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Posted: 13 years ago
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RIMAR OS: IF ONLY YOU KNEW

It was a bright sunny summer morning. He had reached collage in his usual timing. It was sharp 5 o' clock. He had to better start his preparation or he vl be late, he thought. He headed towards the clg canteen, he looked around, there was no one it was empty d whole clg as empty, as if he would have found sum1 at this hour he then thought. Sometimes he so wished he wud be like the other kids relax, have fun and definitely not cum ths mrng for his part tym job!! He sighed and then started his work.

He had been working and din't realize that it was already 8 o'clock. The clg and canteen was now bustling with students. He was busy taking orders n serving them. The gang arrived but his eyes were looking for someone, someone very special. She was nowhere in sight. Just then she entered and his heart did a double summersault, this always happened when he sees her. She was wearing he black skirt which was hugging her perfectly shaped legs and a halter neck dark pink shade shirt. He came near the group and greeted everyone in her sweet-bubbly tone. He was happy to find her near himself. He tried not to stare at her but cud not help himself but then she turned towards him and d looked straight in his eyes. He cud not turn around or take his eyes off her, he was captivated by her gaze. they wud have continued but the jell decided to ruin their perfect moment and they both came back to reality.

They all went for their classes, Amar finished his wrk and left after them.the classes were preety much usual.the boring prof. blabbering about the economy of world and the students busy either playing, gossiping, romancing in class or fast asleep. Only the first bench nerds were paying heed to what was being taught n writing down each n every word. He looked aroung n his gaze fell on her, she wassitting in the next row with simmi , deep in conversation. He smiled looking at her. How much he wanted to come up and confront her about his feeling, but he was scared. His disability may turn out to be the cause of his rejection, he feared. He din't wanted to be rejected, he din't wanted to lose her. He was happy with the small understanding and bond they shared. He remembered the rose day, how happy he was when she accepted is rose. She smiled her best and the glint in her eyes left him awestruck, beauty yet innocence hidden in them and the pure happiness visible on her face,no regret,no malice. He was happy to see her happy.

Just then he heard sum ppl shouting and he came back to his senses, she was out of his sight. He had lost the track of time thinking about her and when he looked around he then realized that the class was over. He smiled and then went for his next class. He had a pretty hectic schedule today. Economics, Statistics, Commerce and two lectures on the survey of economy of India.

Finally the day ended,it was almost 7o'clock. He was in the canteen cleaning up everything. He had almost finished when he heard sumone call out his name. he turn around and found her standing infront of him,looking nervously at he floor.

Amar: linni,tum yanha??(rinni,tum yanha??)

Rinni: ha vo kch notes lene rukk gye thi. I was a bit thirsty so mai idhar aa gye.*looks around*But abhi toh sab band ho gya na..

Amra: aale tum luko mai tumhale liye juice lata hu( aare tum ruko mai tumahre liye juice lata hu)

Rinni smiled at him and said thank you

Amar served her the juice n she quickly finished it.

Rinni: thanx*smiles *. Wese tumhara kamm khatam hua??..

Amar: haa hogaya hai

Rinni:oh ..okay

Rinni: mai bhi nikalti hu. Actually mera driver nhi aaya h aaj n itna late ho chukka h,mujhe khud jana h..so I shud btr leave

Amar: aale toh mai tumhe thol deta hu. Wethe bhi itna late ho chukka hai. It hs not thafe( aare toh mai tumhe cod deta hu.wese bhi itna late ho chukka hai. Its not safe)

Rinni: umm..okay

Amar quickly completes his work. And they walk out of the canteen. They were walking together not hand in hand like couples but just walking together. They were happy in each other's company, they talked about clg, frenz, family, rehearsals, footloose and every minustest thing they cud think of. Once had he wished and then thought it was impossible for him to even get to talk to her and here he was walking with her, talking to her about her life,his own life,wishes do come true,he then knew. His happiness knew no bound. He could not have been luckier he thot. Only if he knew whatwas going in rinni's mind and heart.

What rinni felt at that moment cud not be described in words. To say she was happy would be an understatement. She felt she was d luckiet gal dat day. She was on cloud 9. She longed tell him abt her feelings, but cud not do so. But she din't mind..Actually she din't wanted to ruin d moment by thinking abt anything else than njoying his company .The moment was perfect here she was with d guy whom she so loved!!... the feeling was just perfect.,perfect!!!.. . the feeling of being with him, the feeling of love .

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Posted: 13 years ago
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Rimar Os and FF's are infact soo rare...
But this one was really cute 😍
It was really sweet of him to drop her...
So cutee 😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: achuAR

Rimar Os and FF's are infact soo rare...

But this one was really cute 😍
It was really sweet of him to drop her...
So cutee 😊


glad you liked it 😃
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Posted: 13 years ago
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This one was cute . Beautifully expressed the feelings and insecurities of Amar.
OS like this remind me how much wide scope D3 had in terms of character and their story but still Cv's had not utilised them properly . Along with the main 4 leads other 8 characters story should have been also moved forward.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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thnx 😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: marauder

This one was cute . Beautifully expressed the feelings and insecurities of Amar.
OS like this remind me how much wide scope D3 had in terms of character and their story but still Cv's had not utilised them properly . Along with the main 4 leads other 8 characters story should have been also moved forward.


😊 yeah their story shud also be moved forward btw thnx alot !!..😃 😃
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Nicely put. Though I'm a die hard SwaRon fan, I wouldn't mind if something like this were to happen on the show. I just recently acknowledged RiMar as a couple thanks to Rafi's SS so I found this appealing to my taste. Your take on emotions is extremely real. Keep writing. Thanks for the PM.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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one of the rarest shown couples of d3...u have portayed them so cutely and beautifully..splendid...
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Posted: 13 years ago
#9
Finally, another Rimar fanfic after Rafi's! I love reading Rimar stories, and you have written it so well...do continue if you can 👍🏼
And agree with Shishir, such OS's and fanfics actually pronounce how much these couples can be explored in the actual show.
If only they would cut out the overdose of look-look-hawa-hawa and zaroorat se zyada Taani scenes!

Kudos to your writing!
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Posted: 13 years ago
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dis is d first rimar os or ff or ss iv read
its really very sweet
n der feelngs r beautifully describd
in short its very sweet
n if possible plzz do continue

Edited by divya_luvarsha - 13 years ago

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