My Story: COPs Vs Smuggler

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Prachi

@p.rvaidya

Beginner

Posted: 13 years ago

#11

Hey nice story forfriends!!!

ur narration was very nice!!! 😃

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Debasree

@debasree04

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 13 years ago

#12

This is your first story & you did a good job with everything in it...good pace along with suspense...keep writing 👍🏼

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visrom

@visrom

Stunner

+ 4

Posted: 13 years ago

#13

Finished reading this story. Good attempt. 👏 The only thing question I had was that Daya was in the hospital, so was he fit enough to escape? That's ok...we can overlook such minute things now. 😊

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astonish

@astonish

Sparkler

Posted: 13 years ago

#14

Nice Plot. If it was your first attempt I would say its really nice. 😊
You can try writing some more cases with lots of investigation and twists... and may be try your hands on a normal khooni story too 😊

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Forfriend

@Forfriend

Navigator

Posted: 13 years ago

#15

Originally posted by: visrom
Finished reading this story. Good attempt. 👏 The only thing question I had was that Daya was in the hospital, so was he fit enough to escape? That's ok...we can overlook such minute things now. 😊

No Daya is not fit... Abhijeet came to escape... I try to made it clear from following talk...

ACP: Vivek Fredy Kya bat hai tum dono musase kuch chupa rahai ho……

Vivek & Fredy said no sir… ACP again ask and now

Vivek: Sir hum dono ko aaisa lagata hai ki Daya sir ko yaha se le jane wale or koi nahi Abhijeet sir hi the…..

Abhijeet: Daya ko goli lagte hue maine dekha tha… per hume unn bacho ko bachana tha jiske liye woh deal complete karani jaruri thi…. maine jake woh deal complete ki or phir Daya ko hospital se nilakalne pohocha… yeh Plan bhi humne pehele se socha hua tha…..

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Abena Motianim

@Minionite

Channel Moderator

+ 57

Team Silver Trio

Posted: 13 years ago

#16

Really good plot. I liked it a lot. It was your first attempt and it was really good.

Maybe you could do some more cases with more investigation and twists.

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@Namratha.

Dazzler

Posted: 13 years ago

#17

First of all ur story is very nice...a first attempt and a big hit!!!👏ur main basic concept was good...this shows u have a very nice imagination...very good..👍🏼 keep it up..you hv bright future in story writing...😃