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@shabo24

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Posted: 16 years ago

#291

Originally posted by: noneeM
S! That has to be one the most adorable shots I've read. I totally loved it. Wonderful shot to read first thing in the morning. Can go about the day now with a smile on my face:)
xoxo:-Nonee

Thanks N! I don't know about most adorable, but yea it was kinda adorable!

Originally posted by: sourpuss
You wrote it! *dances while laughing hysterically**rolls eyes* Calm your pants - yes I did. :)

Dude, that was awesome. I loved the Chacha-niece bond between them! And the peanut butter thing was just...🤣It was stolen from the show! :)

You can so write 7 more shots before August ends! *fingers crossed*

Love,

Bhav (:

P.S. Ugh I just found out that Karan's like 16/17 and not 17/18 like I originally thought. *pouts* But he's cute and cheeky though. Oh well. I've got Chace. *grins* *cheeky grin* Karan's near my age than. And Chace is kinda too. So I can have both. *cheeky grin back*

Originally posted by: Khushi34
Shabzieee...
Mine!!

I'll read it and let u no

Gtg xx

LOL - thanks Khushboo! 😛

Originally posted by: Dark Love
Peanut Butter was HILARIOUS! & SO SO CUUTE! Thanks Madz! 😃

And...God. So I basically read ALL your oneshots...and ask Meera...I'm totally stunned. Especially the tragedies...you've left me speechless...so you can say I'm not in a comment mood at the moment, but hopefully I shall do so for each one, sometime in the near future? Ded relax, I'll never bug you for comments because I leave such short comments everywhere! 😆 But I'm really shocked you read everything, and mortifed you are going to read the FF's. 😆

Anyway, just wanted to let you know I've been hovering over these oneshots, clicking the like button despite knowing it doesn't get anywhere close to telling you how much I LOVED each and every OS of yours. [onto the FF's now] Thanks a TON! That means a lot - glad to know you liked them!

Originally posted by: Dark Love
HSSH was AMAZING! No cheesiness at all, I dislike cheese myself! Really? I thought the lines used in the last part was so taporii style. 😆 To each his own! :)

It was so so gooooooood. All the romance...then the twist...and then PREMM 😍 and his khoon wali maang-bhar-ing was soooooooooooo delectable! YAY PREMM! 🥳 *pouts* I really wanted to make that tragic, but people were literally after my blood.

I absolutely adoree your work Shabo! 🤗Thanks so much! ☺️🤗

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@shabo24

Rocker

Posted: 16 years ago

#292

First Date

I fingered the edge of my worn duppata as I stood nervously in front of my closet and that's when it hit me. I had nothing to wear.

"HEER DI!"

Di came running in, and it was obvious she had been in the middle of doing something important because she did not look happy.

"Kya hai Meher?"

I put on my best pout for her.

"I have nothing to wear."

Sighing, she walked over to the my closet and raised her eyes at the overbearing mess.

"Nothing?"

I sighed. "Please di! Preet will be here any minute!"

Muttering to herself, di vanished into the closet only to be back in less than a minute with the perfect outfit. Grabbing it from her, I threw my hands around her.

"Thankyouthankyouthankyou!"

Hugging me back, she left the room, leaving me grinning to myself. This might actually be ok.

~~~

I walked outside the door, to see Preet waiting for me. He smiled down at me.

"Ready?"

Stupid butterflies in my stomach. "As I'll ever be."

Preet returned my smile, but catching sight of what was behind me, he let out a groan. "Maa!"

I turned to see Gayatri Aunty hurrying over towards us and I braced myself.

"Oh beta, you look so cute!"

"Thanks Aunty." I griminced, as she pulled my cheeks. She turned to go, but seeing my mom watching from the doorway, she paused and both mothers exchanged knowing looks. Groaning, Preet grabbed my arm and pulled me down the street, and behind us, I could hear my mom and is, snickering.

"She wanted to bring a camera as well." Preet announced in disgust.

What was I supposed to say to that?

"That's nice."

Preet looked at me weirdly and I mentally smacked myself. Choosing to ignore the sticky moment, Preet and I wandered down the street, heading towards the resturant Preet had picked out.

As we walked down the street, discussing the latest gossip from school, I noticed people on the streets giving us strange looks. Looking down at my clothes, I realized we totally looked like we were on our first date.

For the first time, I glanced over to see what Preet was wearing and my mouth dropped open in shock . He had ironed his shirt.

~~~

We sat down, under the dimming lights, all of a sudden feeling out of place. Couples smiled at us from all around and you could almost hear their thougths. Mortified, I looked down at the menu and ordered the first thing I saw. #34: The Squid Special.

~~~

The food arrived, shortly after, a welcome distraction from the odd silence that had taken over our table. I watched as the waiter set down Preet's fish dinner and my eyes started watering when I saw what I had to consume.

Preet's eyes widened over the squid's tentacles and I surpressed an urge to puke. I stuck my fork in the plate and smiled nervously at him.

"Yummy in my tummy!"

Yummy in my tummy?!?!?! What was wrong with me?

~~~

Dinner passed by slow, dead silent. I couldn't hear his thoughts. What is he was like a typical guy? The guys Ashlesha di was always warning against her? The ones that were always looking for one thing.

Preet looked over at me and I had to stop myself from slapping him. The disgusing pervert. Bet I knew what he was thinking right that miniute.

He opened his mouth to break the silence but I broke it first.

"I don't believe in teenage sex."

Preet gaped at me.

"Umm....ok."

I watched him turn multiple shades of red as he avoided eye contact with me. God, take me now.

~~~

He walked me up to the door, at twilight. The walk home had been awkward to say the least, Preet making sure there was at least five feet between them.

I turned to look at him. Now what?

He spoke first. "So that was..."

"..yea..."

He looked at me, and for the first time I felt we actually connected. He held out his hand.

"Just friends than?"

I put mine in his and grinned. "You got it."

Smiling, he left and I bounded in the house, laughing hysterically to the surprise of Ashlesha and Heer di.

"I'm in love!"

***

Yeah, it's short but I thought it was kinda cute so why not? I think this is my first attempt at first person as a one shot so it felt kinda weird. I don't think it was the best I've written 😆 I think the ending is too rushed. 😆 Comments/Criticism/Like Button?

--shabz

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Meera

@indiandoll89

Trailblazer

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Posted: 16 years ago

#293

my spot! 😛

*edited*

I loved tht! 😛 It was perfect, and writing it in first person was even more fun to read! 😆 I thought it was adorable, her flipping out on what to wear, then not knowing what to say, ordering the obvious WRONG dinner! 😛

But aww they're just friends now? 😆 I love the ending! 😛 It was very amusing! 😃

Love you,

Meera😳

Edited by indiandoll89 - 16 years ago

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urworstnitemare

@urworstnitemare

Voyager

Posted: 16 years ago

#294

MEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEe Issss HERE!!!!!!!!!! *tackles you into a what N calls BBB! Falls off the bed laughing. *giggles

brb!

BACCCKKK!!!!!!!!!!! Haha..that was hilariously cute! BUT squid=YUCK! ANd ohh the ending just flew off the top of my head...Meher's just wierd I guess 😆 The random spitting out of that teenage sex thing was FUNNY! LMAO😆 Can just imagine the look on Preets face. Falls to the ground laughing. Good one!

-Avi

Edited by urworstnitemare - 16 years ago

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Bhavna

@sourpuss

Inactive

+ 3

Posted: 16 years ago

#295

First attempt at first-person POV or not, this was so totally hilarious! I loved the first-person POV for this one because it gave a completely hysterical insight into Meher's thoughts and her panic and all. And the awkwardness between them was so adorable! Though the ending was kinda...off...

Love,

Bhav (:

P.S. OI. Chace is older than you and thus closer to MY age. So back off. Or else. 😛

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Aradhna

@Anhdara13

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 16 years ago

#296

It was cute, her awkwardness and everything. I'm getting more fond of reading first person, and you did it well. Though, the ending did seem a bit off, I mean, are they 'just friends' or is she in love? It's demanding a sequel.

Love,
Radz

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And I should tell you because...?

@shabo24

Rocker

Posted: 16 years ago

#297

Originally posted by: indiandoll89
my spot! 😛

*edited*

I loved tht! 😛 It was perfect, and writing it in first person was even more fun to read! 😆 I thought it was adorable, her flipping out on what to wear, then not knowing what to say, ordering the obvious WRONG dinner! 😛 Thanks Meera! :)

But aww they're just friends now? 😆 I love the ending! 😛 It was very amusing! 😃Way to lie! :P The ending was the wacked out part.

Love you,

Meera😳

Originally posted by: urworstnitemare
MEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEe Issss HERE!!!!!!!!!! *tackles you into a what N calls BBB! Falls off the bed laughing. *gigglesNOOO! Not another N!!! *dies*

brb!

BACCCKKK!!!!!!!!!!! Haha..that was hilariously cute! BUT squid=YUCK! ANd ohh the ending just flew off the top of my head...Meher's just wierd I guess 😆 The random spitting out of that teenage sex thing was FUNNY! LMAO😆 Can just imagine the look on Preets face. Falls to the ground laughing. Good one!LOL, I don't know what I was thinking when I wrote the ending - maybe I should write a alt one? Naa. 😆 But thanks for commenting Avi! 😃

-Avi

Originally posted by: sourpuss
First attempt at first-person POV or not, this was so totally hilarious! I loved the first-person POV for this one because it gave a completely hysterical insight into Meher's thoughts and her panic and all. And the awkwardness between them was so adorable! Though the ending was kinda...off...Thanks di! Yea, the ending, now that I look back at it I'm like "WTF?" 😆 I think I couldn't pick between the two so I just stuck that in there. 😆 Thanks di!

Love,

Bhav (:

P.S. OI. Chace is older than you and thus closer to MY age. So back off. Or else. 😛 It's ok if he is older. As long as me and him are not related. It's all legal. *smirks*

Originally posted by: Anhdara13
It was cute, her awkwardness and everything. I'm getting more fond of reading first person, and you did it well. Though, the ending did seem a bit off, I mean, are they 'just friends' or is she in love? It's demanding a sequel. I COULDN'T DECIDE! 😆 That's why its all....meh. 😆 Hmm a sequel? To fix it up? Maybe....thanks though! :)

Love,
Radz

Thanks to everyone for hitting the like button! 😊