A selfish me - A Shravan poem

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Posted: 9 years ago
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I walked alone a long way,a dark and dreary night
Suddenly you came along,darkness gave way to light

Every waking minute,I would be by your side
But deep within my little heart,a love I did hide

I went away,chose not to stay,pain I couldn't bear
When I saw that about me,you didn't really care

I tried and failed,I kept it locked but listen it would not
I tried and failed,but love prevailed,it mended a broken heart

I hoped again when I saw your smile,my wait was not in vain
Little butterflies and rainbows,and a heart that was mine

But today my heart has lost,it knows your real face
When you chose him, over me,for my rightful place

But Oh I fear !
For you I fear, for you will have to see
That without you, I can become
A new selfish me !

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Nice, particularly the last four lines...
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Lovely poem nith!!
But honestly shravan is to blame for bringing this upon him. They both have their flaws but what was stopping him to trek he his feelings. Just because she dint come to coffee shop and has been throwing some attitude which he was doing too just a few days before. Why could he not just go to her house and called her out and asked bet to get in the car just the way sumo did it.
He is waiting for it to happen. Things went down hill from there.mus and more mus ,right now I feel strangled 😡

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Thank you Sh518obi !
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: an_chau

Nice, particularly the last four lines...


Thank you ! Glad you liked it 😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: avni01

Lovely poem nith!!

But honestly shravan is to blame for bringing this upon him. They both have their flaws but what was stopping him to trek he his feelings. Just because she dint come to coffee shop and has been throwing some attitude which he was doing too just a few days before. Why could he not just go to her house and called her out and asked bet to get in the car just the way sumo did it.
He is waiting for it to happen. Things went down hill from there.mus and more mus ,right now I feel strangled 😡


Thanks avni !
Actually I try to be neutral but I am a Sumo person through and through. That doesn't mean she is super human or flawless. But today Shravan's pain was more visible, and I'll tell you what we will see Suman's pain on Monday and we will feel with her. Thats the way they are doing it. Just like they show Shravan's pain they should show a Sumo perspective, simply introducing more and more conflicts is only making Suman look insensitive. But since we got to see Shravan's pain more, I have written from Shravan's perspective.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Thank you Quirky !
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Awesome poem, Nith.. You are truly talented girl.. Loved it so much..
Just a thought... Shravan isn't becoming selfish.. He is dangerous now.. He will be ruthless, plain mean.. A person who one should fear..
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Take a bow lady
I love you!😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: Roshni2015

Awesome poem, Nith.. You are truly talented girl.. Loved it so much..

Just a thought... Shravan isn't becoming selfish.. He is dangerous now.. He will be ruthless, plain mean.. A person who one should fear..


Thanks Roshini ! Glad you liked it . I get your point, he is ruthless , I do not mean selfish in a bad sort of way. In fact I think its about time both Sumo and Shravan stop being so selfless, their own happiness is also important 😊

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