SS - O Re Piya update pg 19 28th dec

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Hiya guys, i was bored and so wrote this up as a laugh, please ignore my spelling mistakes and i hope you enjoy, i wanted to post this part and the next as one update but it was to big so i have split this up, when i get time i will type up the rest of this chapter and post soon !!!

Sharan XXX

PS please do leave comments even just to criticize, it really helps, thanks!!!

SS O Re Piya

Nazrein Bolen Duniya Bole
Dil Ki Zaban Haaye Dil Ki Zubaan
Ishq Maange Ishq Chahe Koi Toofan
Chalna Aahiste Ishq Naya Hai
Pehla Yeh Vada Humne Kiya Hai
O Re Piya HaayeO Re Piya
Piyaaaaa....
O Re Piya Haye

The honey coloured sun was just peeping through the clouds and the morning larks were merrily chirping away, a few of the early birds in the village were making there way through the early morning mist over to the mandhir for morning prayers, the main street was quite as always expect for a few extra people walking to the mandhir, it was deserted and eerily quite like every morning just before the morning rush, all except the mandhir which was becoming fuller their was a reason why the mandhir was busy so early in the morning, because today was Thursday and every Thursday Bani came to do Aarti and when she came the whole village looked forward to listening to her sweet angelic voice,


Om jai Jagdish hare
Sw'mi jai Jagdish hare
Bhakt jano ke sankat
D's jano ke sankat
Ksha' men door kare
Om jai Jagdish hare

Her melodious voice ran out and floated through the air like a birdsong, the people living in main street opened their doors and windows to get a better listen, a few late comers tried to find a seat in the now throbbing mandhir.


Jo dhy've phal p've
Dukh bin se man k'
Swami dukh bin se man k'
Sukh sampati ghar 've
Sukh sampati ghar 've

Kasht mite tan k'

Om jai Jagdish hare


Mean while a man who was staying at the guest house opposite tossed and turned, he had checked in late last night and was extremely tired, with only a few hours sleep between him and his next destination he was a busy man, tossing again he grabbed some cotton wool lying on the bedside table and stuffed them in each ear, nope no good he could still hear the arti.

M't pit' tum mere
Shara' pa'oon main kiski
Sw'mi shara' pa'oon main kiski
Tum bin aur na dooj'
Prabhu bin aur na dooj'
's karoon main jiski
Om jai Jagdish hare

Tum poora' Param'tam
Tum Antary'mi
Sw'mi tum Antary'mi
P'r Brahm Parameshwar
P'r Brahm Parameshwar
Tum sabke sw'mi
Om jai Jagdish hare

Getting up he barged down stairs to find the owner of the small guesthouse, dusting his old trophy cabinet happily with a old cloth ( the owner an old man in his 70's had claimed to be a wrestler in his youth ), this amused the guest and he reached out and tapped the owner on the shoulder gently, seeing him almost jump with fright, the guest pointed to his ears indicating the owner to turn his hearing aid up higher.

Confused the owner looked at the paying guest walking around with only boxer shorts and a vest so early in the morning too, Mr Mishra began howling with laughter and the paying guest looked annoyed at first but soon joined in with the infectious laughter



Tum karu'' ke s'gar
Tum p'lan kart'
Sw'mi tum p'lan kart'
Main moorakh khalakh'mi
Main sevak tum sw'mi
Krip' karo Bhart'

Om jai Jagdish hare

'I'm glad I amuse you so much Mr Mishra, but could you turn the radio down, I'm not in to Arti or bajans at this time in the morning, even my daughter in law at home does them at a decent hour'.



Tum ho ek agochar
Sab ke pr'' pati
Sw'mi sab ke pr'' pati
Kis vidhi miloon Gos'i
Kis vidhi miloon Day'lu
Tum ko main kumati
Om jai Jagdish hare

'Mr Bali, I can assure you what you are hearing is no ordinary voice on the radio, its Bani singing arti today and at precisely 6:30 she will stop , so go to sleep back to sleep peacefully or just listen because after today we in this village won't get to hear again for a long time, she's moving to Mumbai to further her studies', the owner carried on lovingly cleaning his trophy's while Aditya listened, grabbing a near by shawl to keep him self warm , the old man carried on, 'I have know her from the time she was a baby, she has grown before my very eyes , so sad when her mother died, she was only a 6 years, that's why Bani is so well loved in this village we have all helped to bring her up,



Deen bandhu dukh harta
Th'kur tum mere
Sw'mi Th'kur tum mere
Apne h'th uthao
Apni shara'i lag'o
Dw'r pa'' hoon tere
Om jai Jagdish hare

Bani is a only child and when her Mother died her Father went in to a deep depression and started drinking, she looked after herself and being so loving adopted two orphans called Pia and Rano, those two girls you saw giggling as you checked in, I love all three like my own grand dauhters, you see I never got around to getting married and seeing Bani struggling to look after her Father and to young sisters, Mr Mishra's voice broke, it was heavy with emotions and he stopped, leaving Aditya to fill in the gaps with his imagination, he carried on with a hint of pride now in his voice, I gave them shelter and all the good advice only a grandfather could give, as well as singing Bani is a studious girl, she has won a scholarship to a top college in Mumbai to study music and Indian folk culture,

Vishay vik'r mit'vo
P'p haro Dev'
Sw'mi p'p haro Dev'
Shradh' bhakti ba'h'o
Shradh' bhakti ba'h'o
Santan ki sev'
Om jai Jagdish hare

Aditya was impressed and spotted a servant carrying a steaming tray full of masala tea, Aditya took the glass the servant offered, and took a sip, the sweet and milky liquid sank deep down his throat and his body instantly warmed up, Mr Mishra saw the servant walk past him and stopped his polishing and let out a loud fake cough, the servant ignored it and answered,

'Bani's orders you are to have no sugar, I will bring it in a minute'.

This made Mr Mishra smile and at the same time puzzled him. What would he and his diabetes do when bani leaves.

Om jai Jagdish hare
Sw'mi jai Jagdish hare
Bhakt jano ke sankat
D's jano ke sankat
Ksha' men door kare
Om jai Jagdish hare.

Suddenly the singing stopped and the vibrant ringing of several ghantees could be heard, after a few minutes a young woman appeared with a puja ki tali, offering blessings to al the guests , Aditya took the blessings and gazed at Bani, which made her feel uncomfortable, Aditya observed that she was short in height with thick rimmed glasses and oiled hair tied in a boring plait, she had a girlish figure which she hid behind old fashioned salwaar kameez, her face all tough was beautiful, she had full lips, sculpted cheek bones and a aquiline nose, but her eyes, even behind her horrid glasses shone with a fierce ambition and a quite determination that not many possessed, plus she exuded grace with a strange mixture of innocence.

'Dadaji, has my letter arrived, I wont be able to find accommodation with out my scholarship letter', Bani burst forth like a whirl wind and bowled Aditya over with her assertive manner, a certain some one came to mind but he pushed that thought out of his mind.

Looking suspiciously at Aditya from under her nose, Bani pushed her ugly glasses further up nose and whispered to Mr Mishra, 'I really must talk to you about letting weird guests into the guest house Dadaji'.

To be continued....

Index

part 1a page 1,part 1b teaser page 2, part 1b page 2, part 2 page 4, part 3a page 5, 3b page 7, part 3c page 8,part 4 teaser page 9, part 4 page 10, preview page 14 , part 5 teaser page 12.part 5 page 12, part 6a page 18,part 6b page 18, note page 19,PART 6c page 19,

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divan thumbnail
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Whoa! Sharan writing such a beautiful ff. Hum like this Bani with thick glasses and oiled hair, a village beti going off to big bad Mumbai. Aditya in boxer short...ahem hard to imagine, may be a lungi...can't wait for next part...dil mange more...
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Posted: 17 years ago
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cute part!!!

bani's soo adorable!!!

cant wait to see what will happen next!!

please cont soon
thanks
sanju
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Hey Sharan
great ss 👏
loved the discription of Adi with boxers and a vest on 😆
and Bani with glasses, boring clothes and oiled hair 😕 😕 hmmmm reminds me of ugly betty
bani is only missing the braces 😆 😆 😆

please do continue soon

Taj
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Posted: 17 years ago
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omg shazzy.. lmao.. great start yaar.. im guessing adi is thinking of getting JB togehter isnt he.. lol... awwwnn i love this dada ji.. anywayz continue soon yaar.. cant wait...
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Posted: 17 years ago
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wonderful start cant wait to read more
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Posted: 17 years ago
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haila!!!
Bani with chasma!!
Adi in boxer !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
very interesting start
plz cont soon
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Posted: 17 years ago
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very very nice. you know I am such a sucker for ugly ducklings who turn into swans. waiting patiently 😛
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Originally posted by: divan

Whoa! Sharan writing such a beautiful ff. Hum like this Bani with thick glasses and oiled hair, a village beti going off to big bad Mumbai. Aditya in boxer short...ahem hard to imagine, may be a lungi...can't wait for next part...dil mange more...

thanks dear it was written out of complete boredom and i'm so glad you liked i read your work and feel so inferior !!!



Originally posted by: basket

cute part!!!

bani's soo adorable!!!

cant wait to see what will happen next!!

please cont soon
thanks
sanju

sanju dear its a small cute little SS i have the next two parts written i hope you like them to !!!!!



Originally posted by: momtajbegum1

Hey Sharan
great ss
loved the discription of Adi with boxers and a vest on
and Bani with glasses, boring clothes and oiled hair hmmmm reminds me of ugly betty
bani is only missing the braces

please do continue soon

Taj

Taj dear i didn't mean for Aditya to be like that but i cant help being besharam now i thought you guys would think it was Jai at first ! (it was supposed to be but i changed at the last minute) and as for ugly Betty YUP but with out nasty braces YUCK i hate them and when i get off my lazy behind and post next 2 parts i hope you will like !!!



Originally posted by: phool527

omg shazzy.. lmao.. great start yaar.. im guessing adi is thinking of getting JB togehter isnt he.. lol... awwwnn i love this dada ji.. anywayz continue soon yaar.. cant wait...

i like this dadaji too i based him on my own nani and wait till you see what he gets up to HEHEHEHE such a joka !!!!!!



Originally posted by: amiee

wonderful start cant wait to read more

will post more i promise !!!!!
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Originally posted by: moonlitnight

haila!!!
Bani with chasma!!
Adi in boxer !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
very interesting start
plz cont soon

thanks i will tomorrow



Originally posted by: lenmed

very very nice. you know I am such a sucker for ugly ducklings who turn into swans. waiting patiently

LOL me too sweetie me too !!!!



Originally posted by: btkr

Good start, Shaz...

thanks



Originally posted by: janu_2006

hey
gr8 start
cont.sooon

thanks i will do tomorrow !!!!

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