FF || Milna Hi Tha (part 11, page 32)

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coolgal270

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Posted: 15 years ago

#211

Ah! welcome back..so glad that u updated this 😊
The thing that i liked most abt it was it was totally prem's POV..we have had for heer before and we know the feelings that she is engulfed with..But this was just prem...and i cannot help but applaud you with the way you have written this..maybe i could have come up with an idea like this in this janam, may be...but I could not have written it even half as beautifully as you have written..in any janam...I m telling you...a simple situation, u made it a delight to read and thats really remarkable radz..👏 every choice of sentence was beautiful..like. "He sighed, wondering at the feeling of familiarity towards a place he was seeing for the first time."
dunno, such a simple line but so effective..but the one that I absolutely loved was "What he was searching for, he did not know, but he found his sights settling on the still figure of Heer.".. that put a smile on my face for a long time..it's the expected thing but still, makes me sigh like mad..
Great job!!and now i am so much more eager for the next update...Now, heer knows that he feels something that she feels..her curiosity will reach a max now...Ah! Just waiting for it..

OOh...so he compares his heartbeat to hooves of horse...the same thing that heer dreams abt and the sound of which fills her with terror...and the same sound, same "feel" rattled prem as well....nice, very nice....

ya, forgot to add..really liked that preet bonds to prem the same way as meher to heer..its really nice to read when siblings share such deep love!I like that..

needless to say,i loved this update and will be eagerly waiting for the next one.
love,sumi

Edited by coolgal270 - 15 years ago

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-Bee-

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Posted: 15 years ago

#212

WB, Radz! You updated! I know I've been MIA, but college is killing me! So, as usual...

*reserved*

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Maddy

@blackdaughter

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Posted: 15 years ago

#213

Hello ji,

OMG! That was a beautiful part! Please update soon!! Loved this part. Can't wait for what is next!

Love you! *hug*

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poonam

@P.Kamaljit.Sean

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Posted: 15 years ago

#214

Hey
Awesome
Nice great update
thankz for pm

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ash08

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Posted: 15 years ago

#215

Radzie 🤗

How are you? Studies going okay?

You updated and how!! That was brilliant. I loved how Prem felt that pull to Rajasthan and to Heer. These two have such a connection that everything and everybody just fade out. All this time we have been seeing Heer having flashbacks and Meher helping her out. Now we saw Prem's moods and Preet knowing that. Thats awesome. I am eager to read how these two help PH. And those conversations - that would be a treat.

Please update soon. Take care.

Love,
Ash

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natasha

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Posted: 15 years ago

#216

you updated!!!!!!! I loved it! I still want to know the mystery behind the dream but I loved meet! haha....poor nihaal trying to hold meher back. how cute!

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Aashifa

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Posted: 15 years ago

#217

hey Radz how have you been?

shocking you updated? well I just happen to like always manage to stumble across and must I say what fabulous-ness it was the whole description was amazing and I loved it

-aashifa-

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sugii

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Posted: 15 years ago

#218

amazinggg updatee👏👏...wow! prem feeling smthing 😃..cant wait.. plzzz continue asap..

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Aradhna

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Posted: 14 years ago

#219

I apologise so much for the year-long wait between updates, but I've finally gotten my inspiration back for this fic, so expect it to be completed by the end of the year (hopefully).

thanks so much for all the comments you had left me, and I hope some of you are still interested in this story. :D

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Aradhna

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Posted: 14 years ago

#220

second attempt at posting this. hoping people are still interested. thanks to Bhav and Mee for reading through for me.

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"Ashlesha Bua! Ashlesha Bua!"

The shouts drew nearer and nearer as the five children tore towards the outskirts of the village. The small house they were running towards was not visible unless one knew where to look, and the villagers were very familiar to the lone occupant. The tall woman who stood at the doorway was middle-aged, and still very attractive.

She waited for the children to draw nearer before calling out, "Kya hua? Kissi ke ghar pe aag lagi kya?"

Her eyes flickered from child to child; attentive dark eyes, very familiar to those who had known her mother and sister. Many a suitor had attempted to woo her in her younger days, drawn to the mystery and pain shrouded in her eyes, but she had never married. Only a handful of the villagers still alive knew the reason.

"Sumer Sa'ab aap ko bula rahe hai," one of the boys replied, gesturing behind him vaguely. "Aap jaldi jaayeeye, woh kuch zaroori baat thi."

"Sumer Kaka?" Ashlesha murmured to herself, eyes already moving beyond the children. Others would have been offended by this treatment, but they were used to their Ashlesha Bua getting lost in the past, and in the mystery of her life.

The woman walked down the steps into the garden, pulling her dupatta over her head as she moved. "Chalo, agar Sumer Kaka hume bula rahe hai, toh hum abhi chalte hai."

They made an odd sight to the few visitors that were in the village, this procession of children and a lone older woman. The villagers called out greetings to the woman, and when one visitor asked after her, they were told that she was the daughter of one of the oldest and most well-respected families to have lived in the village; that she had lost her family at a young age, and now lived on her own and helped the families of the village in any way she could.

Upon reaching the residence of Sumer Singh, Ashlesha paused. There had been a spike of something in the pit of her stomach since the words had left the lips of the young boy, but now dread consumed her. What if this had nothing to do with what she hoped?

"Bua?"

Her attention fell to the little girl tugging on her hand.

"Aap theek toh hai?" She could not help but smile. "Toh hum andar chalein?" Ashlesha steeled herself and nodded. The old hermit had not called her for so many years, what he had to say would be important.

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They sat in silence for awhile, Ashlesha not sure where to begin, and Sumer Kaka gathering his strength. He was ailing, everyone knew that, but this was important. He may not be able to see it to its end, but it was finally coming to an end.

"Woh aa gaye hai."

His wavering voice became more firm as he continued, assured of not just Ashlesha's attention, but that of the few others in the room with them.

"Woh vapas aa gaye hai, Ashlesha. Woh apni kahaani ko pura karne aa gaye hai."

Her eyes widened, and her breath caught. "Kaka?"

He smiled gently. "Ab toh tume unko yaad dilana hai, unko apne manzil tak paunchana hai."

He took another deep breath.

"Sab tumhare haath mein hai beti."

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Ashlesha raced down the familiar turns and worn path, uncaring of the odd looks she was getting or the fact that she was not as young as she used to be when she would race down these very lanes chasing after her friend. Her hands grasped the long cloth of her lehnga skirt, her dupatta trailing behind her.

"Harman! Harman!" She cried, spotting his form in the distance.

"Harman!" She raised her voice again.

She could see him pause, and turn around. She picked up her speed, heart racing. And barely a foot away from him, stopped abruptly. Her chest heaved as she struggled to catch her breath, eyes shying away from Harman's penetrating gaze. He had always had that effect on her, even after all these years. Finally, she was composed enough to look up into his eyes. Hers sparkled with joy and hope and many years of unshed tears.

"Woh yahaan hai, Harman. Humne job hi saalon se maanga, woh sab kuch hone wala hai. Jiji aur aapka bhai, woh hume vapas mil gaye hai."

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