Bariyan a ShiVi ficton [Completed] - Page 13

Originally posted by: Fah_huq

ML 🤗

Delighted that you find this beautiful

Well, I think I will let Rishita be a little bit like Suhana of SGP and more sensible 🤪

Hope you like next parrs as well

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That's fantastic news. I liked Suhana's character and so glad to hear it. Also, hope Rishita turns in that direction in show as well.

Are you going to update one today? I can't wait!

HELLO!!!!

Well, I sat to write something else and ended up writing something else. Kesar was haunting my thoughts. So I wrote down something on it. Hope you enjoy my take. Fingers crossed. Comment guys on how you find it. Sorry for the typos.

Thanks to everyone who read and liked the previous parts and of course commented. Hope you all enjoy this one too.

Stay safe and Happy reading.❤️

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PART 5

Pandya family’s ancestral home wasn’t in Somnath. The family once in a while visited their ancestral home 9 hours away from here for special occasions. Suman thought it was high time the family paid a visit there. There was a tradition of the family that the newly weds go to seek blessings from their ancestral temple. It had been 11 days since ShiVi got married. Suman wanted to get done with the ritual as soon as possible. Soon Raavi would start school and Dhara was nearly three months pregnant. They would probably not get time for it later. also Dev's marriage was coming up in a few months. She had asked Gaumbhi to arrange everything and Dhara to not worry about anything regarding the preparation. Ever since her pregnancy news came out two days ago, the family was delighted and extra careful about her. So, Gaumbhi and Dev took the responsibility of the puja. They planned to stay there for maximum three days. They had arranged an AC microbus so that it would be comfortable for both Suman and Dhara. As they loaded the vehicle, Shiva, Raavi and Krish occupied the back seat, while Dhara, Suman and Gaumbhi sat on the middle row and Dev in the passenger sit. On route, GauRa and Suman shared their memories of the haveli and the town with the kids who were eager to capture as many stories as they could. They reached by late afternoon. Gaumbhi took his mother to her room while Dhara went to check the food arrangements for the night asking the youngster to freshen up after unloading all their stuff from the vehicle.

“aur kesar ke baath yaad hai Shiva”, Krish suddenly asked as they entered the haveli and was about to laugh as if he just remembered the greatest prank ever but stopped on Shiva’s signal of staying mum,

“haa mujhe yaad hai, tum teeno ne kitni darawani faltu ke kahani sunaya tha. Woh Kesar sach me hai kya?”, Raavi asked with a frown – she was also there in the haveli for her Anita di’s supposed marriage and these three idiots had to scare her out of her wits with their brain cooked stories. Now that she thought of those she realized how fake and silly those tales were. But still spirits were spirits and she preferred them miles away from her. She clutched Shiva’s shirt on arm glancing around.

“ kesar ke hone se tujhe koi dikkat nahi honi chaiye. Woh kesar apne rishtedaron ko kuch nahi karta”, Shiva retorted having fun at his wife’s slightly scared face,

“Rishtedaron matlab”, She immediately zeroed her concentration on him narrowing her eyes knowing his play very well,

“tu bhi chudail woh bhi chudail. Behno hoge na tum dono?”, he added a shrug for extra effect, she pinched his arm making him shriek and move away. Krish and Dev were following them inside and shook their head at the nonsensical conversation,

“usse rishta hoga tera. Tu bhoothnath woh bhi Bhoothni”,she tried to take a jibe at him, but well, it was Shiva, so her jibe came right back,

“kaise sahi pakde hai na tu”, he started suddenly excited, “ woh nah mere mashooka thi. Par tere khatir maine usse reject kar diya. Tabse woh apne toote dil lekar yaha haveli mein mandara rahi hai. Aab tu bole toh usse apna loo?”, if glare could burn,Raavi would have ashes for husband by now. He offered her a smug smile.

“behen bani sautan”, Krish exclaimed dramatically dropping down on the sofa in the living room, other two boys followed suit, but Raavi! her scorching gaze turned to him – did he just called her chudail too!!! He sat up straight quickly, “mera matlab soch Raavi bhabi, woh yaha itne saalon se tera hi intezar kar rahe hai. Tujhse badla lene ka”,

“par humara shadi toh do hafte pehle huwa nah!!”, Raavi said coming back to frowning again – what kind of logic was that!! They hadn’t even fallen in love, not yet. Shiva sighed – this pagal was actually buying their story, Again!!! what did she for brain?!!

“shadi saath janmo ka bhandan hota hai. Pichle kisi janam chod diya hoga Shiva ne usse tere liye”, leave Dev to add a more realistic touch!!- Shiva grinned at his brothers sharing a wink. They proved to be his brother today! Raavi looked in deep thoughts.

“kitna ajeeb baat hai, tu apne rishtedaron sekitne darti hai. Kabhi chipkali kabhi chudail”,

“izzat se naam le samjha, kyon ki ab toh yeh tere bhi rishtedar hai. Mere pati joh thehre tu”. Raavi frowned at the trio’s relaxed expression as they lazed off on the sofa.

“shukar hai tune mana toh tu chudail chipkali yeh saare cheez hai”, they burst out laughing leaving Raavi dumbstruck,

“Di sahi kehte hai. Tum teeno ho banar senah. Aab jake fresh hoke aa, ja”, She said to the other two and pulled a smirking Shiva with her.

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That night, Raavi couldn’t sleep as Kesar occupied her thoughts. She somewhere felt that it was another of Shiva’s stupid trick to make fun of her. But again she did see some shadow ten years back right? No,she might be thinking too much. It must be Shiva messing up with her again. Her chain of though broke by some noise. She tried to hear carefully and felt it was coming just outside their door. She looked at Shiva’s side and saw him in deep slumber. She doubted if even tsunami could wake up that saarson ke tel ke tanki! Sighing she thought to have somewater and got up. Suddenly she saw something through their open window, something white may be. She walked towards the window and saw a figure clad in white saree sitting on Krish’s window perch, its feet were dangling on the air and it’s face was covered with all of its long dark hair. Krish’s room was just beside them. Whereas Suman’s were in downstairs and GauRa and Dev’s on opposite wing. Raavi felt a shiver run down her spine seeing the scenery. It seemed to be merrily singing something and waiting. What was it waiting for? Shiva? Or his wife? She felt frozen on her place as if all blood was sucked out of her. Was it Kesar? Did that mean all those tales by the two monkeys were true!! She quickly turned around only to clash with another body making her scared even more. She screamed at top of her voice but the person shushed her up. It was Shiva.

“aee gadheri, itni raat ko kya kar rahi hai aur aise kaoye ki tarha chik kiya rahi hai”, he asked in his most nonchalant voice holding her shoulder. She immediately hugged him tight.

“Shi..vva, woh ke...sar hai waha”, she whispered hiding her face in his chest. He encircled his arm around and felt her chanting hanuman chalisha. He felt it was enough and couldn’t hold himself back. She felt his chest vibrating and she stiffened – was he laughing?! She pulled away and looked up at his face and he started laughing loudly. She switched on the light and he called out to Krish in between his laughter. She again looked out of the window and watched as the white saari person got into krish’s room. A few seconds later, a knock was heard on their door that made Raavi startle. Shiva opened the door laughing and incame Krish in that white saari ,long hair and blood red nails.

“kya Shiva itna jaldi kyon bula liya. Aur mazaa aa raha tha”, the duo highfived and Shiva watched her reaction closely. She felt anger course through her veins – Shiva and His Kesar –how dare they scare her like that!! those donkeys! elephants! gorillas! She felt like hitting them and looked around for something. Shiva and Krish had stopped laughing and followed her movements. She took the nearest thing – pillow first and threw it straight at the brothers face shouting ‘ kamino, duffos, saare huye tamatars and whatever came on her mind’. She didn’t wait to see if they were hit or not - it didn’t matter who got hit, both deserved that - and searched for the next thing. The boys dodged the pillow cackling slightly and looked back to see what she threw next, only to Krish get hit by the hairbrush on his nose. Shiva laughed at him and got her lotion bottle on his face. Both looked ahead and saw her picking up the vase, they looked at each other widening their eyes and ran out of the room into the hall,

“Ayyy chudail kya kar rahi hai tu! Prank tha usske kiye jaan thode na legi”,

“lena hai toh iss ka lele bhabi, mere toh aabhi bhi shadi nahi huyi”,

“tujhe shadi karni hai!! Ek accha sa ladka dhoondo ga main tere liye Kesar khala. Gharelu bahu ka pose dene ke liya taiyar ho jaa tu”,

“dekh mami ke behan ki beti , woh vase rakh. Mujhe kuch ho gaya toh tujhe mami ke behan ki beti kon bulayega bol”,

“tu!!! saare huye kele ke chilka!! woh ek naam 11 saal purana ho gaya hai. Mujhe nahi chaiye woh”, suddenly they came face to face with a white saree clad figure halting their chase and all three got scared. Raavi dropped her vase and the devar bhabi clinged to Shiva shouting their lungs out. The hall dim light was replaced by bright light giving them a clear view. Shiva saw Dhara standing in front of them with a horrified look, he shrugged the two off.

“yeh ho kya raha hai bhai, aur yeh......Krish? tu yeh kya pehna hai!!’, GauRa and Dev had come out to check hearing all the chaos the three were making. They were shocked to see the trio’s state. What was Krish doing in that attire!!! Dev slapped his forehead getting what all these fiasco was about.

“bhabi yeh Raavi chudail ban gayi hai”,

“chudail ke kapde khud phene rakhe hai aur mujhe bula rahe hai chudail”,

“haa isse chudail nahi bhootni bula”,

“bhoothnah se shadi ki hai aab bhoothni to bulayega hi nah”,

“bas karo tum teeno”, they didn’t pay heed and kept on throwing insults at each other. Gaumbhi had had enough, “ MAINE KAHA STATUE”, all three froze on their place,

“aab kon bolega yeh kya ho raha hai”,

“yeh na inn dono ka plan hai Raavi ko tang karne ki”, Dev said pulling Krish’s ear, GauRa gave them an exasperated look,

“tu hai Kesar !! jo saalon se iss haveli mein mandara raha hai!”, Raavi nodded eagerly and Krish offered them a sheepish smile. Gaumbhi laughed at their silly antics.

“Shiva,maine kaha tha na tujhe Raavi ko tang na kar”, Raavi glared her husband, her eyes screaming revenge,

“kya bol rahi hai Dhara, tere Shiva ko sirf teen cheez aata hai – ek dukan sambhal na, do bhabi bhabi karna aur teen Raavi ko saatana”, Gaumbhi said slapping Shuva’s cheek lightly, “aur tu Raavi, tujhe lagta hai inn shaita no ke hote huye bhooth, dayan, chudail koi bhi yaha tik payagi. Joh bhi aayega khud apna saman band wapas chala jayega”,

“phir mere bagal mein khade woh kya hai”, Shiva muttered under his breath but Raavi heard it. She gave him a look as if saying ‘apna time aayega’,

“aab tum teeno aise moorti banke kya khade ho”, They gave Gaumbhi an incredulous look – who was asking?? Yes, the one who statued them!!

“Bhabi maine kuch nahi kiya , yeh sab na Shiva ka idea tha”, Krish made his most innocent face,

“gadhere, saree tune pene rakkhe hai”,

“jo bhi ho, tu na apne kesar ke paas jaake so jah. Kamre mein tere gira huwa kathal jaise shakal nahi dekhni chayiye”, Raavi stomped to their room with Shiva following her calling her whatever he called her. Others shook their head at their retreating figure and Dhara turned to Krish who made a puppy face,

“aab tera kya hoga kesariya”.

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One week later,

There was a hustle - bustle going around in the Pandya House. Raavi sat on the step outside the kitchen resting her chin on her hands. She watched as the four brothers ran around doing god knew what. Today was Raavi’s joining day at school. So she had woken up early and completed most of the chores to ease out Dhara. She was reluctant to go. But whole family refused that idea instantly and instead insisted on making the day perfect for her. According to the brothers, she and Dhara were to take rest and relax and they were to take care of everything for that day. Raavi couldn’t understand what were they taking care of actually. She herself had finished maximum house chores. She had made breakfast and prepared everything for lunches well. Then what were they cooking in the kitchen? Dhara was going to the washroom when she saw Raavi sitting like that.

“tu aise kyon baithi hai Raavi?”,

“baithi nahi hu Di. Mujhe jabardasti baithaya gaya hai”,Dhara gave her a confused look. Just then Krish passed by them carrying a bucket full of water in his hand. Dhara raised her eyebrow at Raavi who gave a nod sulkily. Both watched him walk into the washroom then return back to the kitchen. Dhara stopped him midway holding his arm,

“Yeh kya hai krish?”,

“balti hai Bhabi”, Dhara put her both hand on her waist, “woh aapke liye garam pani dale hai, jaldi se jaake nah lije”,

“kisne bheja yeh garam pani”,

“Gaumbhi ne, of course”,

“Gaumbhi ne!!”, Krish nodded excitedly making the girls glare him, “matlab kitchen me yeh charo hai”, Raavi gave her a sad nod, Dhara gave an exasperated sigh and went into the kitchen followed by Raavi and Krish. Both girls widened their eyes at the condition of the kitchen. Well, it looked like a mini tornado had passed through it.

“Tum logo ko mana kiya tha mere rasoi me mat aana”,

“ Shiva!! tujhe yeh toofan lana tha isliye nahi aane de raha tha mujhe aandar”,

“jo bhi karo so, mujhe tum teeno yaha ek aur second nahi dekni chaiye”, Dhara said pointing at Shiva, Dev,Krish , “aur tum Gaumbhi yeh saare faile huye raita sameto ge, AKELE”, she finished emphasing the last word. All three boys left showing thumbs up, better Gaumbhi than them.

“Di main.....”,

“rehne de Raavi, inhe aata hai yeh sab. Yeh toofan to woh banar sena ne laya hai. Gaumbhi kar lega”, Dhara said as she pulled a reluctant Raavi with her, “ tu jaake school ke liye tayar ho ja jaldi”. Well she might have declared he would do it alone. But few minutes later, Dhara was found in the kitchen helping her husband and the youngsters couldn’t help admiring them.

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Shiva stopped his bike as they reached her school and waited for Raavi to get down. When he was about to get down too, Raavi stopped him and suggested he should get going lest he would be late. Sitting back, Shiva stared at her face then gently held the back of her head. Seeing him leaning forward, she closed her eyes. He watched her face then closing his own eyes placed a peck on her forehead ever so softly. Feeling his kiss, Raavi encircled her right arm around his waist and kept her left palm on his cheek. He backed away a bit but held her close. Neither opened their eyes. A slight smile was playing on their lips. Both opened their eyes and stared at each other. A different emotion flowed between them at the moment. They had been close before on numerous times– it was either Shiva pulling her by her arms to emphasis his words or her holding his collars to spout something very annoying or something else. But right now, right in each other’s arm, it felt way different from those incidents. They were normally touchy people. Holding hands, pulling each other, hitting shoulders, hugging each other etc had always been normal for them. They had always been comfortable around each other. They hardly ever shied away from each others touch. It always felt... normal. But now all touch felt different,meaningful and special. They felt an emotion they never experienced before. They didn’t know if they wanted to name it, yet. But surely, they were excited to experience it all.

“sun,waha apni asli roop mat dikhana, bacchco ko pata chala tu chudail hai toh school chod ke bhag jayenge”, Shiva’s voice was soft despite the words. Raavi smiled at his remark, still in the same position,

“fir toh tujhe yaha se jaldi bhaga na chaiye,tu bhoothnath jo thehre”, he gave her a challenging look, she grazed his slightly grown beard. He didn’t retort her deciding to continue it at home. So, he let her go with a smirk. She too started walking to the entrance. He rode off shaking his head with a goofy smile after she went inside.

Around 3:30pm,

Shiva and Gaumbhi were unloading some goods outside thestore. Kaka was attending a customer inside and Dev was on the cash counter. An auto stopped in front of the store and Raavi came out of it .

“Gaumbhi aap jaldi se ghar chale jaiye, hum sambhal lenge yaha”,Raavi said as Shiva took her bag off of her and went inside followed by Gaumbhi and her. He checked her tiffin and found it full, he kept everything aside shaking his head.

“kyon?Tu school karke aa raha hai, ghar jaa aaram kar”, Gaumbhi refused instantly,

“chodona gaumbhi, iss ke kaan kam nahi kar raha kuch dino se, aap chale jayo. Bhabi khush ho jayegi aap ko dekh kar”,

“aur kehte hai pregnancy ke waqt jiska chehra jyada dekhte hai baccha uske jyasa hota hai.”, Devadded his two cents getting on the duo’s plan. Surely, both maa and Bhabi would a happy seeing him early. All this years they had seen their brother and sister in law always on their feet working tirelessly. May be with this baby they would be allowed to relax back a bit.

“phir toh mujhe hamesha di ke paas rehna chaiye. Tab bhi jake baccha mere jaise sundar aur intelligent hoga na”, Raavi exclaimed making Shiva snort and others smile,

“yeh dekho gadheri ko!! galat fehmi ke mehel bana ke jee rahi hai!, tu aas paas rahegi na toh baccha gadheri hi hoga”,

“gadhere hoga tu aur tere aane wale khaandan”,

“Raavi, tu jaanti hai na iska aane wala khaandan tujhse hi aayega”, Gaumbhi gave her a pointed look. She widened her eyes and turned to Shiva who smiled smugly. She couldn’t decide whether to feel embarrassed at those words or irritated at Shiva’s look. Beside them Dev and Gaumbhi burst out laughing, “ Raavi, yeh bata tera din kaisa raha?”,

“Bohat accha tha Gaumbhi. Waha ke bacche itna pyaare hai. Aur staffs bhi bohat acche hai”,

“matlab tumne chaar paanch dost to bana hi liya hoga”,

“insaan jaisi makkhi ke bhan bhan se pak gaya hoga pure school”,

“chalo saaro che.”, Guambhi interrupted not letting Raavi reply, “ Main chal ta hu, Raavi tune lunch kiya na”,

Raavi was about to nod a no but Shiva interrupted again,

“yeh chiti hai Gaumbhi, rashan kar raha hai khana”,

“aur tu machchar hai khane ke katne lag jata hai”,

“sun, inn logo ne bhi nahi khaya abhi tak. Saab sath me kha lena”, ShiVi nodded their head obediently, “Aur Dev, dhyan rakhna yeh dono khud ke sath sath humare dukan bhi na jala de kahi”, Dev nodded biting back his laugh as the couple glared at each other.

The store was busy even at that hour. So Raavi suggested Dev and Kaka to have lunch while she and Shiva attended the buyers. Then they could take over and ShiVi would lunch. Dev immediately agreed giving teasing looks to Shiva who for the first time didn’t feel annoyed. Instead he enjoyed it. As their lunch was over they got busy with the customers again. Raavi took control of the cash counter while others provided people with their necessary things. Krish joined them by evening as it was their peak time.

“Bhabi, teri school mein koi handsome colleague hai kya?”, Krish asked out of nowhere making ShiVi confused,

“Ek teacher hai joh dekne main bilkul Ranbir kapoor jaise”,Raavi said not paying attention entirely to the words but Shiva looked at her with a scowl,

“tu parane gayi thi ya ladka dekh ne”, she rolled her eyes and looked up at him questioningly,

“kya fadak padh ta hai Shiva.” Dev intervened as he was the referee for today and smacked Krish for asking the stupidest question, “ waise bhi, teri Raavi Deepika Padukone banke ghumti hai, usse to Ranveer Singh hi pasand aayega”, his reply made Raavi look at her husband in a new light. Was he pissed with that piece of information?? Was her dear bhoothnath jealous? She couldn’t help grinning at him. Her day just got even more better. But Shiva wasn’t pleased with all RK – RS mention.

“Ayy mami ke behan ki beti !! tu apna kabutar apne muh meh ghusa aur kaam pe dyan de”, Well well well, didn’t Raavi find just the right plan for revenge for all his pranks on her?!! She cheered in her mind - apna time aa gaya!!!

Originally posted by: Fah_huq

HELLO!!!!

Kudos to you writers..you guys bring life into your write ups..seriously,how you guys write dialogues for raavi,shiva and krish? 🤣😆

only two options,either आप लोगों के अंंदर उन तीनो का भूत चढ जात है या आप writers को split personality का बिमार है। 🤣

my fav dialogues:

1. “tu bhi chudail woh bhi chudail. Behno hoge na tum dono?”
   
2. usse rishta hoga tera. Tu bhoothnath woh bhi Bhoothni”.
   
3. behen bani sautan”, “mera matlab soch Raavi bhabi, woh yaha itne saalon se tera hi intezar kar rahe hai. Tujhse badla lene ka!
4. shaadi saath janmo ka bhandan hota hai. Pichle kisi janam chod diya hoga Shiva ne usse tere liye”.
5. sun,waha apni asli roop mat dikhana, bacchco ko pata chala tu chudail hai toh school chod ke bhag jayenge.

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keep up the good work!

Soooo beautiful 😍

Kesar, behen bani sautan🤣🤣🤣🤣

That moment when he dropped her to school

N that forehead kiss was so sweeet🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩

Aane wala khandaan 😜😜😜😜😜

Shiva to jealous hone wala h 😅😅😅😅

Thanks for updating

Update next part soooooooòooooooooooooooon ❤

Nice chapter! Shiva's dialogues were the highlight 😆.. Raavi accepting that chudails are her rishtedaar 🤣

Shiva claiming that kesar was his lover was hilarious

Loved the whole shivi, krish and kesar part! ❤️

So Freaking good, best part so far :)

I laughed soo much, when Raavi dropped the vase and she and krish hugged shiva... their banter while the whole Kesar fiasco was superb ♥️

Krish as kesar khalaa hahaha

Shivi little romance moment was cute

Shivaaa is jealous 😍😍 loved it, continue soon please

This was lovely! Loved how the story progressed!

Update soon

Another awesome update! Loved it.

I always get so excited when you upload 😆

This was so funny! Love Krish, Shiva and Raavi's antics. I really want to see all three brothers also laughing and bonding, really miss that in the show. The story progression is so organic and their relation is budding so beautifully That forehead kiss I am just in love.

That bit in the shop when Gaumbi told her that his future khandaan will come from you was so funny 🤣 Dimaag ki batti jali 😆

Super eager to read about this jealousy angle!! Update sooooon ❤️

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You have me so excited for tonight's episode. Haha so glad you incorporated Kesar. And all of the dialogues. 😆I really want to get inside of your head when your write these dialogues. You've got to be chuckling while you write this. That whole Kesar drama. And Dev chimed in for the extra effect as well! Kesariya 😆

And I loved the little ShiVI bike scene as Shiva was dropping her off to work. It was cute and they're moving in the right direction. And probably faster than what they anticipated. Haha looks like dono ka time aa ga ya hai. Can't wait to read what Raavi has up her sleeves to use this new information to settle the score with Shiva on all of his pranks. One thing I know for sure is that it's going to be a riot!!