MANAN OS - EK VILLAN...LOVE STORY TO BE CONTINUED

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Posted: 8 years ago
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PROLOGUE
It's around 12:30 a.m. at night a girl is running down the street it seems as if she is running away from someone when she hears a loud screaming Noise from inside the nearby building. If they would have been a normal person instead of her she would have ran away but this fellow went inside showing her smartness... qnb curiosity that who is inside she got to check but what she saw was something which literallymade her blood evaporate from her veins...there it was...
Three men with surrounding a single person who was already begging them to release him... but they were too busy pointing their pistol at him...at without listening to his plea...they shot him...and the over smart girl who had sneeked in instead of keeping her over smart mouth close she screamed grabbing the attention all to herself ...all the goons had a critical look at nandini...
Nandini:(looking here and there) koun mein...are meine kuch nahi dekha(stumbling and terrified)...infact mein toh yaha huin hi nahi...yeh toh meri atma hai...
Nandini then putting her hands on her ear...
Nandini: ap sab logo ne suna...koi mujhe bula raha hai...ok see u later ...bye...
Nandini ran from there...
Goons: pakdo re ladki ko...
All the goons ran after nandini...
Nandini is running and after her three goons...nandini again and again is turning back and looking at them...when she suddenly striked to someone's bullet .the man is totally dressed up like a mafia member...it was non other than manik...
Manik put his bike on stand and asked nandini...
Manik: bola tha na akle nahi jane ko...
Nandini(first acting normally): han thik hai ab nahi jaungi...(Suddenly raising her voice) ap mujhe inse baccha...
Manik looking back of nandini...goons are coming towards nandini...
Manik again looking towards nandini...
Manik: han han jarur bachata lekin abhi mood nahi hai...
Manik stretched his hands up and got a jerk on his bullet...
Nandini: kya matlab mood nahi hai...tere mood ki toh aisi ki teise...tujhe maine hier kiya hai...
Manik: heir kiya hai toh kya hua...apun tera har kam nahi karega...ab yeh jo raita tumne failaya hai usse tu hich saaf kar...
Nandini: please help kar do na( making a cute puppy face)
Manik: achha thik hai par yeh heroin mafik moh nahi bananeka...
Sun meri ek sarth hai...
Nandini: sarth...are sarth ko maar goli...
Manik: toh ja phir nahi bachaunga...
Nandini: accha thik hai agree karti huin...chal ab toh mar salon kon...
Manik: accha...
Manik stands on his bullet...
Manik: aye ...dont angry me...
Nandini pulling manik down...
Nandini: yeh films ke superhit dialouge mat maro...woh tumpe shuit nahi karta...ab jao ...
Goons see manik. .
Goons: are manik bhai...bhago bhago...
All of the goons ran away...
Nandini isseen relieved...
Nandini: hash...
Nandini going infront of manik...
Nandini: dekha ...bagha diya na unhe...
Manik : han ab chalo...
Manik took nandini with him ...
So guys yeh tha prologue...jab prologue hi itna dhasu tha...toh story kaisa hoga...jarur batayeye ki apko prologue kaisa lag...I am waiting...dont forget to comment...
Edited by MadhusmitaMm - 8 years ago

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Interesting...
Wanna know what Manik sarth...
But love this Manan...
Continue soon...eagerly waiting...
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Nandini... Aww...I love her foolish n innocent character... Manik is mafia...good... But what will be Manik's condition...
Cont soon.
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Amazinggg prologue
Thnx for pm me
Continue soon
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Awesome prologue
Loved it...
nandini all chirpy and mafia manik😆
would love to read further


Thanks for pm dear
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Manik TAPORI hai kya?? Lololol
Awesome idea!!
Very much excited to read further!!
Update soon n thnx for the pm :)
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CHAPTER 1
The plot is in the hospital...a girl is sleeping on the bed and is fighting between life and death...a man is standing outside holding magalsutra in his hand...he is remembering some of the incidents...where the girl is smiling and telling him...
Girl:, manik kuch bhi ho gaye I will never leave u alone...
Suddenly tears rolled down from manik's eyes...
Docter came out...
Manik: sir sir nandini kaisi hai...
Doc: chot gehera hai...humne ek bahut bade doctor ko bulaya hai...he wants to meet you...
Manik: thik hai ...par woh hai kaha...
Doc: yaha se left aur second cabin...
Manik ran to the new doctor...
Manik: sir may I come in ...
Doctor: yes plz...
Manik: sir woh mein nandini...
Doctor: mujhe pata hai...maine uska x ray report dekha hai...par ...
Manik: par...kya...doctor...
Doctor: knife lagne ke baje se uske stomach ki kuch veins bahut harmed ho chuki hai...butBut still we have hope...
Manik sitting on his knees with folded hands ...
Manik: doctor please ...kuch bhi kijiye lekin meri nandini ko bachayiye...
Doctor:(holding manik) get up my son...I will try my best to give her life...but agar tum bura na mano to kya tum mujhe bata sakte ho yeh sab kaise hua...
Manik : (smiling with tears) kehete hai ek ladki ko sabse jyada pyaar toh ek baap hi karta hai lekin agar uss bap ke man me pyaar se jyada paise aur higher scale level ke feelings ho toh woh usske bati ko marne se pehele ek bar bhi nahi sochega...Phele mein ek mafia gang mein tha aur ek din...mujhe ek bade sahab ne bulaya...jab mein unke ghar pahuncha to...
Manik starts the past...
PAST...
manik is standing inside a big house...
Suddenly a man with many bodyguards enter and he sat on the couch...
Man: toh tum ho manik...or manu...
Manik: apun ki idhar kai ko bulaya...
Man: tumhe meri beti ki personal gurad banana hai...i have heired you...
Manik: thik hai par teri beti ko gurad ki kya jarurat...
Man: woh ek millionaire ki beti hai...and abhi hamare opponents hamare khilaf kuch plan kar rahe hai. ...
Isiliye main meri beti ki life ko le kar koi risk nahi le sakta...sun abhi woh college gayegi aur tum bhi uske saath jana...
Man: nandini beta...
Nandini:yes papa...
Nandini came downstairs...
Nandini: yes papa ...boliye kya hua...
N papa: beta yeh manik hai...aur yeh tumhara guard hai...
Nandini looking at manik from top to bottom...and giving frowning looks...
Nandini: yeh...no ways...papa apne isse dekha hai...
Manik: apun mein ayisa kya kharabi hai...
Nandini: papa iske clothes...yakkk...
N papa: manu tum abhi jao aur kuch achhe kapde pehenkar aayo...
Manik: apin iske liye apna style kuin change karega...
N papa: manu...
Manik: achha thik hai...
Manik went out and after half an hour both manik and nandini are prepared to go...
Nandini and manik both sat in the car...
Nandini: jaise superman ki costume mein laal chadi pehenna compulsory gai usse hi tum mafia walo ki yeh saadhu look compulsory hai kya...cholo aja se hum ek saath rahenge ...so friends...
Manik: kitna chapar chapar karti hai re tu...hum mafia wale kisike dost nahi hote...
Nandini: tum mafia wale humans nahi ho...are u a alien from mars...
Manik: hen...kya hai hum...
Nandini(crumbiling her hand and keeping both the hand on the head) do saar wale animals...hehehehe...
Manik: hai bahut ho gaya tera majak...isse toh accha mein bol data tera dost baneneko...
Nandini: toh ab bol do...
Manik: han han thik hai thik hai...chal tera collage aa gaya...
Manik and nandini both went inside college...nandini is walking woth manik...
Nandini: achha tum mafia log karte kya ho actually...
Manik putting his hands on his head: yeh kitna chapar chapar karti hai...
Loudly...hum mafia wale logo ko chup karake sula dete hai...
Nandini: accha meinne suna hai ki tum logo ko mar dete ho...accha hai...mein tumhe mere NGO mein le kar jaungi ...qaha na chote cgote bachhe hai aur woh bahut rote hai...tum unhhe chup karke sula dena thik hai...
Manik: are kaha phas gaya mein...achha thik hai meri maa ab chaal...
Nandini sat inside the class and the teacher enters...
Manik was standing outside...nandini called him...
Nandini: ssshhh...ssshhh...ae manik...
Manik looked at nandini...
Manik: kya...
Nandini: ander awo...
Manik: kya...nahi nahi...mujhe yeh padhai se bahut daar lagta hai...meine toh wase bhi 10th mein do bar fail hua tha...
Suddenly nandini catched the attention of teacher...
Teacher: Ms. Nandini what is happening there...
Nandini got up and looked at manik while manik was showing his batisi(white teeth)
Nandini: accha bacchu...rukh...
Nandini: mam woh kya hai na mera ek dost bahare khada hai...I was calling him in...
Manik's smile is lost and he is shocked...manik's expression...







Teacher came out and saw manik...
Teacher: beta come inside...
Manik with a vulnerable face came in and sat besides nandini...
Teacher: students I am having an important announcement...our college has arranged a manali trip so those who want to go plz give there names...
Nandini got up and ran to the teacher...
Nandini: mam I will go...
Manik: (standing up) arre ek bar sir se puch toh leti...
Nandini(turning round to manik): tum chup raho...aur chupchap udhar beatho...
The class laughedn..n...
Manik proves: accha bacchi dekhti huin ghar ja ke kaise apne papa ko manati hai...
Nandini and manik both reach home...
Nandini met her papa...
Nandini: papa woh...
N papa: bolo nandini kya chaheye...
Nandini: permission...
N papa: kis liye...
Nandini: ap pehele do phir batati huin...
Manik is standing at the door...
N papa: baat na sune bina tumhe permission dena is a very dangerous task...
Manik started laughing...









Nandini: papa mujhe manali jana hai.n...mere sare dost jarahe hai
Npapa: nahi nahi...bilkul nahi...
Nandini: please papa...
Papa: nahi ja sakti ...udhar kuch ho gaya...
Nandini thinking for sometime...
Are papa mein akele kaha ja rahi huin...(going to manik)yeh ap ka guard .manik bhi chalega mere satth...
Manik: kya...manik's expression







Nahi nahi nahi...mein toh aj se pehele apne area se bhi bahar nahi gaya...
Nandini: tum toh kuch bolo hi maar...papa yeh jayega...
N papa: thik hai manu ...tumhare bharose nandini ko chod raha huin...
Agar usse kuch hua toh...tumhari aarthi nikalwane mein mujhe deer nahi lagegi...
N papa went outside the room...nandini seems to be very happy...
Nandini:hash mil gayi permission...
Manik: are permission toh mili par dekha na tere bap ne kaisa dhamki diya upun ko...
Nandini: chill manik...mein kuch gadbad nahi karungi...cholo bag pack karti huin...tum bhi karlo...
Manik: pata nahi unhha kya raita failayegi...he bagwan mujhe iss mahamusibat se bachana...
Manik proves to himself: manik chup kar...are agar logo ko pata chala...to log kahenge ki mafia gang ka leder manik ek ladki se daar gaya...chi chi...par yeh ladki kaha hai ...chalti friti gadbad ki dukan...are kaha gayi...nandini rukhi mein aa raha huin...manik ran after nandini...
Next morning...
Nandini is ready to go...she is standing outside with manik...manik was dam feared...







N papa: manik ...
Manik: pata hai sir...apki beti ka pura dhayn rakhunga ...kuch bhi hone nahi dunga...
Manik proves: agar yeh mujhe jinda rakhe toh...
Nandini took his papa's blessing...and they both went for manali...
Directly we see the flight landing in manali...
All the students are out and gathered at a particular place ...
Teacher: so app sabhi logo ka tent lag gaya hai...aur girls boys alag alag tents mein rahenge...
Manik pinching nandini...
Manik: ab mrin tumhara khayal kaise rakhunga...
Nandini: mein koi choti bacchi nahi huin I can manage...ok...
Manik proves: badi ayi manage karne wali...agar isse kuch hua toh isska bap toh mujhe hi tapka dega...manik...be positive.n...
At night girls were having late night parties...nandini joined them...they all offered nandini a drink...nandini thought it was a juice and drank it...and after that...nandini drunk...
Nandini worked to manik's tent...everybody were asleep...
Manik was also sleeping...nandini came inside...and ina drunk tone...
Nandini: achha si manik mafia so rahe hain...mujhe utha na ata hai...
Nandini sat on manik giving him a sudden jerk...
Manik: auuuch...kya hua...koin sa hatthi gira mujhpe...
Nandini: tumne mujhe haathi kaha...
Manik rubbed his eyes and to his shock it was nan other than nandini...
Manik: tumm...tum yaha kya kar raho ho...
Nandini: pata hai tum jab aise tensed hote ho to bahut cute lagete ho...
Nandini gave a sweet kiss to Manik on his cheeks...






Manik was terrified...
Nandini ran outside...
Nandini: are ladki beautiful kar gayi chulll...
Manik: isse kya hua...are nandini...hey bhagwan...
Nandini: mein ladki beautiful kar gayi culll...
Manik: nandini wapas aayo...
Manik holding nandini: kya piya tha tumne...
Nandini giving a sweet slap to manik: tumhe badi phikar hai meri...
Nandini ran from there...she hide beside the bushes...manik comes searching her...
Manik: nandini...nandini...kaha ho yaar...
Suddenly a slow ball hit manik...when manik looked it was non other than nandini...
Watchman of the placed came...
Watchman: yeh kya ho raha haiii...
Nandini: are bah...ek aur aa gaya...ruko mein timpe bhi ohekhti huin snow balls...
Nandini started hitting the watchman with snow balls...
Watchman: are isse koi sambhalo...
Manik:(sitting down the tree) isse koi nahi sambhal sakta...techniqui kharabi hai...ek hi peice hai yeh world mein...
Nandini: haiyi mera heri...
Au tu watchman tujhe toh meinnn...
Watchman ran out of danger from there...
Suddenly nandini mood change...she picked up a wood log and shouted...
Nandini: soha ...tu hai shesha...aur mein huin shivanya...aja mein tumhe dash dungi...
Mein teri dushman , dushman tu mera , mein shivanya tu sheshaaa...
Manik: isska mood kab change hota hai pata nahi...acha nandini yeh shivanya aur shesha kaun hai...
Nandini: tumhe pala nai...woh dono naagin hai...ab mein bhi naagin ban kar uss soha ko dasne ha rahi huin...
Holding the log nandini is running and shouting...
Nandini: aaa...
Manik is also running after nandini...
Manik caught hold of nandini...he threw the wood log from hand but nandini without her sense hit manik...dishoom dishoom on his face...
Manik: chal tu chal...
Manik took nandini ans make her sleep
Next morning ...nandini woke up...
Manik was standing there...
Manik: kaisi ho...
Nandini: thik huin...mujhe kya hona tha...
Suddenly ...nandini friend entered
Friend: chal nandini ek ek peg marte hai...
Hearing this manik shouted ...nooo...
Manik: nandini tum kahi nahi jayogi...
Nandini: tum handel nahi kar sakte toh kya mein nahi kar sati...mein peg mar ke bhi full sense mein raheti huin...
Manik: dekho...sau chuhe kha kar billi haj ko challi...
Friend: waise hum abhi jane wale he toh ek peg marne mein kya problem hai...
Nandini: han...
Manik: yeh meri maa tu ja peee...lekin nandini nahi ayegi...nandini pack ur bags...we are leaving...
Nandini: sadhu...
Back to mumbai...nandini worked inside her room followed by manik...
Nandini shouted on manik...
Nandini: mujhe kya karba hai nahi karna hai woh mujhe tumse janne ki jarurat nahi hai...woh toh mere papa hai jinhone tumhe hier kiya hai...
Manik: toh phir thik hai nein abhi jake sir ko nana kar dera huin ki mein yeh kam yahin chod raha huin...
Nandini: ok fine.. ..nandini took the car's keys and worked outside the house...
Manik worked to his boss room...but when she reached there he saw his boss was taking with his friend about nandini...manik started listening to them...
N papa: tumhe kya laga mein nandini se babut pyaar jarta huin...aisa kuch nahi hai...
Friend: par woh toh tumhari beti hai na...
N,papa: kaiki beti ...woh toh meri sagi beti bhi nahi hai...
Manik was literally shocked...he is taken a back...
Manik opened his phone vedio recoder and started recording ...
N papa: 23 saal pehele mein iske bap ke saath jam karta tha...mujhe suru se hi iske bap ki jayedad chahiye thin...isseliye meine isske bap ko maar diya...par neine isse apne mohore ki tarah istamal kiya...
Friend: par ab kya karoge...
N papa: karna kya hai...issko mar ke isski sari property nere naam pe karwalunga...aja nandini ki life ki akhri din hai...abhi mere gunde waha usse khatm kar denge...
Hearing this manik ran from there...took his bullet and goes in search for nandini...
Nandini's car was having some problem which nandini corrected from a mechanic...and the mechanic was non other than a goon send by his father...he had made nandini s car's brakes fail...Nandini was driving and she suddenly found that the brakes were not working...
The car was maving here and there...when suddenly manik came...
Manik: nandini...open the door...
Nandini opened the car's door...
Nandini: manik help me...
Manik lifted nandini out of thrme car and made ger sit back on his bullet...the car got snashed in to pieces...
Nandini and manik got down...nandini have a tight hug to manik...
Nandini: par yeh hua kaise...lagra gai yeh hamare dushmanon ki chaal hai...
Manik: yeh sab tumhare papa ne kiya hai...
Nandini: are u serious...tumhe lagta gai ki tum mere papa ke bare mein mujhe kuch bhi bataoge aur nein maan jaungi...I dont want to talk to u...
Manik: nandini...I have proof...
Nandini: acha kya hai woh...
Manik showed the video to nandini and nandini was taken a back ...she was standing like a stone...
Suddenly she sat down on the road with teary eyes...
Nandini(mumering): unhone mere papa ko mar diya...iska matlab mera iss duniya mein koi nahi hainn...
Manik sat beside her...
Manik: chahe tumhare saath koi na hon...I m there with u and for u...
After that both manik and nandini reached home...
Nandini's papa came...he was shocked to see nandini alive
N papa:aa gayi beta...
Nandini: apko bahut afsos ho raha hoga na ki mein jinda kaise bach gayi...
Nandini papa was shocked as he thought how does she know...
N papa: yeh kya bol rahi ho tum...
Nandini: kuin saach accha nahi laga...waise mein apko bata duin ki mujhe sab patahai...
Ap ne mere papa ko mar diya...par jis liye ap sab ne yeh sab kiya...meri property...woh apko kabhi nahi milega...mein aur manik abhi issi waqt saadhi karne ha rahe hai...phir meri saari property hum dono ke naam hi jayegi aur apko ek phuti coudi nahi milegi...
Nandini holded manik's hand...
They both went to the church...
Manik: father we want to marry...
Father: let me prepare...
Nandini: I want to ask u something...aja toh bata de...mujhse pyaar karta gai ki nahi...
Manik: nandini mein ek mafia tha tumse milne se pehele...u made me better...my heart only beats for u...I LOVE YOU...
Nandini: I LOVE YOU TOO...
They both shared a cute hug...

Pal, do pal, ki hi kyun hai zindagi(nandu: meine kabhi nahi sochha tha ki mein aise chruch mein saddi karungi)
Iss, pyar, ko hai sadiyaan kaafi nahi(she took out a magalsutea...)
Toh khuda se maang lun(yeh meri maa ki hai...tum mujhe yeh jarur pehenana)
Mohalat main ik nayi(I always wanted to wear it)
Rehna hai bas yahaan(she gave it on manik's hand)
Ab door tujhse jaana nahi
Jo tu mera humdard hai
Jo tu mera humdard hai
Suhaana har dard hai
Jo tu mera humdard hai
Father came...
Father: everything is prepared ...lets start ...
Suddenly a loud sound came...ruko...
All of them turned to see ...it was non other than nandini's evil father...
N papa: jis chig ke liye maine itno ko mars isse mein itni asani se nahi chodunga...
Aa jao aur uss manik ko khatam kar do...
One goon ran to manik with knife...he was to hurt manik in his stomach when nandini came forward and the knife instead hurt her...
Nandini fell down in manik's arm ...
Nandini: aa mere her...agar mein nahi bacchi toh tu kuch aisa waisa mat karna...I will always be with you...
Nandini faints...
The guys who has hurt nandini...manik gave him a mukkha on his neck...
And both his eardrumps collapsed and blood striked out of his mouth...
Manik lifted nandini in her arms...
Manik: abhi toh mein jaa eaha huin lekin...mein wapas aunga...nandini ke gire hua ek ek bund ke khoon ka hisab lene aunga...aur uss time tum sabko hamesha ke liye sula dunga...
Coming back to present...blood hadhas been collected ph manik's eyes...holding the magalsutra manik worked out of the hospital...he reached his adda and asked them...
Manik: cholo hume kisko khatam karna hai...
Manik loaded his pistol...cholo...
All of the members worked out...They reached the house...while all member statted fighting with the goons...manik worked inside...
Nandini's father was afraid...
Manik came inside...
Manik caught hold of him while he was running and favegave him a nice tharash on the ground...he was about to shoot him with his gun...when a phone call came...it was from hospital and they told that nandini was fine and he can meet her...
Manik: cholo re...isse mere saath leke cholo...
Nandini was sitting on the bed waiting for manik...
Manik came with nandini's dad half injured...
Manik threw him on the ground...
Nandini was shocked to see this...
Manik: bolo nandini...kya karun...agar tum bolo toh tahi usse upar pahuncha dunga...
N papa(holding nandini's feet) beta mujhe maaf kardo mujhe kuch nahi chahiye...isse mana kar do...mukhe maat maro...
Nandini: manik chod do isse...isse hamare life se nikal toh diya hai humne...
Kisike khoon se mujhe tumhare saath ek naya rista suru nahi karna...
After that movement...
We see the house fully decorated with flowers...
Guests were standing for the ceremony...
One of the guest asked...: are dulha dulhan kidhar hai...
Are woh rahe...manik and nandini came down with dulha dulhan attaire...
The os ends with manan's Weeding...


THE END...
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Amazinggg suprrbbb
Thnx for pm me
Lovd it
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nice OS...
liked it...
thanx for pm
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lovely os
pehle bahut hasaya hein
and made me cry too.
Thanks for the PM

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