Arshi SS - Chrysalis - Completed - Epilogue up 4/19/18 - Page 23

Hi.

First of all i wanna start by saying that even though I only read the first 2 chapters of this story, I'm already deeply in love.

I usually don't do this, and by this I mean stop when reading a completed story on IF that I'm so hooked to to leave comments in between, in stead I read all in a go and leave one -usually long- comment at the end. (it's a different matter in blogs because it's easier reading and leaving comments on every post there)

Anyway, something compelled me to do just that today, so here goes.

When i read the 1st chapter, I instantly knew this is a story I'll gladly stay up late to see through. Interesting chapter, good beginning, you certainly know how to captivate a reader's attention.

As i made myself acquainted with your characters i thought, okay a protective big brother arnav, a fragile weepy anjali, nothing new :p , a best friend lavanya who is secretly on love with arnav.. but what captivated me was the second khushi was mentioned, her being a bratty bully girl who was "intentionally" behind anjali's tears.. I though that's a good twist, then arnav's secret fantasies about her were mentioned and i thought that should make things interesting. But when you actually delved into khushi's character, history, what she feels and how she thinks and what's driving her to be the renegade everyone sees her as was what captivated me the most. A lonely kid cast away from her own parents since birth for 9 years because they "weren't ready" for a child, a child longing for affection and attention from her family, and how her rebellious behavior is only to get her parents attention, who even after a decade of bringing her back are still not ready for her yet, and instead marry her off to transfer the burden to someone else. I knew this was a special one.

As for chapter 2, let me start with this question: can i grab arnav's head and bang it for a couple of times with the nearest wall?? Dude!! You ignored your feelings for her, ridiculed hers, turned her down. You haven't seen her in 6 years, didn't even try learning anything about her life since you've been gone. You've been especially told to take it easy on her especially today. And what do you do, you spew stupid, hurtful, cruel things that you shouldn't be telling anyone in the first place.

Now back to khushi. When arnav's dad talked about the case he's helping with, i had a feeling the girl would turn out to be khushi. I don't know what I imagined the injustice she went through would be, but damn it wasn't this. They killed killed her 3 previous unborn children because they were girls!!! 😢😢 are people who think like this still around for f**k's sake!!! (sorry for the language, I usually refrain, but i couldn't this time.. I dont think another form would describe how frustrated i felt thinking that) My heart clenched and eyes pricked when she said defended herself and told him that.

I can't wait to read the rest.

Zed.

Chapter 3:

- the apology in the bathroom didn't go as I expected, instead it was Waaaaay better 😁

- lavanya's comment.. Disappointing. I understand her feeling jealous and threatened, but that's no excuse for what she said and her lack of empathy and humanity. I'm glad the family's immediate reaction was sympathy and worry about khushi and taking her side as a girl being done horribly wrong and not passing judgement based on who she was growing up. And that they didn't refrain from expressing their shock and disappointment, especially anjali, who did the right thing by pointing her best friend's blunder.

- khushi just wanting to be free instead of having the matter dragged and prolonged in case of pressing charges makes sense, to me at least, since I am someone who would chose my peace of mind and freedom rather than lengthy confrontations and dragging procedures in general. But i don't know what it feels like to be pregnant, to lose a child, least of all three, only to realize it was a cold blooded murder by people you'd expect be the ones looking after you and your unborn child.. So I'm not sure if I'll choose the same but like I said, I understand.

- her finally learning what a mother's love feels like from spending time with madhu aunty is just so sad. Yes she's been happy and loved living with her grandma, but it's still not what a mother's love feels like I guess.

- and last but not least, her interaction with arnav in his office was just a delight to read. You have a way of balancing emotions and effortlessly taking us from one mood to the other in a seamless transition that we only register once we're fully immersed in the new feeling.

Ps: i want to commend you for breaching this topic, for not shying away from expressing your mind. And i want to wish you and your family all the best in life.

chapter 5:

I am glad you took your time with their conversation post Arnav's confession. Had it been all done in one chapter, it would have felt hurried and unreal. Her reaction is very much the logical and expected thing from her. For 6 years she thought he hated her and was disgusted by her. When they met again, his behavior only drove her to think he still does.. And even after declaring a truce and agreeing for friendship, other than a great boss and maybe a caring friend, she bad no reason to think he feels for her anything more than friendship only to be abruptly told otherwise. And instead of talking things out, about his feelings for her that didn't waver for 6 years, of saying the words he kept to himself when he told her in chapter 4 that he was the idiot 6 years back, he had proceeded with kissing her.. Which i think would only cement her, albeit crazy, theories of his 'knight in shining armor' syndrome and haven'tbeenlaidinawhile 😂😂 (great ones btw 👌 )

Can't wait to read the next chapter.

Chapter 6

If her dad’s monologue was intended to be an apology to her, then is was a seriously poor and pathetic excuse at that. He didn’t even own up to all the wrongs they’d done her for twenty freaking five years. Not to mention that he put the blame on her for being born, for acting up because she was ignored, And, cherry on top, for being a girl !!! Are you kidding me. This family is hopeless.
And yes, as I read further, Arnav confirmed this, they were more impressed by the fact that ‘he’ wants to marry her despite the divorce and the pregnancy rather than by the fact that she refused to elope with him and shame her family.

(( A petulant, irrational, adorable raccoon. )) 🤣
As adorable as it sounds, i don’t think it’s wise for him to ever voice that out loud :3

“I didn’t climb up the balcony for sure. I knocked on your front door and your papa let me in “ he said flippantly. xD
Although I did wish for him to climb up her balcony, that would’ve been a hilarious turn of events to conclude the story right where it began.. To come a full circle. But the fact that he mentioned it is just as good I guess.

The proposal was shoo shweeeeeeeeet <3 I loved every bit of it. His words when he asked her to marry him and put him out of his misery. Kissing her belly and talking to the baby.. His baby ❤️ and looking sheepish when telling her he already got the license ready 🤣
But I understand, he probably doesn’t trust her hormones any more. One second she agrees and who knows what crazy idea she might get next :3

(( …only stop suddenly when she heard a familiar voice softly say.
“Hi bacha, this is me…your papa..” )) <3 (y)
I mean.. This is as best a conclusion to this story as it could get. I loved the simplicity of the statement yet the depth of meaning and emotions it carried.

Ps: Are you seriously asking IF we WANT an epilogue ? Who would say no to that?? No one in their right mind I’m sure 😃

Oh yeah, how could I forget! Mishka (gift of love) such a beautiful and apt name <3

Epilogue

First of all: Haaawt

Then Haaawt

Finally, yep still HOT :3

Okey, moving to the less hot more sweet stuff now 😊

The difference between Mishka and Advik and in Arnav's respective relationships with both of them was a realistic touch which I so appreciate. It's not favoring one over the other, just that one bonds differently with each person, kids included. And it goes both ways. Kids bond differently with their parents too. That doesn't say one is better than the other, it only means that one is closest to a parent in some ways more than the other.

I also appreciate the fact that you mentioned Arnav's apprehensiveness about having a second baby. People are not always so ready to have more children, no matter what the reasons may be, and it's real.

Arnav's nervousness when heading to the surprise birthday party, for some reason I'm not really able to put my finger on, made me wonder if it had anything to do with Khushi's first husband, I won't say Mishka's dad, because he is in no way that, best he could get i guess is "the sperm guy" but I'm glad it wasn't the case.

Not refusing the idea, just maybe not an epilogue-y kind of twist.

“Don’t you dare!! Not today! You can pop all you want tomorrow" 🤣 their mom's reaction was hilarious.. actually that whole conversation was hilarious.. "Father of two and this is how he speaks" 😛

Arshi's conversation at the end was the best way to conclude this story.. How can one conversation be hot and sweet and funny all at the same time. <3 (would you look at that, we're back to hot again :3 )

This was such a beautiful story, one I'll surely come back to read again and again.

Btw, here's someone else who hasn't moved on to Adni..

Arshi all the way baby 😊

Love, Zed.

Hi,

Just the read story in one go. Beautifully written.

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