
Why do you love when you don't feel
Why do you sing when your words don't heal
Why promise when they're never meant to keep
Why even pretend when you never took the leap

Why worry when you don't care a dime
Why even ask when you don't have the time
Why laugh wen your thoughts r somewhere else
And yet seeing you smile my heart still melts

Why stay when you can just walk away
Why hurt when you never felt that way
Why cry when i say i don't care
Why lie that you'll always be there

Why do you leave when you know it's hard to breathe
Why do you run when you know it's meant to be
Why close your eyes when i move you hair strand
Why do you search when i'm not there to hold your hand

I know you feel it, you feel for me
Unnamed, unjustified, but satisfactory
I know you care & for now it's enough
But why do you fight when we can just love

Plzzz tell how it is... constructive criticism is most welcome!!

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Posted: 13 years ago
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⭐️aww...dat was so beautiful...it summarised all of uv's thoughts...gr8 job👏
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awww...taht was jsut beautiful...amazing!!awesome loved it...👏👏
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: ilvuday

⭐️aww...dat was so beautiful...it summarised all of uv's thoughts...gr8 job👏


Originally posted by: -JEHAN-

awww...taht was jsut beautiful...amazing!!awesome loved it...👏👏


really???...thxie...so happy u guys liked it...!!! 😃
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: AKlover101

Awww!! Lovely poem dear!!:D


thxxxiee fizza 😃
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Aww! This is just mind blowing !!! :D
Very well written Akshi dear ;)
Loved it <3
Describes UV's thought brilliantly ;)

You should write more :D xx
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Posted: 13 years ago
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it was super super nice u described uday's emotions so well
good job dear
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Thank you so much everyone who read it, liked and commented...m soo happy u all liked it...i was thinking it didn't turn out to be good...but u all hv made me sooo happy...and about writing more...i don't know...i don't think so i'll be but lets see...this one also came out of the blue so who knows...and thank u soo soo much once again!!! 😃

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