Naina Barse (maaneet Os) EPILOGUE page 36

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Hello guys,,, I was thinking about writing an OS,,, its long time that I have written any OS,,, so with a new story i m here,, just freshen my mood and and so for u'..

Naina Barse

Kali raat beer vohi mohe,,,

Humko laagi ye agan kohe

Tohre beena jeena nahi saajhe

Naina more barso bheegi raahe'

Kaise tohe batayu more sajan

Piya bin rove ye suna man

Bheege palke pukare tohe

Naina barse more naina barse

Ye jiban abb sukhe patto se sajhaye

Kabhi tha rango si ujal

Hamre dil pe diya tha dastak

Jiban adhuri piya tohre bin

Naina barse abb sare din

Kabse baithi hu sajan

Tohre raah take

Aaja abb naina ye mor tarse'''.


(poem by me😳😳)

Its being more than 6 yrs, I didn't saw my country'. It was difficult for me to stay away from my loves one'. but fate was having some different plans for me, i have seen so many things in a short life pane,,, yeah short as I m only 25yrs'. I have seen a time from a girl to became a woman'. A simple girl to a mother'' but I m happy as a mother'. I have tried to give everything to my daughter but still where I failed,,, is to give her the most precious happiness,,, her father'.. but my tamanna is not like a cry baby'. She is only 5yrs,, soon to be 6yrs'. but she pretends to be my mom,,, always bossing around everyone,,, her cute act always gets me busy all the day'. Ohh but where is she?? Ther talking to some air hostess' gosh ye ladki kahi bhi kissi se bhi baat karna suru kar sakti hain'. in that way she is like her father'.. Talkative,,, charmer' the same cuteness,, same anger' she is exactly like him'.. but did he look same the way he was at then? Will I get a chance to see a glimpse of his handsome features? No he probably have his own family I shouldn't think like this'. But I m lading INDIA in few hours,,, same place that takes everything from me'but its gave me my angel,, my tamanna and HIM'. my MAAN'.. maybe I can see him once,,, forget it GEET,,, whom r u fooling,, he possibly forgot ur face also'. But its not his fault,,, its none of our mistake,, whatever happen I was responsible equally,,, and to think about that I m not regretting either'.. I m happy being like this,,, with my angel'. She is the most cutest child on earth'. Yeah I know every daughter is cute and the best for their mother,,,but my tamanna is really very different from others'.. at her age child only know how to protest and demand from their parents,, but my tamanna never want anything not her father also'.. she never asked about her father, hmm I know she understood we can never have him'.. she always support me in my every decision'. I m grateful to god he gave me her,, when my whole family was against her,, he gave me the strength to fight for my daughter and bring her in the world''

Mamma,,, mammaaa,,, mammmaaa

Uuhh,, kya huya????

Tamy: hehehe aap kiske khayalo me khoyi ho?? Tom cruise ya brat pit?

Meet the most naughtiest daughter in the world tamanna,, u can call her tammy'. I was busy in my thought that didn't realize she was calling me and now I have to face her teasing smile' God ye aaj kal ke bacche'..

Geet: ur brat pit and tom cruise are nothing compare to my shahrukh and hrithik' u know

Tamy: ha ha pat ahain pata hain,,, SAARE JAHAN SE AACHA HINDU SITAN HAMARA''. And I know ur shahrukh and hrithik are more hot than these'. Mamma we are landing india so I can meet them na?? geet's eyes got widen'.

Geet: what??? tum unse kyun milna chahti ho?

Tamy: I always tells my frnds bollywood actors are hotter but reality is I never know are they hot or not so I wanted to see them and touch them,, I can confront them confidently'.. geet rolled her eyes'

Geet: don't u think u read too much filmy magazine,,, and ur friends,,, u guys are only 5,, concentrate on ur study'.. aaj e no Tv'' tamy made a cute pouting face'.

Tamy: Hitler'.. she mumble it silently but geet overheard and gave threatening look to her'..

Geet: ok don't pout we will try to meet them,,, now be seated, the flight will land in 30 mins' did i told u that I m a fashion photographer? Ohh sorry may be I forgot,, hope I can fulfill my angel's wish''.

Ohhh here I am,,, INDIA,,, the most beautiful place in the world,, I missed it so much'. London was a great experience but india ki baat alag hain'' its smell so good'. Ohh where is my nanhi saitan'.. there she is talking to stranger'. STRANGER????? Gosh ye ladki mujhe pgal kar degi,, abb kisse panga liya'.. ufff babaji maher karna'. Last time she also I had to face trouble because of her,,, she and her antiques ufff''..

She is talking someone,, I can't see his face as he was bending down,, actually I would say I never get bother with others,,, is my princess is ok? I said while rushing to them''

Geet: Tamannaaa''.. geet knelled down and the person just stood up from his position'. Tamanna r u ok? What happen? Yaha kyun ruk gayi,,, tamy looked at geet with guilty face' and looked down'. Then she followed her gaze and saw the person's shirt is in a mess'.

Geet: shittt,,, I m so sorry,, she spills coffee on ur shirt'.. I m extremely sorry,,, yeto kharab hogaya'. Look I can purchase a new shirt for u,, pls give me some time,, geet said all in one go but she didn't even saw his face,, she just stares at the shirt which is now not in a position to wear' what have u done tamy,, just look at it,,, did u said sorry'

Tamy: yes mom,, and this man is really a gentleman,, he didn't scolded me' geet smile'..

Geet turn to see him but her eyes stuck in his shirt: my daughter just accidentally spills it,, I m sorry,,, please let me get a shirt for u' know she is really naughty but,,,,

GEET'''''. She just froze on her track,, when she heard HIS voice'.. its him'. MAAN'' she looks up to see his face, and her heart unknowingly started bolting and she was breathing hard to control herself'.

MAAN,,, an unknown sensation ran though both of them as they stares at each other'. A whisper came out from her mouth'. Suddenly she felt a tug on her saree,, so looks down to see her angel was calling her'..

Geet: aap thik hona? Tamy noded'.

Maan: Geet its u? she abruptly looks at him,, frighten to see his reaction but more she was afraid with her consciousness,,, she knew she will lose if she stares at him like this'. Maan just grabbed her shoulder'. I can't believe this geet.. u r here,,, in front of my eyes,, I m seeing u after so many years'.

Geet: how r u maan?

Maan: jaise tha, waise hi hu,,, geet looks at him meaningfully,, but he has changed a bit,, his stubble were light when he was 22 and she was 18,, ohh he is now 28,, more manly,,, geet chuckle inward'.. then they heard their princess's voice'

Tamy: mamma do u know him???

Maan's face get hard,,, his jaw goes tighten'. Geet looks at tamy and kneeled down'

Geet: ha baccha,, we are old FRIENDS,,, she said looking at maan,,,, who seems like lost in his thought'.

Tamy: then he can be my friend also' she tugged his pants,,, maan looked at the little girl,,, who exactly looks like geet,, same hair, same complexion,, but only one mismatch is her eyes,,, her eyes is deep,, very beautiful unlike her mother,,, geet has almond eyes,, that complimented her complexion'. He comes out from his trance when heard the sweet voice'

Tamy: will u be my friend?? Wo kya hain na,,, I m new in india, so I have no friends here,, she cutely pouted just like her mother,,, so can u be my first friend here?? Geet looks at him with hopeful eyes, he was lost in her but in the trance he can't say no to this sweet little angel'.

Maan: sure princess,, but if u want to be my friend, u have to tell ur name first'.. I don't know ur name'.. he said sadly,,,

Tamy: ohh,,, aap bhi na,, isme kya hain,, hello I m tamanna,, u can call me tamy, my close frnds call me that only'. Maan smiled at her and accepted her extent hand'' their sweet introduction got disturb when a shriek voice enters their eardrums'..

Maannn,,,, u r here?? Lets go we are getting late'. Everyone is waiting for us'..

Maan: sasha,, if they are waiting for 30 mins they can wait 3hrs also,, Maan singh khurana didn't give a damn to them'. Its my rule whom to deal and how to deal'. Geet was shocked to listen the deep and dangerous tone of maan,,, she was witnessing a new maan,, which maan she knew in collage was not this'. He was full of life,, masti khor,, no 1 prank star' always laughing and a charmer.. never talk rude or arrogance with any one,, and girls,,,, oops he was no1 flirt as well,,, no girl can survive not being charmed by him'.. and now what happen that he has changed so much,, no wonder he is looking more hot than before,, his tighten jaw with stubble, his shirt and waist coat,, he has changed his style that is giving him a look of rough and hot angry young man''

Sasha came running to him: I m sorry maan,, but the client are here only to meet u,,, and its really a very big project,, please we shouldn't get late,,, it will be a bad name for our company,,,

Maan: sasha , I know how to handle such things and u don't bother to thing so much about my company,, he looks at geet who was gaping at sasha with fuming eyes'..

Geet (st): itne chote kapre,,, hii hii babaje,, ye maan kabhi nahi badal sakta,, she was so engrossed in sasha's "chote chote kapre" that she forgot to concentrate his words'. Maan saw the typical geet after so many yrs' he felt an unknown happiness forming in his heart but soon it crashed down'

Tamy: mamma don't u thing we are getting late?

Maan looks at geet sadly,,, but geet knew she have to go from here,,, from him' far,, like before'

Geet: yes baby,, but I think the car isn't arrived till now,, she said while looking outside'.

Tamy: mamma I think they are looking for us'. Geet looks at the sign and the man holding a banner of her naam,,,

GEET..

Maan saw this and found something fishy why there is no surname,, he knew she is handa' and if he is not holding her full name how can she be sure its her' pushing all thoughts beside he wanted to talk to her,, he saw her after ages and doesn't wanted to lose her,, doesn't wanted to do the same mistake he did before 6 yrs'..

Geet: maan I have to go now,, bye take care'

Tamy: bye friend'. They were heading towards the car when maan called her'

Maan: tamy'' she looks behind and smiled at him,, that smiled only give him peace,, a beautiful smile crept his lips,, sasha was shocked to see him smiling'. He have never smiled in her life with him'..

Maan: tamy,, hum abhi dost bane aur aap abhi jarahe ho,, tamy looked at him sadly'

Tamy: what can I do? We have to go na? mamma has so many works,, she is so little but she knows how to support her mother'.

Maan: ok, but u can give ur contact number na,, I can call u and meet u sometime,, we will do lots of masti,, tamy's face literally lit up,, but then she looks at geet,,, who was gulping her saliva,,, tamy looks at geet with a cute puppy eyes, that she can never refuse'. Geet rolled her eyes..

Geet: maan umm,, I just land here today I don't have any contact no now..

Maan: then tell me ur address,, I'll meet u,, I mean tamanna there'. Geet was knotting her corner of the duppata,, she was nervous and maan knew that but why he have to find that'.

Geet: my company is receiving me,, I don't know where they will make arrangements for us,,, that was a sheer lie and maan knew that,, he knew her too well,, she can't speak lies'

Maan: ok then take my card and whenever u settle down give me a call' she was looking at the card but as she extent her hand to reach that maan gives that to tamy,, and told her to call him' accidentally his hand touches her slightly,, she shudder at the contact' he saw her going out from the airport'.. and taking her place in the car'.. he smirks,,

Maan: geet,, I won't let u slip away so easily,, may be u r married but I want to attempt one chance to win u back'. i can't be wrong to judge u,,, u were lying me but why? U were jealous to see sasha so close to me, but why,, if u are married u shouldn't be jealous'. So many years I have lost,,, I yearn u' I missed u,, u didn't even inform me before ur departure from here,, where were u, I don't know, and when I found u are keeping urself in a shell,, didn't wanted to open up' but I'll find everything geet'..

Sasha: chale maan? sasha asked little afraid' Maan nodded and headed towards his car'..

Precap: maan's monologue for the entire meeting with geet'.. meeting 2nd time, some flashback'


Part 2

Part 3

Part 4
Part 5

Part 6
EPILOGUE

I have attempted something new,,, I hope u'll like it'. But don't know it's upto the mark or not'.. this OS has 3 or 4 parts only will update when I'll get sufficient likes and comments,, I know my friends will not disappoint me'..



i m sooo sorry for all the mistakes...

Edited by tich.1990mg - 12 years ago


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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: ramahesh

superbbb os
continue soon dear


thank u s much dear
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Nice start dear...

So maan is thinking geet married to some other...

Loved tammy cute talks...

Continue soon...
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wow!new concept..
luvd tammy ..she s so cute...
Congrats for the new os..
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nice start ya.. loved it !!
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amazing os
do continue soon
please, will be waiting for its next update
do continue
will be waiting to know more about geet, maan and tammy
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awesome...
tammy n her talks are really cute..
luved it..
continue soon
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i liked it...interesting😊
Please continue
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Originally posted by: Remya_Pillai

wow!new concept..
luvd tammy ..she s so cute...
Congrats for the new os..


thanks dear 😊😊
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awesome os dear lved it
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