What about this plot? Please suggest changes

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hippo is thinking of directing a movie. I am working on a story and need your suggestions.

The main cast of movie is

- Rishi Kapoor as drunk King
- Shabana Azmi as sober queen
- Ranbir Kapoor as Prince who follows his mom and hates dad
- Priyanka Chopra is un married aunt of Ranbir Kapoor and sister of Rishi Kapoor

- Anupam Kher as obedient munshi
- Deepika as his daughter
- Deepika's mother died while giving birth to her and therefore Deepu is considered Panauti

- Ranveer Singh as gardener's/maali's son who is also driver of the royal family
- Alok nath is gardener
- Sonu sud is Ranveer's sing elder brother


The story is basically a love triangle between the prince, munshi's daughter and ranveer sing. Prince is a Kabeera i.e. carefree rich and is not interested in marriage. Deepika eyes Prince and loves her.
Driver Ranveer singh in turns loves Deepika who is not interested in Ranveer.

There is often tension in the movie. Drunk King is a former tharki himself and does not believe in royalty. He likes Deepika as his bahu. Ranbeer and Shabana are royal and believe in class system. Shabana specially has poisoned ranbeer against Deepu and told him that she is after him for money. And in reality the munshi is behind this. However Deepu loves Ranbeer in real. There are often clashes where Anupam shows how sincere he is and this is not about money. He would often reprimand his daughter to keep her away from prince.

Ranveer does not like when Shabana mistreates Deepu. He confronts her one day only to be slapped by alok nath. Sonu showed anger as well but Nath manages the scene. Drunk king was seeing all from t he window above while having a glass.

There was somethine else going on as well. Aunty Priyanka was eyeing Sonu sood. That was another problem for the royals. Old unmarried royal aunt after driver's friend. Things were falling apart.

Sonu was hesitant at first as PC was 10 years older than him. However he then thought she is royal afterall so its worth it.

FILLER: some songs, side kick scenes, fat friends making jokes etc.

Climax: Aunty and sonu decide to run away one day. In depth of nights Priyanka and Sonu were sneaking from the door whent he royal dog barked and Ranbeer woke up. He saw aunty running with sonu. Shabana also saw it. She ordered ranbeer to carry on the family parampara and shoot the two. Ranbeer takes out the gun and shoots her aunt. Sonu from 10 feet away jumps and comes in front of PC and takes it on his shoulder. Aunt is safe. Sonu is hurt.

Ranveer looses it. He and Ranbeer clash.

Oh there is Deepika in the movie too.

She comes in between and supports Ranbeer. Ranveer is hurt. Why does she not love me? i am poor, public sympathy is with me..why is she with ranbeer.

While all this is going on Ranbeer shrugs deepika's support and insults her. Now Deepu is hurt. How dare you ranbeer...I loved you..and u did this to me.

She changes loyalty and now is with ranveer. Ranbeer said fine I did not give a damn anyway

Suddenly someone falls from the upper floor.

Its the King.

He was drunk and while watching all this he slipped alond with his glass.

He was no more.

Shabana crying and now realizes the importance of husband and family.

She changes

PC marries Sonu

Ranveer marries Deepu

Alok nath is happy,

Anupam his happy

Shabana is happy

Ranbeer leaves the country for education.

Please suggest some edits and possible changes to my story.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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I know its long but hopefully interesting
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Posted: 9 years ago
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vo to theek ha hippo g par how will u handle d camera!! ap k to hath hi nahi ha!!
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Posted: 9 years ago
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what is the name of the movie

interesting story
Edited by .Amrita - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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I love it. 😆 Where was this inspired from? 😉
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Posted: 9 years ago
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I will fit the camera in my hat. That is not a problem

Name of the movie could

baby ko prince pasand hai (depu based name)

kabira (ranbeer based name)

kati patang with umang (pc based name)

bewara baadhsah (rishi based named)

driver dulhaniya lee jayee ga ( ranveer based name)

parampara aur anushasan (shabana based name)

ek munshi ek maali (side actors based name)

Inspired from my real life assessment of Ranbeer-Ranveer and Deepika situation


Edited by hippopotamus - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Neetu Singh in place of Shabana. :P
Ranbir and Deepu love each other but one day a dancer from England comes and Ranbir falls for her.
Deepu cries foul that Ranbir cant marry her becsuse she doesnt have the Indian passport.
This dancer was in a relationship with a powerful king of neighbouring state and was about to marry him but this Prince charmed her.
The powerful king gets really angry attacks and destroys the Prince's kingdom.
Now the Prince is struggling while the Driver acquired some small states in all this and is now rapidly expanding his territory. Deepu starts loving the driver turned king and starts living with him.
Prince sees the dancer as bad luck and dumps her.
Edited by Hydro123 - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Oye Hippo ki haal chaal hain bhidu. Meeting longtime after BB forum. Miss your howlarious posts man in BB forum. 😆
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: Hydro123

Neetu Singh in place of Shabana. :P
Ranbir and Deepu love each other but one day a dancer from England comes and Ranbir falls for her.
Deepu cries foul that Ranbir cant marry her becsuse she doesnt have the Indian passport.
This dancer was in a relationship with a powerful king of neighbouring state and was about to marry him but this Prince charmed her.
The powerful king gets really angry attacks and destroys the Prince's kingdom.
Now the Prince is struggling while the Driver acquired some small states in all this and is now rapidly expanding his territory. Deepu starts loving the driver turned king and starts living with him.
Prince sees the dancer as bad luck and dumps her.


Kati patang aunt priyanka chopra sensed opportunity

She sneaks into neighboring kingdom and performs a dance number

[YOUTUBE]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9C11QJtPRGs[/YOUTUBE]

the neighboring king falls for her..and ditches the dancer

dancer is back with prince

driver and deepu all set

aunt is now the queen of the neighboring state
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: Hydro123

Neetu Singh in place of Shabana. :P
Ranbir and Deepu love each other but one day a dancer from England comes and Ranbir falls for her.
Deepu cries foul that Ranbir cant marry her becsuse she doesnt have the Indian passport.
This dancer was in a relationship with a powerful king of neighbouring state and was about to marry him but this Prince charmed her.
The powerful king gets really angry attacks and destroys the Prince's kingdom.
Now the Prince is struggling while the Driver acquired some small states in all this and is now rapidly expanding his territory. Deepu starts loving the driver turned king and starts living with him.
Prince sees the dancer as bad luck and dumps her.


And the prince's mother starts hating the English dancer and wants the prince to marry Munshi's daughter. There's a childhood friend of prince who is attracted to him but the prince is indifferent. He conspires to break up the prince and the English dancer. Meanwhile the prince starts taking drugs...

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