Viditi FF: Tere Sang Naina Laage (COMPLETED)

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Babygirl728

@Babygirl728

Dazzler

Posted: 7 years ago

Hi guys, actually ye idea mujhe Gashmeer ka "Naina" song dekh k aya. Isme:-

1. Aditi Cop ni hai bulki NGO worker hai.

2. Aditi Suresh dutt ki niece hai.

3. Vikrant ek undercover banke ek area me jata hai. Undercover ek tapori "Raja" ka hai.

4. Aditi use tapori samajhti hai iss liye usko napasand karti hai.

5. Vikrant ko uss love at first site ho jata hai.

6. Ye romantic comedy FF hai. Chapters abhi tay ni. Jaldi update karungi.

Kaisa hai idea,continue karu ya ni?

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siya

@loveinshi

Sparkler

Posted: 7 years ago

Yes yes!! Wo bhi movie dekhni baki Hai Meri abhi.. lekin Mei obviously Aditi ko imagine karnewali hu jab dekhungi tab 😆

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Babygirl728

@Babygirl728

Dazzler

Posted: 7 years ago

Originally posted by: loveinshi
Yes yes!! Wo bhi movie dekhni baki Hai Meri abhi.. lekin Mei obviously Aditi ko imagine karnewali hu jab dekhungi tab 😆

maine bhi abhi ni dekhi but jab dekhungi toh Aditi ko hi imagine karungi

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Dishi

@TunesOfHeart

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Posted: 7 years ago

Excited to read this out!

Update soon!

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Babygirl728

@Babygirl728

Dazzler

Posted: 7 years ago

Character sketch :-

Vikrant/Raja : Acp Vikrant singhal,single hai,handsome hai. Ek case k liye usne mawali Raja ka undercover lia hai. Varli me theen mahino se hai ek drugs racket ko pakadne k liye. Chali me sabka ladla ban gya hai & pure area me uska vatt hai

Aditi sharma: ek NGO worker,varli me gareeb bacho ko free me padhane ayi hai. Vikrant ki hi chali me kiraye pe ghar lia hai. Gunde aur mawaliyo se bohot chidti hai coz commissioner ki niece hai.

Guru: ek 20 yrs old college going boy,drugs k chakkar me phas gya tha but Vikrant ne use nikala. Sirf qahi Vik ki asliyat janta hai ki woh ek ACP hai. Vikrant uske liye ek bada bhai hai.

Jia: Aditi ki cousin, Lucknow ki pali badi hai,Aditi k sath NGO ke kaam k liye ayi hai aur usi k sath rehti hai.

Suresh dutt: Commissioner of police & mama of Aditi sharma 😆. Apni bhanji k liye acha ladka dhundh rhe hai,apki nazar me koi ho toh batana 😉

Asha: side character

Akram: villain

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Looks :-

Vikrant: gali k tapori wala look mtlb jeans,ganji,and unbuttoned shirt.

Aditi: kal k epi wala look,jeans,kurti & dupatta

Guru: full sleeves t-shirts and jeans

Jia: Cute tops and patiyala/afgani pajamas

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Kaisa laga sabka character and looks? 1st part raat me updated karungi.

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Babygirl728

@Babygirl728

Dazzler

Posted: 7 years ago

Chapter-1

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(Varli,Mumbai)

Boy: bhai badi talapp lagi lagi hai,kuch intezaam karo na

Boy2: bhai talapp toh mujhe bhi lagi hai,pr yaha kuch ni ho skta hai.

Boy1: bhai kuch mahino se toh yaha magan ka koi aadmi bhi ni dikha

Boy3: salo talap lagi hai na toh mujhe raat me 11 baje milne,wo band jhopri k piche.

(Shiksha NGO,Andheri)

Mrs. Poonam: Aditi hi come with me

Aditi: ji ma'am

In Poonam's office)

Poonam: Aditi ye varli me ek chali hai,uske bacho ko unke parents padhne ni dete,paiso ki wjh se shayad.

Aditi: yeh toh bohot bura hai ma'am, toh ab hum kya kar skte hai?

Poonam: Aditi tumhe waha do hafto k liye jana hoga,unn bacho ko free education dene k liye,aur ho skta hai ye do hafte jb parents apne bacho ko padhte dekhe toh wo unhe aage padhane k liye kuch kare & unki help k liye humara NGO toh hai hi.

Aditi: thik hai ma'am

Poonam: do hafte tumhe wahi rehna hoga aur maine ek ghar bhi kiraye pr le lia hai for you. And If you want tum kisi ko apne sath help k liye le jao

Aditi: ma'am meri ek cousin hai,social work student hai & holidays k liye Mumbai ayi hai. Agar aap permission de toh mai usse le jau.

Poonam: ok Aditi tum usse le jao.

Aditi: thanks ma'am.

Poonam: but tumhe aaj hi jana hoga taki kal se kaam shuru kar do.

Aditi: ok ma'am.

(11:15 pm,varli)

Boy3: abe itni der kaise lagi?

Boy2: arre dose na milne ki wjh se bada dard ho rha tha toh ane me der lagi

Boy1: ab baate chod aur maal de,bada dard ho rha hai.

Voice: beta dard toh ab hoga

Boys: Raja bhau

Raja: ha be Raja aur ab bajega tum logo ka baja,drugs hai na? Salo tum log ki umar kanche khelne ki hai,aur tum log yaha ganja aur heroine ki baziya laga rhe ho? Ab mai lagau sab k kaan k niche dus bees?

Boys (Vikrant k pair pe padh k): bhau maaf kar do,ab ni karenge

Vikrant: chal maal de

Boy3: pr bhau

Vikrant: abe tum logo ko kanche khelna chahiye,mujhe ni,chal de ab

(Boy3 usse sab packets deta hai but ek apne pass rakh li)

Raja: ab agar tum log iss k sath dikhe to bohot marunga.

Boys: ni dikhenge bhau.

(Vikrant/Raja unhe jane ko kehta hai aur wo log thoda door nikal k jate hi hai ki boy3 drugs ka packet nikal k inhale karne hi jaa rha hota hai but tabhi Vikrant/Raja usse pakad leta hai aur pitne lagta hai lekin wo Vikrant ko push kar k waha se bhagne ka try karta hai aur Vik uska picha karta hai. Wo uss boy ko pakad leta hai bich road pr use marne lagta hai ki tabhi ek car aa jati hai)

Voice: abe oye chodo bacche ko

Raja: oh madam apna kaam karo,rasta napo apna.

Voice: aye bakwass mat karo chodo use warna police ko phone karungi

Raja: abe Raja ko police ki hool dene qali tu hai kon? Chal nikal gaadi k bahar nikal

(Ladki yani Aditi car se bahar aati hai)

Raja: abe headlights off kar taki iss ka head dikhe.

(Head lights off hui aur Raja/Vikrant ko Aditi ka khoobsurat face dikha aur dekhne k baad bs dekhta hi reh gya)

Aditi: oye chod bacche ko,sharam ni chote bacche ko iss trh se road pr itni buri trh se peet rha hai

Boy: tai mala vaswa

Aditi: ha,oye chod use wrna tujhe isse bhi buri trh marungi,chod

Raja: abe chal ja kyunki mai khoobsurat ladkiyo ki baat ni talta

(Boy waha se turant bhaag jata hai)

Raja: ab khush ?

Aditi: shut up & get lost.

Raja: arre ha woh bhi ho jayenge pr apna naam toh batayiye madam ji

(Aditi waha se bina jawab diye chali jati hai & Vik usse waha se jate dekhta hai)

(After two days, at Vik's place)

(9:24 pm)

Guru: bhau andar aa jau?

Raja: abe sale tujhe puchne ki kya jaroorat aur aate hue darwaja bhi band kar dena. Sala garmi ki wjh se adha nanga ghoom rha hu toh yeh machhar (mosquitoes) khaaye ja rhe hai. Waise kab aya tu atya k ghar se aur ye dibbe me kya tilak ki mithayi hai?

Guru: ha ye mithayi hai,aayi ne bhijwayi hai. Waise thanks

Raja: la de jaldi. Thanks kahe ko re?

Guru: wo aatya k ghar pr baba ne sabke saamne meri taareef ki aur ye sab aapki wajh se. Apne drugs ki lat chudwayi,meri help ki uske liye thanks bhau

Raja: abe bhau bolta hai aur thanks bhi bolta hai,pitega mujhse

Guru: waise udti hui khabar suni hai ki aapko kisi teacherni ji ne jhad laga di hai?

Raja: teacherni ji?

Guru: ha wo ladki jisne aapko daata tha

Raja: abe wo teacher hai aur ladki ladki kya keh rha hai waheni bol be,teri hone wali waheni hai.

Guru: ye baat apki trh aur bhi kayi ladke keh rhe hai chaali k

Raja: unki yeh himmat chal unko bhi kal dekhte hai. Waise baiko toh meri hi hogi woh. Oye or kuch janta hai.

Guru: yhi k woh iss chali k akhiri wale ghar me kuch dino k liye ayi hai,NGO me kaam karti hai & free me yha bacho ko padhane ayi hai.

Raja: wah apni waheni ki kafi khabar nikal li tune,chal kal mil k aunga teri waheni yani apni baiko se.

Guru: hahahaha...kya bhau aap toh deewano ki trh baat kr rhe ho

Raja: abe deewana hi toh ho gya hu uska. Kya dikhti hai,kya awaaz hai,teri waheni banne wale sare gun hai. Pehli nazar me pyaar ho gya usse.

Guru: wah,chali me naya majnu aa gya hai. Waise ghar chalo aai ne khane k liye bulaya hai.

Raja: chal.

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So sab log ye tha first chapter, kaisa laga? Waise Vikrant likhne ki adat hai toh Raja ki jgh kayi baar Vikrant likh dia aur shayad aage bhi likh skti hu toh adjust kar lo. & comments toh zaroor karna.

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siya

@loveinshi

Sparkler

Posted: 7 years ago

Omg! Mast update Hai babygirl!! 👏 tapori style ditto portray ki Hai..👏 pata nahi I cracked up at vikrant's "garmi ki vajah se aadha nanga ghum raha hu" 🤣🤣

Waiting for the next update!

PS: "Waise baiko toh meri hi hogi woh. " Haan...😳

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AMIKA14

@AMIKA14

Navigator

Posted: 7 years ago

It was amazing babygirl!!Loved Guru and Vikrants conversation.TERE HONE WALI WAHENI HAI!!🤪

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Shruti

@mitras

Navigator

Posted: 7 years ago

Every part was awesome for me

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Babygirl728

@Babygirl728

Dazzler

Posted: 7 years ago

#10

Thanks everyone for lovely comments and here is the next chapter.

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Chapter-2

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(7:00 am;chai ki tapli)

Pandu: bhai chaali me joh nayi item ayi hai,kuch pata chal naya uske bare me?

Ganeya: ni re abhi tk wahich sui ataki hai ki wo ek teacher hai aur focat ka gyaan baatne ayi hai.

Pandu: abe toh thoda gyaan apun log bhi le lete hai,apne ko aisi madam ji mile to life set ho jaye

(Raja ki entry)

Raja: abe toh focat ka gyaan toh apun bhi de skta hai

Pandu: arre Raja bhai aao na,wasa na tumi,ai chotu chai la bhai k liye

Raja: abe ni re chotu,mat la. Abe tum dono ye bata k uss teacher k bare me bol rhe ho na?

Ganeya: ha bhai,kya mast item hai,ek dum kadak maal

Raja: idhar aa zara

(Ganeya pass aya aur *satak,ek lafa lagaya Raja ne usse)

Raja: abe ao chichoro waheni hai wo tum logo ki,yani apun ki chaabi,hone wali baiko. Usse tameez se paish ana aur gandi nazar rakhne ki toh sochna bhi mat varna aankhei nikal k kanche khelunga.

Pandu & Ganeya: ho bhai ho,chuki zali maaf kara

Raja: ha ha thik hai.

(Ye keh k Raja Aditi k ghar ki taraf nikal jata hai)

Raja/Vikrant's p.o.v:

Chalo ye kaam toh ho gya,ab jake apni chaabi se milta hu. Subah subah uska sundar sa chera dekh k din ban jayega,waise bhi usse pr gandi nazar rakhne ka haq toh sirf apna hai,hai na? Kahin aisa na ho meri chaabi ka koi chaaba nikle,arre ni ni Vikrant shubh shubh soch aisa kuch ni. Waise khali hath acha ni lagega,Raghu k yaha se mast guldasta leta hu,wo khush ho jayegi.)

(Aditi ka ghar)

*doorbell rings & Gia ne door open kia

Gia: arre wah kitne sundar phool hai par in sundar phoolo k piche kiska chera chupa hai?

Raja: mera

Gia: aap? Arre tum toh woh ho na jisse meri di ne data tha,yaha kyu aye ho?

Raja: arre ruk toh sahi,andar toh ane do

(Raja andar ghus jata hai)

Gia: oye kaha ghuse aa rahe ho

Raja: arre sali sahiba,apne jija se koi aise baaat karta hai kya

Gia: jija?

Raja: ha arre dekho tumhari tayi meri chabi tum meri chaabi ki behen toh hui na tum meri saali,par saali thoda gaali type lgta hai toh saali sahiba bola

Gia: chabi kya hota hai?

Raja: chabi manje hai setting manje girlfriend

Gia: oye kya bakwass kar rhe ho? Meri Adidu tumhari chabi I mean Girlfriend hohi ni skti. Arre tumhari trh kayi diwane hai meri Adidu k,but unhone kisi ko ghaas ni dali toh tumhara toh koi chance hi ni

Raja: arre honge diwane but Raja toh ek hi hai

Gia: mai janti hu Adidu tumhe reject kar dengi,kuch qualities chahiye unka BF banne k liye jo tumme naah..no chance

Raja: acha kya qualities chahiye?

Gia: ladka handsome ho,acha chalo usme tum pass,but ladka educated mtlb padha likha ho aur kamata ho

Raja: ha to apun bhi paanchvi fail hai,aisa thode k kabhi school ni gya,pachvi tk padha hai mai & kamata bhi hu

Gia: chori karke

Raja: ni re property bechne walo k liye grahak apun ich lata hai

Gia: oh,fir bhi chance kum hai

(Tabhi Aditi naha k nikalti hai,woh apne baal towel se sukha rhi hoti hai & Vik usse dekhta hai)

Aditi: kon hai Giu? Tum tum toh wo tapori ho na? Yaha kya kar rhe ho?

Raja: mai apko dekhne aya tha.

Aditi: tum...aahhh...

(Aditi slips coz of her wet slippers and the famous fall and catch scene)

Aditi: chodo mujhe

Raja: fir gir jaogi

Aditi: faltu joke mat maro,tum jante ho mera mtlb,ab chodo

(Aditi khud ko thik karke)

Aditi: kyu aye ho?

Raja: wo aap teacher ho na toh isi liye,focat ka gyaan lene aya hu

Aditi: what?

Raja: ni mtlb wo apun ko uss din laga k aap ne apun ki galti k liye data toh sahi kia. Fir socha chalo aapse kuch achi baatein sikh lu. Sikhayiye na zara achi wali baatein

Aditi: thik hai

Gia: but adidu

Aditi: Giu,ye sudharna chahta hai toh thik hi hai na,waise bhi shiksha pr sb ka haq hai

Raja: ha apun ko chahiye wo shik..shi...wahi jo aap boli. Toh basa aur shuru ho jao

(Aditi Vikrant ko achi achi baatein batana shuru karti hai,ahinsa,shanti etc. ki but Vikrant ka dimaag uski beauty me hi khoya rehta hai)

In Vikrant's mind: kya bol rhi hai kuch sunayi ni de rha,but usse bolta dekhna baa acha lag rha hai. Aur ye paani ki bunde wo toh ispe aisi lag rhi hai jaise,gold pr diamonds. Aankhein kitni nashili hai,aur lips rose petals ki trh,mannn karta hai ki...aaj tak itne sundar chere dekhe,models, actresses sab ko dekha hai but isse jada sundar koi ni dekha)

Aditi: samjhe...ooo...kaha kho gaye ho

Raja: ummm ha kya?

Aditi: samjhe jo maine kaha?

Raja: ni

Aditi: kyu?

Raja: arre jb samne itna khoobsurat insaan ho toh bhala baato pr kiska dhyaan jata hai.

Aditi: kitne besharam ho

Raja: are apni hone wali baiko ko dekhne me kaisi sharam?

Gia: what is baiko?

Raja: baiko manjhe hone wali biwi

Gia: oh ok

Aditi: what "oh ok"? & u get out,bahar niklo aur dobara ana mat yahan. Chalo niklo