'Unkahe Pal[ finally back chk last pg]

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(both these poems are copyright protected ask me if u want them dont i repeatt dont copy them without permission)

As u enter through the gate it leads you into a house at the far end of the yard has flowers and the other side is all dried ..like it gets after a snowfall then we hear a sad voice "kuch pal...bas kuch pal main meri zindagi badal gayee ...hamesha ke liyay"

Why does life have to be so cruel...so much for Angad and Kripa's happiness.
certain things and moments come in your life which u dont have control of and ruin everything.

a story of a girl ,whose everything got ruined in just a matter of hours ..only hours which could not be fixed again leaving her hopeless and helpless.And she cant even mourn to it cuz she has no clue what her past consisted of.

Character Analysis

Kripa Sharma JUST A NORMAL GIRL ..WITH A WISH TO TOUCH THE SKIES....BUT SOMETHING IN THE PAST LEFT HER SHATTERED INTO A MILLION PIECES.

Angad Khanna A singer For The Heck Of It ,WAS JUST LIKE THOSE GUYS HANGING AROUND WITH THERE GRILFRIENDS...ONE NIGHT CHNAGES ALL..


[ other charachters will be intorduced as they come]

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Posted: 19 years ago
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sounds cool...who are the characters 😊 😛
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Posted: 19 years ago
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Sounds great cont when u can!
Neha
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Posted: 19 years ago
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PART 1

As you go further you see a heavy metal gate and behind it is a white mansion…. the gates open and allows you in. as you take a step forward you can smell the welcoming breeze of the house. Yup that's the Bose mansion. as you walk towards the door you pass a fountain, and a few monuments.

There is a long pathway leading to a lawn filled with flowers, as far as your eye crawl there are flowers .on the right side of the garden is a patio where a canvas is standing the camera moves towards it and there is a beautiful girl painted on it..With sad eyes, 😭beside the canvas is a table were a few brushes, a palette and paints are sitting on the far right hand corner is floor seating with white cloth spread on the floor and white cushions on the cloth is a sitar…all these paintings flowers and sitar isn't anything in front of this window.

This window is what catches everybody's eye. Its filled with vines of leaves and the only thing you can see in this greenery is the window. Lets have a peek inside the window (aw bad manners never look inside anybodies room) 😡
The room is pitch dark but on a table a candle is lit which allows you to see some one sleeping on the bed.

As you see the figure it could be described as a girl. So this girl is restless she keeps tossing and turning and has beads of sweat on her forehead and under those heavy lashed eyes pupils are moving…who could tell what was behind them..Just then the girl wakes up panting and screams…. just then the door open and in walks a figure switches on the light and sits beside the girl..Puts his strong arm around her, all the girl could do was lean into him and cry …as she cried the guy said "kripa…kripa"
But the girl wouldn't stop crying.
Just then kripa starts talking"bhaiyya…why ….why is it always me.?…why me ?…why do suffer every time?


And the guy just sits there helplessnot able to do anything…and how could he …even though she wasn't his real sister but he loved her as is she were one.he couldn't see her cry or in pain …he just couldn't. He ..Prithvi Bose..son of Akshay Bose..the richest industrialist in India. Who could buy a hotel or a plane in just am tter of hours ..always felt helpless when it came to kripa ..she was Prithivi's weakness he could do anything for her ,but he couldn't bring what she ad lost. 😭

What did the girl loose??
Stay tuned..

hope u guys like my first part ..plz reply lol

bbye tczz...

luv ya guyss

Edited by Hania baweja - 19 years ago
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Posted: 19 years ago
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i love this fanfic!!! plz plz plz continue!!
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Posted: 19 years ago
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😉 😉 😉 AWESOME 😛

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Edited by shahidlover24 - 19 years ago
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Posted: 19 years ago
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hey guys thnxz for ur replys ...ill be posting 2nd and 3rd part on friday cuz i have examz bbye tc ..until then keep enjying 😛
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hey guys ....

PART 2

As prithvi thought over all this he felt that he shouldn't be here ,if he couldn't do anything for her, as prithvi looked over at kripa who was still in his arms, but sound asleep there was a tear ub her lasg which prithvi rubbed off and layed her down on the bed, she looked so innocent just like and angel she didn't deserve all this she was just too good to have all this pain In her life.

He gently kissed her forehead and left the room closing the door behind him. he walked through the fully lit hallway on the right side was a railing and on the left side were paintings done by kripa …as prithvi stopped by the paintings his eyes just welled up with tears and he walked off from there ,…entering his study …it was dark and dusty, he sat on a sofa….staring at the floor thinking …about kripa, he thought probably living in dehradoon…. Or India made her sad and that's what caused nightmares,

SO she could go abroad to study further cuz she always loved school. HE thought that this was the best option and he would talk to his mom abt this in the morning. just as he was thinking a little girl jumped in his lap.. breaking the trance.. she is neha bose. The second d heart of the bose mansion. Well the first is kripa cuz no matter how much pain she had hshe would be happy every time and help everyone around.
So neha is prithvi's daughter.. neha sitting on prithvi's lap started to talk " daddy.. lets go.. plz I am really sleepy.. and you knw you have to tuck me in today.. daadi already slept.. plz plz com e one an d you have to tell me a story too" prithivi just smiled at his cute little angel.


"OK lets go" said prithvi picking neha up. He walked towards the door he walked out of the room with neha in his arms. Prithci and neha are talking as they enter their room, A young lady sitting on the bed reading, She puts down the book and looks at her husband and takes neha says.. "hmm neha come one its time for you to go to bed and y did u bring daddy wid u? he miust be doing some work rite?"
Pritthvi spoke" nahin mishti,, main kaam nahi karrahai tha.. jjust thinking.." ok so here is mishti she is prithvi's wife and neha's mom she luvs her family specially kripa.


Just then mishti spoke " kripa ke bare main?" prithvi nodded his head. His eyes looked sad. Mishti walked over to him and took neha from him telling neha" neha I'll tuck u in the bed today cuz daddy has some work ok and no stories cuz it already too late. And you have school tomoro" neha looked obver at her mom with a sad face saying "but mommy" no bus said mishti and took her to the room which was pink and had flowers painted on the wall. Obviously by kripa and her room was filled with her faovourite cartoon chracter dora the explorer, Arthur, Barbie and Minnie.
Mishti tucked her under the covers and sat down beside her and said "sorry neha, no stories today: and kissed her forhead gave her Dora and left the room switching off the lights.

As she walked by the hallway and stood in front of the paintings doont by kripa she touched one of the paintings and remembered how kripa had made her sit on the bench for 2 hrz and did her painting. She was always like dat ever though the person wouldn't like to get herself painted she would drag them and make them sit. As if it was her right to have a painting made by kripa. As mishti thought over it she had a smile spread over he face but her eyes were welling up wid tears. She wiped the tears off and went to her room. Prithvi was sting on the bed looking through an old album of kripa. Just as prithvi thought that sum1 was coming,, he wiped his tear and hid the album. When the mishti entered the room.

She sensed that prithvi had been crying and that smile on his face was fake. She sat beside him and said. "Prithvi you don't have to put that fake smile in font of me" prithvi sighed" why mishti why?!" and hugged her" why me? Why? That's what she says… that's what she asks me!" he was crying no1 " why her mishti? I can't see her like this, I know she tries to hide the pain and she is successful at time but she can't hide it from me. Never.." they parted.. mishti rubbed off his tears and said "prithvi I knw wat you are going thought and you can always talk to me abt it cuz Iu knw I am ur best friend b4 ur wife and u never put that stupid fake smile in front of me!" prithvi looked at her and hugged her.

ok so ....how do u guys like the second part.....???

hope u guys like it

waiting for ur replies

bbye tc

hug

Edited by Hania baweja - 19 years ago
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Posted: 19 years ago
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just read the two parts and it's great but a bit sad to anywayz pls cont soon 😆
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Posted: 19 years ago
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hey guys ,...thnxz for yallz replys ...and yeah i cnt update today cuz the book i wrote my part in got washed away 😡 ...
soo hopefully ill updatetomm
bbye tc
andd hugzzzzzzzzzzz

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