Shanak SS Gunah 6th Feb Part3 page4 replies pg4 - Page 3

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Posted: 13 years ago
#21
nice nd intresting story with pain in it continue it soon
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Posted: 13 years ago
#22
Heyy Payal...nice & emotional update😊
so, they realized that they have fallen in love with each other...😲
but, did she really get back her memory???...😕
update soon😍
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Posted: 13 years ago
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plz update soon...am waiting eagerly...
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Posted: 13 years ago
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when r u goin to update ???
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Posted: 13 years ago
#25

Hello friends,

I am very busy so my update is very late, please bear with me. 😳

Thank you all for reading my SS🤗

Please read and comment, it makes my day😆

I will reply to all comments tomorrow.


Part 3:


Dadi: where are you going Shaan?

She saw suddenly Shaan picking up his mobile and moneybag.

Shaan (rushing out of the door): May be I can still catch her.

Dadi (thinking): What are you doing Shaan? running after something which you can never have. I can understand how you feel (tears running down her cheeks).

Parting from Khanak was not easy for her as well. An angel who came to her monotonous life and took her back to her 20s. 😛Suddenly she was again feeling like an old lady.

Shaan met the hotel manager outside, who told him Khanak left half an hour ago. She asked him to call an auto rikshaw for going to railway station. Shaan borrowed the scooter again and head out for the station.

But "Alas!" when he reached the train to Mumbai already started moving. He ran along with the train looking for Khanak but he couldn't find her.

Khanak saw him, she saw him looking for her, she hid herself so that he can't see her. She wanted to cry, cry her heart out. But she has to be strong now. She can't do the mistake she did last night. She shouldn't have cried, she shouldn't have let him know that she can't live without him.

But she knows Shaan will understand. He will never want to break a happy married life; especially she knows Shaan only wants her welfare, her happiness.

...

Shaan sat down on the bench burying his face into his palms. He felt so empty.

His mobile rang, it was Daadi.

Shaan: I couldn't catch her Daadi, she is gone.

Daadi: Come back my son, Khanak got back her memory now. Its her decision, she wants to go back to her husband. (Daadi didn't say but Shaan understood Daadi wanted to say Khanak loves her husband now).

Shaan: Daadi, kuchh der main akele rehna chahta hun.

Dadi knew she can't ease his pain now; he himself has to understand.

Daadi: OK beta, take care and don't do anything dangerous.

Shaan: Don't worry Daadi, I will be OK.

It was evening; Shan was sitting on the sea beach looking at the setting sun. Throughout the day he tried to make his mind understand that it was only a dream, but "kya kare, yeh dil hai ke manta nahin".

He got a call from Daadi: Shaan, where are you?

Shaan: Daadi, I am on the beach. Please daadi, I need some more time.

Daadi: Ok beta, but you haven't taken any food today, do come back before dinner. Anyways I called you to inform that I called Sunil and he said Khanak reached her home safely.

Shaan (trying to hide his despair): Thanks Daadi, I will be back before dinner.

[YOUTUBE]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xeMb_0TfzqQ[/YOUTUBE]

p.s: The scenes not matching with the story, but the lyrics fits very well. Its a awesome VM made by Akanya4eva😃


...

Next morning 11 AM: They reached Mumbai Central station.


Shaan: Daadi, I will drop you home, I need to go to office, have some important work.

Daadi: Drop me near Bhandup station, I need to meet an old friend.

Shaan: Which friend daadi?

Daadi was trying to hide.

Shaan: Daadi, you are going to meet Khanak, right? Don't worry I will drop you at her home. I know you must be missing her and want to know whether she is OK or not.

Daadi knew its very tough for him "You go to office Shaan, I can manage myself."

But Shaan didn't agree. Actually even his heart also wanted to know whether Khanak was OK.

They reached Khanak's home. Shaan: Daadi, after reaching office I will send the car here.

Daadi watched him going; she was feeling so bad, its so difficult for him to come here. She should have come here later, without letting Shaan know about it.

Shaan was about to get into the car when he got a phone call. "Shaan, I left my purse in the car, can you tell the driver to bring it to me?". Shaan decided to take it himself. Actually his heart wanted to see her once. "Kya kare yeh dil hai ke manta nahin"

He came to the door, rang the bell. Khanak's father in law opened the door.

"aiye andar aiye, hum aapke behad shuker guzar hai, aapne hamari Ishaani (Khanak's real name) ka itna khayal rakha".

Shaan didn't want to go inside but he couldn't ignore Khanak's FIL's request. He came in.

Daadi was waiting for this moment, without wasting a single second she said: Mr. Sharma main Shantanu ke liye aapki Ishaani ka haath mangna chahti hun.

This made Shaan totally shocked.

Daadi (to Shaan): she is not married Shaan. She is an actress, that day she was dressed as a married lady.

[Flasback:

No, yesterday morning Khanak's memory actually didn't come back. She left because she knew she will be sent back to her husband. She loves Shaan. She didn't want to love somebody and stay with somebody else. So she decided to leave, she wanted to lead her own life, away from her family and Shantanu.

But in Mumbai station a friend of her saw her and took her to her home. Khanak (Ishaani) came to Mumbai one year ago from a village in Uttar Pradesh. She lost her mother when she was only two, last year her father also died so she came to Mumbai to her uncle's house. She used to act in village play groups, got a job in a play group in Mumbai as well. That day she had to rush home as suddenly her uncle became ill, so she couldn't change her dress or remove make up. When Shaan's car hit her, her make up washed out in blood, but her fake mangalsutra was still there.

Khanak's friend took her home. She came to know she is not married. When Shaan was on the beach Daadi got a call from Khanak. Daadi came to know the whole truth. So everything after that was Daadi's plan.]

Daadi: Mr. Sharma, where is Khanak?

Mr. Sharma: yes yes, she is coming.

Shaan can see her now, entering the room with a tray (with tea and sweets) in her hand. She is dressed in a light pink saree with golden border. No mangalsutra at her neck, no sindoor at her forhead. She looks really beautiful in her simple attire. Shaan kept looking at her without blinking his eyes. Khanak looked at him, their eyes met. Both started smiling. Because they know its not a Gunah anymore.😳


... END...

Edited by payalmehra - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
#26
Lovely update

poor gurl he must be shattered into pieces... though he tried hard

i love how dadi understands him and was ready to give him time and space

but she has a master plan... she knew abt her whereabouts

but mr genius thank God was finally able to guess

the purse was dadi's partner

my my wht a twist she's an actress

coz she's in luv she was ready to leave her family

hay... finally the came to know abt the truth and its not a sin

i loved it.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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omg wat a twist by the way loved it ...you ended it so soon i thought we will get atleast 8-9 parts but loved all parts u updated
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Posted: 13 years ago
#28
Dear friends,

Sorry, for my late reply, I was really busy😳

Thank you all maneesha28889, angelic_leena_3, pooja.88, neethurose, snigdhanagar, yashran_rocks, AwesomeYashAran, IF_rida, RB81, Ammu_ShaNak, sshriyaa8,
for loving my SS🤗

I hope the ending is OK, actually I had a different story in my mind with Khanak actually having a husband, but later on I thought to make the story lighter😊

Originally posted by: IF_rida

Lovely update

poor gurl he must be shattered into pieces... though he tried hard

i love how dadi understands him and was ready to give him time and space

but she has a master plan... she knew abt her whereabouts

but mr genius thank God was finally able to guess

the purse was dadi's partner

my my wht a twist she's an actress

coz she's in luv she was ready to leave her family

hay... finally the came to know abt the truth and its not a sin

i loved it.



Thanks a lot dear😃

Originally posted by: yashran_rocks

omg wat a twist by the way loved it ...you ended it so soon i thought we will get atleast 8-9 parts but loved all parts u updated



You loved the twist? I thought its quite unrealistic. The story is small so only three parts. Will try to write a bigger FF😊


Originally posted by: RB81

nice one payal..
loved it..



Thanks a lot🤗your guess is right Khanak didn't got back her memory. At first I thought I will bring back her memory but later on I felt it might look unrealistic.

@aditi305: your guess is right😳

@loveYM: thanks😊

@janavi07: I am very happy you loved it😊

@ neethurose: thanks😃

@sharon18: yes you are right she couldn't get her memory back😊

@snigdhanagar: Thanks😳

@sshriyaa84: glad you loved it😊

@shonai: thanks😊


Love

Payal



Edited by payalmehra - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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I read ur story and its really awesm..khanak shaan ki gadi se takrana fir khanak ki memory jana fir shaan uski dekhbhal krta hai...wo dono friends hote hai...fir khanak ki identity mil jati hai...shaan khank ekdusreke ko like krneke lgate hai..lekin khanak ke married hone ke karan wo apni dukh ko dbate hai...fir khank chali jati hai...lekin dadi ko sb truth pata chalta hai aur wo shaan ke samne hi khanaka haath magti hai..shaan pura shock ho jata hai..lekin use pata chal jata hai ke wo married nahi hai...aur jo wo guilty feel kr raha tha ke mai married ldkise kaise pyar krne lga wo bi dur ho gayi..aur wo dono dusre ke ho gaye...awesm end..loved it...plz write more story
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Lovely update payal...😊
omg...she is not married... wht a twist she's an actress
shocking update ...khanak(Ishaani) memory not come back...but she leave poor khanak...Love so much shaan...
and what the daadi...master planer...totally love all this ...hay... finally the came to know abt the truth.
i love last line no more gunah...

payal why r u End so early...i want more update...
payal please to try write another SS...
love u...



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