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Posted: 3 years ago
#91

I loved the chapter mujhein bohot achi lagi ye update🤗loved you sweetheart for this 😳


Agni thori rude hai par jo uskein saath hua hai na ussienn dekhne kein baad lagta hai ki haan jo vo kar rahi hai vo iskein andar ka gussa aur frustration hai but Malhar kein saath usne jo kiya pata nahi sahi tha ya Galat..😭

Becharein nein chai banayi uski favorite hai aur usne uspein hi phek di 😭itni hard punishment and he even complete it but got fainted bechara 💔

Chalo agni abhi bhi kahi na kahi kalyani hai ..uskien andar aaj bhi malhar kein liye koi jagah to hai 👍🏼..

Usne ussein hospital main admit karwaya and her attitude uff 🙈🙈

Such a savage replies to aswari and madhav I loved it ..

Moksh and her scene is so pure and cute and malhar and his scene ..

Waiting for more

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Originally posted by: Phlo004

I loved the chapter mujhein bohot achi lagi ye update🤗loved you sweetheart for this 😳


Agni thori rude hai par jo uskein saath hua hai na ussienn dekhne kein baad lagta hai ki haan jo vo kar rahi hai vo iskein andar ka gussa aur frustration hai but Malhar kein saath usne jo kiya pata nahi sahi tha ya Galat..😭

Becharein nein chai banayi uski favorite hai aur usne uspein hi phek di 😭itni hard punishment and he even complete it but got fainted bechara 💔

Chalo agni abhi bhi kahi na kahi kalyani hai ..uskien andar aaj bhi malhar kein liye koi jagah to hai 👍🏼..

Usne ussein hospital main admit karwaya and her attitude uff 🙈🙈

Such a savage replies to aswari and madhav I loved it ..

Moksh and her scene is so pure and cute and malhar and his scene ..

Waiting for more


Thanks a lot Vanshu 💖💖💖💖💖

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Chapter-10


Evening had crept in. Malhar was still unconscious. Tired of waiting for his Baba to wake up, Moksh had slept in Agni's lap. Giving her neck a light massage, Agni opened her laptop which she had made her subordinate bring and started working. As Marilyn Monroe had said, your career would never wake up one day and say it doesn't love you. Agni knew when she had nothing, it was only this career which made her capable enough to survive. So she was never going to neglect it, for anyone, except Moksh and her Aai.

Agni looked at Malhar's burnt chest and she felt a disgust for her own self. Strangely she was beginning to understand what happened five years ago:

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Kalyani crying: "Malharji. Pillu ro raha hai. Mujhe ek baar use god me lene dijiye."

"Mere bete par main ek bhi Deshmukh parivaar ke sadasya ka saaya bhi nahi chahta,. Meri behen ko maarkar chain nahi mila tumhe jo ab mere bete ko bhi khaana chahti ho?" Malhar said, turning away from Kalyaani, with Moksh in his arms.

"Aap apne badle ke liye Pillu ke baare me bhi nahi soch rahe," Kalyani said, "Ro raha h vo."

"Tumhe badi chinta hai Moksh ki?" Malhar said, "To ek kaam karo ki jo main Moksh ke liye doodh ubaal raha hoon na main. Use gas stove par chadhe chadhe tum das minute tak apne haath usme daale raho."


"Mujhe pata tha Moksh ke liye tumhara pyaar sab hawa hawaai baatein Hain..." Malhar was saying when he turned back to find Kalyaani with her hands in the boiling milk.


"Aap das minute kya das ghante bhi mujhe ye karne ko kahenge na Malharji, to Pillu ke liye main iske liye bhi taiyyar hoon," Kalyani said. Seeing the shocked expression on Malhar's face, Kalyani thought he would come running to get her hands out of the boiling milk and scold her. But when Malhar began the countdown of 120 seconds, Kalyaani was horrified at what Swara's death had made her husband

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Agni reassessed her plan again. To make Atharva and Sampada knees deep in debt forcing them to borrow from brutal loan sharks who didn't even hesitate to brutalize the debt-ridden in such a way that a death is more preferable. Most of the times, these debtors are criminals and murderers themselves so no one misses them when they disappear. In fact people feel a sense of justice and closure, when these criminals meet their fat. For Madhav, it would just take a sight of her to shatter his fragile ego. For him, a woman is only fit for responding to a man's beck and call. Agni had fair tricks up her sleeves to humiliate him like he always humiliated Kalyaani and Anupriya. Asawari- her heartbeats resided in Ahir- she just had to pinch Ahir and Asawari will be on her knees. The most tricky one was Malhar. Agni remembered if he had not abandoned Kalyaani that night alone out of his house, Atharva couldn't have kidnapped her and torture her leading to her child's murder. For once, Agni could forgive Malhar for how much pain he had caused his wife Kalyani but a mother couldn't forget the man who was at root of her child's murder. But hurting Malhar meant hurting Moksh which Agni never could let happen. She had to find a way to give Malhar a taste of his own medicine without Moksh getting affected by it.

Meanwhile, Sampada and Atharv were cooking their own plan.

"Music band kar Sampu," Atharv shouted, "poora din bhain bhain bhain..."

"Mera bheja mat khao Atharv," Sampada said, "Tumhe bhi Malhar wali beemari lag gayi h kya? Na khud enjoy karte ho na mujhe karne dete ho. Zyada muh chalaya na to tumhe bhi chhorkar chali jaungi main."

"Mujhe chhorkar jayegi tu Sampu," Atharv pulled Sampada towards her, lifting her face by chin, "Fir Agni ki company ke shares khareedne ke baad main Agni ka crorepati right hand ban jaunga to vaapis mat aana."

"Are tum to bura maan gaye Atharv," Sampada said, patting Atharv's cheek, "Main to bas ye keh rahi thi ki jab se Agni ne hame naukar banaya h, bas kutton ki tarah banakar rakha h humne. Vaise mere paas ek idea tha jisse ham maze kar sakte hain. Kyon na ham Moksh ki brain haemorrhage enable karne ki dawayein de rahe hain, usi tarah Malhar ko bhi ham paagal karne wali dawaaein de. Malhar agar paagal ho gaya to ham court me prove kar denge ki vo Moksh ki custody ke laayak nahi h. Fir kucch din baad Moksh bhi brain haemorrhage se apni pyaari Kallu aai ke paas chala jayega. Fir Rane parivaar ki jaydaad ki maalik hogi Moksh ki asli aai. Are 9 mahine maine Moksh ko apne pet me rakha h, us Kalyaani ne kya socha tha, Moksh aur Malhar ki saari sewa karungi main aur mewa khayegi vo."

"Mere saath rehkar tera dimaag bhi chalne laga h," Atharv said proudly.

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It was night when Malhar in his delirium asked for water. Agni tried her best to ignore his calls. Malhar after all, had kept her hungry and thirsty for hours several times as her punishment. But Agni, despite herself, couldn't see Malhar so helpless.

She took a water bottle and touched its rim to Malhar's lips. Her hand was touching stubble on Malhar's face. Then suddenly, Malhar kissed her hand. Agni was stunned. Though she knew Malhar was in delirium, but still?


On the other hand, Malhar in his dream, was remembering the time when he was down with fever and couldn't go to police station. He tried to get up to drink water but could not.


Kalyani scolded him, "Dekh na Pillu tere Papa bilkul nahi sunte meri. Kitna bhi bolo ki uthna nahi h fever k time magar majaal ye kisi ki sun le."

"Muh kholiye," Kalyani stood with a bottle over Malhar.

"Moksh dekh raha h," Malhar said sheepishly.

"To kaun sa hum Titanic pose kar rahe hain jo aapko sharam aa rahi h. Kholiye muh."


And Kalyaani made him drink water from her hands.

Malhar held the hands that were wiping with a handkerchief at his chin.

"Kalyani!" Malhar squinted. Why was Kalyani looking so different? Then Malhar remembered.


"S...sorry ma'am," Malhar stuttered, "I'm really very sorry."

"It's OK Mr. Rane," Agni said leaving the ward, "BTW, your son is really cute. Uski maa use aapke bharose chhor gayi h to uske bharose par Khare utariyega. Acche employee to Khair aap ban nahi sakte, at least be a good father." And Agni left.

Is chapter me utne acche scenes nahi the but I thought I should give some clarity regarding the characters' motivations. As always, waiting for your feedback :)

Edited by Autumn09 - 3 years ago
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Posted: 3 years ago
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It's amazing baby.... Tune bhi apna deewana bna hi diya.... Tareef ke liye kuch shabd milte hi nhi..... Par dilemma bhi acha diya tune.... Kalyani galat hai ya malhar don't know par bura to dono ke sath hua hai.....


Moksh bachara☹️☹️☹️..... But finded solace in her lap❤❤

Agni madam kaam ko kbhi piche nhi rakhengi unlike kalyani in show.....👍👍👍👍

Omg how can he be so cruel..... Boiling milk m haath.... Or fir bachaya bhi nhi use..... But i am glad ki agni ko thodi si sympathy aayi mj par☺☺☺☺

Samtharva yaha kuch jyada hi nikamme hai.... Moksh or malhar dono ki jaan ke piche pde hai... 😒😒😒🥺🥺..... I hope ki inhe bhi ek jhatka lage vo bhi tagda wala.... Tbhi mental asylum jaldi pohochnege😂😂😂

Agni ne bhi sahi decision liya.... Malhar ko btana zaruri hai ki usne galat kiya but without hurting her son😊😊😊😊

Finally Agni ne uski help ki or chota sa moment bhi mila🥰🥰🥰🥰. .... Malhar ek employee acha na ho kaha ja skta hai but good father hone m koi kami nhi hai

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Originally posted by: PRAKRITI_12

It's amazing baby.... Tune bhi apna deewana bna hi diya.... Tareef ke liye kuch shabd milte hi nhi..... Par dilemma bhi acha diya tune.... Kalyani galat hai ya malhar don't know par bura to dono ke sath hua hai.....


Moksh bachara☹️☹️☹️..... But finded solace in her lap❤❤

Agni madam kaam ko kbhi piche nhi rakhengi unlike kalyani in show.....👍👍👍👍

Omg how can he be so cruel..... Boiling milk m haath.... Or fir bachaya bhi nhi use..... But i am glad ki agni ko thodi si sympathy aayi mj par☺☺☺☺

Samtharva yaha kuch jyada hi nikamme hai.... Moksh or malhar dono ki jaan ke piche pde hai... 😒😒😒🥺🥺..... I hope ki inhe bhi ek jhatka lage vo bhi tagda wala.... Tbhi mental asylum jaldi pohochnege😂😂😂

Agni ne bhi sahi decision liya.... Malhar ko btana zaruri hai ki usne galat kiya but without hurting her son😊😊😊😊

Finally Agni ne uski help ki or chota sa moment bhi mila🥰🥰🥰🥰. .... Malhar ek employee acha na ho kaha ja skta hai but good father hone m koi kami nhi hai

Aww...Thank you Praku 💖💖💖💖💖

Tum logon ki hi wajah se I visit this forum varna after lockdown, I didn't watch THR except some episodes here and there. Seriously it feels so heartwarming to talk with you all. Bas waiting for the cast new shows. Vaise mera is maamle me bad luck hi raha h ki jin actors ke naye show ka wait karo, vo thode underwhelming hote hain. But waiting for Reem and Sehban's new show...Aau Saheb to Anupama me aane vali hain

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Posted: 3 years ago
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It's so good pragyu ..I am liking how you are building character and presenting their povs clearly 👍🏼👍🏼...

Malharji kein liye bura bhi lagta hai aur phir Kya kahoon unkein torture Jo flashback main hai ussein lagta hai kalyani Jo Kar rahi hai sahi bhi hai and she has a valid reason for it but still it hurts to see them like this ...but your writing baby awesome😎

Agni making plan against them like a true player ..her attitude Savage replies. ...ahha this is making her more Savage person 😊

Atharav and sampada 🤣🤣

Malharji aur kalyani ka cute sa flashback and their cute scene ..but the bitterness in that

Awesome update baby 🤗

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Originally posted by: Phlo

It's so good pragyu ..I am liking how you are building character and presenting their povs clearly 👍🏼👍🏼...

Malharji kein liye bura bhi lagta hai aur phir Kya kahoon unkein torture Jo flashback main hai ussein lagta hai kalyani Jo Kar rahi hai sahi bhi hai and she has a valid reason for it but still it hurts to see them like this ...but your writing baby awesome😎

Agni making plan against them like a true player ..her attitude Savage replies. ...ahha this is making her more Savage person 😊

Atharav and sampada 🤣🤣

Malharji aur kalyani ka cute sa flashback and their cute scene ..but the bitterness in that

Awesome update baby 🤗


Thank you so much Vanshu 💜💜💜💜

Is baar maine socha tha ki aisa FF likhoon ki samajh me naa aaye kon sahi h aur kaun galat.

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Pad liya tera update Pragya..

Malhar ne past me jo kiya woh bhi sahi na tha... Bitterness aur galat faimi me kuch jyada hi kar gaya..

So Agni doesn't want to feel any emotions for him, but still she does feel some pull..

Bechara Moksh... He's the person affected by every circumstance...

Uss bache ko saari khushi mile..

Shayad when Malhar comes to know who is Agni and realises his past bitterness killed his unborn child and almost killed kalyani, woh praschayit ke roop me Moksh ko kallu ke paas chod de and may not want to interfere in their lives.. As a punishment to himself..

Atharv and Sampada deserve to rot in hell for giving wrong medications to both Malhar and Moksh..

Agni is true career woman.. And her revenge against each character is also well planned..

Their moment in hospital was good too..

Good Malhar asked sorry for thinking she is Kalyani.

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Originally posted by: rekha_crm

Pad liya tera update Pragya..

Malhar ne past me jo kiya woh bhi sahi na tha... Bitterness aur galat faimi me kuch jyada hi kar gaya..

So Agni doesn't want to feel any emotions for him, but still she does feel some pull..

Bechara Moksh... He's the person affected by every circumstance...

Uss bache ko saari khushi mile..

Shayad when Malhar comes to know who is Agni and realises his past bitterness killed his unborn child and almost killed kalyani, woh praschayit ke roop me Moksh ko kallu ke paas chod de and may not want to interfere in their lives.. As a punishment to himself..

Atharv and Sampada deserve to rot in hell for giving wrong medications to both Malhar and Moksh..

Agni is true career woman.. And her revenge against each character is also well planned..

Their moment in hospital was good too..

Good Malhar asked sorry for thinking she is Kalyani.


Thanks a lot Rekha💖💖💖💖 I'm glad you liked it. This FF was the fantasy I had for the show after leap...

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Posted: 3 years ago

Read both the updates pragyaa.

I really loved it completely.

You explained each other povs perfectly and even kalyani got to know malhar was also suffering.


The pure bond between a child and mother is showcased greatly and each found their solace in one other.

Malhar helping anupriya in studies even having hatred for deshmukh people, shows his character and his virtue.

I loved the update.


I really hate sampu as a mother, she may not care for her child but having him loss his life for property is so disgusting

Waiting for agni punishing both sampu and atharv in her own style.

I really loved this ff. Thank you for this.

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