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Posted: 3 years ago

Originally posted by: LizzieBennet

Oh I didn't wanna do this but since no one's responded I think people haven't seen the update so here go the tags

thanks for the tag.....busy for this week but will surely read it.....and comment too

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Posted: 3 years ago

Riya, what should I say I am not understanding!!!( You made me speechless)🥳🥳

First of all, with all the reasoning of Shiva, I can not agree with him but I understand him for what he did and why he did, That is so Shiva like. ❤❤

How I wish someone do all this bucket list for me eventhough I don't have one. It's so dreamy!!!🙈🤭

From singing song for her and trying to do what he thought is best for her by setting her up with Tushar - I loved how it is progressed.🤍🤎

Making her feel beautiful and uplifting her confidence😍😍

Raavi even being hurt, understanding that he is saying something but feeling something else through kiss was fab!! Also, trying to talk with him why he did to understand him.🤍🤍

Their conversation of their parents under the sky full of stars and sky gazing,Ahhah!!!💖💖

Now, I think Raavi will be one helping him in completing his wish. 🤎

Also, I am eagerly waiting for wht Raavi will do to change his perspective for himself and about the new entry!!!💚💚💚

Loved tge whole update❤❤

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Posted: 3 years ago

Originally posted by: RainbowChaser

This is so beautiful and pure❤️.

The way you threw light on as to what these mad hearts are actually made up of in the core is so delicately delightable !

And why do I feel it is Mrs. Siganporia who's making a comeback 😁


Thanks so much! What do I call you btw? (Only if you're comfortable sharing!)

I'm glad Raavi's realization of who Shiva is at his core stood out to you. There were quite a few realizations in this update, now that I think of it! 😆

And about Mrs. S, my lips are sealed, but full marks to you for remembering her! That means you actually have read all the updates so far! 😆❤️

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Posted: 3 years ago

Originally posted by: prernapewdie

I am so overwhelmed by reading this.

I need to know more of them 🤗


Thank you, Prerna (If that's your name!) 🤗

I didn't mean to overwhelm you but at the same time I'm glad you want to know these two more! I like writing characters I can feel for, and root for. It makes me connect more with them and I'm so happy that you did too!

Thank you for reading and your comment! ❤️

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Posted: 3 years ago

Originally posted by: Odette_delusion

It was lovely😘🥰😍

Thank you for reading!

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Posted: 3 years ago

Originally posted by: maanmeet1

thanks for the tag.....busy for this week but will surely read it.....and comment too

No problem, Roops! Whenever you find the time! 🤗

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Posted: 3 years ago

Originally posted by: Kfof

Riya, what should I say I am not understanding!!!( You made me speechless)🥳🥳

First of all, with all the reasoning of Shiva, I can not agree with him but I understand him for what he did and why he did, That is so Shiva like. ❤❤

How I wish someone do all this bucket list for me eventhough I don't have one. It's so dreamy!!!🙈🤭

From singing song for her and trying to do what he thought is best for her by setting her up with Tushar - I loved how it is progressed.🤍🤎

Making her feel beautiful and uplifting her confidence😍😍

Raavi even being hurt, understanding that he is saying something but feeling something else through kiss was fab!! Also, trying to talk with him why he did to understand him.🤍🤍

Their conversation of their parents under the sky full of stars and sky gazing,Ahhah!!!💖💖

Now, I think Raavi will be one helping him in completing his wish. 🤎

Also, I am eagerly waiting for wht Raavi will do to change his perspective for himself and about the new entry!!!💚💚💚

Loved tge whole update❤❤


Oye hoye, Kshama! Thank you for that 'lamba' comment! 🤗❤️

Yeah none of us will agree with Shiva, because we all want ShiVi to be together 😆 but I'm glad you understood his thought process! He's extremely low at this point and thinks of himself as undeserving of Raavi and her love, but mostly I think he's afraid of hurting her. He's afraid he'll keep doing the wrong thing and that will lead to a crack in their relationship which will be ultimately more unbearable for him than being away from her now.

Don't we all dream of a man who'll give us our own bucket lists?


Okay, so Shiva probably didn't bank on #9, being the most beautiful being fulfilled, because he hadn't planned it, but it happened anyway and that was a bonus (at least that's what Shiva thinks!)


Thanks for mentioning the conversation while star gazing. That was my favorite part of this update too and I'm happy it stood out for you!


What Raavi will do to change his perspective or to convince him that she wants him anyway- with all his flaws remains to be seen. She wants Shiva as he is and doesn't expect him to change. But he has to see that. Right now, he's put Raavi on some sort of pedestal and doesn't think he's worthy of her. He has to see himself as her equal in every way!

Thanks, Kshama for reading and the review. It made me so happy! 🤗

Edited by LizzieBennet - 3 years ago
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Posted: 3 years ago

Lizzie, what dod you do? 😭 Beautifully written❤️

This was all emotional, most of it resembles cannon Shiva for the past 4 months who wanted to sacrifice so Raavi can find a better person and a better life yet he couldn’t see her with anyone. But when Disha came into his life, that was the turning point for Raavi, who fought hard and finally she claimed him.

I can’t see these two in misery and wallowing in self-pity.😕 I just got done with it in the actual show😆

Anyway, both are sanki, pagal. Atleast Raavi knows what she wants and not acting on it. Shiva is in complete denial, Gadheda😆 Why are they so difficult? 😔
The length he went to fulfill her bucket list and yet he wants to let her go. Now I want to know what #7 and # 8 in the list. I want Shiva to fulfill them for Raavi❤️

Can I have some positive progress in the next chapter, please, pretty please?😆

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Posted: 3 years ago

Originally posted by: mpks1

Lizzie, what dod you do? 😭 Beautifully written❤️

This was all emotional, most of it resembles cannon Shiva for the past 4 months who wanted to sacrifice so Raavi can find a better person and a better life yet he couldn’t see her with anyone. But when Disha came into his life, that was the turning point for Raavi, who fought hard and finally she claimed him.

I can’t see these two in misery and wallowing in self-pity.😕 I just got done with it in the actual show😆

Anyway, both are sanki, pagal. Atleast Raavi knows what she wants and not acting on it. Shiva is in complete denial, Gadheda😆 Why are they so difficult? 😔
The length he went to fulfill her bucket list and yet he wants to let her go. Now I want to know what #7 and # 8 in the list. I want Shiva to fulfill them for Raavi❤️

Can I have some positive progress in the next chapter, please, pretty please?😆


Thank you, Prema!

I didn't intend for this chapter to get so emotional but Shiva's reasons had to be brought forth and so did Raavi's realization of her own self, plus the fact that they are kindred spirits. In a way, I'm glad I could mirror the show so my ShiVi aren't too different from the canon ShiVi! 😆And anyway, every story needs some amount of conflict right? Now perhaps it's time for Raavi to take over and call the shots! 😆

About #7 and #8 I think we all know she's not gonna let anyone else other than Shiva fulfill them! 😆

The next chapter will be the last one (or I may have one more update after that max) so it's time to wind up and give them their HEA! And there won't be time for more strife!

Thank you for reading and the review, Prema! ❤️

Edited by LizzieBennet - 3 years ago
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Posted: 3 years ago

I know I’ve reserved multiple spots to put my comments in but I’m horribly lazy so I’m just taking up a new spot.



You’ve done such an amazing job portraying Shiva’s inner turmoil. And please forgive my urge to slap Shiva. I’m just so done with this whole self-sacrificial troupe from the show that it gets hard for me to step back and look at this Shiva differently. I mean, at least this Shiva realizes that he is doing exactly what his Maami is trying to do.. make decisions for Raavi. No matter how well intentioned you are, you don’t get to decide for someone else. Especially not after kissing the living daylights out of them. Which by the way, that scene was insanely hot! I mean just the kiss was so scorching, I can’t imagine how it’ll be when things progress between them.

Isn’t it so weird that I could totally picture the Disha from the show turning out to be like the Disha in your story? I mean, she did kiss him at first sight in the show 🤮. Bechara Shiva, had to get two unwanted kisses before he could get to the woman whose kiss mattered. But of course, he had to ruin it. SheChu kahin ka!

Which by the way, even though his gesture of serenading her was super cute, I don’t think Raavi should’ve given in so easily. That was pretty hurtful and mean. Whatever his reasons. And Gadheda, no one and no relationship is perfect. They are both going to mess up but the important part is they work through it and come out of it with a better understanding of themselves and their relationships. He is such an idiot in love! I hope Raavi can knock some real sense into him.

How cutely is he working through her bucket list but at the same time being such a jerk and ruining it too. How does he manage to do both at the same time? And no matter how hard you try not to, you are going to be one to fulfill all her wishes! My girl, Raavi will make sure of it! You go girl! I have a feeling he is going to try to run away. Do not let him go! Tie him up if you have to but knock some sense into him please!


Also, I think we are all so burned from the third angle track of the show, as soon as I read Tushar’s entry I was like gayi bhains paani mein! And anytime there is mention of a new character, my heart starts breaking. But then, you are the writer and I know you’d never mess up as bad as the PS writers.



Which brings me to the stargazing and talking about parents’ scene. That line where he says he doesn’t know which one is worse - to not have known your parents or to have known them only for a short time.. that really touched my heart. And I say this with utmost sincerity. I lost my father when I was really young and have very few memories left of him all these years. In that one scene, I was right there beside your Shiva and Raavi, feeling what Shiva was going through. That is only because of your exceptional writing skills. I think that’ll remain among the top of my favorite scenes in any of the stories I’ve read on this forum. Thank you for such a beautifully poignant scene between the two!


Only one more update?! Or two?! Why? Please don’t finish it so quickly. I’m so attached to your Shiva and Raavi, I can’t part with them just yet!


You are probably asleep at this point, but if you’ve made it this far, please don’t end it too soon. Pwetty please with puppy dog eyes?

Edited by IshqKaRang - 3 years ago

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