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Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: shabo24

Aww damn it. Was not tragic enough? I got to buff up those skills....maybe I'll put away that Meet shot...I got an idea for a tragic one as well....I shall get around to penning BOTH of them soon/ 😃Thanks for liking it...poignant....I like that 😉
Nooooo!!! Whatever you do, please to be not putting away the Meet shot! *desperate* Haha I like 'poignant' too. The editor of my school newsletter last year used that with regards to a poem of mine, and I felt so happy and accomplished because he's a much better writer than I am. Although his shizz at the College Day thingie kinda rolled a few eyes...But please don't put away the Meet one-shot!

Posted: 16 years ago
Awww how can I say no to that? I really want to write that Meet shot because Preet is going to have a couple of smirks (☺️) in there. I don't think he will be shirtless, but how about I go for a muscle top. It would be kinda weird if he wore no shirt...😆...appreciated...but weird.
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Posted: 16 years ago
hey....i just read ur oneshot and god ur so frikkin evil.... 😈 ......i hate tragic stuff but i srsly love the way u have written this part.......its brilliant....

continue writing....and hopefully it wont always be a tradegy that will bring be to the verge of tears... 😉 😆

xx
Pragya
Posted: 16 years ago

Originally posted by: pragz1994

hey....i just read ur oneshot and god ur so frikkin evil.... 😈 ......i hate tragic stuff but i srsly love the way u have written this part.......its brilliant....

continue writing....and hopefully it wont always be a tradegy that will bring be to the verge of tears... 😉 😆

xx
Pragya



Ohh new reader! Thanks for commenting! 😃 Muhahaha....aren't I ebil? I love it. *rubs hands together* But thanks for the suger sweet comment, I got a tragedy one coming up probably in a week ish but then after that got tons of fluff filled shots, and after that - we will see! 😃
Posted: 16 years ago
Hey guys! *squishy hugs*

Been a while since I have written anything, think I am suffering from something called writers block. 😆 I have lots of ideas, but just don't know how to pen it down. And when I do write them, they turn out weird. I wrote this shot, mostly for Bhav di who makes every idea of mine seem like the next big thing! 😆 but I don't think I did justice to it! Maybe it's just me, but it was so weird. I like the idea, just now how i wrote it. 😕 aha well, whatever. Meet shot, titled "Morning Suprises" Basically, Meet are to be married in a week, total fluff, very short. 😆 Enjoy!


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Meher frowned her in her sleep as she felt something poking her in the small of her back. She moaned deeply. Who the hell was disturbing her beauty sleep? She was getting married in a matter of a week and she couldn't afford to look less then a flower for her to be husband Preet. Shifting in the bed, Meher tut-ed in the dark, for the poking had yet to cease. Who was bugging her in her sleep? She needed her sleep. It was her only time where she could dream of Preet without being interupted. Speaking of Preet...

"Preet!"

"Meher!"


She sat up in bed, shocked to say the least. Her over-sized shirt, his shirt, fell a bit to expose her shoulder. He looked at her bare shoulder with a raised eyebrow with a smirk to match, and she quickly pulled the shirt up again, narrowing her eyes at him. She turned to look at the side table. 3:54. 3:54 AM.

"PAAGAL HOGYE TUM PREET! ITNI SUBHA SUBAH TUM MERI KAMRE MEIN KYA KARRE HO?"

Preet grinned at her. "Arre, chilla re kyun? Mein kya koi annjane lardka hoon? Hone waala pati hoon tumhare...itna toh haq hai na mera?"

Meher clutched desperatly at her sheets. "Haan, PAR SUBAH KE CHAR BAAJE?!?!" Dimaag toh kharab nahin hai na?!!???"

Cheekily he replied, "Bhai, dimmag ke baare mein toh pata nahin par haan, dil toh kabkhi kho gaya."

Blushing crimson, Meher shifted in her bed, unsure of what to say. She decided it would be the safest to keep yelling at him.

"Par Preet, shayed tum ne dekha nahin, subah ke char bajrehai! Tum, yahan, iss waqt kya kaare ho?"

"Arre, why do I need a reason? You should be happy to have me here. Pata hai, kitne lardkiyan paagal ho chuke hai sirf meri muskaan se?"

'Toh phir, woh lardkiyan ke kamre main jao! Mujhe sona hai!"

"Tum hai pata nahin kya? Pyar mein neend nahi aathi."

"Yaar, mujhe toh bohat neend aathi.... - KYA KAARE HO?"
screamed Meher, as Preet had slyly lay his head down in her lap and closed his eyes, a smile playing at his lips. Although Meher's yelling continued, with every question, Preet buried himself deeper in her lap. Sighing in frusteration, Meher knelt back against the backboard. Minutes passed, while the young couple sat in silence, fingers knotted, savering the moment, wondering what the future would bring. Suddenly Preet got up and pulled Meher up along him. Bewildered, Meher restrained.

"Aab kya kaare ho?"

"Sawal maath poocho, bas mere saath ao."

"Par Preet -"
Meher was cut short as Preet tied her duppata around her eyes and mouth. Losing control over two her senses, she clinged to Preet who smiled. Mission accomplished.

He lead her out her room, down halls, up stairs, walking with care, helping her with ever step and every corner. Finally he stopped causing Meher to stumble and then still. She felt a cool breeze hit her face, and she could feel her hair flying behing her.

"Preet? Kahan hai hum?"

Smiling to himself, he silently, undid the knot, so her eyes could drink in the sight infront of them. He had led her to the terrence, not a moment to late as the sun peeked out, bathng the area in yellow, orange, red and a hint of purple. Smiles found their way onto to Preet and Meher's faces as the sun shone brighter with every passing moment.

Meher felt Preet wrap his arms around her waist, her duppata wrapping both of them in a tiny sanctuary. She knelt back, her head resting on his chest while his head lay gently on her right shoulder. Memarized by the moment, enthralled, both of them stood in silent, appreciating not just the miricale in front of them, but each other.

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Erm. Sorry BD, couldn't make it better. But for those of you hate how I write a lot of tragic, I tried writing one earlier this week, and just failed. It sucked. Ask Meera. 😆 So break from tragic for a while, don't worry Radz di has got a lot planned. *wink* But I have a TON of fluff shots - all for Meet - so get ready for those! =] Ummm what else?

Comments, critisim?

--shabz

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Posted: 16 years ago
mine! 😳

*unreserved* shockingly enough...I don't think this could've been better....

Her total anger all adorably at him, I just wanna hug them both, or I'll hug Meher and leave all the Preet hugging to you guys!😆

But seriously 4? in the morning? does he want her to shoot him? cus I would've!😆😆😆 *sigh* I can barely get up at 6😆😆😕 But the whole part of him just laying in her lap, and then taking her up to see the sunrise, I can't stop smiling it was sooo adorable Shabz!😳😳😳

Oh oh oh! The part with her wearing his shirt, and all A-D-O-R-A-B-L-E!😃

Write more soon, and oye! the tragic didn't suck....it was just like MAHA depressing, and it seemed kinda lacking near the end, but in all honesty, I didn't want you to write it, fluff, and specially MEET fluff is so much fun!😉😃😳

Love you loads,

Meera😳
Edited by indiandoll89 - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
IT-WAS-FAB!!!!!!!!!

AAHH!! Shabzz!!!! Whether its tragic, romantic, or just Meet fluff, you do an EXCELLENT job at writing it!!

Honestly...I don't think this one needs any criticism cuz it was shooo shweett!!!

*sigh* I'm loving Meet more and more each and every day....especially after I read your wonderful songfics/one-shots!!!

LOL! Preet is so naughty!!! Waking up Meher 3:54 AM!!! Has he gone MADD??!?!?! lol...acutually, I would be fuming too if someone woke me up THAT early!!

But the result was soo sweet!!! The two love birds admiring the sunrise!! how cute!!!

Loved it shabz!!! Cant wait for ur forth coming ones!!!

Luv yaa!! <3333333
Garima
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Posted: 16 years ago
mine! =)
Oh, that was so sweet!! It was simple and short, but it had everything we needed!!! *thumbs up* 👏
It's so funny how Meher is shouting/screaming at him the WHOLE time and he is looking at her like he can't her hear and if he can, it's music to his ears anyways (which it probably is)!!!!!! 😆 Awwww, she is wearing his shirt to sleep!!!! 😳 That's adorable!!!
it shows that they have a great comfort level around each other, but at the same time that they know and respect their boundaries!!!! *thumbs up* 👏 I love Meet!!!
Oh....... sunrises are so beautiful!!!!! I would love to just be there with someone i love and watch a sunrise!!! Hopefully in th future i can!!!! *fingers crossed* 😳😆
That was awesome, great job and can't wait till your next one!!!! *hug*
Edited by blackdaughter - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago

Okay, so my other comment got deleted *sobs* so I am starting again!! =P I was giggling whilst reading all of this!! My sister was looking at me thinking- Has Zahra gone mental?! ROFL!! But yeah, that is the effect your writing has on me- I become like marshmallow, all soft and sweet!!

Anyhoooo, that was amazing!! Loved how you started it- Preet poking Meher- I could so imagine that- LOL!! And her reaction to realising that he was actually there in her bedroom at 4am!! BTW- what was she doing wearing his shirt, eh??!! ROFL!!

The bit about Meher deciding to continue shouting at Preet in order to hide her blush was super cute- reall made me laugh!! And is Preet sweet or is he sweet?? Laying in her lap like that- awwwwwwwwww!! I love that you don't have them married yet- it makes it even more cute- the way you focus on their thoughts about the future- loved it!!

And wooooowww- the end!!! That was soooo romantic- watching the sun set together, so sweet!!! I DEMAND you write more fluff!! Not that I don't love your tragedies, but you know I am a sucker for all things fluff!! Hehe!! Great job Shabz!!
I made the comment a tad shorter this time- but hope you like it!! =P
Love Zahra xx
Edited by Pyari_Zahra - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww! Ohmygosh I cannot believe he woke her up at 4 in the morning just to see the sunrise! (Where does the sun rise at 4 in the morning, exactly? Here it's out by 6.30-ish!) Aww don't worry hun it was brilliant! The chemistry between them was just fabulous and has completely knotted me up (in a good way!) so much that I think I'm going to throw up. It's a weird feeling, but trust me when I say it was awesome!!!
Love,
Bhav :D

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