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Chinchinchoo

@Prinsesse.Suvi

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Posted: 14 years ago

Hey everyone. I am having a go at writing my first FF, so please do tell me whether you like it or not. I will try to update atleast once a week.

The story so far is that Naku and Dutta are happily married (FR has happened already ofcourse) and Nakku's pregnant. They are in a shed (Y'know when its raining her heroine in jungle and they cant find shelter but they find a shed its that type of shed but...that is not the situation they are in) The rest like what they were doing in the shed etc etc will be explained later when Nakku has a flashback so here goes Part 1:

"Dutta Bhau, come out, we know that you are in here," a loud booming voice filled the room. Dutta and Naku looked at each other, panicking. Dutta grabbed Naku's wrist and they attempted to run but Naku fell.

"Dutta Bhauuu" the voice came again.

"Naku, get up!" Dutta tried to pick her up, but in vain. Her foot was stuck in a hole in the floor in such a way that it wasn't coming out, and the fact that Dutta was so tensed and wasn't able to concentrate wasn't helping, at all.

"Saab, aap jao. Please, I can take care of myself."😭

"That you can, but what about our kid? Bolo Nakku? You expect me to leave you here?"

"Saab Go!!!! Aapko meri kasam. I dont want anything to happen to you because of me!"😭

"Nakku!, your foot will come out, nothing will happen!"

The thump of someone's feet was coming closer.

"Saab go! I wont let anything happen to our baby, I promise. Aap jao varna there will be no hope for any of us. Please" Nakku looked up at Dutta with pleading eyes. Dutta seemed reluctant, but what Nakku had said was right. If the men found both of them here, they would definitely kill, or do something worse with Nakku. He gave her a last look and creeped out of the window. Nakku was laying by the fireplace, there was no other option. The door creaked open as she grabbed a handful of ash and started rubbing it on her face.

Ta-da the end (of part 1 only 😆)

I know its short but next one I will try and make longer. Please appreciate, criticize whatever😊 I hope you'll like it

Suvi😳

Index

Part1 - Page 1

Part 2- Page 1

Part 3- Page 2

Part 4- Page 3

Part 5- Page 4

Part 6- Page 5

Part 7- Page 6

Part 8 - Page 9

Part 9 - Page 10

Part 10- Page 13

Part 11 - Page 15

Part 12 - Page 17

Part 13 - Page 19

Part 14- Page 22

Part 15- Page 24

Part 16 - Page 26

Part 17- Page 29

Part 18- Page 32

Part 19- Page 35

Edited by Suvi7884 - 14 years ago

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Chinchinchoo

@Prinsesse.Suvi

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Posted: 14 years ago

Lost Love Part 2

The men cmae in and saw Naku on the floor.

"Aye ladki? Tu kaun hai? Yahaan kya kar rahi hai? Aur Dutta Shreeram Patil kahaan hai? Bol!"

Nakku whimpered, in terror and pain.

The men forcefully grabbed Naku's foot and wrenched it out of the hole.

"AAAH!", Naku screamed in pain,

One of the men looked at her face, and pulled a face in disgust, "Kisne peda kiya hai tujhe? A witch-like face like this I have never seen. How can anyone be so ugly?". The other men laughed and said "Lets take her to boss, he is the only one who can make her talk"

The man picked her up and pushed her into the car. They tied a rope on her hands and put a tap eon her mouth so she was unable to do anything.The next thin gshe knew she was being thrown at the feet of a man. SHe grappled around for a hold, or some support, to help her stand upp but was unable to find anything. The man was wearing a white suit with several gold chains around his neck, he had a humongous belly and a piercing in one ear. He had a dark complexion and there was slight stubble growing on his otherwise bald head. He looked down at her and sneered. He twitched his fingers and the men helped her get up, taking out the rope and tape. She lowere her face and looked down at her feet.

"WHo are you, girl?"

"Saab, I was looking for my pet dog, he ran away, and I thought he was in that shed"

"I ASKED YOU WHO YOU ARE NOT WHY YOU WERE IN THE ROOM!" he shouted!

Nakku grimaced and whisperd, "Saab, I am Nakusha, I live in the village"

"Hmmm.....do you know Dutta bhao?"

"Noo!...I mean yyes I have heard of him, he distribute clothes and food to the poor...I think", she stammered

"Ladki, was there anyone in the room before you went in?"

"Uhh, I heard a noise and that is why I thought my dog was in there, but when I went in there wasn't anyone there"

"Are you suree?"

"Yes sir! Believe me, I havent seen dutta bhao in person! ever! Actually when I was in the room I tripped and fell, thats when your men came"

"hmm....so what shall we do with you now?"

"Saab, please dont kill me, I beg of you"

"We cant just let you go now can we, you might be lying, you might know something about Dutta"

"Saab please, I can cook and clean and do all housework"

"Then fine, you are my housemaid until....wel until I have killed Dutta!"

"Saab, if you dont mind, may I ask you why you're after him?"

"well.. this Dutta, he killed my son. Actually my son was looking at his wife, so Dutta got jealous and killed him. It wasn't my sons fault that his wife was so beautiful was it?"

"err..no saab"

"Good girl! now go leela bai will show you how to do your work."

Nakku followed the lady into the room. The lady placed a hand on her head.

"Your luck must be bad. You were at the wrong place at the wrong time. You became a scapegoat. There's no work to do today, you can rest. You look exhausted. I will give you some clothes by tomorrow. Okay beti?"

Nakku smiled and nodded. The lady left and Nakku flopped onto the bed and let out her sadness.

Here is a bigger part..sorry if it is not that good😊 Do comment

Suvi

Edited by supreme_shine - 14 years ago

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Akanksha

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Posted: 14 years ago

hey congrats on ur first ff👏 ............starting of ur ff was outstanding🤗 and hats off to u for that ...........amazing .

ur ff is just superb loved it😳 pls update next part soon 😍

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Chinchinchoo

@Prinsesse.Suvi

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Posted: 14 years ago

@akky baby Thank you. I am glad you liked it. I will update next part as soon as I can (Hopefully tomorrow) Thanks again😊

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Sophia Khan

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Posted: 14 years ago

Congrats for your first FF...
Ohhh Nakku is pregnant and she's back to black!

And Dutta knows the truth..

Hmmmm Interesting...

Waitng to read more..Please continue soon!

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Chinchinchoo

@Prinsesse.Suvi

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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: Sophia21
Congrats for your first FF...
Ohhh Nakku is pregnant and she's back to black!

And Dutta knows the truth..

Hmmmm Interesting...

Waitng to read more..Please continue soon!

Thanks Sophia

Yep she is back to black 😆 And that's gonna be a slight problem later on😕 but there is aloooottt of time for that for now it is just sad naku and her flashbacks😭 I will continue soon.....😛

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Leandra

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Posted: 14 years ago

very nice FF keep writing update soon and plz send me PM when u update next.

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Yuvika

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Posted: 14 years ago

hey suvi

congrats on ur ff...

hope u continue soon..its going gr8 so far

so naku puts her black make up on again...nice way of shwin why and hw she does so...

btw i edited ur ff link in the media center thread..thts wer al other ff links hav been edited...urs is on page 5, at the bottom

it helps members find the ffs easily rather than looking thru evry page of the forum😳

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Chinchinchoo

@Prinsesse.Suvi

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Posted: 14 years ago

@Sasha thankyou.. and sure I will PM you

@Dibya I can't update today as its diwali (Yayy😛) and I am too busy but thankyou for commenting

@Yuvika thanks for putting it up in the media center.. I was going to but thanks for putting the link for me😊

I am really happy that you all liked it

Edited by supreme_shine - 14 years ago

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Chinchinchoo

@Prinsesse.Suvi

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Posted: 14 years ago

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Lost Love Part 3

She remembered the day, Dutta and her were out shopping for Bajji's wedding. The were returning home and Nakku wanted to eat kulfi, so Dutta and her went to get some. On the way back to the car, a guy came infront of them. Nakku got scared, and was cowering behind Dutta's back. The man was staring at Nakku hungrily. He leaned forward and wiped a drop of melted kulfi that was dripping down her chin. "You are so beautiful", turning to Dutta, the man asked, "How much did you buy her for?" Dutta had furiously beaten the man to pulp while Nakku tried to stop him, but in vain.

Nakku came back to her senses and started crying. "Saab, my mother said that my beauty was a curse, and now it will cost my baby's life." she thought.

SHe laid down onto the bed and pulled the blanket over her. The blanket had holes in it and was dirty. Nakku looked at the blanket and started sobbing.

~*Flashback*~

Nakku has fallen asleep on the sofa. Dutta comes in and smiles at her. He picks her up and takes her upstairs. Nakku wakes up, startled, but then realises she is in Dutta's arms. SHe smiles and touches his face, looking innocent, like a child. Dutta puts her on the bed and kisses her forehead. He gets a plush quilt and puts it on Nakku. He gets a pillow and puts it under her right leg. Nakku looks at him questioningly. Dutta smiles and says " You got hurt today, na? I dont want to put any strain on your leg"

"But saab"

"No buts. Sleep quietly."

~*Back to Reality*~

"Saab you used to take care of me and now..." Nakku sobbed and leaned back onto the wall, crying herself to sleep.

Sorry its short but I was busy beacuae of diwali and couldn't do a long one

Suvi

Edited by supreme_shine - 14 years ago