My take on the RAAZ

pooja.walia thumbnail
19th Anniversary Thumbnail Dazzler Thumbnail + 4
Posted: 19 years ago
#1

ok guys this is my take on the dreadful raaz.... i hope you like it....

the story begins with Ranviya entering the Walia Mansion with his kids...

Ranvijay (Thinking): Today is such a happy day for me… both my kids will be setteled in life…. N the best part is the family they are marrying into …. The great Walia's…(mysteriously smiling)….

Jai looks disturbed on seeing him.....bani notices his discomfort but is unable to understand the reason behind it.... she decides to ask him for an explaination....

Bani to Jai(she's very upset): kya baat hai...aap mujhse kya chupa rahe hain...i've been noticing u go pale everytime u see those Cobra's but there is something more to this... aaj apko mujhe batana hi hoga... yeh kya raaz hai.... bataiye mujhe Mr.Walia...please...please ....please....

MEANWHILE.......

Ranvijay (thinking): well well Mr. Walia still looks so very hot… even after so many years he still holds the same charm….he's gained a few extra pounds but that just adds to his S*# Appleal….. My heart goes flying for him the moment I see him…. Good that we are going to be relatives… I'll be able to meet him often….

Jai to Bani: You want to know the Raaz…. You want to know the shameful incident that happened on 29th June, 7 yrs back…. I'll tell you… I love you too much to hide it from you… but you have to promise me that you won't leave me after you come to know about it… n you have to swear upon me to never mention it ever again… to no one…

Jai narrating to Bani: It was a lovely night…. After a day's work… I was out for a drive… just wanted some fresh air… n when I reached Park Road… I met none other than Ranvijay Cobra waiting for me… Bani... he was there …. With a grining face he approached me… he looked too happy… actually I didn't understand his expressions till he spelled them out…I thought he was happy to see his sis being engaged to me…..but I was soo wrong…. the bloody Cobra declared that he had feelings for me…

A LONG PAUSE……………

I was too shocked to react… but as his words sunk in… all I felt was raged… n a bit scared too… I was all alone on that haunted Road… the only thought that struck me was that I run away from the place…. N in no time I fled in my car… I called up Roshni… my then girlfriend to tell her about the incident… she doubted me at first but later believed what I said coz her brother always took too much interest in me…

ANOTHER PAUSE…..

I was driving as fast as could…. But he was right behind me….about to overtake my car any moment…. But then I saw Roshni's car coming fast from behind…. N it all ended up with a major accident in which Roshni hurt herself… n ranvijay took her abroad.. to get her treated….But now he's back....

Jai to Bani: now do you understand why I get scared on seeing that evil Cobra around me…that's the reason I didn't want anu married in that family…. Bani he's after me… I belong only to you…. You are my wife dammit….Please save me…. His grining face scares me even today….

Bani to Jai: mujhe maaf kar dijiye.... main nahi janti thi aap kis taqleef se guzar rahe the.... aur main samjhi app us Roshni mein interested the....yeh dono bhai behen aapko pareshan kar rahe hain😭😭😭

Bani to Jai: don't worry darling….I won't let that cobra come anywhere near you…. After trying out the Sherlock Homes character… I think trying to be Superwoman would be cool….n i will never leave you....

Jai to Bani:thanx darling.... ab mujhe secure feel ho raha hai.... with u around... wo Cobra mujhe choo bhi nahi payega....

Bani (to herself):yeh dono bhai behen mere pati ke peeche pade hain... inhe to sabak sikhana hi hoga... Roshni kya kam thi ki ab yeh Mr. Cobra bhi shuru ho gaye hain... Mr. Walia ko stare karne ka haq sirf mujhe hai...

DIACLAIMER: this theory of the raaz is my fiction it has nothing to do with Ekta's dimaag....any resemblane to ekta's stroy is highly co-incedential... there is no intention to offend any person orany character.......

i hope u guys liked it.... if i bored u i'm sorry.....😭

please leave your comments.....

Edited by pooja.walia - 19 years ago

Created

Last reply

Replies

8

Views

1.6k

Users

7

Frequent Posters

misspickle thumbnail
19th Anniversary Thumbnail Voyager Thumbnail Engager Level 1 Thumbnail
Posted: 19 years ago
#2
Hey pooja,i really like ur concept of d june 29th raaz.LOLz 😆Girl u r too funny,i almost peed my pants laffing so hard 😆.Keep up d good work 😆 😆 👏
pooja.walia thumbnail
19th Anniversary Thumbnail Dazzler Thumbnail + 4
Posted: 19 years ago
#3
thanx for replying.... i'm glad u liked it....
bani121 thumbnail
Explorer Thumbnail Engager Level 1 Thumbnail
Posted: 19 years ago
#4
IT WAS VERY...UM...INTERESTING. YES, VERY INTERETING BUT DON'T YOU THINK IT WAS A LITTLE FAR FETCHED FOR AN INDIAN DRAMA! NO OFFENCE BY THE WAY! 😉
pooja.walia thumbnail
19th Anniversary Thumbnail Dazzler Thumbnail + 4
Posted: 19 years ago
#5
hey no offences taken... i know its farfetched but just thats why its fanfiction... anyways... imagine if it were to be true... 😆 😆 😆
mayona thumbnail
20th Anniversary Thumbnail Dazzler Thumbnail
Posted: 19 years ago
#6
Wow buddy nice take on park road 👏 👏 👏

😆 I cant imagine if it were true 😆
Dewanee thumbnail
20th Anniversary Thumbnail Voyager Thumbnail
Posted: 19 years ago
#7
😆 😆 😆 wayyyyyyyy tooooo goooood 😆 😆
Tomiko thumbnail
20th Anniversary Thumbnail Sparkler Thumbnail + 5
Posted: 19 years ago
#8

haila!!😆......the most interesting prediction i've come across so far!!

blossom84 thumbnail
Posted: 19 years ago
#9
HAHAHA...

now why didn't i think of that??!

hmm...maybe that is the real "raaz".. 😕

LOL...gr8 work hun! 😃

Related Topics

Top

Stay Connected with IndiaForums!

Be the first to know about the latest news, updates, and exclusive content.

Add to Home Screen!

Install this web app on your iPhone for the best experience. It's easy, just tap and then "Add to Home Screen".