~The Fear Within~ Part 29 Pg. 44 2-27-10

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Posted: 16 years ago
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THE FEAR WITHIN

~Story of a Destructive Fate...~

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Alone and driven to insanity,
Reflections of a destroyed women sitting by her vanity.
Shattered is the mirror pointing to her broken dreams and the future.
Gone are the people who could once say that they knew her.
Don't make her a promise you know you can't keep.
She knows they're all lies and they won't help her sleep.
Wet and stained is her face dripping with tears.
Day after day of running into her fears.

Cursed is she with this loneliness disease.
No way for this pain to ease.
Drained now of tears no longer can she cry.
Hollow of emotion inside she will slowly die.
Without a trace she disappears.
No one cared to see that she was vanishing all these years.
So now she's gone how could this be?
Lonliness destroyed the girl at the vanity.

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Water pouring heavily from the shower ran through her numb body, her cold skin now drenched in water felt nothing'her moist eyes couldn't differentiate between tears and the water droplets'she stood under the cold running water and stared blankly'lifting her hand towards her face she noticed the ring placed on her left hand'a symbol of something she had known was a bond between two people that could never be shattered, a relationship beyond all other friendships and relations, an undefined love that was forever lasting'she looked at the gleaming diamond her ring held, almost as delicate and fragile as the relationship itself'her eyes were yet again moist, and yet again she felt guilty of 5 years of destructive and troubled marriage'as her eyes flowed up her arm, she noticed the bruises, the hand prints, and the ugly marks that were evidence of her failed attempts in fixing what went wrong 'they say that time heals all wounds but in some relationships wounds only get deeper with time' coming out the shower with her bath robe and her messy curls wrapped in another towel she walked herself towards the sink and stood in front of the foggy mirror'looking at her faded reflection she wiped the last of her tears away, yet again vowing to be strong'she felt the slight sting towards the left side of her neck and noticed the scratch was bleeding again'the scratch that was a reminder of her marriage with a stranger, the moment of that awkward intimacy where she felt nothing...nothing at all'the stranger she had known from the early days of her life'from the teenage years'from the adolescent age' it was ironic knowing a stranger for that long'she winced in pain again and then washed it over with water putting some pressure on it so that bleeding would stop'her doctors instincts had played their fair share of role here, but she was nowhere near living the dream she had always wanted to'her sacrifices were all done to fix the unfixable in her marriage'her yearning for that one moment of love and honest care remained a yearning' she blamed herself at times for not fulfilling that relationship'she blamed her lack of passion when they were intimate'she blamed her lack of dramatic nature when she would just ignore his foolishness'she blamed her inability to become a good wife...her far fetched dream of becoming a mother someday' her inability to handle her relationship well'Yes, it was her fault, at the end of the day it was always her fault, and today was no different'the noise of clattering objects from outside snapped her back to reality and she quickly dressed herself in a black night gown and went outside, where her lifelong stranger maybe, just maybe awaited for her like she had for him'for many years'


Guess the Characters if you must...I'll be up with the character sketch and part one Soon...

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Posted: 16 years ago
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Okay the character is Muskaan!!!!!!!
And the intro is Really Really Intresting..
please continue soon...........
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hey very nice intro
can't wait to read more 😊
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very interesting intro...waiting for u to update!!!!!!😊
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wow ,that was one intense intro
loved it ,though i'm not much of a RM fan, i'd still love to follow this one
coz the concept looks awesomely interesting
and the known stranger bit was my fav from that little part
the verse well written

do pm me if u can
and hope u can cont soon,wud wana know wats made Muskaan live this miserable life...

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Posted: 16 years ago
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great intro imane! intense, with only the right amount revealed... muskaan and curls sound obvious, if it turns out to be someone else i will be surprised... the misery causing stranger she knew all her life i wont take a guess at... hoping you will update soon!

cheers,

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Posted: 16 years ago
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Fear Within
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Character Sketch


The picture perfect couple.... Mr. and Mrs. Armaan Malik


Self made, Successful, Smart, Realistic and Affluent
Known to the world as Armaan Malik, he is one of the most ambitious and successful Entrepreneurs of his generation, with firms all over the country he has his influence over many powerful people and industries. Married to Muskaan for almost 5 years he is still trying to explore what marriage is all about or rather making his own rules about the relationship itself... at times he just doesn't see Muskaan the way she wants herself to be seen.
Short temper and Aggressive nature is something he has a hard time coping with, but it is a part of his personality that remains indifferent to anyone and everyone. As a husband he believes in having the upper hand, and as a known member of the high society his expectations are above normal for everyone, especially his wife...


Simplistic and Compassionate, Understanding and Graceful
Known to the world as Muskaan Malik, she is a type of person who has sacrificed herself for the sake of others. Raised in an orphanage from a very young age, she suffered the loss of her parents when she was only 12. Three years a go she completed her Masters and M.D along with specialization in Oncology. Hardships in life made her a strong person and she is capable of coping with almost anything. She believes in destiny and it's sharp turns, she knows that her fate will someday bestow her the happiness she deserves. As Mrs.Armaan Malik she has managed to erase her own identity in order to mend the flaws in her marriage...her dreams about her career have remained as dreams so far...her life is a series of struggle and she knows that she is capable of fighting against the odds... will she?



Lively and Optimistic, Loving and Benevolent
Neighbors with the Malik's, he is a successful Neurologist who has recently moved to Mumbai due to his assigned position as the head of Surgery in Sanjeevani Hospital. He has family living abroad and an older sister (Nikki) living in Delhi with her husband (Abhi). He believes in timeless and ageless love, and also thinks that a pure emotion like love requires no basic reasoning or rationality. His personality is of a very down to earth type of a guy, he is easy going and fun loving, he prefers his surroundings to be happy as well, two things he hates are manipulation and betrayal. Besides being a surgeon he is also into personal training, he has mastered self desfense course and every once a week coaches people who want to learn. He has heard a lot about the Malik's from people at work and around the social circle, but refuses to judge them based on others opinions. He loves his work, he is carefree and live spirited, he loves the idea of reaching above and beyond one's dreams.


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Other Characters


Mr and Mrs. Abhimanyu Modi

Abhi and Nikki are a happily married couple living in the suburbs of Delhi. They are expecting their first child after 3 years of blissful marriage. The couple as well as the uncle to be (Rahul) are excited about the new arrival. Nikki is Rahul's older sister who is caring and kind. Abhi is a loving husband who supports his wife in all ways possible, him and rahul share a good rapport. Seeing his sister live the dream of her life with Abhi makes Rahul truly believe in a match made in heaven.


Sukriti Sharma
Co-worker and a close friend of Rahul's, she is very straightforward and realistic about life and it's various aspects. She is intelligent, pretty, and an amazing friend. To rahul she is a "mom" like figure, as she makes sure rahul is not slacking off in any way. From making sure he is eaten his dinner to assisting him in difficult surgical cases, Rahul and Sukrirti are dependent on each other for life at work and at home. Sukriti is happily engaged to Karan who lives in Boston.


Riddihima Kahnna
Muskaan's Best friend since childhood days, she has known muskaan since she was 12 years old, after her parents died. Basically the Orphanage where muskaan was raised was ran by Riddihima's Dad. She is like a sister to Muskaan as Riddihima's family is the only family Muskaan has. She owns her own Fashion Designing Institute along with a designer boutique. Talented and Smart, her life is exactly the way she had wanted it to be.



Shilpa Anand
The "other women" in Armaan's life, she is a lawyer and works alongside with with Armaan. She always had feelings for him, but due to his marriage and responsibilities, she never confessed any thing. After returning from England and finding about Armaan's marriage, she was initially shattered, but decided to keep her friendship going by joining him in his business. Her desire is to be by him, if not with him. She doesn't envy muskaan, nor
does she mean any harm to Muskaan or Armaan. She is basically there as support for Armaan, whenever he needs. Naive and easily convinced, she is a girl who is completely charmed by the cold-hearted Armaan Malik ever since the first time they met, and will continue to live in his shadow for however long it takes Armaan to notice her... Obviously she doesn't know the brutal reality of Armaan Malik.


Atul Joshi
Family friend of the Malik's, he is also an affluent business person. Satisfied with the life he is living. Married to Anjali, He portrays a supporting role in this story.
He is not rude or mean, but considers certain things in life to be a certain way.


Anjali Joshi
Family Friend of Malik's, Married to Atul. Organizes most social gathering and parties. She is funny and loving, but has her "disapproving" checklist for certain things in life. Basically, She is a busy bee in the high class social circle. Portrays a supporting role in the story.





Note: This is a work of fiction and so please don't be ofended by anything in this story or creative writing, all characters pictured above are made up, their actions and purpose are only for the story's sake. i am not bashing or trashing anyone here... it's a story and it's made up for entertaining purposes. So please don't take anything to your heart because this is JUST A made up story. I hope i am not hurting anyone by my story and the work of fiction involved in it.
Thanks



Edited by imane568 - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Oh my god. I knew it! After reading your intro, I had a feeling that jerk of a husband had to be Armaan. I take it you dislike Armaan as much as I do? good good. Anyway, I love your writing so I'm definitely going to follow this one as faithfully as the other one. Honestly, I have a feeling I'm going to be your #1 fan. 😊 Thanks for the PM. love you hamesha!
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Posted: 16 years ago
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hey Imane,
this was one amazing intro,dear.......just fab as all of ur other FF's......cant wait to read more......very interesting......and i'm definitely in the PM list......continue soon!!
-surbhi😊
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Posted: 16 years ago
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the intro was really nyc and well written as always!!!!!!
Character sketch was good too!!!!!
waiting 4 u 2 continue!!!!!

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