ArHi FF:1: The BEASTS and the BLEEDING ROSES

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arshi1020

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Posted: 13 years ago

#21

Will this count as a double post or another one down before you can post the next part?? 😉

Waiting eagerly!

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Nightingale...

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Posted: 13 years ago

#22

gr8 work pls continue soon!

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Lovely1

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Posted: 13 years ago

#23

Alright, Aqua!

This is not Bubbly style writing!

Yehhh, I am #14 in 'like's... Seven more and we get the next part, right?

Now that you have asked for frank opinion -

Agatha Christie is back plus the Gothic style. Your English is literary heavy English that requires serious readers - It sounds like a Gothic Mystery...

As I kept on reading - I thought ' FRANKLY -

You should just write this as a Novel and not FF - you are on a roll, lady - run with it!

BTW, when you publish the novel make sure that

you dedicate it to ME!

😉

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Aquiline

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Posted: 13 years ago

#24

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Yuks

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Posted: 13 years ago

#25

This is insanely interesting. I just cant wait to read more from you.
Khushi seems like an unsure girl

How old are they?

Yuks

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arshi1020

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Posted: 13 years ago

#26

I must say the chapter was worth waiting for 👏 Khushi's insecurity and the bond between the two sisters really came through. Keep up your awesome work!

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molten_lava

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Posted: 13 years ago

#27

Oohh! I loved this chapter.

Khushi was the one who was in tears inspite of Payal being hurt.She easily blames herself for anything bad happening around her.

So why did Payal's mom ask her to sleep alone in the room? Does she not trust Khushi? And nice to know, Payal is really close to Khushi, even though she isn't blood related unlike the serial.

Overall I loved the vocabulary. It was neither too simple nor too hard to understand. And the whole flow of the story was smooth. I could nicely imagine the whole scene in my mind.

Awaiting the next chapter.😃

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dingle

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Posted: 13 years ago

#28

The image of two girls crouching in a yellow field was beautiful... and things happen for a reason which our mysterious lady knows all about 😃

THANKYOU for continuing with this story... I love everything about it, the world/country its set in, the whole time era... the bond between the sisters and father... everything!