Originally posted by: IshqKaRang
I know I’ve reserved multiple spots to put my comments in but I’m horribly lazy so I’m just taking up a new spot.
You’ve done such an amazing job portraying Shiva’s inner turmoil. And please forgive my urge to slap Shiva. I’m just so done with this whole self-sacrificial troupe from the show that it gets hard for me to step back and look at this Shiva differently. I mean, at least this Shiva realizes that he is doing exactly what his Maami is trying to do.. make decisions for Raavi.
He did realize it, and it reminds him of his hypocrisy. He wants his mother to stop her insane matchmaking but he's doing the same thing to Raavi! I'm happy I could portray Shiva's inner turmoil. No matter how well-intentioned we are, we all mess up some time, and if you do feel like slapping Shiva that means I've managed to rouse your emotions for these characters which means I've done my job right!
No matter how well intentioned you are, you don’t get to decide for someone else. Especially not after kissing the living daylights out of them. Which by the way, that scene was insanely hot! I mean just the kiss was so scorching, I can’t imagine how it’ll be when things progress between them.
Yayy! I'm still exploring writing passionate scenes. I haven't written too many of them, so you saying you found it hot is all kinds of validating! Thank you! About things progressing between them-- ahem, ahem, we'll see. There are still some items for Raavi to check off her bucket list, even if Shiva seems reluctant to give her those.
Isn’t it so weird that I could totally picture the Disha from the show turning out to be like the Disha in your story? I mean, she did kiss him at first sight in the show 🤮. Bechara Shiva, had to get two unwanted kisses before he could get to the woman whose kiss mattered. But of course, he had to ruin it. SheChu kahin ka!She kissed him at first sight? I didn't know she was that forward! 😆 I just made her a bit unlikeable and a little tharki in this one, but had no idea she was so similar to the Disha in canon! He did ruin the first kiss, he does have a lot of making up to do!
Which by the way, even though his gesture of serenading her was super cute, I don’t think Raavi should’ve given in so easily. That was pretty hurtful and mean. Whatever his reasons. And Gadheda, no one and no relationship is perfect. They are both going to mess up but the important part is they work through it and come out of it with a better understanding of themselves and their relationships. He is such an idiot in love! I hope Raavi can knock some real sense into him.
Yeah maybe she shouldn't have. He only ended up breaking her heart again. But then that's what being in love does to you. You forget your ego, who's winning or losing. When the object of your affection appears in front of you with an insanely romantic gesture, all you can do is melt. They are both fools in love.
How cutely is he working through her bucket list but at the same time being such a jerk and ruining it too. How does he manage to do both at the same time? And no matter how hard you try not to, you are going to be one to fulfill all her wishes! My girl, Raavi will make sure of it! You go girl! I have a feeling he is going to try to run away. Do not let him go! Tie him up if you have to but knock some sense into him please!
Ha ha! Tie him up! That's a thought! 😆 But I have a feeling Raavi won't have to do anything so drastic to get him worked up! His hormones will do it for him! He knows no relationship is perfect but he's still going to need convincing about that! And yes, he's being cute and a jerk. How indeed does he manage to do both? 😆 He's infuriating, for sure! 😆
Also, I think we are all so burned from the third angle track of the show, as soon as I read Tushar’s entry I was like gayi bhains paani mein! And anytime there is mention of a new character, my heart starts breaking. But then, you are the writer and I know you’d never mess up as bad as the PS writers.
Idk what's happening in the show but rest assured, Tushar was there for just that update. I don't intend for him to play a bigger role than he did here.
Which brings me to the stargazing and talking about parents’ scene. That line where he says he doesn’t know which one is worse - to not have known your parents or to have known them only for a short time.. that really touched my heart. And I say this with utmost sincerity. I lost my father when I was really young and have very few memories left of him all these years. In that one scene, I was right there beside your Shiva and Raavi, feeling what Shiva was going through. That is only because of your exceptional writing skills. I think that’ll remain among the top of my favorite scenes in any of the stories I’ve read on this forum. Thank you for such a beautifully poignant scene between the two!I'm so sorry for your loss. I lost my dad too, and no matter when the loss happens there is something about that grief. It hits you at all the odd times. Memories will be all we have. That scene is my personal favorite too and I'm so touched it resonated with you.
Only one more update?! Or two?! Why? Please don’t finish it so quickly. I’m so attached to your Shiva and Raavi, I can’t part with them just yet!
You are probably asleep at this point, but if you’ve made it this far, please don’t end it too soon. Pwetty please with puppy dog eyes?I don't have too much planned beyond the next couple of updates. And I don't want to needlessly create strife for them where none exists and stretch the story beyond where it's meant to go. But thank you! I feel so humbled and grateful for all the love this little fic has received on this forum! Perhaps it will motivate me to write more ShiVi stories! And I'm so so glad you're attached to my Shiva and Raavi (Psst, I am too!)
Thank you so much, Neet for the review and your honesty! 🤗
It's still early here, I'm on Mountain time, so not yet asleep. Hope you had a good thanksgiving holiday! ❤️
Geet - Hui Sabse Parayee
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