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Maithili

@maithu_

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Posted: 8 years ago

#131

Originally posted by: taahir004
Part 5

Fabulous Part

Suraj its almost as if his world is changing without his permission and yes Chakor now more confident more determined then ever wants what she wants and she makes no mistakes about showing it
Suraj in this chapter it almost felt like he wants to avoid Chakor yet he knows its like an magnetic pull towards her asking her to wait after class

Thanks a lot dear!

Liked how you formulated their views towards each other!

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Maithili

@maithu_

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Posted: 8 years ago

#132

Originally posted by: taahir004
Part 6

Suraj speaks to Chakor well that was expected as he tells her he is her teacher and that is the only relation that will exist between them , but she is confident about her love while he seems to be making excusing as he is Vivaan's friend then he is Chakor's teacher and the main reason that he never expected happiness in his life
surprisingly Vivaan was so cool about everything but then again he knows both his sister and his friend
Suraj now will try his best to avoid Chakor but with her determination and confidence I do think he will bend soon

Thanks a lot!

I think you will find the confirmation of your hypothesis in the part 9!

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Maithili

@maithu_

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Posted: 8 years ago

#133

Originally posted by: taahir004
Part 7

Awesome Part

Oh I loved how innocent mischievously Chakor kisses Suraj and he so shocked that he could not respond neither could he push her away well she is one determined girl
while Vivaan has accepted Suraj as his sister's love but again Suraj makes excuses saying he is the teacher and Chakor is his friend's sister
Chakor knows that Suraj will avoid her so she texts him but the best was her future with him she already has a name for their son wow this girl is much right

Thank you!

I don't know if there are brothers like Vivaan in real world.

Glad you enjoyed reading the message!

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Maithili

@maithu_

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Posted: 8 years ago

#134

Originally posted by: Sania_suraj
Hi di..
It was superb..
Loved suraj and vivan conversation on phone..
Chakor wat a girl she s?how boldly she express her feeling to suraj her teacher..
Poor vivan..he was so scared of his sister..lol
But i can imagine how chakor looks like kali..and also can see suraj's and vivan's fear for diff reasons..
Atlast how she expressed her feeling to suraj was awesome..
Waiting to see how suraj reacts to her..
Every part of tis story takes me to the diff world with only sukor..
Tq for taking me to these world by ur writings sis..
Luv u a lot sis..and i loved tis part a lot..

Hey dear!

Thanks a lot dear!

Glad you enjoyed every bit of the last part! Hope it will be the same with upcoming ones.

It's my pleasure dear that you like my writings and boost me with your words!

Louve you too dear!

See you!

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Maithili

@maithu_

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Posted: 8 years ago

#135

Originally posted by: meshmesh
Interesting update!
Poor Suraj, trying to talk sense into Vivaan.
Vivaan is no match for an angry Chakor.
Chakor is letting her feeling overpower her reason, she needs to control herself more.
Can't wait to find out Suraj's reaction.

Thanks buddy!

Ah the word control. I love that word! And I don't know what you will say when you will read part 12-13-14.

I know it will come in a long time but with what I have planned, it's going to be a shocker! And I hope it does!

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Maithili

@maithu_

Rocker

Posted: 8 years ago

#136

Originally posted by: amrutha131
Superb👍🏼
Chakor's confession is nice
Don't know about heart attack,but bhai-behen duo will make him mad one day😆
Waiting for next !!

Thanks yaar!

Glad you liked her confession.

@bold LOL! It's for sure!

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Maithili

@maithu_

Rocker

Posted: 8 years ago

#137

Originally posted by: SofiaIshVeer

Wonderful update 😊

Poor Suraj with Vivaan and Chakor😆😆

Thank you!

Yeah Poor Suraj! Don't know how he is going to get freedom! LOL

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Maithili

@maithu_

Rocker

Posted: 8 years ago

#138

Originally posted by: Charaju
As always update was fabulous
Suraj tries to distant from chakor but chakor still gets closer 😆
Waiting for suraj's reaction

Thanks dear!

I feel like replacing Suraj from CAY with Chakor LOL

Will be updating tomorrow!

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Maithili

@maithu_

Rocker

Posted: 8 years ago

#139

Originally posted by: taahir004
Chapter 8

Amazing Part

Chakor have not given up her determination on Suraj as her brother spoke to her and perhaps told her everything about Suraj and she also wanted to try and distance herself from him but seeing him at her home made her feel differently something that maybe only he should understand and it seems that her determination as paid off as Suraj somehow accepts her but his care shown on her was great
waiting now to see if he regrets anything or he is starting to accept her in his life and heart

Thanks a lot!

Glad you are liking it and finding it interesting!

I too hope it!

See you tomorrow with the next part!

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Maithili

@maithu_

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Posted: 8 years ago

#140

Hey!

Thanks for all the positive responses I'm getting for this story.
No blah blah, straight to story!

Link to previous part: Part 8

Happy reading!

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Part 9

He took a deep breath and started:
"I'm an orphan." she opened her mouth to say something but got closed by his index "I was abandoned by my parents when I was few months in front of the orphanage where I grew up.
I have never seen my family. My blood related one. For me the grandparents from there are my real ones. They gave me their name and they were and they are my support.
I never imagined of my life with any other family. I wanted to do something for myself and the orphanage.

I never felt the things I feel with you.
I don't know what is it.
All I know is you are special to me.
Since when? I don't know.

You have a future.
A better one.
A good family who supports you.
I don't want to come in between your beautiful life." seeing her eyes begging him he shook his head:
" I know what you want to hear!
I like you.
I don't know if it can be called love as I don't know what is love in general. I'm going to ask you something that you will not want, you will not like." he took another deep breath and continued:
"I want you to forget me.
I want you to have a bright future.
I want you to be the person you want to be."

She palmed his mouth and said
"I will have a future when I want to be the person I want to be, which is to be your half.
To be The only lady in your life.
To be One among your existing family.
And" she removed her hand from his closed mouth to close it with hers.

This time he reciprocated the feeling she showered until they broke it breathlessly.
"Add few members in future." hiding her shy face in the crock of his neck, hugging him tightly.

"You have a future"
"Only with you!" she completed with her words.
"But"
"If the reason is my studies. I will complete what I always wanted to do with your help." facing him "You are my inspiration and I want you to be my perfection." with a smile.
He smiled for her craziness and said "If I don't agree?" in a questioning tone.
"I will rape you!" in a menacing mischievous way.
"Too bad Miss."
"Not with you Mister!"

"I need time." he said.
"If it's for my studies. I promise you I will do what I wanted to do. Please." not knowing why she was pleading.
"I will be a disturbance for you."
"No, you will be my guide."
He smiled!

"Hey! I finished my 2nd round of dinner! Can we work?" Vivaan screamed knocking on the door.

"Are you staying?" she asked with hope without giving a pounce to her brother.
"Hmm No"
"Please stay! I will not disturb. Promise." pinching her throat.
"Ok!" he accepted after a lot of pouting and pleading puppy dog faces of hers.

She peeked his lips and jumped out of his lap and hurried to the door.

"How is my friend?"
"He is more than fine!" grinning.
"You didn't eat him."
"Slowly and steadily Bro!" exiting from the room.

Vivaan started to close the door when he was stopped by his sister's commanding ton.
"I will be back with my book! Don't close!"
"We have to work on a project Choti!"
"I know I will not disturb."
"Hmm Ok! You aren't going to listen me."
"Correct!" turning back to her room and screamed "I'm getting the guest room ready! And I will come to your room!"
"Guest room? Oh! Okay okay!" he answered to his question understanding why.

Like she said, she went to the guest room which is the next room to hers, to get it ready before taking her iPod and her book, along with a juice pack and few snacks.
She entered Vivaan's room to find them concentrated, so made herself comfortable on the other side of the king size bed after putting all the items except iPod and book on the table.
The boys turned to acknowledge her presence and went back to their work.

Around 1 AM.
The partners stopped working and packed everything they have put around them.
Seeing this, Chakor got up and put the empty packets in trash can and went to her brother's closet, took a pair of black night pants and a loose white shirt.

"Are you going to wear that?" Vivaan enquired.
"Hahaha funny! It's for Suraj!" she said shyly the last part.
"Oh!" her brother exclaimed.
"I will show him the guest room!"
"Can I trust you with him?" enjoying the teasing session until he received a small punch from his friend.
"Whatever!" saying that she went out of the room with the dresses and her objects, waiting for Suraj.

Saying good night to his fried who is grinning ear to ear, he came out only to hear the door to be locked behind him.
"This way!" she said showing him the way.
He followed her and stopped before entering the room.
"Thanks!" he said laying his hand in front of her.
She took hold of his hand and pulled him inside before closing the door.

"I was asking for dresses!"
"Oh! I thought! Never mind!" brushing it off.
He opened the door and extended his hand.
She closed the door and put the clothes on the table near the bed and sat there.

"What is it?" he asked.
She patted the place near her.
He sat there waiting for her to say something but instead her head rested on his shoulder as her right fingers interwind with his left hand's ones, while her left hand played with their fingers.
"Can I sleep here?" hesitantly.
"No!" the first word he thought hearing her.
"Just sleep! Please!" lifting her head.
"No please!" shaking negatively his head.

"I hate you!"
"That's what I want!"
Freeing her fingers, she pushed him on the bed and rolled over him, coming face to face with him.
Pulling his hands around her waist, she started to trace his jawline with the back of her right hand.

"Get up Chakor!" trying his best to move her.
"Just 10 minutes and I will go!" she made herself comfortable with her head over his chest and her hand over his hair and left check.

Hearing his heartbeat, she said:
"I so want to be like this forever and ever."
He smiled, taking his right hand from her back to her head.
"Chakor"
"Hmmm"
"Can I ask you something?"
"Hmmm"
"In school"
"I will be just your student." she completed.
"We can't go out now. I want you to"
"Finish my studies and be a good girl."
He smiled and added "What do you want to study?"
"Before answering to your question, I need to know when will I get to see you or talk to you as yourself and not my teacher?"
"Once I talk to your parents!"
"When?" lifting her head from his chest.
"The sooner."
"Oh! And by the way I think I will become a Chemistry teacher!"
"Is it because of me?"
"No! I always wanted to!"
"Okay! What about Maths?"
"I love Maths but Chemistry is my favourite!" grinning she added "When we do biology we will make little little CheMath."

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Let me know if there is any loopholes!
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Next part: Part 10

- Maithili

Edited by maithu_ - 8 years ago

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