OS:'IF ONLY...'(A Tale of What Could've been)

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Anu

@DulceAmor

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Posted: 13 years ago

#11

Hey, the OS is very well written. You kept me guessing right up to the end about why Khushi was feeling so detached from all around her. The reveal was handled brilliantly and I never saw it coming. You did a great job with it. The last sentence was heart breaking.

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amaniM

@amaniM

Voyager

+ 4

Posted: 13 years ago

#12

you ended it there!

how could you?

now i have to live with the story in my head

this so not fair

it was a pleasure reading your OS

hope to read more of your writing

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Laila.N

@Laila.N

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+ 3

Posted: 13 years ago

#13

Originally posted by: amaniM
you ended it there!
how could you?

now i have to live with the story in my head

this so not fair

it was a pleasure reading your OS

hope to read more of your writing

Yeah I agree ! We want at least an epilogue, dear Raina ! 😛

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Raina S.M

@rainaM

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

#14

THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR THE AWESOME COMMENTS GUYS, I'M TRULY OVERWHELMED!

Originally posted by: anumeha_rajat
really amazing n superb os...
poor khushi...
feeling bad for her..
but just loved the way u described abt the family bonding n all...
do write more..
thnx for the pm

Thanks A lot for reading it and sharing ur views :) & i'll definitely write more & will tell u when i do so ;)

Originally posted by: AR-kash
awesome OS
loved it
feel bad for khushi
really sad

Thank you :) I know whatever happened with her is pretty sad, Its really unfortunate how many girls become victims of such crimes!

Originally posted by: sammy4u
awesome os dear
hey laila thanx 4 pm

Thank you so much!

Originally posted by: awesome
hi dear
amazing os
loved it
thanx 4 pm dear

Hey there, Muchas gracias, m really glad u liked it :)

Edited by dmgloverforever - 13 years ago

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Raina S.M

@rainaM

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

#15

Originally posted by: DulceAmor
Hey, the OS is very well written. You kept me guessing right up to the end about why Khushi was feeling so detached from all around her. The reveal was handled brilliantly and I never saw it coming. You did a great job with it. The last sentence was heart breaking.

Hey there,

First off, i just loved reading ur comment, Thank you so much for taking the time out and reviewing!

& Well, Honestly speaking, i was pretty nervous as to how the "revelation" is gonna come out coz if that wasn't put forward effectively enough the whole "detachment", as you called it, was gonna seem pointless, So figuring out as to how the truth shud come to the surface was somewhat a difficult task,I'm not gonna lie! anyways thank you so much for commenting once again, I'm really glad u enjoyed my work :)

Originally posted by: amaniM
you ended it there!
how could you?
now i have to live with the story in my head
this so not fair
it was a pleasure reading your OS
hope to read more of your writing

Ok, two things, Thank you so freaking much and Sowwiee -batting eyelashes-

Thanks for liking the OS! Means alot ;)

& m Sorry if u thot the ending was abrupt! , Well honestly ,i didn't really expect ppl to actually like the OS! but to my surprise m getting a wonderful response ( need i mention, U guys are awesome -hugs- )

Edited by dmgloverforever - 13 years ago

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Raina S.M

@rainaM

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

#16

Originally posted by: Laila.N

Yeah I agree ! We want at least an epilogue, dear Raina ! 😛

Humm, Is that so dear Laila? Well, i cant promise you anything ( No promisess.. laa laa, its a song by Shane ward which i m totally digging nowadays lol. God i have an attention span of a squirrel!) anyways getting back to more important stuff , I'll try to come up with something as soon as possible! 😊 Though it might take some time -avoiding eye contact-