Premeer one-shot :] updtd pg. 2

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Posted: 16 years ago
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hey guys...i know i promised a romantic one-shot abt premeer as my present to everyone here on IF for the independence day! So i just came from skool like a while ago and came straight online here...replied to the pm and now am gonna start working on the one-shot. It will be done by later on tonite...its like 3:30 right now shoooo i have lots of time! So keep a look out for when it says updtd on the title! 😉 Leave comments and critisism because quite frankly they mean a LOT to me and tell me what ppl think of my writing! Now am not gonna give a lecture..i dealt with enough lectures today in skool soooo imma go and start on the part now! I dont wanna nag so ill say this just once more! Plz leave your comment...i love getting feedback on my work because it rlly encourages me!! 😃🥱
Ps- how was everyone's independence day?? hope you all had a BLAST!! 😳😉😆
Rinki ⭐️
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Hey, im really looking forward to it!
Independence day in NZ is like any other day which is sad!
Hope you had/ have a good one!
?xXx?
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Posted: 16 years ago
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looking forward
will be waiting

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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: .xganga.x

Hey, im really looking forward to it!

Independence day in NZ is like any other day which is sad!
Hope you had/ have a good one!
?xXx?

aww thank-o!!
aww i know! here in cali it was sooo boring! 🥱🥱
i had skool and then none of my friends know that it was today!
nd i dnt have that many indian friends just like two 😆
but overall it was an okay day 😛
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: pooji123456789

looking forward
will be waiting

aw thanx
am working on it but get sidetracked 😆
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Posted: 16 years ago
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ellooww!!! my amazing pplz kay a change of plans...hehe imma post it tomorrow because my bro is sleeping nd tomorrow he has to get up real early so i have to go off the comp..😡 im somewhat done with it and will finish it later and then post it online...kinda late but oh well 😆 so till then im off adios tc rinki
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Posted: 16 years ago
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hey guys! bad news...kinda! hehe yesterday i forgot to save what i wrote....so now im bak to the beginning!! ugghh 😭 me feeling angry...yet i dnt feel anything 😕 aah anyway ill start it again and will try to post it... this time i'll save it! 😆😆 bye-bye rinkz
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Posted: 16 years ago
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kay guys give me tem to fifteen minutes and i'll post it!
:]
rinki
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Surprise!

"Preet...tumhe pata hai ki prem kahan hai?" Heer asked her devar softly with her eyes watching his face keenly for a hint. Preet looked up from his phone and shook his head...not meeting her eyes. "Nahin bhabhi...mujhe toh kuch bhi nahin pata". Saying this he walked out of the room quickly, trying to look as nonsuspicious as possible. She watched him walk out...noticing the way his eyes had not dared to meet hers. "Iska matlab preet janta hai ki prem kahan hai...lekin yeh mujhe kuch bata kyun nahin raha!" her voice was in a whisper, sounding so tired and hurt. She thought back to this morning when she had woken up to see Prem dressed up and talking on the phone to someone. His words still rang through her ears, "yes don't worry i'll be there...yes in 15 minutes...okay thanks and one more thing don't tell anyone about it!" She wondered who he was talking to...he had left the room without looking at her once. She sighed and walked to the garden in the back. Hours passed by and she spent the entire time in the garden alone...only her and her thoughts. Nobody had wished her...it was her and Prem's anniversary yet no body showed any sign of remembering. "Di!!!" she turned around and saw Suki walking towards her. "Di aap yahan kya kar rahi ho? Come on you have to come with me to go shopping!" Heer looked at her sister confused...shopping? "Suki lekin tujhe shopping kyun jana hai?" Sukriti shook her head and pulled her up and out of the house...where everyone was watching with a grin. The two sisters spent hours shopping for some unknown event. Suki forced Heer to buy a beatiful deep red sari with golden lines and sequences on it. Both sisters entered the house with smiles and looked at the decorations. Suki with a knowing grin and Heer with a confused look. "Arre aagayi tum dono," Gayetri said walking to them as all the guests looked at them with smiles. "Ma yeh sab kuch..." Heer started to say but was cut off by Suki, "Di chalo lets go and change!" Everybody watched as she dragged her still confused sister up the stairs. Twenty minutes later Heer was led down dressed in her sari by Suki. There was a big cake in the middle of the floor, on it in cursive was "Happy Anniversary!!". Everyone surrounded Heer and wished her, but her eyes were only searching for him. She nodded to the lady talking to her without hearing what she was saying. She didn't even notice when the lady left her alone and she was still nodding her head. "Who are you nodding at?" she heard his voice say...husky and soft...she shivered as his breath tickled the back of her neck. She turned around but no one was there...she tilted her head confused and turned back...finally noticing that she was alone. She smacked her forehead lightly and smiled guiltily at her getting lost in his thoughts. She turned to the side to walk off and bumped into someone...her eyes closed automatically as she fell backwards. She felt arms wrap themselves around her back, electric currents ran down her back at the feel of his hands at her bare back. She knew it was Prem that was holding her safely in his arms...opening her eyes she confirmed it as she watched him smirk at her with a glint in his eyes. He pulled her up and her head fell to rest on his chest as her hands gripped his shoulders tightly. Both became lost in the others eyes as everyone watches them laughing and smiling at their cuteness. Suki walked upto them and snapped her fingers in front of their faces...no reaction. She rolled her eyes and left them alone to stay in their dreamland. Heer blinked and looked away with a sweet smile on her face and turned to walk away. Prem watched her talk to a lady...he could see the way she would tilt her head slightly to look at him. Heer looked to the side to see him again but he wasn't there. "Excuse me" she told the lady and walked around the room looking for Prem...she couldn't deal being away from him...it was as if her soul had been snatched from her body. Music started in the background and she saw Prem walking towards her with a smile. He held his hand out for her and she of course accepted. They started dancing to the slighlty fast track and some other couples joined in. Prem started singing in her ear making her giggle as his breath tickled her. Everyone was having a blast and it could be seen on their faces.
Thaare Vaaste- Shakalaka Boom Boom
ohhhh ohhhhh ohhhh

[Thaare vaaste dedenge jaanve
Thaare vaaste Dil hai kurbaan ve]2
[Love you i love you o jana
Tu hi armaan ve]2

[Thaare vaaste dedenge jaanve
Thaare vaaste Dil hai kurbaan ve]2
[Love you i love you o jana
Tu hi armaan ve]2

Thaare vaaste dedenge jaanve
Thaare vaaste Dil hai kurbaan ve

Mere dil kya hai kya hai
Tera pyaar hai
Tujhe milko hamesha bekraar hai

Mere chain ki manzil jana tere paas hai
Meri dhadkan mein tere hi ehsaass hai

Door door nahi jana nahi jana nahi jana

Na mujhe tadpaa tadpana tadpana

Love you i love you o jana
Tu hi armaan ve

Thaare vaaste dedenge jaanve
Thaare vaaste Dil hai kurbaan ve

[Love you i love you o jana
Tu hi armaan ve]2
Thaare vaaste dedenge jaanve

Thaare vaaste Dil hai kurbaan ve

Tujhe paake mitli hai meri tanhaiyan
Mere khwaabon mein rehti teri roobaiyan

Meri aahon kya hai teri hi khawaahishe
Aa puri kar de karde meri farmaishien

Tera Tera Tera charcha hai meri meri meri har baat mein

Tu hi tu hi basti basti hai mere jazbaat mein
Love you i love you o jana
Tu hi armaan ve
Thaare vaaste dedenge jaanve
Thaare vaaste Dil hai kurbaan ve

Love you i love you o jana
Tu hi armaan ve

Love you i love you o jana
Tu hi armaan ve

[Thaare vaaste dedenge jaanve
Thaare vaaste Dil hai kurbaan ve]2

[Thaare vaaste dedenge jaanve
Thaare vaaste Dil hai kurbaan ve]2

The song came to and end and everybody applauded at their performance. "Wow guys you both were awesome...though i really thought you would perform some slow song!" Preet said clapping his brother on the shoulder. The couple smiled at him slightly shocked themselves at their dancing. "Heer!!" Gayetri called out making her leave Prem's hand and walk towards her mother-in-law. Gayetri introduced her to some old ladies...she didn't realize that Heer just wanted to be with her husband. Until it was time to cut the cake, Heer and Prem had to spend their time away from one another. Heer was holding the knife while Prem held her hand and they cut the cake as everyone cheered for them. The rest of the night went by really fast as the two spent their time laughing and dancing...happy with being close to one another.
aah yesh it was boring huh?? sorry 🥱
anyway...i wasn't really that much into it...but since i promised to write it, I did!
share your views...though i am sure not many will comment! 😆😉
adios *waves*
Rinki :]
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Posted: 16 years ago
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wow awesome
loved premeer scene
eagerly waiting for next update
update soon plz......

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