New FF ISHQBAAZ/DBO( chapter-10(a) on page 10 on 11/06/2017)

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Hey guys i am starting a new ff .
here is prologue

Point of view of shivaay

"sab haath se chuth raha hai mera Om udhar mandap mai betha hai shaadi ke liya aur mai yaha khade hoke sirf dekh raha hoon use is shaddi mai dhakelne wala mai tha maine waada kiya tha use mai use iss shadi se bachaunga par kaise kuch samaaz mai nahi araha hai kya karu pehli baar haathon se saab chuth raha hai pehli baar khudko itna bebas mehsus kar raha hun .3 mihino se hum saab swethlana ki sachaai janne ki koshish kar rahe the par vo itni shatir nikli kuch bhi nahi mila."

Point of view of Rudra

"mera o paraya dhaan ho raha hai aur mai bas dekh raha hun kuch nahi kar pa raha hun kaash aj anika bhabhi yaha hoti to to unke khidki tod dimaag se jarrur kuch idea nikal ata.vo o ki shaadi us sultana se kabhi hone nahi deti. Kya karu...

Point of view of daadi

"hai bhagwaan kaise din deekha rahe ho mere baache ko bachalo aj mera billu bhi kuch kar nahi pa raha hai. Kash anika yaha hoti meri bahun jarur kuch karti."

so above is prologue if u like it i will continue. this is my first attempt.


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Posted: 8 years ago
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awesome yaar
please continue and update next part
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Posted: 8 years ago
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hey guys thank u for commenting here is first chap.

CHAPTER-1

One day before marriage

"Tum janti ho na Om ko ab us chudel, chant,cheapde Svetlana se sirf tum bacha sakti ho.tum hi meri akhri umid ho."

"Nahi didi hum yeh sab nahi kar sakat hai.mana ki hamari shaadi hui hai lekin vo saab bus mujhe un gawalonse bachane ke liye kiyi tai unhone wo yeh shadi nahi mante aur hum bhi apne apko unpar nahi thop sakte".

"Mujhe bas yeh jana hai ki kya tum yeh shaadi manti ho ya nahi.meri ankhon mai dekh ke bolo ha ya na?

"Ha didi hum yeh shaadi mante hai lekin vo humse nafrat karte hai.vo to hamari shakal bhi dekhna nahi chahte aur agar hum ab saab ke samne shaadi saach bata de to vo jata dhari hippi hamari jaan le lega aur paani takh nahi puchenga.mana ki hamne unse shaddi ki hai aur hame apne dil se apna pati mante hai lekin hame itni jaldi nahi marna abhi to hamari umar hi kya hai aur hame apni ma ke khatir bahot kuch karna hai.aur to aur hame apne chulbulse bhi milna hai."

"yeh chulbul kon hai?"

"Are aap chulbul ko nahi janti are apne dabang salman khan ji.hame to vo bade pasand hai hame na bas ek baar unse milna hai.hum bahot bade fan hai unke."

"Haan yeh baat sahi kahi tumne kitna hansome hai na mai bhi use milna chati hu kaash yeh baadgad bille se milne se pehle meri life kitni acchi thi waha sirf main aur mera salman the.vo bhi kya din the vo roj mere sapno mai ata tha hum dono milke munni badnaam hui pe dance karte the lekin aab us baaga billene hamari neend uda di hai ankhe band kare to vahi najar ata hai ankhen kholo to vahi dikhta mera bagad billa haiii"

"Attention gauri didi aur meri baagad bille jiju ke khayalon mai khone vaali anika didi jara apne sapno ki duniyase bahar ayengi hame Om bhayya ki shaadi rukvani hai uspe dhyan dijiye"

"sorry sahil hame maaf kardo" ani and gauri both said at same time making puppy faces.

Anika "to bataon gauri tum kaal mera saath dogi ya nahi.dekho muje tumhara chulbul ka saach pehlen hi saab pata tha phir bhi maine kisi kuch nahi kaha mai bus yeh ki kaal bas jake bol do ki tum Om ki patni ho and phir Om aur Svetlana ki shaadi tut jayegi."

"Dekhiye didi main apke liyen kuch bhi karongi lekin apko hame marna hai to ase hi maar daliyen naa us jata dhari ke haton kyun marvane pai tuli hai kaal vo hame dekte hi hamper pai tut padega hame to yeh kene ka mauka bhi nahi dega ki hamari shaadi hui hai."

"Dekho mai tumhare saath hun mujhe apne devar pe pura vishwaas hai vo tumhe marega to bilkul nahi plz haan aol do aur ek baar shaadi tuti tum apne raaste aur Om apne.plz ha bol do plz."anika said to gauri by making puppy face.

After looking anika anika gauri can't said no yaar

"thik hai hum kaal apke saath ayenge"

"anika thank u gauri."anika hug gauri and thinks in mind (tumhe mai tumhari asli jaga dila ke rahungi gauri main janti hun ki kaal jab tum Oberoi mension mai jaogi jarur par vaapis mai ane nahi dungi mai tumhe aur OM ko ek karke rahungi yeh mera vaada hai akhir mai bhi ASSO hun.looking towards sahil both do thums up to each other.)

plz give u r comment and tell me if there is need to improve something i am trying my best so enjoy waiting for u r comment

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Wow funny convo btwn
Gauri n Anika
Love their bonding
Chotu shahil so cute
U didnt mentioned that u have updated new chapter
Next tum when u update new chapter mention it in title
Like new chap added date n all
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Posted: 8 years ago
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nice i like it ... update soon and send on PM pls
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Note:
Hey guys thank u for ur support and ur special comment which motivate me to write this ff. Soon I am going to update.
Hey and I want u r opinion for next chapter actually u all read first chapter where it become comedy .so I want to know that u want a comedy ff like u read in first chap or a serious one plz tell me.
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Mix of both
Otherwise funny
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Posted: 8 years ago
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nice story dear.
i hope gauri is able to keep that swetlana away from om.
do continue soon
i think it should be a mix of comedy and serious
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Thank u guys for u r response here is the next chap hope u all like it.plz if u want to give any suggestion plz tell me.

CHAPTER-2

Aj oberoi mansion bilkul dulhan ki tarha saja hua tha lekin iss gharke saabhi log bas apne hi dhun mai khoye hue the kisi ke bhi chehare par kushi nahi the.pata nahi yaha ek ajeeb si shanti chai hui thi mano kisi tuffan kea ne ka sandesha de rahi ho.wahi teen log dulhe ko dekh apne hi khayalon mai khoye hue the.

Point of view of shivaay

"sab haath se chuth raha hai mera Om udhar mandap mai betha hai shaadi ke liya aur mai yaha khade hoke sirf dekh raha hoon use is shaddi mai dhakelne wala mai tha maine waada kiya tha use mai use iss shadi se bachaunga par kaise kuch samaaz mai nahi araha hai kya karu pehli baar haathon se saab chuth raha hai pehli baar khudko itna bebas mehsus kar raha hun .3 mihino se hum saab swethlana ki sachaai janne ki koshish kar rahe the par vo itni shatir nikli kuch bhi nahi mila."

Point of view of Rudra

"mera o paraya dhaan ho raha hai aur mai bas dekh raha hun kuch nahi kar pa raha hun kaash aj anika bhabhi yaha hoti to to unke khidki tod dimaag se jarrur kuch idea nikal ata.vo o ki shaadi us sultana se kabhi hone nahi deti. Kya karu??idea!!! he goes from there.

Point of view of daadi

"hai bhagwaan kaise din deekha rahe ho mere baache ko bachalo aj mera billu bhi kuch kar nahi pa raha hai. Kash anika yaha hoti meri bahun jarur kuch karti."

Tabhi waha light chali jati hai aur thodi der baad vapis a jati hai.

No one point of view

Pandit:ab dulha aur dulhan pheron ke liye khade ho jaye.

Tabhi vaha ek ladka chillate hue ata hai nahi yeh shaddi nahi ho sakti.

All turns towards the door all are shocked to looking at the boy because he is none other than our chulbul.

Svetlana:how dare u chulbul tumhari himmat kaise hui meri shaadi rokne ki?

Chul:are madam ji ihi shaadi nahi ho sakat hai kyunki omkara ji pehle se hi shaddi shuda hai to vo dusri shadi nahi kar sakat hai.

All are shocked

Svetlana:what rubbish .

Shivaay:fhat the wack.

Rudra:hawww o to pehle hi paraya dhaan nikle!!!

Daadi:hey bhagwan.

Pinky:oh my mata.

Tej,janvi,Shakti and prinku all are just shocked.

Chul:ha madamji hum sahi keh rahe hai.

Svetlana:kise hui hai shadi.

Chul:mujhse

All at same time fhat the wack even Svetlana.

Rudra:dekha ma maine apko bola than a ma ka laadla bigad gaya kaha mai sundarsi chulbulisi bhabhi ka intjaar kar raha tha aur kaha o chulbulse chulbul jija leke aye.but don't worry o I am with u.

All at same time shut up rurda

Pinky:yeh to ho na hi tha beti ki shaadi ki umar mai agar baap ishq laadane lage to beta haathonse nikal hi jata hai.

Daadi:pinky chup karo.

Janvi:om yeh saab kya hai.

Tej:omkara tumne mujhe kahi muh dikhane ke layak nahi choda.

Svetlana:how dare u om tumne is ladke ke liye mujhe dokha diya.ab mai tumhe nahi chodungi.

Tej:( amusingly saach mai omkara ki shaadi hui hai yani ab Svetlana meri ho sakti hai)

chul: ek jhaap mai saat jai be deewar pai hum ladke nahi ladki hai.gauri kumara sarma panchvi pass from barely.

All gets shocked listening gauris word tej somewhat scared listening gauri's dialogue.

Rudra:are tum to wo womaniyan ho jo boldojar chadaye car pe ek jhaap mai dushman Saturday jaain oberoi mension nki deewar pai and he deed his logic wala sign.

Shivaay:by the way it's not sarma it's sharma.

Gauri :hum vahi to bole saaarma.

Shivaay:just leave it par mai nahi manta ki tumhari shaadi om se hui hai saboot kya hai tumhare pass?

Gauri:saboot to khud hamare patiparmeshwar hai kyun jata dhari hippi hum sahi kehrahe hai na?

Rudra:what ja...jata dhari hippi yeh koun hai?

Gauri:are pagal chirote tumhre bhayya omkara vo kya haina hum pyaar se unhe jata dhari hippi bulate hai.

All at same time looking towards om bolo om kya ye saach bol rahi hai

Shivaay:tu kuch kyun nahi bol raha?

Suddenly someone said from behind kyunki om waha nahi hai

All turn towards the voice all at same time kyaaa?

this is litte bit boring but i promise u next one is going to be blast.

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Dudeee!!! Hillariously hiallarious!!!

Awesome attempt!!!

Update soonish!

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