General Discussion Thread #5 - Page 107

Originally posted by: Moonks

Can you please make the MOTW thread bro?

Done , here is this week's MOTW thread

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/vanshaj/5346659/motw-10-sonirita

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/164632061

Guys, check this thread outwriters in you gonna love it

Originally posted by: Moonks

Rishton ki Mahabharat ka chakravyuh Aisa tha,

Kisiko pyaar paana tha toh kisi ko paisa,

Koi dhundh Raha tha wajood apna,

Kisi ke liye yeh duniya thi uska har sapna,

Koi jhuth ko sach Maan kar jeeta raha,

Koi sach ko jhuth Maan mann behlaraha,

Sab Paane ki iss daud mein khota Raha har rishta,

Vanshaj ki khoj mein hi buna Gaya har chakravyuh tha!!

Wrote this a month ago or so, for timepass, sharing it now

Wow. This is a beautiful poetry. And I love how it fits the show as well as the real world scenario perfectly capturing the emotions and challenges of different kinds of people in this world. Some are greedy for money, others are lonely in search of love.

Even the sach and jhooth part is aptly describing how people these days will live in wishful thinking and daydreams instead of accepting the reality at hand.

And then the last two lines are portraying how people are always running behind one goal after another, never satisfied.

It's beautiful. You are very talented in this. Write more naa

Originally posted by: Moonks

Rishton ki Mahabharat ka chakravyuh Aisa tha,

Kisiko pyaar paana tha toh kisi ko paisa,

Koi dhundh Raha tha wajood apna,

Kisi ke liye yeh duniya thi uska har sapna,

Koi jhuth ko sach Maan kar jeeta raha,

Koi sach ko jhuth Maan mann behlaraha,

Sab Paane ki iss daud mein khota Raha har rishta,

Vanshaj ki khoj mein hi buna Gaya har chakravyuh tha!!

Wrote this a month ago or so, for timepass, sharing it now

Another encounter with a born writer

Loved it

Originally posted by: Moonks

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/164632061

Guys, check this thread outwriters in you gonna love it

Thank you for the tag

But i don't think I'll be able to write a fic based on cannon events of epics...cause it's an epic and it might unintentionally hurt the sentiments of few....writting fics for TV shows are fine cause everything is fictional....it's strictly my own opinion

Originally posted by: Moonks

But the thing is I am not a born writer like you guys

I mean I can't write so I will love to read others fan fic rather than writing

Originally posted by: Pete15rogmourey

Thank you for the tag

But i don't think I'll be able to write a fic based on cannon events of epics...cause it's an epic and it might unintentionally hurt the sentiments of few....writting fics for TV shows are fine cause everything is fictional....it's strictly my own opinion

Originally posted by: Moonks

People thinking our display name and our viewpoint is their business is so Funny

I actually had thought that this will agitate a few.

Also isn't moral policing against the rules of IF

Originally posted by: Moonks

Mohan ka sandesh hai yeh,

Haan geeta ka upadesh hai yeh.

Na tera jeevan hath mein tere,

Na hi mrityu hai vash mein,

Phir kyun tu yahan darta hai,

Jab nahi tu karta dharta hai,

Tere mere hai janma anek,

Bas yaad nahin tujhe koi bhi eik,

Nahi tera yaha koi bhi apna,

Ya phir hai shayad ye mera koi sapna ,

Nahi tu jeene maarne wala hai,

Nahi tu haar ya jeetne wala hai,

Tera moksh bhi mai tera arth bhi mai,

Tera karma bhi mai tera dharma bhi mai,

Na koi bhi yaha jeeta ya marta hai,

Ye to bas Manav deh ka karma hai jo wo karta hai,

Aatma manav ki yaha deh kai badalti hai,

Wo to mar kar bhi na marti hai,

Jo hona hai wo to hokar rahega,

Tere karne na karne se yaha na kuch badlega,

Phir tujhko yeh kaisa bhay hai,

Mann mein yeh kaisa sanchay hai,

Mai tere karmo ka fal hu mai to har pal hu,

Sarvatra hokar bhi mai kahi nahin hu,

Karma dharma mrityu moksha sab bhagwan hai,

Itna sa hi to bas geeta ka gyaan hai!!

I don’t know if I have shared it here or not, but this my personal favourite from all the poems I have ever written

This is beautiful. I never thought it was possible to summarise the heart and soul of Gita in a few verses. But you've done it so well! Personally, I have read Shri Bhagavad Gita twice as of now. Just like DB, I also look for my life's answers there. I won't say I remember it word for word, but I try to incorporate the philosophies in my life.

And your poem is the crux of Gita. I like the emphasis on the fundamentals of the life cycle and seeing the divine in everything. Plus, realising that it is not I who is the doer, rather I is just the medium is so important in today's world, and you've put that out in every line very well.

I love everything about this poem. Include me in your fan club. I really enjoy reading Hindi poetry and I am fond of everything related to Shri Bhagavad Gita.