Thou art flame, my love : Chapter 6; P-20

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Posted: 8 years ago

#51

Originally posted by: kriti_atharv
omg...so she went through an acid attack...awww sooo emmotional but a very relevant topic...cant wait to read further!! thnx frnd pm hun!!

Dear Kriti,
Yes the topics will bring a lot of emotions and show the struggle. SwarA will rise as a survivor.

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Dyuti

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Posted: 8 years ago

#52

Originally posted by: Nivijo
Hey dyuti. How z u? Long time since I have come in the forum. A wonderful yet heart wrenching story of swasan who have a lot of hurdles in their love. Love their flashback. I am not much into poems. They're beyond my understanding level😆.
It must be traumatic journey for the girls who are a victim of acid attack. People's taunts and family's sympathetic attitude makes them feel helpless. But glad that sanskar stood for swara like a hard rock. ' Sometimes the two people who are truly best for each other will have to face greater obstacles in order to be with each other '.
This sahil, Iwould love to use all the good adjectives on him😡😡. I think there's another story behind it. Was it a love triangle where swasan where in love with each other and sahil, who was either swara's or sanskar's classmate, who also loved or to say was obsessed with swara. The feeling of not getting swara made him do like this, I believe.
But would leave it upon you. I would love to read what happened actually. And congrats too. Just saw your story ZvT on FB.

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Nivi

Dear Nivi,
At first I can't help myself to make you understand the poem. Here Sanskar expressed when his music (Swara) plays concord (piano), the lucky keys get the chance to kiss her fingers. Where he should get the chance instead and see her blushing. As piano keys are blessed and satisfied to kiss her hand. He demanded the piano keys can kiss the fingers, and he will kiss her lips. 😳 Not that hard, is it?

Acid attack victims... you said it all. Unfortunately in our subcontinent acid attack is burning issue.I recall few year back acid was easily available so there were many incidents happening around the country. Now the law is strict so occurrences are less than before. A coward's weapon it is.
How Sahil came into picture I'll describe it gradually.
About ZvT, it's now in 3 places. IF, wattpad, FB. But in IF responses r declining.
😭 I guess I've to buck up and write next chapter really well.

And congrats to you too.
😃

Love,
Dyuti

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Posted: 8 years ago

#53

Originally posted by: Esha012
awesome update

Hi Esha,
Thanks for dropping by and the compliment.

😊 😊

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Posted: 8 years ago

#54

Originally posted by: MusicAddict
Beautiful update Dyuti!
I just can't wait to read more of this!!

Dear Sakshi,
Nice to see you here! I want to write the next chapter as early as I can!

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Posted: 8 years ago

#55

Originally posted by: kritz4ever
Awesome update

Thanks dear! 😊

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Posted: 8 years ago

#56

Dear Dyuti,

I am finally back - God - it feels good to be back at the Forum.

I loved the title - even though it does not actually indicate who the "flame" is, it evokes an irresistible imagery - I have always associated Sanskaar with the fire element so there was an instant connect (apart from the very visible SwaSan😊)

I think I was a little lucky, as I read the prologue and chapter 1 together, so did not have to bother guessing what Sahil had done to Swara and why she refuses to face Sanskaar.

That was a heinous and diabolical act, an act of great cowardice. (acid is corrosive, it simply eats away the tissue it comes into contact with - I still remember, in school, we would identify nitric acid by simply closing the test tube with our thumbs and giving the tube a shake, if your skin turned yellow, it was surely nitric acid - those chemical tests were not reliable, we felt. But the Gods help us if we were caught, all those acids were mild, but still our teacher would have thrashed us. And yes, the impact of concentrated acid in unimaginable).

It is heinous because apart from the physical disfigurement and the accompanying pain, the psychological scarring is damaging. Facing the mirror is frightening and even if one is courageous to do so and is blessed with family and friends willing to be by your side, it is daunting to face the world. However unintentional it is, one would flinch when seeing a "disfigured" face and the "victim" is usually ultra sensitive. It is a long and scary battle for Swara.

Sanskaar is such a rare gem, he believes, no I think he embodies the thinking, that true love is what the soul feels and not what the eyes see. Agreed the initial attraction must have been based on her lovely smooth skin and beautiful eyes, he must have sung odes to her beauty but as love runs its course, they must have reached a stage where Sanskaar is unable to actually distinguish her physical beauty from the lovely heart she carries and the dazzling soul that she is. She needs to be reminded and convinced that she is what her soul and heart light in him and not her flawless skin that he must have loved.

But it is a delicate balance - he must not diminish her loss of beauty for then his love would be more of pity nor must he overlook her mourning for her disfigurement for that would be insulting her pain and fears. He has to convince her she can be beautiful and lovable even with all her scars, not despite them.

But he will do it, right - for his "love is a flame, neither timid nor tame" (no credit given, so I do not know who the author is).

And now to Sahil - can I have him slowly boiling in a mild solution (mild solution would enable a prolonged agony - no point killing him in one shot) of nitric acid alternating with sulphuric acid - for all eternity. And I hope that Laksh is a true friend here, a good, trusted and supportive one.

Take your time to update😉 (selfish me for it would give me breathing space to catch up with the other updates😆).

lots of love,

Nyna

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Posted: 8 years ago

#57

Originally posted by: Nynaeve
Dear Dyuti,
I am finally back - God - it feels good to be back at the Forum.

I loved the title - even though it does not actually indicate who the "flame" is, it evokes an irresistibleimagery - I have always associated Sanskaar with the fire element so there was an instant connect (apart from the very visible SwaSan😊)

I think I was a little lucky, as I read the prologue and chapter 1 together, so did not have to bother guessing what Sahil had done to Swara and why she refuses to face Sanskaar.

That was a heinous and diabolical act, an act of great cowardice. (acid is corrosive, it simply eats away the tissue it comes into contact with - I still remember, in school, we would identify nitric acid by simply closing the test tube with our thumbs and giving the tube a shake, if your skin turned yellow, it was surely nitric acid - those chemical tests were not reliable, we felt. But the Gods help us if we were caught, all those acids were mild, but still our teacher would have thrashed us. And yes, the impact of concentrated acid in unimaginable).

It is heinous because apart from the physical disfigurement and the accompanying pain, the psychologicalscarring is damaging. Facing the mirror is frightening and even if one is courageous to do so and is blessed with family and friends willing to be by your side, it is daunting to face the world. However unintentional it is, one would flinch when seeing a "disfigured" face and the "victim" is usually ultra sensitive. It is a long and scary battle for Swara.

Sanskaar is such a rare gem, he believes, no I think he embodies the thinking, that true love is what the soul feels and not what the eyes see. Agreed the initial attraction must have been based on her lovely smooth skin and beautiful eyes, he must have sung odes to her beauty but as love runs its course, they must have reached a stage where Sanskaar is unable to actually distinguish her physical beauty from the lovely heart she carries and the dazzling soul that she is. She needs to be reminded and convinced that she is what her soul and heart light in him and not her flawless skin that he must have loved.

But it is a delicate balance - he must not diminish her loss of beauty for then his love would be more of pity nor must he overlook her mourning for her disfigurement for that would be insulting her pain and fears. He has to convince her she can be beautiful and lovable even with all her scars, not despite them.

But he will do it, right - for his "love is a flame, neither timid nor tame" (no credit given, so I do not know who the author is).

And now to Sahil - can I have him slowly boiling in a mild solution(mild solution would enable a prolonged agony - no point killing him in one shot)of nitric acid alternating with sulphuric acid - for all eternity. And I hope that Laksh is a true friend here, a good, trusted and supportive one.

Take your time to update😉 (selfish me for it would give me breathing space to catch up with the other updates😆).

lots of love,
Nyna

Dear Nyna,

This was really a bold step for me, to attempt writing on a sensitive topic like this . The physical and psychological trauma an acid attack survivor goes though is unimaginable. I don't want to mess up this one. And I'll try to portray this with my heart. Still feeling nervous about this, I think you or Lucky could've excelled instead of me.

Who's the flame? Aah, that's some tricky question. It could be Sanskar, it could be Swara. .. or their love for each other is their flame. Not to mention both are burnt. One, by liquid flame, another by the flame of agony. ..

Oh don't worry! I'm definitely going slow. Updating 2 FFs alternatively. You'll get enough time. Also trying to edit the initial chapters of ZvT,they had lots of mistakes. Soon I'll post the edited chapters in IF.

How I missed your lovely thoughtful posts!
Love,
Dyuti

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Posted: 8 years ago

#58

Originally posted by: iamreader

Dear Nyna,

This was really a bold step for me, to attempt writing on a sensitive topic like this . The physical and psychological trauma an acid attack survivor goes though is unimaginable. I don't want to mess up this one. And I'll try to portray this with my heart. Still feeling nervous about this, I think you or Lucky could've excelled instead of me.

Who's the flame? Aah, that's some tricky question. It could be Sanskar, it could be Swara. .. or their love for each other is their flame. Not to mention both are burnt. One, by liquid flame, another by the flame of agony. ..

Oh don't worry! I'm definitely going slow. Updating 2 FFs alternatively. You'll get enough time. Also trying to edit the initial chapters of ZvT,they had lots of mistakes. Soon I'll post the edited chapters in IF.

How I missed your lovely thoughtful posts!
Love,
Dyuti

Dear Dyuti,

I am a sucker for happy endings (even my FM will have one😆😆) and I hate agony filled stories (have enough in reality😉) so I doubt if I could be able to tackle such a story line. You are doing a good job so just keep going.

I missed out in my earlier comment - I simply adore your titles,I have a title fetish (you must have guessed it by now😊) and I love the way you play on the words. As to who the flame is, despite both burning in different fires, I would think it is their love for each other for "love is a flame that burns everything but itself. It is the destruction of all that is false and the fulfilment of all that is true" (quote by Adyashanti)

love,

Nyna

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Posted: 8 years ago

#59

Originally posted by: Nynaeve

Dear Dyuti,

I am a sucker for happy endings (even my FM will have one😆😆) and I hate agony filled stories (have enough in reality😉) so I doubt if I could be able to tackle such a story line. You are doing a good job so just keep going.

I missed out in my earlier comment - I simply adore your titles,I have a title fetish (you must have guessed it by now😊) and I love the way you play on the words. As to who the flame is, despite both burning in different fires, I would think it is their love for each other for "love is a flame that burns everything but itself. It is the destruction of all that is false and the fulfilment of all that is true" (quote by Adyashanti)

love,
Nyna

Nyna dear,
When I started this one, I imagined you're chasing behind me with a knife in your hand! 😉 Scary, right! But the chapters are not going to be totally depressing. Their happy past will strike the balance. Titles... I'm a bit picky about them. I'm choosy about names of the characters too.
I'm assuring you, Swara will rise like a phoenix. And the quote was nice!

Love,
Dyuti