~ Building Life ~ (A Swadarsh FF) ~ Note, Page 76 - Page 17

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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: Sharmi_swadarsh

Totally loved it..

Mamu is so so understanding and the convos between adarsh and mamu are so well written..mamu is one of my favourite character in the show too..the way he speaks makes ppl warm towards him..be it swa or adarsh..
Adarsh's confession was so beautiful and it was portrayed beautifully too..adarsh practicing what he'll say and swa regaining consciousness just at dat time made the moment more sweeter..his words and her tears confessed their feelings for each other..even imagining both of them in my mind while reading this makes it even more special and wonderful..
Thank you for such an amazing update and ff..this is one of the best ff's i have read..
Waiting for swa's answer and her confession too..and definitely for the swadarsh moments to come.. :) :)


Thanks Sharmi. I have planned something special for Swa's confession. Hopefully I can do justice to that part. Let me see.

Mamu is my fav character too. He is so good with everyone... amazing. I truly like him. His is one character that I have kept as is from the show. The CV's did such a perfect job, I didn't have to do anything else to make him perfect šŸ˜†
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Posted: 9 years ago
šŸ‘ wow! Such a cute confession šŸ‘
Though it wasn't filmy but i liked it ..
Adarsh &his action šŸ˜†
Practice looking at wall šŸ˜† keep it up šŸ‘šŸ¼

Swadheenta ,she heard all this just after regaining sense .
Mama such cute person 😊

Thank u for sending me PM 😊
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: Sana_J.

šŸ‘ wow! Such a cute confession šŸ‘
Though it wasn't filmy but i liked it ..
Adarsh &his action šŸ˜†
Practice looking at wall šŸ˜† keep it up šŸ‘šŸ¼

Swadheenta ,she heard all this just after regaining sense .
Mama such cute person 😊

Thank u for sending me PM 😊


Thanks Sana.
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Posted: 9 years ago
hi just came across the ff
and read all the parts in one go
its lovely
the way you planned there meet , hurt , outburst, realization, friendship and finally cute confession
everything is super awesome
picture perfect
what i liked most title for each part..
you are fab writer
keep writing more and update soon


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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: dh19

hi just came across the ff

and read all the parts in one go
its lovely
the way you planned there meet , hurt , outburst, realization, friendship and finally cute confession
everything is super awesome
picture perfect
what i liked most title for each part..
you are fab writer
keep writing more and update soon



Hey, thank you so much. Incidentally, I was writing the next part now... may post it in a bit if I manage to finish it in time. Letz see.

Thanks for leaving your comment. 😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
Meeting "her" parents

The door to her hospital room opened. Adarsh, who sat on a couch at a corner opened his eyes from the light slumber that he had gotten into to see someone that he didn't recognize. He looked at the gentleman with confusion in his eyes. At the same time, Swadheenta also woke up from her sleep because of the sudden rushed opening of the door. She looked at the new entrant and smiled lightly Appa!

15 minutes ago
In the hospital corridor

Maamu who left Adarsh with Swadheenta was walking outside, trying to figure out what to do. He had not intended to leave Swadheenta's side till she woke up, but realized Adarsh needed a push to convey his feelings to her. While he was wandering in the corridor, he saw someone that made his heart skip a beat. He saw Mr. Ramakrishnan, Swadheenta's father, and Mrs. Revathi Ramakrishnan, her mother and his rakhi sister, walking towards him. Yeh yaha kya kar rahe hai?

He quickly ran to them to stop them from reaching Swadheenta's room. Bahi saab, Revathi, tum log yaha?

Bhaiya, kaha hai Dini? Meri beti kaise hai? Kya hua hai usko?

Revathi, aaraam se. Saas toh le lo. Woh ab teek hai. Tum, logon ko kisne bataya?

Kal raat mein hi Zubeida bhabhi ka phone aaya tha. Tum log hospital mein the, toh line mil nahi raha tha follow-up karne ke liye. Humse waha baita hi nahi gaya. Agle hafte aana toh tha hi aur yeh toh bol rahe the ki wait karange koi news ka, lekin mein nahi reh paayi. Mujhe dekhna tha Dini ko. Woh kaisi hai?

Woh teek hai. Aap log ghar jaake fresh ho ke aa jaayiye. Zubaida aur Asad ghar mein hai.

Bhaiya, ab aa gaye hai toh usse milke jaayange

Haan Haider baisaab. Kaha hai woh?

Woh, yehi hai, aayiye.

Usko aapne room mein akela chod diya?

Nahi, woh, koi hai uske saath. Aayiye, mein milwa ta hu usse. Aayiye

Maamu kept thinking in his mind about how he could warn Adrash. He left Adarsh sitting next to Swadheenta. He didn't want them to intrude on anything special, particularly not with Mr. Ramakrishnan. But he couldn't just call Adarsh from in front of them. As they were approaching the room, he saw his opportunity. He wantedly bumped into an orderly who was walking with a tray in his hand. The tray fell down with a loud bang, and Haider pretented to fall down because of the bump. While he screamed in pain, Mr. Ramakrishnan rushed to help him with a Kya hua Haider baisaab? Aap teek toh hai na?

Haan baisaab. Mein teek hu. Yahi kamra hai Swadheenta ka. Aap chaliye.

Inside the room

Swadheenta and Adarsh kept looking at each other, unable to say anything. Adarsh waited for her to respond, and Swadheenta was too chocked with emotions to say anything to him. Their eyes did all the talking, and portrayed their apprehensions, vulnerability doubts and consent. While they were both searching for words to say, they heard a loud noise coming from outside the room. Distracted now, they both looked at the door to figure out the reason for the commotion. What they heard next almost made Swadheenta jump out of bed. She looked at Adarsh with sudden fear in her eyes. Upon his questioning gaze, she mouthed a "Appa". Having understood the entire context, Adarsh rushed to the couch at the corner of the room and pretended to be asleep while Swadheenta did the same on her bed.

As soon as the door opened and Mr. Ramakrishnan walked in, both Adarsh and Swadheenta pretended to be disturbed from their sleep.

Present

Swadheenta, yeppadi ma iruke? (Swadheenta, how are you?)

Nan nalla iruke appa. Minor accident da (I am fine appa. It was a minor accident)

Paata minor maadari teriliye. I am sure you weren't paying attention. What were you doing? Were you on the phone? (It doesn't look minor)

Please, koncho chumma irungale (Please keep quiet). Kanna, romba vali iruka? (Child, is it hurting a lot?)

Illai amma. I am really ok. (No amma)

Having been assured that she was indeed alright, appa turned to look at Adarsh.

Who are you?

Maamu who had been witnessing all this waited a couple of minutes to let them answer. As soon as he had walked in, he had noticed the redness on both their cheek's and realized immediately that they must have had a talk. Did they confess? Will they tell Ramakrishnan about it? He saw that the both of them avoided looking at anyone in the room, and kept prolonging the moment. Maamu knew they were not ready yet, and that he had to save the day

Baisaab, he is Adarsh, Adarsh Sinha. He is my student, mera matlab hai, he was my student. The best student I have had. Jaise appaka Jeevan hai na, waise yeh mera best student raha hai.

At this both Adarsh and Swadheenta looked at maamu. Maamu had a teasing glint in his eyes and kept smiling at the both of them. They both quickly relaxed and promised to give maamu a tight hug later.

Hello sir. Swadheenta's dad looked younger than Adarsh had anticipated. He was a trim man and Adarsh could tell that he was a strict and a no-nonsense guy. He was a handsome man. Her mom however looked very calm and elegant, maybe in her mid 40's. She exhibited a very pleasant aura.

Hello. What are you doing here? Do you know Swadheenta?

Woh, kya hai na bhaisaab, jaise aapke ghar ka sab kuch Jeevan ko pata hota hai, waise hi hamare ghar ka sab kuch Adarsh ko pata hota hai. Isi liye woh Swadheenta se pehle mil chuka hai. Dost hai dono. Abhi Adarsh ek IAS officer hai. Accident hua tha na, isi liye officially or personally, dono taraf se poochtaach karne aaya tha. Subha hi aaya, on the way to office. Usi ke liye chai lene jaa raha tha mein.

Oh, acha, acha. Appa looked at Adarsh's crumpled shirt, ruffled hair and unshaven face. You are going to office like this? Your shirt is not ironed, you haven't shaved? Government officers represent our country. No matter how we simpletons dress, you guys should always be dressed well.

Adarsh was zapped. This man didn't miss a thing even with his daughter on the hospital bed. He didn't know how to answer him, and was trying to stutter out an answer, while maamu again jumped in to his rescue

Woh, maine early morning usko jaga diya tha Swadheenta ke baare mein batane ke liye. Jaldi jaldi mein nikal gaya hoga ghar se. Isiliye

At this, her mother walked up to Adarsh and patted his cheek. Thank you beta. You did so much for our daughter. Thank you.

Nahi maam. Please, aisi koi baat nahi hai. Please, don't thank me.

You must be getting late. You leave for office. And please, call me aunty. Maam romba weird aa irku (Maam sounds very weird).

Huh? Adarsh couldn't understand clearly the meaning of her words.

She explained Maam, it is weird. So call me aunty. ok?

Ok aunty. Adarsh smiled. He looked at Swadheenta and when their eyes met, both of them remembered their conversation from before her parents arrived. Although both of them knew the answer to his question, she had not had an opportunity to give words to her response. It would now have to wait for another time.

Seeking leave from all of them, Adarsh reluctantly left the company of the Ramakrishnan's and Haider maamu.
Edited by Soapoperasrfun - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
Totally loved it..šŸ‘
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"Woh, kya hai na bhaisaab, jaise aapke ghar ka sab kuch Jeevan ko pata hota hai, waise hi hamare ghar ka sab kuch Adarsh ko pata hota hai. Isi liye woh Swadheenta se pehle mil chuka hai. Dost hai dono. Abhi Adarsh ek IAS officer hai. Accident hua tha na, isi liye officially or personally, dono taraf se poochtaach karne aaya tha. Subha hi aaya, on the way to office. Usi ke liye chai lene jaa raha tha mein.
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šŸ˜† I lobed this one😳
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: yawfeh

Totally loved it..šŸ‘

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"Woh, kya hai na bhaisaab, jaise aapke ghar ka sab kuch Jeevan ko pata hota hai, waise hi hamare ghar ka sab kuch Adarsh ko pata hota hai. Isi liye woh Swadheenta se pehle mil chuka hai. Dost hai dono. Abhi Adarsh ek IAS officer hai. Accident hua tha na, isi liye officially or personally, dono taraf se poochtaach karne aaya tha. Subha hi aaya, on the way to office. Usi ke liye chai lene jaa raha tha mein.
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šŸ˜† I lobed this one😳


Thanks. Maamu is the best really. But how Swadheenta and Adarsh also acted like they were sleeping... Badmaash dono šŸ˜†
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Posted: 9 years ago
This is awesome..mamu the savior again..how much i love him..he definitely gets a tight hug..not only from swadarsh but from us too..his presence of mind..waah!!
I hope swa ke appa yahan pey thoda sa diffrnt honge..like suhasni here is totally opposite..amma is giving positive vibes..and when mamu is here no fear..
Again waiting for swa's answer..and swa ko jaldi achaa kardo..so that swadarsh can happen soon..
Definitely this ff is giving a boon of happiness when in the show we are about to witness a happy-sad track..
Keep on writing..u doing a fab job..love ur updates..and update soon too..eagerly waiting for the next.. :) 😊 šŸ‘šŸ¼ šŸ‘ 😃
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Posted: 9 years ago
Maamu is a total sweetheart! He is so supportive of these two. His perceptiveness is absolutely commendable! It's a pleasure to read about characters like him.

The current track in the show is completely distracting me and I can't seem to be able to focus on my story. :( It's great that at least we have something happy to read here at least.

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