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Posted: 13 years ago
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heya guys
just idea came in my mind and thoought of writing a FF on this
story is diffrent from the original story of Jamuna paar
i m going to post prologue
please dont go on my english grammer😆,,haven't touched english grammer book from last 5 years ,,so please bear my tutti futti english and hindi
all types of criticism is welcomed,,it actually helps in improving
one more thing havn't decided the name of FF right now,,,i m confused,,please give some suggestions yaaron


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Posted: 13 years ago
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Prologue

"mom, I have lost my job" shouted vidhi, going upstairs, very irritated
"kanta, bring a cup of coffee for me" shouted she again
Vidhi's mom, Sudha, a very well-maintained lady, wearing a simple salwar suit,runs to her daughter's room "Vidhi beta mirror ke saamne kya dekh rahi ho". Vidhi observing herself in front of the mirror "Myself" she repliled. The girl in very foul mood turns toward the almirah to change into her casuals " I totally changed myself for this job, wearing a saree,Oh damn it, I hate these sarees"
"toh kya huya beta, ek job hi toh chali gayi,,waise bhi maine tumhaari bahut shikayat suni " Sudha understandinh her daughter's frustation very well "vidhi, main nikaal deti hoon"
"yes ,mom do it"
"yeh lo" hands vidhi a pajyama and a loose t-shirt
"mom, yeh kanta ka haath bahut dheela hai, abhi tak coffee nahi aayi meri"
"Vidhi doosron meiin galtiyaan nikaalna band karo aur pehle apni aur dekho, itna man kar raha hai coffee peene ka toh khud banao, tumhare papa ne call kiya tha, bata rahe the aaj kya hua unke office mein, aur unhi ka order hai tumhe itni facilities na dene ka, abse apne chote chote kaam tum khud kiya karo"
Vidhi, a little bit sad ,listening to her mom ,,went on her own thoughts and realizes, how dumb she was to agrue with her father in front of others.

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"o meri zohra jabi ,,tujhe maloom nahi" enters, before he could finish the lovely song ,,was interrupted by his elder brother
"kya hua janaab, gaane shaane, kya baat hai" Biju's elder brother, in khaddi kurta, looking like much father figure than a brother to biju
"hmm,job mil gayi bhai" came with sweats box and offer to his brother
"really ,munbarak ho, mujhe laga tha yahan Nasik mein shift hone ke baad tujhe job dhoondne mein problem hogi, aisa kya kiya ke doosre week hi job haat mein"
"kuch khaas nahi, they were impressed with me"
"hmm, theek hai, ab jao haath mooh dhulo, phir dono mil kar khana banate hai"
"hahaha, bhai,,hann khana, I don't understand, aapne unse shaadi kyun ki agar unhe khana bhi banana nahi aata"
"oye, woh zyaada busy hai apne work mein isliye"
Biju without any question wents to his room, as he knows his brother will always takes his wife's side.

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Sitting next to window, the weather isn't pleasant, thinking what has happened with her life, she felt betrayed, betrayed that her father didn't listened her. "Was it my fault?" she asked herself many times. This day was the worst for her, people were accusing her. "Where was I wrong?".

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Eating his maggi all alone in his room, feeling about the job he got today and suddenly his thoughts went to the other side " why I have to eat this magggi everyday, after my salary I surely eat indian food". The thought make him happy, as at home there's only one lady and that his bhabhi. But she doesn't cook and her brother too supports her. "meri patni toh acchi cook hogi" with his last look on his plate.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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oye kamal kar ditta...majaa aa gaya...

good job yaar,
continue soon :)

and i love maggi too..lol

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