Jhanvi and Surya FF ~ Do dil; ek dharkan ~

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JuhiR

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Posted: 13 years ago

#11

very nice!

But I don't want the Rana in the JaYa love story for too long. I hope you can figure out a way to get him out of the FF.

He is really spoiling my mood in the TV show these days. He gets a lot of screen space. Too much of him is hard for me to swallow.

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Posted: 13 years ago

#12

Hi all. My greatest appreciations for your constructive feedback and I am glad everyone is enjoying the FF. Thank you also for constructive ideas and I am sorry I haven't updated for a while. This may be a short update as I am keeping very, very, very busy. Hope you all understand. Here it is. Lets see whether you like it or not :)

PLEASE NOTE: These updates are entirely a work of fiction. Any resemblance to people (living/passed away) are totally coincidental. These updates are not meant to offend anyone and are just a creative way of expressing thoughts and ideas.

Diya: Choro! Choro muhey! Mujhey choro! Kya chaheye! Mujhey choro!

Kidnapper: Kyu? Jhanvi ki pyaari behen dargayi!

Diya: Meri behen ke khilaaf-

Kidnapper slaps Diya.

Kidnapper: Chup! Bilkul chup! Agar kuch kaha na tho teri behen aur usski pathi ki moth ki zimidar tum hogi. Samjhi!

Diya struggles to get her out of the rope she is tied it. Kicks the kidnapper to escape. Frantically unties her hands and then legs. Takes off the blind fold and takes the mask off of the kidnappers face.

Diya: Rana?

Rana: Tujhey kya laga? Ki Jhanvi aur Surya ki shaadi honneyy doonga main? Kabhi nahi. Agar vo shaadi kiye to main tujhey maar doonga.

Rana gets up to hit Diya but Diya escapes and grabs Rana's phones. While Rana is getting up after falling Diya finds Jhanvi's number on his phone and dials it. She hides the phone behind her back.

Rana: Yaha tujhey koy nahi dhoond payega! koy bhi nahi!

Diya: Kaha hai hum? ha? kaha hai hum?!?!

Rana: Merey parivaar ka farmhouse. Kissi ko nahi patha! Ab kya karey gi?

Surya and Jhanvi hear this. They rush out of the haweli to save Diya with Ammaji.

I know we all want to get back onto the JaYa track so I'm going to rush this so we can get back to some romance! :) Hope nobody minds also I don't have very much time! Hope nobody minds :) Please forgive me for rushing this bit :) JaYa romance coming up though!

When JaYa and ammaji arrive there they see Rana has kidnapped Diya. Jhanvi goes to free Diya. Surya is trying to stop his dad from hurting anyone. Rana threatens to kill Surya. Surya stops him in time but is extremely shocked at his father's words. Diya, Ammaji, JaYa return to the haweli. Rana does not come back. When they arrive everyone asks where Rana is. Ammaji explains. Rana does not come back. He has gone to Rai's place as he knows no one in Veerpur will accept him. He is arranging his next plans to stop Ammaji etc.

Preparations for marriage are still on. Surya misses Rana but understands that Rana did the wrong thing and he needs to realise his mistakes. Jhanvi explains to him that everything will be alright eventually and Surya agrees smiling and hugging Jhanvi.

It has been a long day of preparation and there is only one day left until the marriage. Jhanvi tells Surya to go and have a shower as he looks very tired. Surya goes inside the shower and turns the tap on. After having a shower he realises he has forgotten his towel. He calls out to Jhanvi.

Surya: Jhanvi? Mera tolya dena zara.

Jhanvi: Ha Surya, ek minute, dethi hoon.

Jhanvi gets Surya's towel and goes to give it him. When she gets there Surya reaches his hand out to. Mischeviously he grabs Jhanvi's hand instead of the towel. Jhanvi is embarrassed and tells him to let go. Surya pulls her in the bathroom and tugs her into his arms. Jhanvi tires to escape but can't! 😆 Surya pulls her in closer. As he is moving back the shower tap turns on with a knock of his elbow. Water starts pouring down on him and Jhanvi. Both are dripping with water. Jhanvi tries to escape again but Surya grabs her. Eventually Surya turns the tap off. He lifts Jhanvi up into his arms and lays her on the bed with him on top. Takes Jhanvi's hair off of her face. Jhanvi closes her eyes. Surya leans in and kisses her. He turns the light off cuddled in Jhanvi's arms.

I am once again sorry that the update is very short. Just thought I should continue on for those who are curious to know what will happen next. I will update the next part later :) My sincere apologies for any minor/major/grammatical errors. Hope you all enjoyed :) xxx

Edited by heeyyyy - 13 years ago

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JuhiR

@JuhiR

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

#13

Very lovey dovey❤️

Looking forward to more😛

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Posted: 13 years ago

#14

Hi all. My greatest appreciations for your constructive feedback and I am glad everyone is enjoying the FF. Thank you also for constructive ideas and I am sorry I haven't updated for a while.

Surya: Jhanvi, aaj hummari shaadi hai. Aaj hum dono ek ayse bandhan me bandh jayengey jissey hummey koy judaa nahi karpayega. Jhanvi, tum meri ho, sirf aur sirf mer.

Jhanvi: Ha Surya, shaadi ka yeh atoot bandhan mein hum joorjayengey. Sirf me aur tum. Me bohoth khush hoon ki mujhey tum jayse jeewan saathi mila. Tum nahi tho me kaha?

Surya: Jhanvi, mein tumharrey bina nahi jee saktha. Bohoth pyaar kartha hoon mein tumsey.

Jhanvi: Mein bho tumsey bohoth pyaar karthi hoon Surya. 😳

Surya and Jhanvi go into a deep embrace. They love each other so much that they can't pull apart until Diya comes in the room.

Diya: Jhanvi!

Diya sees that Surya and Jhanvi are together in the room.

Diya: Oh teri!

Diya hides behind the door. Surya and Jhanvi quickly pull apart from their embrace.

Jhanvi: Diya? Tum yaha? Kab ayi? Kaysey ayi?

Diya: Meri lovely-shovely si behen, Surya jigu ke pyaar mein itni khogayi ki tumhey patha hi nahi chala ki mein kab aur kaysey ayi? 😉 😆

Jhanvi: Diya!

Diya: Koy baath nahi! Mein hi sumjhaa dethi hoon. Mein yaha abhi tooranth ayi aur darwazey sey andar ayi. Vaysey tum aur Surya kya karrey theyy--?

Surya: Tum jaanthi ho Diya, kissi ney pathni ke behen bilkul sahi naam dia hai, Saali!

Diya, Jhanvi and Surya laugh.

Jhanvi: Dekh, ab tu mazaak karna band karr aur jaldi batha mujhey ki tu yaha kyu ayi hai?

Diya: Kyu? Jaldi kyu? Surya key saath aur vaqt bithaana hai kya? Dekho ji dekho. Pathi aya tho yeh to behen ko bhool hi gayi!

Jhanvi: Diya!!!

Jhanvi pinches Diya embarassed.

Diya: Accha baba sorry! Baathaathi hoon! Bathaathi hoon! Hum tumhey yaha sey lenney ay hai.

Jhanvi: Kyu?

Diya: Kyu mathlab? Nahi aana merrey saath? Theek hai, me Ammaji ko kehendoongi ki Jhanvi ko hummari yaad nahi aathi hai-Surya jo agaya?

Diya's pretends to be upset.

Jhanvi: Oy meri lovely-shovely kudi, maaf kardeyna!

Surya: Mmm...lovely-shovely kudi! Achha Jhanvi?!?!

Jhanvi: Surya, mein yaha issey mananney ki koshish karri hoon aur tum-

Diya: Arrey arrey Surya yeh tho kooch bhi nahi hai! Lovely-shovely, oh teri, kudi, sab bolthi thhi yeh! Aajkal moon seyy kam nikaltha hai par ek baar shaadi hojayegi na to dekhna tumheyy kithna thaang karegi!

Jhanvi: Yeh na...yeh na...yeh bilkul bhi lovely-shovely baath nahi hai Diya. Meri shaadi honney vaali hai aur tu meri pathi seyy meri hi shikayad kari hai. Jab teri aur Shaurya ki shaadi hooyi tho kya meyney kuch ayssa kaha thaa-

Jhanvi mistakenly mentioned Shaurya's name. As soon as she realizes she keeps quiet. Tears swell up in Diya's eyes. She fights them back and tries to give a smile. It is obvious that Diya is upset but she tries not to show it.

Diya: Wiping away her tears. Jhanvi vo shaadi key peheley dhoola dulhan ek doosrey se nahi milthey hai issiliye mein tumhey leyney ayi thi. Shyaam mein baraath yaha se nikalkey mandir mein ayegi. Bass itna hi.

Surya: Jhanvi, Shaurya kaun-

Jhanvi squeezes Surya's hand indicating him to be quiet. He does so. That has done it for Diya. She runs from the room, tears streaming down her eyes. Jhanvi packs her clothes for the day and kisses Surya good bye. She looks upset. Although Surya has no idea why she is upset he cuddles her in his arms and kisses her. He fills her maang and tells her not to worry and that he is always with her. Jhanvi is still upset before leaving. Surya grabs her arm and closes the door. He lays her down on the bed and kisses her a little more stroking her hair.

Surya: Jhanvi, mukorao na thoda sa...

Jhanvi: Surya-abhi nahi.

Surya: Please! Please please please!

Jhanvi: Nahi Surya-

Surya: Theek hai, tho mein tumhey tabtak choomtharahoonga jabtak tum muskuraogi nahi.

Surya leans down and kisses Jhanvi. He doesn't stop. Jhanvi tries to break free of his love-ful grip but can't. Surya kisses and kisses her. Finally Jhanvi breaks free.

Surya: Mooskorao.

Jhanvi: Surya-

Surya: Theek hai.

Surya leans down and begins kissing her again. Embarrassed Jhanvi smiles and Surya smiles at her back. For one last time Surya kisses his Jhanvi.

My sincere apologies for any minor/major/grammatical errors. Hope you all enjoyed :) xxx

Edited by heeyyyy - 13 years ago