A Letter Left, A Heart Taken (3 Parts, Now Complete 2/01/2018)

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I am trying my hand at a 2 shot.
Do let me know what you think of part 1.

Part One:
Dear Neil,

It feels really weird to call you that now, since all I call you is Sir.
I guess im writing this letter to let you know that I know why you put handcuffs on my wrist.
I know Vidyut wants me and as always you did what you thought was right.
I am greatful for your faith in me, for your protection and your love and I can't imagine how hard this has been on you.

I have spent a lot of time thinking this over, and have finally reached a decision I feel is correct.
I forgive you, for imprisoning me, because in your eyes it was in my best interest.
Although, I don't agree, you know as well as me that hiding things only bring about pain and suffering.

Anyway, I just wanted to say, I dont forgive you for wiping away my sindoor or for taking away my mangalsultra.
It was a part of my existence and who gave you the right to take that away from me?
But that was then, I have changed now and being your wife isnt my identity anymore.

I love you, I always will but walking away is something I must do for me.
Just like you did what you did without explanation, you dont deserve an explanation off of me.

I hope in time you realise the significance of what you did.
For me, that was a divorce, sometimes Neil actions are more then enough.

When you find this letter, dont try and find me, I want to be alone.

Love
Avni

Neil screwed the letter up in his hand, his watery eyes remained on the hole in the wall.
Avni had escaped but not alone, no, she had left with his heart.
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: neeraja91

Wonderful!please update

Thank you, I will update soon!
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Great concept!! 😊 looking forward to reading it... 😊
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Originally posted by: Ayesha134

Great concept!! 😊 looking forward to reading it... 😊

Thank you!
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Heart breakIng letter, update soon
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Originally posted by: -AvniNeil-

Heart breakIng letter, update soon

I will update tomorrow!
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Part 2-
"Shes been spotted at the train station"
As soon as DD had spoken those words, Neil ran, ran as fast as he could to Avni, to his love.

"Do I inform the other officers"
"No, this one is just for me"

Neil arrived at the station in record timing
"Avni" he shouted
The train station deserted, just like his life without her

The rain was heavy, so was his heart
The one she had taken with her
His footsteps that hit the floor were heavy, he felt weighed down, in his search for Avni

Then he saw her.
Those beautiful chocolate orbs that took his breath away, the smile that could light up a thousand dark rooms.
Frozen in time, just Neil and Avni

He took a step forward, then another
Then he was stood infront of her
So many things to say, yet no idea how to say it

"Dont go" it wasnt a statement, it was a plea
"But I must, I must leave, for me"
She reached up, running her fingers through his wet hair

"Ill miss this" she whispered
Neil shook his head, clasping her wrists with his fingers
"Dont leave me"
Avni held her wrists up

"If I say no, will you cuff me and make me anyway"
Like he had been burnt, Neil dropped her wrists

"What can I say, what can I do to make you stay"
She shrugged
"Tell me what you like, tell me what you will, whats the point of holding on, when you will always do things as per your will"

Speechless.
He couldn't form speech, the daring look in her eye made him swallow twice as hard.
Avni picked up the bag on the floor

Turning she went to walk away
"Stop" he begged
Dropping on his knees

"Id do anything for you Avni"
"Same to you"
She turned on her heel, before the look in his eye would make her lose her courage, turn and run into his arms

She walked faster, to the point where she was running
Jumping on the train, she sat down

Neil was now banging on the window as the train departed
"No, no you cant leave me like this, Avni"

He stopped as she wrote something on the window in the steam
One word
One singular heartbreaking
Soul shattering
Word

"Goodbye"
With one more loud bang on the window
The train passed him
There left Avni

Avni and his heart

Do let me know what you think!
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Next time please write something happy... separating Avni and Neil please it just hard I prefer threm together
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Posted: 8 years ago
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The first part was really good, I loved to the core, I read 3-4 times too, but at the same time its never Neil and Avni, its always been AvNeil, so keeping them apart so Neil realizes his folly but at the same time they come together when they realize the foundation of a relationship has to be maintained like trust, kept in loop, don't take the other for granted etc etc. Both have screwed up, they just need to learn from it most probably the hard way.
Separating them permanently is not a solution.

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: AvNeil_TV

Next time please write something happy... separating Avni and Neil please it just hard I prefer threm together

Dont worry, theres one more part to come

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