Fatejo short story on current track - THE DINNER DATE!

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Story in current track

Dear forum friends

I stopped watching since last friday. Reason being too much ss for the villain which doesnt make sense

Only on updates thats all. Saw the latest precap shared in the forum. I moved on to short stories as they take lesser time to write a max of 1 hr thats all

There is a reason for writing this one which is towards the end . U can leave ur comments . I will surely get back to u later Tq for reading


THE DINNER DATE!

Decorated with beautiful lights the dine in was cosy and attractive but a little further from their residence suggested by gippy who've been there before with friends giving recommendations of its fabulous food and services


All four seated with jasmin clinging on to gippy saying

Yeh restaurant gippy ka favourite hai na gippy!

Gippy nodded with a wide smile putting his arms around her which annoyed the person sitting right in front who instantly did the same with his wife and interrupted

Gippy yeh sari tejo pey achi legti hai na !

The former replied with a thumbs up

Very nice tejo u are looking beautiful!

Akhir biwi kis ki hai!

Fateh claimed pulling her a little closer which affected her that she felt embarassed and gave an excuse to go to

The ladies!

She stood in front of the long wide mirror admiring her own appearance

Her slim figure wrapped in that red saree!

A wonderful unexpected gift from her husband!

Emotions building in her that she was trying to console as seconds later her phone rang and the caller was

Fateh!

Ajaona miss kar raha hun!

He stated excitedly trying to annoy the one sitting right opposite , his obsession

Jasmin sandhu!

The younger sister to his wife

His sali!

Jasmin ignored his gestures calming herself stating

He's just making me jealous thats all!


They started enjoying their taste buds with their delicious meals and both fateh and jasmin were serving their partners sweetly with lots of love in a competition to make the other

Jealous!

Tejo and gippy were touched with the duos warm gestures without realising the act of their

Pretense!

Minutes later fateh stopped eating suddenly

A distraction!

Dressed in a yellow shirt and blue jeans a guy seated alone at one corner of the dine in was staring at

Tejo!

Fateh noticed as he was having his meals and was getting disturbed with that hard stare of that hazel eyes that just doesnt seem to blink watching his wife very very closely

Just then jasmin's sweet voice interrupted to which he did not pay any attention

Gippy merey liye shahi paneer order kardo gey!

It was fateh's favourite dish yet he paid no attention as his mind was fully occupied with

that stranger!

He's pretending to ignore i know he's affected!

Jasmin smirked

He stood suddenly and gave an excuse to go to the

Gents!

Jasmin smiling as he walked away

Plan working !

He's jealous!

Soon he will be mine only!

As he walked towards the direction of the washroom with his dark eyes still set on that hazel ones wondering what is he upto

Her bare waist!

Exposure of the saree!

The eyes set still on that glowing skin of her curvy waist

Furious he grabbed a table cloth from one of the empty tables not occupied by guests

Covered her up!

Which choked her while drinking a glass of water

Fateh !

Bahut thend hai ! Tu yeh uper leley!

He blurted trying to control his

anger!

Tejo tried to uncover stating she was not feeling cold to which he spoke sternly and insructed her to recover

Bimar ped jaogi!

Gippy interuppted taking tejo's side

Rehney dey fateh itni thend nehin hai!

No! He replied angrily that tejo and gippy were taken aback exchanging glances with the same thoughts

What happened to him suddenly!

Koi baat ni it's ok main cover kerleti hun !

U calm down! She quickly covered herself again with the table cloth

Puzzled and confused!

Sighing to herself

Weird husband! Unpredictable!

And crazy!

Does anyone covers the other with a table cloth in the first place!

She ate her meal still unclear with his actions

Jasmin smirked

Mera gussa tejo par nikal raha hain!

He could not enjoy his taste buds any longer

Damn!

How dare he!

The guy stood up walking towards the entrance

I wont spare u !

Fateh glared at him

He excused hinself with a phone call to be made and rushed to catch up with

That pervert!


Seconds later he was riding on his bike speedily as an empty beer bottle flung into his direction!

If i ever get hold of u again that will be the end of ur life!

Fateh's furious voice close behind

He took steady steps ahead and sat at a bench approximately half kilometres away from the restaurant

Feeling the cool breeze of the dark nite calming his anger and frustrations

Why did i encourage her to wear the saree in the first place !

Damn!

I will never ever in my life purchase for her even if she begged for it!

No one has the right to see through her!

Only me!

He was confused with the last two words that crossed his mine

From now on only salwar kameez !

At least she's covered!


Jasmin was glad that her plan was working


Ringg

His phone rang and to which he answered immediately

The investor on the line enquiring some details of his business to whom he clarified to for at least half an hour

Suddenly he could feel a disturbance in his nostrils

Smoke!

Where is it coming from !

He was horified as he located tne exact direction

The dine in was on fire!

Heavy clouds of smoke

Oh no!

He ran frantically dropping his phone on the marble surface of the pavement near the bench

Speedy pace!

Running for her!

His life !

She was trapped!

He could feel his knees weak as he tried to pull a great force into his feared filled muscles moving forward to

Rescue her!"

The fear of losing her!

His heartbeat on par with his pace

He could hear the pulses very clear

I'm coming to get u!


The fire started from the kitchen side due to staff negligence and unfortunately raged towards the dining as the fire extinguisher was not working and so was the fire alarm and smoke detectors . Poor maintenance issues from the management despite being reminded by the supervisor numerous times

All guests were on the dance floor flowing with the music .Some semi drunk while others were either fully drunk or too sober


He reached the spot finally

Desperately looking out

Where is she!

His heart beating !

A chaos at the dine in with humans running and some trapped inside

Couldnt see through the thick smoke

Screams heard all over

His eyes searching for her


Gippy was seated on the floor of the parking lot still trying to breath in the clear air confused with jasmin's act of not coming along with him


She was waiting for him to come to her rescue with the strong belief that he loved her dearly

There he was trying to see through the smoke

Fateh!!

Pretending to choke with the smoke signalling to her rescue!

He obeyed and rushed forward

She held open her arms embracing him

I knew it !

He will come running !

To her surprise he ran past her brushing her aside towards the one lying unconscious on the floor a few steps behind her

Tejo!

Took her into his arms running frantically towards the exit through the thick smoke

Jasmin was left behind!

Couldnt believe her eyes

A stranger held her arm seconds later and guided her to her safety


Tejo ankhen khol!

He laid her in the backseat of his car

She was not responding

A bleeding fore head

Panicked he rushed her to the nearest hospital!


She was fast asleep . He sighed a relief

Thank god nothing happened

But he was restless

That stranger

How dare he!


The next morning she was glad that he rescued her as she folded his clothes to place them in the cupboard

He left early for the academy and had very little for breakfast

He looked upset!

Never mind i will bring him his favourite lunch

Will make his day


Seconds later she gasped

All her sarees were missing!

Only salwar kameez!

Where have they gone!



Reason for this fiction

Jasmin's obsession and delusions had taken over fateh's conscious mind so badly that he could hardly see the subconscious side which is occupied by tejo

Triggers are required for him to act towards the direction of the subconscious mind where his reflexes cordinates accordingly

The separation track which many predicted is also one of the triggers for him to realise the subconscious side of his brains

That also explains the flip flop between the two women

Though its annoying but the writers have done a good job

Tejo is already in him but with jasmin's obsession he cant see and understand it clearly

That also explains his approach when the investor was being friendly with tejo

It was clear possesivess and jealousy

An indication that tejo is already in his subconscious side that he havent realised yet

And it will come with time perhaps with the help of triggers

This is what i analysed from the recent episodes

Jasmin's obsession has preoccupied his conscious mind that he could barely see tejo on the subconscious side!


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Posted: 4 years ago
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Loved it, awesome I wish something like this happens on the show. But I can never like a man like fateh. He is indecisive, over dependant and malfunctioned beyond my understanding. I was only tolerating his presence bcaz of Tejo but now uh-huh not happening. I have so badly controlled my urge to call over a panditji and have him chant some anti fateh mantras. He brings out the worst in me as a viewer. It's not that we ever have sensible male protagonists on itv with sarabjeet gill and abeer of truck as exceptions. I have not really watched either of the shows but however little I saw or heard about during discussions with my cousins it seemed like these men had their sanity in check. Ohh and Neil from naamkaran I had absolutely loved and adored him. That was I first itv show I had religiously watched bcaz of the strong female protagonist.

Butbfateh my boy I'm done with u.. Me liking u not happening.

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Posted: 4 years ago
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So beautifully written, love it how Fateh realized how important Tejo is for him. Really wish any such incident should happen in the serial as well to trigger his senses where he should realize whom he want.

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Fateh rushing past Jasmine towards Tejo truly reflected his priorities (they surface in a time of crisis) which was great!

Jasmine's delusions finally come to an end!!!!!!!!!

Loved it 👏

Thanks for the tag :)

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Posted: 4 years ago
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let's see ki iss gadhe lafandar ko serial mein kaise akal aati hai?

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Originally posted by: Shraddha6789

Loved it, awesome I wish something like this happens on the show. But I can never like a man like fateh. He is indecisive, over dependant and malfunctioned beyond my understanding. I was only tolerating his presence bcaz of Tejo but now uh-huh not happening. I have so badly controlled my urge to call over a panditji and have him chant some anti fateh mantras. He brings out the worst in me as a viewer. It's not that we ever have sensible male protagonists on itv with sarabjeet gill and abeer of truck as exceptions. I have not really watched either of the shows but however little I saw or heard about during discussions with my cousins it seemed like these men had their sanity in check. Ohh and Neil from naamkaran I had absolutely loved and adored him. That was I first itv show I had religiously watched bcaz of the strong female protagonist.

Butbfateh my boy I'm done with u.. Me liking u not happening.


Hi shraddha

Sorry i wanted to tag u but couldnt remember ur full id

Afraid tag the wrong person

U can rewrite in ur own style if u are keen

Tc

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Originally posted by: mrsrakhra

So beautifully written, love it how Fateh realized how important Tejo is for him. Really wish any such incident should happen in the serial as well to trigger his senses where he should realize whom he want.


Hi dear

Tq very much

I see u have been following my stories a lot

Tq for ur loyalty and time

Regarding the fiction

for fateh to move towards tejo requires triggers

An action of reflex

She is on the subconscious side

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Originally posted by: lovereading14

Fateh rushing past Jasmine towards Tejo truly reflected his priorities (they surface in a time of crisis) which was great!

Jasmine's delusions finally come to an end!!!!!!!!!

Loved it 👏

Thanks for the tag :)


Hi dear


Tejo is the subconcious part

He hasnt realised yet

His reflexes moves towards her in crisis

And not only crisis

I have given example of that pervert as well

The moment there are triggers he forgets jasmin and attention drawn to tejo instead

Later he will still bounce back to jasmin coz shes the obssession

In times of crisis tejo will be his priority

He will br comsciously with jasmin but subconsciously with tejo

The same i wrote on the other fiction the coincidence

He's focus will be more on tejo

The tagging is if u are keen to rewrite in ur style

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Hi dear

Yes u are right

Lets see what he does

Tq for always reading and commenting

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Originally posted by: Aniash


Hi dear


Tejo is the subconcious part

He hasnt realised yet

His reflexes moves towards her in crisis

And not only crisis

I have given example of that pervert as well

The moment there are triggers he forgets jasmin and attention drawn to tejo instead

Later he will still bounce back to jasmin coz shes the obssession

In times of crisis tejo will be his priority

He will br comsciously with jasmin but subconsciously with tejo

The same i wrote on the other fiction the coincidence

He's focus will be more on tejo

The tagging is if u are keen to rewrite in ur style


Oooh I get it. You have written it so well, I don't know if I will be able to provide it justice!

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