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Posted: 4 years ago

This Os is on demand of..Kammy02 ..ans for all my readers...

“Hum to hai hi pagal…aur hum pagal hi rhenge maa..humse frse galti ho gyi..sabse badi galti..pyar karne ki…pyar kr bethe hai hum apke damad ji se..aur unhe nahi hua maa….unke liye hum sirf ek dost hi rh gye….naam ki patni..DUSRI PATNI….wo to bas Antra ji se hi pyar krte hai aur hmesa krte rhenge…ab ghutan ho rhi hai hume ….bht ghutan…hum samajh nahi pa rhe hai ..na hume dur jane dete hai aur nahi hamare pass ate hai…..lekin is galti ko bhi hum jaldi thk kr denge”

He closed her diary…..he has read this page …this last page of her diary..nth time in two months….this is her diary….her whole journey was in it…with him..for him…

He closed his eyes…..and remembered that inauspicious day..

@flashback

He went to jail to sign some document..regarding perv case and to meet him…to see how was he..

Aj: bhut samjhaya tha mne tumhe ..par tum nahi samjhe….ab dekho kha pahuch gye ho tum…

Perv: glared at him..

And as aj starts to leave..

Perv: tum mujhe kya sikhaoge AJ….tum bhi to bht apni patni Antra se pyar krne ke dave karte the naa…kya hua..apne se kam umar ki ladki mil gyi to sab bhul gye…kha gya tumhara pyar…

Aj: wo bhi patni hai meri..aur mai aaj bhi Antra se pyar krta hu …

Perv: to guddan se kya karte ho…aree maan kyu nahi lete ki guddan ke liye tum bhul gye Antra ko..

Aj catches his collar..but inspector separated them..and he went home..but whole way he only thought about his words….is he really ditching Antra for Guddan……and after this incident he unknowingly maintain distance from Gudaan…

After two Days;

Aj was standing infront of the portrait of Antra..again and again he think about perv’s words…

Guddan came to him and places her hand on his shoulder…he came out of his trance…all things are mixed up in his mind..and he was so frustrated..he jerked her hand…

AJ: kitni baar bola hai..mai dost hu tumhara…pati mai sirf Antra ka hu..aur bs usi se pyar karta hu…aur karta rhunga..kyu aa jati ho baar baar mere pass…

She was devasted…and shocked….she came here to ask him the reason of his distance from her…and to tell him all are calling him down as today is Rvati and Angad’s  marriage…

He left her in that state….because he can’t see her hurt….

She sat down there for hours…crying for him…she got her answers…she knows her place in his life….she takes her diary out and penned down her feeling..which she always do..as now this is the way to talk to her mother….

In the Evening..

She comes out of her room after getting ready in her pink and blue lehenga…with fake smile on her face..she went to revti’s room…

@revtai room..

Kaushalya:aaj mera sapna sach ho jyega..tu is jindal parivar ki bahu ban jyegi…

Rev: maa aap bhi na…

Kau: kya mai bhi..ab sun tu apne pati ko apne kabu mai rakhna….aur us Guddan se dur…

Rev: maa..plzz aap fr suru ho gyi..

Kau: tu samjhti nahi hai..dekh wo Aj to usse pyar karta nahi hai ..fir wo tujhe aur angad ko sath dekhegi to use bhi to bura lagega…aur tujhe bhi nazar lag sakti hai…

Rev: esa kch nahi hai maa jiju di se bht pyar karte hai bas khte nahi hai..

Kau: kash tu kh rhi hai whi sach ho..dekhne se to lagta nahi hai..jbse mai yha ayi hu undo ko baat karte bhi nahi dekha mne…wo to bas apni phli patni se hi pyar krte hai aur karte rhenge…guddan ki to kismat hi esi hai…

Rev: maa ab bas kro plzzz…

Guddan who overheard all the conversation enters the room..

Gudd: aree wahh chutki tu to aaj bht sundar lag rhi hai…and she put nazar ka teeka to her….wese to apno ki nazr kbhi nhi lagti..fr bhi..teri khusiyon ko kisi ki bi nazr na lage..ab chal neeche sab wait kr rhe hai tera…

Kausalya takes  revti with her..and guddan came down after composing herself…

Aj looked at her she was looking divine…he can’t take his eyes off her..but she was supposed to wear dark  blue lehenga to match him…she had told him last week about that…

He feels guilty for talking her in that way..he was wrong..he will tell her his dilemma after this marriage and asked for the forgiveness…he knows that she is very angry and that’s why she choose different outfit..

And suddenly perv was before him with gun in his hand…he pointed towards him…but guddan pushed him and perv take her with him…he take her to their terrace…everyone was shouting to stop him..and Aj was behind him asking him to release her…and in their conversation guddan pushed perv..but he clutched her hand with him…they were hanging upside down…guddan was holding railing…and perv was holding her leg…aj asked her to give him her hand ..but this way perv will be saved…she refused to give her hand…

Gudd: AJ…

Aj looked her in shock…she never called him Aj….he is her jindal sahab…

Gudd: hum apki help nahi lenge..hum is insane ko nhi bacha sakte jisne hamari chutki ki life khrab karne ki kosis ki…aur wese bhi..hum to aaj ja hi rhe the….ab hume ghar dhundne ki mehnat bhi nahi karni padegi…

Aj: dekho tum samjh nahi rhi ho ki tum kya bol rhi ho..mujhe apna hath do guddan..

But she release her hand from railing with smile and tears …

Aj : Guddannnnnn…

@flashback ends..

He wake up with jerk…

Angad was shaking him ..bhaii...aap thk ho...

Aj: haa..tu yha..kch kaam tha kya...

Ang: haa wo maa bula rhi h apko khane k liye..

Aj: maa janti hai na mai khana yhi khata hu...

wo apko sbke sath nahi unke sath khane ke liye bula rhi hai jiju...revti entered his room...please kha lijiye unke sath..

Aj : mai kese..yha..

Rev: mai yha rukti hu..aap jayiye..

Aj left with Angad...

Revti turns towards his bed where  guddan was lying..in coma..

After her fall she was saved from dying but went into coma,while perv was in serious condition for weeks and then die..

Rev: Bhut ho gya dii...ab bus bhi kro kis baat ki itni saza de rhi ho sabko..jiju ko...kisi ke liye nhi to unke liye thk ho jyo...plzz dii...ek baar sochiye unke bare mai...jbse aapki ye halat hui hai hai..tbse is room s bhr ki duniya unhone b chhod di hai..din raat apke sath rhte hai..apki wo dairy hai na...bs use hi pdhte rhte hai...kisi ko hath b nhi lgane dete...sb kch chhod diya h unhone..baat karna ..hasna sb kch..

Apko pta hai dii..apki jo chz jha thi  aaj bhi whi hai..dekho apka towel ..jha apne rkha tha...apki chudiya dresser pr bikhri pdi hai..apki sari ..whi pdi hai..bolte hai ki use kamra bikhra hua hi pasand hai isliye ese hi rehne do....sach to sabko pta hai dii ...kisi ko bhi apki chze nhi chune dete qki aaj bhi unme apka ehsaas hai.. Aa jyo wps dii..mujhe pta hai..aap sab sunte ho...plzz and she start crying...angad came and put his hand on her shoulders she turn and hugged him..

Meanwhile Aj came there and they leave the room..

He came near her...sit by her side..holds her hand and start telling her about his day...this was his daily routine.. 

But today ,he feels tired..like he was loosing hope ..and in his mid conversation he start crying vigorously....

Aj: guddan bas kro naa aur kitni saza dogi mujhe...ab tut rha hu mai...tum ek baar thk ho jyo..fr tum jo kahogi mai wesa hi krunga...jo saza hogi mai pura krunga..bs ek baar ankh kholkr mujhe dekh lo...guddan,...

She slowly opens her eyes...and first thing she saw was his crying face...she slowly move her hand towards his face...and touched his cheek..

Guddan: jin...jindal..jindal sahab...

Aj looked up ...first he thought he was hallucinating...but then he hears her voice...

This is real ..she really comes back..he don't know how to react he ..she tries to sit but was feeling very weak..he hold her and hugged her...

For how much time they were in hug they don't know but he was not having enough of her...he was feeling like if he release her she will lost...

Gudd: jindal sahab...hum thk hai..aap phle rona band kijiye..aur hamari taraf dekhiye...

He slowly release her...and took her hands in his...

Aj: guddan mujhe maaf krdo..mne usdin jo kch bhi kha...wo kch b shi nhi tha...us galti ki ye saza...ye saza mt do mujhe...mai nhi rh sakta tumhare bina...Akshat jindal kch bhi nhi hai apni Guddan ke bina..

Gudd: hum to apse naraz the hi nhi..bas hum kch samajh nhi pa rhe the...ek galti apne ki..aur dusri humne ..aapko itni takleef di ...hum bas khud se naraz the qki...qki..

Aj: tumhe mujse pyar ho gya tha...??

Gudd: Haa...aur apko nahi hua tha...

Aj : tha guddan pyar tb bhi tha...bs ehsaas baad mai hua...mujhe samajh a gya ki " tum ho to mai hu"..Mai aur Antra sath the isliye mujhe usse pyar hua...lekin tumse pyar hua tha isliye tumhara sath chahiye tha..

Isliye na tumhe dur jane de rha tha na paas a rha tha...

Gudd: hww! Apne hmari diary padhi...ye to galat hai naa..

Aj : bs whi ek tareeka tha tumhe mehsoos krne ka mere pass..

Guddan saw his sad face...

Gudd: ghar mai bhi sabko bta dijiye..hume bhi sabse milna hai..

Aj: aree haa..and he called all others...

Everyone came and shower their love on her and blessed her..

Doctor came and checked her..

Doc: she is fine Mr. Jindal..bs weakness hai..wo bhi chali jyegii...

Everyone leave them alone..

Gudd: chutki ne hume sab bta diya..aap ese rhe the hmare bina.

Aj: ye mera praichit tha...aur hua wo hua..ab tum kch bhi nhi sochogi..

And he came on his side of bed and put his arm around her..she also put her head on his chest..

Aj : ab sab thk hai guddan...sab thk hai..

She smiles and he kissed her forehead and put her to sleep...

After two months he sleep with smile and new dreams in his eyes..

So..this is end...

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Posted: 4 years ago

Beautifully written ❤️

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Posted: 4 years ago

Loved it. It's just Amazing one, Avni👏

You are very good at writing emotional scenes. Do write more.👍🏼

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Posted: 4 years ago

Wow👏👏

I'm just dumbstruck 😐no words to describe how this os was!!!! 

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Posted: 4 years ago

Avni this is ur best writting so far❤️

Thanks for writting this 🤗i have already read it twice and again reading it its worth reading 

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Posted: 4 years ago

Amazing os🤗

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Posted: 4 years ago

Exactly what I wished to read on Akshan for atleast once 

Well done .. keep writing 

Ya the pace was too fast .. thoda to aur tadpaana  tha AJ ko unki Guddan ke bina ;) but baad me thik kar dena tha Guddan ko

But anyway loved it 

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Posted: 4 years ago

This beautiful👏👏

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This beautiful👏👏

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