AshDeep OS:- Unwanted Feelings

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AMereWanderer

@AMereWanderer

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 7 years ago

#51

Originally posted by: mistii.rum
Ab kya!!!! Plz update soonish... Jaan atki padi h!

Thank you so much! Ab jo aap soche wohi... 😆

Muskan 😃

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AMereWanderer

@AMereWanderer

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 7 years ago

#52

Originally posted by: Anjali33

Kal ya parso.. Is baar pakka
I was busy with some TS competition so couldn't type it plus I wasn't keeping well

Yayayaya!

I'll be waiting for the PM 😃

Hope you're doing well now...take care. 😊

Muskan 😃

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AMereWanderer

@AMereWanderer

Dazzler

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Posted: 7 years ago

#53

Originally posted by: A.Green
Heyy! Loved reading this OS. Although just like everyone else, even I'll want it to be continued but I read how you want it to have an open ending!😳
I appreciate the fact that people still believe that not everything should have an end, alas I've never been one of those people but I appreciate the strength it takes to do that! 😆

Also, if you're not continuing this, at least tell us the 'she' , I think it's that stupid Sunaina😉😛

But anyways loved it! Write more on them.

Thank you so much for reading! And thank you for understanding my idea.. 😃

The 'she' is all up to you...jo Ashi ke dushman lage woh.. 😆

I'll definitely write more...

Muskan 😃

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mehraan

@mehraan

Trailblazer

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Posted: 7 years ago

#54

Beautiful Os dear ...Normally i avoid reading the real ones ..but then im a fan of ur writing so had to read tis one!!..i wished u had completed it...😊

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braveheartdoc

@braveheartdoc

Alumni

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Posted: 7 years ago

#55

Amazing OS Muskan...i usually don't ship any onscreen pair but your writing is awesome and I loved reading this 😃👏

Sorry for being so late😳

Thanks for the pm dear 😊

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mistii.rum

@mistii.rum

Beginner

Posted: 7 years ago

#56

Ashi ka pov diya Nd randeep ka nai!!! Ye Kahan ka insaaf hua???? Aaj se Tera raasta alag Nd mera raasta alag!!!! -preeti stylee😉 hahaha... Bt cn U give deep's pov plzzz pretty plzzz!!!

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MSK04

@MSK04

Dazzler

+ 4

Posted: 7 years ago

#57

Hey Muskaan,

You know normally I avoid reading AshDeep stories... Don't get me wrong, I am a shipper... truly... but somehow stories on real characters make me uneasy as I am not comfortable imagining...

So, I will just comment from the writing perspective... 😳

First person account is your strength... quite evident from your FF... and this story too has that crisp language and flawless emotions... The entire sequence flowed smoothly without any names, that's what I liked best...

The Mt. Abu track is my favorite... and the dance sequence in rains just made it more fab... music is not needed... and of course the surge of emotions and desires, caused by the perfect weather as much as by the touch... I truly loved the way he pleaded to stop him... Beautifully done...

I kind of liked how you kept the "she" unnamed... somehow lessened her importance for me... even though she was the cause for turbulence, I couldn't help but think it was nothing major...

And the end... kind of leaves you wanting more... but as a reader and a writer I am happy to have my own imaginations of what happened after that... 😊

Loved the writing as always Muskaan... And yes, I will comment on your FF soon... 😊

Love,

Mou

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