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Posted: 8 years ago
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Dyuti lovd ur write ups
Being a raglak fan also luvd ur writing bout Swasan coz its so unique and so deep
Plz update
Coz I also hv interst in reading books a lot and Seems lyke u want to be a writer
Plz update soon and pm me
Would love to read nd learn things
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Originally posted by: ShikhaAgrawal

Dyuti lovd ur write ups
Being a raglak fan also luvd ur writing bout Swasan coz its so unique and so deep
Plz update
Coz I also hv interst in reading books a lot and Seems lyke u want to be a writer
Plz update soon and pm me
Would love to read nd learn things



Dear Shikha,
I'm really humbled by your comment. I know you're a crazy Raglakian still you dropped by. My other story is not very pleasant for you guys. But in this one Sahil is the bad guy, so no disturning element foryou.

Don't embarrass me by saying I want to be a writer. This one is my 2nd attempt. Just yesterday I was bashed in left, right and center in wattpad for my other FF (she was right though, initial chapters had many mistakes). Writing is my hobby.

Thanks a lot again for your sweet comments.❤️

Love,
Dyuti
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Posted: 8 years ago
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No dyuti well I dont mind even if any of the raglak being negative also
Well I knw ke these r ol fictions and nothing is for real nd ur not talking bout temish ur talking bout raglak so would luv to read and dont worry yaar I lv to write and to read I judge smbody on purly writings nothing else if if the person is my truest frnd I give a truthful anwer so that person should improve(this is the quality of a true frnd I suppose)
So go ahead and I m not tooo much into this fan war u can ask to soumi or sakz or harsha or tani or nivjo from ur fd
I dont lyke this fumingness unneccesaryly and foul language
So thats why me and Sakz r frnds
And now u also
So dont worry people just knw how to bash (watappad) dont knw how to motivate
Well u write even if raglak are negative
Would luv to read
Ur User Nami is too good
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Originally posted by: ShikhaAgrawal

No dyuti well I dont mind even if any of the raglak being negative also
Well I knw ke these r ol fictions and nothing is for real nd ur not talking bout temish ur talking bout raglak so would luv to read and dont worry yaar I lv to write and to read I judge smbody on purly writings nothing else if if the person is my truest frnd I give a truthful anwer so that person should improve(this is the quality of a true frnd I suppose)
So go ahead and I m not tooo much into this fan war u can ask to soumi or sakz or harsha or tani or nivjo from ur fd
I dont lyke this fumingness unneccesaryly and foul language
So thats why me and Sakz r frnds
And now u also
So dont worry people just knw how to bash (watappad) dont knw how to motivate
Well u write even if raglak are negative
Would luv to read
Ur User Nami is too good



Dear Shikha,
I always love sane fans. Happy to meet one more in you.I was never into fan wars. In fact I found them silly and entertaining at the same time!
In ZvT I enjoyed writing Raglak's characters as they had vulnerable sides though they were villain.In this FF too Lucky'll have a strong role, even if he won't be mentoned too frequently.I'm still confused what role should I select for Ragini.

And I took that bashing positively.Surely I'll thank her one day. ( My Wattpad version is already better because I edited the mistakes )

I discovered IF when I was a crazy Maneet fan.I used to read their all FFs. As I never planned to comment or write any FF, hence my username is like that. My first post was in Nimmi's thread, first PM to Shruti. Then gradually made few friends. As I do a lots of bakbak, I hope to shove myself down your throat very soon! 😆


Love,
Dyuti
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Well dyuti my mouth is waiting to gulp u down baby just be my maincource
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Sorry girls for lthe late update yet I couldn't edit it.Crazy week it was.I hope you'll ignore them kindly.


2.When you're looking like that



Kaleidoscope of memoirs : Reflections

"Shonaa!Mujhe rona aaraha hai!"Laksh whined,as the hair stylist wrapped his body from shoulder with a piece of cloth.He had to go to the men's salon for chopping off his hairs following their classes . Dhruv had reminded him again during the lunch break.Swara and Nikhil tagged along,to give him moral support.

" Such a crybaby you are! Whining as if someone have stolen your favourite candy! Arey! Don't start again yaar !My ears are almost bleeding cause of you! Think about my feelings too! I still can't decide should I laugh at you, cry over our shitty day or shout in anger?"

"Wow! Perks of having a crazy girl as BFF!? Lucky kitne lucky hai!Do one thing! Do your Bharatanatyam or Bhangra over here! "Lucky said sarcastically as he swivelled around his chair.

Nikhil adjusted his glasses and and started, "Oye! Stop calling my sis crazy! And what's the fuss about your hair huh? They were being thoughtful,if you ask my opinion. At least you'll look decent,not like a punk.. You have that kind of appearance only right now! Stubborn guy! Why were you so adamant about that song? Pehle din se hi woh log se panga lene ki kya jarurat thi? "

"You Phattu!Scaredy cat! Don't make me open my mouth!"Laksh looked angry, "I'm not hypocrite like you, got it? My words are my oath and I mean them!... Now showing so much love for sister!What were you doing, when that Sanskar..."

"SHUT UP! Woh naam mat le Lucky!"Swara's eyes were spitting fire, "Bloody rogue! Ullu ke patthe! Stupid monkey face! Because of him my first day at college was a nightmare!"

"Aww! nicknames for him already,ha?Not bad!But seriously... You always had a long queue of admirers behind you. What's the big deal? At least this guy can match you in hotness!" Laksh smirked,
" Saara zamaanaa..
Haseenon ka deewana...
Shona kahe phir kyun...
Bura hai dil lagaana!
Ouch!" He sang in his horrible voice when Swara hit him with a hair brush .

"Et tu Brutus?Here I was mourning over the impending death of your hair and you're making fun of me?"Swara said angrily, her arms were crossed against her chest.

"Sorry yaar! To tell the truth I'm a bit grateful.Because of him I was saved from singing that disastrous song! Behna!Ewww!!" Laksh shuddered,

"Grateful my foot!You'll eat your words tomorrow when your dreamgirl will escape after watching your almost shaved head. Aur Mera bhai Phattu? What are you ? Superhero?Oh puh-lease! As always this Swara Singhania came to your rescue from those jerks! "Swara tauntingly replied.

"Don't remind me again yaar!Main loot gaya, barbad ho gaya!My hair Shona!MY HAIR! I'll definitely look like a joker tomorrow!"Laksh again started to whine!

Swara was furious on those guys!She was very protective of her best friend since their high school days. She could get the cause of his aversion. When she and her cousin Nikhil met him for the first time during their 5th grade, Laksh was a shy,studious boy with big glasses and cropped hair. He often got bullied a lot, and Swara due to her inherent nature turned to be his saviour and later best ever buddy. During 8th grade, the bullying got worse. Some boys who were jealous of Laksh for his friendship with Swara, physically assaulted him and mocked him in front of whole school. He was deeply traumatised from the event. Since then Swara had taken the charge of his grooming into a dashing youth.

"Already you're a joker, with or without hair! Don't be stressed about it! But I'll never forgive those guys. They dared to mess with me, forced their will on you, just because they could!" She looked at hairstylist, "Anyways..Let's get this done Joe! I think leave at least 2 inch longer hair at the top. Then trim the sides and back. His spikes will be still visible this way. So..."

"Sweety,you never disappoint me with your ideas!" Joe gave a satisfied smile, " If you weren't into architecture I would've suggested you to be a fashion stylist. You know,for models and actors?"

"Naah Joe! Wrong advice! She can be a model or heroine herself, even without any styling for her! Why she should waste her time for some... JOKERS" Swara turned abruptly only to clash into someone's rock hard chest,who steadied her by holding her arms. She looked up only to face that familiar face.

"YOU? What are you doing here?"She yelled, finding a mesmerized Sanskar who was looking at her infuriated face in amusement, with his keen dark chocolate eyes.

"Excuse me!I should ask this question, not you! For your kind information, this is a men's salon. Or was Joe so impressed that he gave you a job, sweetheart?" He smirked having noticed the cute little red nose and those honey brown fiery eyes.

" Leave me, you idiot! And I'm not your sweetheart!" She sounded irritated. Sanskar stepped back and pouted as if he had to do the most unpleasant work just now.

"Better! Now ask them for whatever you've come here... And please leave!" She still watched him in suspicion.

Sanskar started singing leaving everyone around him surprised
"How am I supposed to leave you now
When you're looking like that?
I can't believe what I just gave away
Now I can't take it back.
I don't wanna get lost
I don't wanna live my life without you
How am I supposed to leave you now
When you're looking like that?"


As soon as he started singing Swara recalled the morning incident with horror and stepped back.Nikhil and Lucky came forward this time ready to intervene if needed.

" Don't trouble my Sister, we ...we won't... tolerate it every time!" Nikhil confronted Sanskar in a shaky voice.

"Hey it's my salon! Not a high school musical guys! You're wasting my time during the peak hours!" Joe seemed dismayed, especially noticing Laksh still wearing that protective cover.

"Haan Sir, why you try to flaunt your cultural talents whenever you meet her? First time poetry, now song, next time what? Drama?" Laksh tried to look stern, but he was getting curious inwardly.

"What can you expect from a habitual flirt like him Lucky? And what next time?" Swara again threatened him pointing her finger towards him, " Listen Mr Whatever you are... Dare you mess with me again or you'll see the worst of me!"


Sanskar thought, "I'd love to see the worst of you... Sherni Shona!" But instead said, " But you bring the best of me,sweetheart!I decided to give someone happiness. Sorry Joe! You'll lose a customer today!"

"Indeed we'll be happy if you leave today,Sir!"Swara sighed in relief.

Sanskar grinned, " Who told you I'm leaving? Mr joker, you can keep your precious hair!"Swara was going to say something but Laksh jumped out of excitement."Thank you Bro! Thanks a lot!"He was so relieved that he didn't mind Sanskar calling him a joker.

Swara didn't wait for a second more. "I'm leaving guys!Lucky, aana hai to aaja nahi to raat me yaha pe hi so jana." She rushed towards the exit but stopped for a while. She turned back and glanced straight into Sanskar's eyes. "Thanks... But please, don't call him joker next time." she smiled.

Sanskar ran his fingers through his hair and replied a playful manner, "If this brings out your lovely smile more often,then fair enough! It's a deal.No one will trouble these two,it's Sanskar Maheshwari's promise."

"Thanks again. And goodbye!"Swara couldn't find any words at that moment. No longer Sanskar was some the mean bully in her eyes, her perception had gradually changed over last few minutes.

He let out as if he had heard her inner thoughts, "Swara, I'm not that bad as a person. But you're really bad in giving names. Bloody rogue, Ullu ke patthe, stupid monkey face,pathological flirt... all are misfit. Better luck next time! Or perhaps you should stick to Sanskar only!"

She left the salon not wanting to face him.How embarrassing for her and how mean of him! That guy had the gall of eavesdropping on their conversation! The boys quickly followed her.

Sanskar shaking his head was about to take a seat, when Laksh came back running.
"Flirt kar ke kuch nahi hone wala!The methods you've tried previously with other girls won't work for her! Jyada karo ge toh thappad padne ka chance hai!"


"Are you giving me tips or threats? Jealous much,Lucky boy?"Sanskar sneered, "Why should I answer you? Are you his boyfriend ?" He was back to his arrogant avatar but inside he was tensed to know what would be his reply. Sanskar,himself was being green with envy whenever he noticed their great bonding. Irony of his question!

"Keep this attitude in your pocket Bro. Stay in good terms with me, way to Shona's heart will be closer by default! Consider yourself Lucky, cause Lucky likes you!" Laksh bragged, holding his own collar.Then he whispered, "You were awesome this morning. Any other girl would've agreed to even marry you let alone fall in love!"


Sanskar's lips curled upwards,eyes had a faraway look,almost dreamy."She is different!That's why probably for the first time ever in my life I'm being drawn towards a girl. Time will tell me should I travel down that road or not."



Present: Some relations cross trial of fire

"Shona!" Laksh shouted from the doorstep. "How could you? Don't you understand how much pain we feel when you utter those words? For once think about the emotions of your friends your family. If not anyone else, at least try to think about Sanskar Jeeju! He's on the verge of breaking down.For God's sake don't tear him apart !"

"Ussi ki liye hi to keh rahi hoon!Lucky, I beg you!Khud mar dal mujhe ya zeher leke aa! I can't handle this pain anymore!"she was screaming in physical pain and anguish.Sanskar held her shaking body with his both arms from back.

"Shhh Shona! Not one more word! Enough rubbish was said for one day!You've to live... and fight only because I'll there for you."He tried to calm down an agitated Swara who was squirming in his arms. Soon she felt drowsy as the Morphine injected earlier gradually started its effect on her.

He laid her on bed and removed the bed sheet over her face . Doctors said any clothing shouldn't touch the wound. But in the process the sweet lover inside him turned into a Demon vying for blood. His eyes reflected both tears and flares. Laksh put a hand on his shoulder,
"Jiju, please come out. I've something very important to talk with you."

Sanskar and Laksh came outside of her cabin, thunders covered their once brightened face. Sanskar couldn't hold himself anymore. He sat on a bench and broke down.
"What was her fault Lucky?Why destiny gave those most blissful days if it had planned for a living hell for us? I can't see her this way Lucky... I can't see her!"

Lucky immediately sat down and held his collar, "Are you planning to ditch her Jeeju? Are you saying you can't stand her burnt face? Dare you hurt Shona like that or I'll kill that Sahil first, then you! She deserves better than some coward guy."He growled in a dangerous voice.

Sanskar couldn't bear his accusatory tone,"Stop!How could you think me as someone that shallow, haan? How could you assume I'll leave her?I can't see her writhing in pain, wailing in despair...and you thought... I can't even dream of doing that to her... to us! Even if she wants that!"

Laksh held his hands immediately. He was moved, seeing the depth of Sanskar's emotions and... also embarrassed," Sorry Jeeju! Pagal ho gaya tha main... Nahi to aapko kaise galat samajh kar baitha! Sorry, I was afraid for Shona that's why..."

Sanskar smiled a little, for the first time after that incident. "Crazy guy! Shona was right about you! Nautanki! But I'm happy... Fate snatched her everything but at least was kind enough to leave a lucky charm for her, her best friend Lucky! Who have guts to threaten the Sanskar Maheshwari! Anyway, why did you call me outside?"

"It's about that b******d, Sahil Sengupta."Lucky's voice had a serious undertone

Sanskar felt that his whole body and mind caught on a fire. "Don't tell me he's still roaming free after destroying my Shona's life ! I'll not spare the police force if-"

"He has been caught Jeeju. You've called to the police station for identification."Laksh cut him in between, trying his best not to lose his cool.

So after half an hour they were seen in Andheri Police station, in front of lockup. The officer in charge asked a constable to open the lock.

"Dekh lijiye Mr Maheshwari. Is he the same man who threw acid on your fiance?" the officer asked pointing towards a man who stood facing the wall.

"Yes Mr Maheshwari. Gaur se dekhiye!"Sahil turned, sneering in victory, "Am I the same man, who had turned your fiance's once upon a time beautiful face so ugly that even you can't bear to look at?"

And that's it! Sanskar couldn't control himself anymore."YOU BLOODY SON OF B*****H!"He growled and punched on Sahil's nose, causing him to bleed. Sahil still had a crooked smirk on his lips which brought in another powerful punch, now the angle of his mouth was cracked and bleeding. Sanskar now pounced for his throat, but the constable and Laksh dragged him away, out of the lockup.

ACP Gautam Solanki was furious. "Mr Maheshwari!Control yourself! You're here to punish him for his crime. Not to become a murderer yourself! So, was he the one?"His voice became sympathetic as he noticed Sanskar closed his eyes in pain.

Sanskar still was shaking in rage. He nodded. "Yes, Officer. He was the one. Will you give me 5 minutes? I want to talk with this scoundrel...Don't worry.I'll stay outside."

ACP Solanki left with Laksh to finish the legal formalities . Sanskar turned to face Sahil again. He still had a devilish smirk , giving a damn about his wound.
"Was that a revenge,Sanskar? Then sorry to say you couldn't defeat me. I won this time and didn't let you win Swara too!"He wiped the blood dripping from his nose and mouth with the back of his hand.

"You ask for revenge? Be careful what you wish for. You'll beg for death!You'll suffer! You'll repent the day you dared to mess with my Shona's life. I'll return the pain you have caused her, with interest thousand times more! And you're talking about winning? My Shona is not a trophy for anyone to win! Insaan hai woh! Tere jaise janwar nahi!"Sanskar conveyed all his hatred as he threatened him in a low voice.

"Right! Woh toh aab trophy kehne ka layek bhi nehi! Tsk tsk Sanskar! For her we all were crazy,weren't we? Kitna khush tha tu, uss par apna haq jatake? What did you used to call her? Princess? Kuch fayda hua?
Jala diya na maine? Tere sapne, tere pyaar, tere ex fiancee Swara ko?" Sahil again tried to hurt his already wounded heart.

"Khabardar Sahil. Don't you dare take her name by your filthy, gutter mouth!" Sanskar clenched his teeth. "What do you think you can destroy her life? Or break our marriage? Sorry to disappoint you. My Swara is still precious... both inside and outside. Aur jalane ki baat kiya na? Dekh le na,ek din havan kund jalake agni ko sakshi maan kar woh meri zindagi roshan karegi. And you? I'll make sure you'll never come out of this darkness!"

Sahil laughed like a maniac."You can't keep me behind bars for long Mr Maheshwari! I'm not just any other Tom,Dick or Harry!How long that ACP are going to keep the owner of Sengupta industries? Today or tomorrow I'll come out!"

Sanskar turned to leave but not before giving a final threat"Oh believe me Mr Sengupta! Pray that you can stay inside! For that's how you're going to get the least amount of torture!"

Swara woke up to see a bouquet of white carnations,and a card on it. It read...

"I want nothing more
than to align my body
with yours.
lips to lips.
scars to scars.
pulse to pulse.
just let me."*


Dear Shona,
You know what is the hidden message behind white carnations? They transpire good luck and pure love.I want to give my entire share of good fortune to you, at this moment you need it more than anyone... You know I've been loving you since forever and will continue to do so. Perhaps you need these flowers to remind you my love is not like some candy floss that vanishes in the thin air in an instant when someone tries to engulf it.

These flowers are not a bunch of white carnations,rather my share of good luck and a desperate attempt to prove my undying love for you!

Forever yours,
Your would be husband
Sanskar



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Edited by iamreader - 8 years ago
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Res
And I finally unres.

What I liked in this chapter is the way you are building up the narrative - the distant past (by way of flashback) and the present tale slowly leading to the point where they merge and we learn as to why exactly Sahil committed that atrocity.


I cannot forgive him and while I do admire Sanskaar and his deep potent adoration for Swara, I can somehow connect more with Swara. Despite knowing how deeply and irrevocably Sanskaar loves her, it must be difficult for her to accept him when she cannot face herself.

The physical injuries are debilitating but the psychological scars must be killing her. And at this point she is too distraught to even hear that both her friend and her lover would always be there for her.

Looking forward to updates.

love,
Nyna
Edited by Nynaeve - 8 years ago
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Hi Dyuti,

HAPPY VALENTINE'S DAY

well this was VALENTINE'S DAY TREAT...I have my break time right now in my coaching...
between those irritating physics problems😭...and stupid conversations of my friends over valentine's day😡 I am reading this...it refereshed my mind otherwise I was so irritated with this stupid derivations and utter nonsense discussion going on here about choclate...teddy...flowers...and what not...uggghh😭
leave it...coming to the chapter...its really heart touching😭...U have described every emotion wonderfully👏...I wish everyvictim of inhuman acts🤬 like acid attack,rape,physical or mental abuse...every SWARA may get a SANSKAR for her...to love her unconditionally...love is not about choclates ...teddies...gifts...etc...
Ita about undying LOVE...SUPPPORT...TRUST...on each other...love should not be celeberated only one day... its a feeling to be cherrished and treasured till eternity...

that's it for the day,
SHRUTI(waiting for ZvsT)





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Dyuti 😃
Once again a beautifully written update 👏
Swara is miserable 😭,Sahil😡
Admiring our Sanskaar more & more😳
Eagerly Waiting for ZVST !!
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Originally posted by: shruti_pakki

Hi Dyuti,


HAPPY VALENTINE'S DAY

well this was VALENTINE'S DAY TREAT...I have my break time right now in my coaching...
between those irritating physics problems😭...and stupid conversations of my friends over valentine's day😡 I am reading this...it refereshed my mind otherwise I was so irritated with this stupid derivations and utter nonsense discussion going on here about choclate...teddy...flowers...and what not...uggghh😭
leave it...coming to the chapter...its really heart touching😭...U have described every emotion wonderfully👏...I wish everyvictim of inhuman acts🤬 like acid attack,rape,physical or mental abuse...every SWARA may get a SANSKAR for her...to love her unconditionally...love is not about choclates ...teddies...gifts...etc...
Ita about undying LOVE...SUPPPORT...TRUST...on each other...love should not be celeberated only one day... its a feeling to be cherrished and treasured till eternity...

that's it for the day,
SHRUTI(waiting for ZvsT)







Dear Shruti,

HAPPY VALENTINES DAY to you too. I can remember my younger years when we had a lot of silly conversations regarding these stuffs. But when I got into a relationship and later married him, never got a chance or gave much thought to celebrate this date in 8 years. So I'm on the same boat.

I wish the update could be better! Last few days I read many articles regarding acid attack survivors. They were so heart wrenching that I couldn't stop crying and felt emotionally drained. At one stage I turned the pictures off in my browser settings. My characters' emotions will be therefore true, straight from the bottom of my heart.If you feel Swasan or Lucky's emotions can't touch you, that would be purely my lack of ability to express in words.

Love is not only teddies, chocolates or flowers. Or according to Sanskar it is not like a candy floss. and there are Sanskars in real world though they're less in number. We should salute them on this valentines day for they show what lover rwally can do.

Love,
Dyuti

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