ArYa OS: Yeh Moh Moh ke Dhaage - Page 2

Originally posted by: Fandu

Kat's as always great OS, full of emotions. Enjoyed every part of it. Thank you.

Originally posted by: annirogc

superb os.. loved it.. thanks for posting it here..

Originally posted by: ksen

very nice os

loved it

Originally posted by: roserosey

firstly congratulations kat 👏 ...thank u so much for giving us a fantastic OS admist ur hectic schedule 🤗

thats really a fantastic OS...👏

Thank you so much Rosey 🤗.

this is what i expected in our show which didnt happen at all...was very disappointed with what they showed ...no clear confession of all the deeds , no heart to heart talk ...

I know! This was such a perfect moment for our fav couple to really talk and discuss things. I couldn't believe the CVs did not utilize it.

but yes with the help of ur OS i enjoyed what i wanted to see in the show ...the outburst from both of them is very much needed as coz of that all the misunderstanding got cleared and they confessed from their hearts ...

So glad it worked for you Rose. Since it was an OS, by force it was shorter than perhaps I would have written the scene otherwise. But as long as it worked and gave you some satisfaction.

Strong point of this OS is which is also a turning point to get their confessions happen is when aarti said ...U WOULD HAVE BEEN FREE OF US...such a strong way to express her grief abt not being trusted enough and loved by her partner... oh which made yash so vulnerable 😭 but yes aarthi is the only one whom he can show his vulnerability ...

She just lashed out, hurting him as he hurt her. And she hit at his weakest point. Perhaps he needed that to realize how far he had gone this time.

Their confession ...⭐️☺️

fantastic OS kat 👏

always loved reading ur works ... oh me a crazy fan of ur writings !! 😃 keep writing !!

Originally posted by: sb1410

An awesome ff enjoyed reading, you described such a beautiful romantic scene between aarya with rain as the backdrop, Misunderstandings cleared and a start to a bright new beginnings.

Originally posted by: cuteariya

beautiful OS
I love aarya ❤️
plz carry on 😃

Originally posted by: lovely_nikki

First of all

I'm so Sorry for delaying in un-reserving my spot

Absolutely no apologies needed Nikki.

I was busy. Plus it took me lots of time to write my comment. But it was worth it 😳

😆 True.

Kat you don't have to Thank me for anything. I forced you, threatened you, pacified you for participating in the contest... Well I did it all for myself. For my own greed to read something from you. And if that something is on AarYa then it's 'Sone Pe Suhaga' 😳

🤣 Kya yaar Nikki. Waise, I agreed only for you. Sachi. The last few months have been so hectic, and i knew ahead of time that it was going to be crazy and so I wasn't planning on writing anything - nothing new at least. but how can i say no to you??

Now coming to the OS...

Well I want to know from where you came up with the Title? I mean is there a song or something? If yes then from which movie? I don't think I have heard it. Knowing your choice, I'd like to hear it 😳

OMG!! You haven't heard it? Its from the movie Dum Laga ke Haisha. Lovely movie and i absolutely adore the song. Here's the link: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=h590S4ZqSiw

You know I had been having trouble with the title of the OS. I had heard the song and it kept playing in my head, and i sort of just gave up and picked it as a working title till i came up with something else. But it stuck, and i couldn't think of anything better. Gaana sun ke mujhe batana if you think it was an appropriate song.

And thanks for telling me about that movie 'Khichdi' in my OS. I had no idea about it. I'll definitely try to watch it whenever I get chance.

Its an awesome movie. Total time-pass. Watch it when you are bored or feeling down. Will change your mood around.

Ok now get ready for my comments. Here it is... (As I've commented on almost the entire OS, I had to divide it into two parts)...

You are so sweet.

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Kat after reading this OS I watched the episode and I was so heartbroken. Had they shown what you have written, the whole essence of their confessions would've become so beautiful. Oh! How I wish they had showed this type of confession.

Alas, it didn't happened. So I will content myself with this OS. Thanks for giving me this confession. 🤗

I was always so frustrated with the episode. There were many moments in the show where i felt if only they had shown it in a different way. But this one topped my list.

Coming to the OS, my comments are highlighted below your scenes. Please bear with me as this is the first time I've commented in this way. And also it's my longest comment. EVER.

And i am honored. Thank you Nikki.

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1 - When he was shouting that he didn't, couldn't hear what she was saying, all I wanted to do was hit him on the head and put some sense in it, in him 😡

How I loved the way you showed the realization sinking in him of the extent of hurt he had given her. At first he kept blaming her. Then followed his realization of the way he had treated her. Which was followed by his confession and them clearing all MU

Well done Kat, ⭐️

Thank you. I was always annoyed that Yash got away with everything. All his mistakes, his wrong-doings were always overlooked, never addressed, even obliquely. For a relatively sensitive guy, he had to have felt guilty at some point. But since the CVs never showed it, Yash here did.

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2 - It hurt. Hurt so deep he couldn't think straight. And all he wanted to do, all he could do, was lash out at her. Hurt her as much as she hurt him.

She bit back the gasp that threatened to spill out as she saw him turn pale at her words. She had wanted to hurt him, just as he had hurt her

Ah! All they want to do is to hurt the other, as much as they are hurting themselves.

Why? Is it because the other one has hurt so badly that they want to take revenge?

No... They want the other one to feel the pain, that agony that they have gone through. That they are going through at this very moment 😭

They want to hurt the other the same, as now all they want to do is to love the other, throughout their life. If this one hurt means lifelong showering the other with their love, then this hurt should be done.

Kat I loved it so much. Their pain touched me. ⭐️

I did a lot of juxtaposition in this OS. Yash feels / thinks something and somewhere along the way, Arti mirrors it. You picked up on the first one itself! I am so glad. And so very true Nikki re why they are ok hurting the other. When you love truly, deeply, only then do you have the ability to hurt equally deeply. And you can wound the other as deeply as well. Give and take. And here the stakes were high.

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3 - The downpour couldn't mask her - he would recognize her anywhere. What was Artiji doing in the garden in the rain?

He ran out to her. She should be inside - she was risking both herself and the baby, getting wet like this. She was sitting on a bench, a lone, shivering figure that trembled every time the thunder rolled through.

He reached out to touch her shoulder and hesitated. Dropping his hand down he called softly, "Artiji."

A very slight stiffening of her shoulders was the only indication that she had heard him.

He would recognize her anywhere. Even in the darkness of the night. He reached out for her, but didn't, couldn't touch her. He knew he was responsible for her condition. She was so vulnerable at that moment. Almost numb as a statue.😭 Yet she heard him. Obeyed him.

Mmm, obeyed him? I didn't think of it that way. To me, it was more like - easier to go in than stand out here in the rain and argue. 😉 But then again, perhaps there was an element of obedience too. Arti never really willfully defied Yash.

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4 - The sky split in half as lightning struck but she remained oblivious. When the thunder followed though, she gave a small jump and then huddled into herself.

She was terrified of thunder.

He remembered each and every instance when the rain and its accompanying thunder had her scampering into his arms. Tonight though she walked as if she didn't care. Almost. He could see the shiver that trembled through her even now as the remnants of the thunder growled angrily. But for the first time in these many months, she did not seek him out.

I so wanted him to take her in his arms and make her feel protected once again.😭 But more than that, I was dreaming that she pushed him away, making him feel more guilty. Well he deserved it. Didn't he? (Yes I'm saying this about my most favorite character in PV, Yash's character)

He totally deserved it. And would Arti have pushed him away? Or would she have stood still, like a cold stone statue in his arms? Either would kill him. And his punishment for himself was perhaps just as severe. And definitely justified. He had been a royal jack-ass.

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5 - He walked closer to her, so close he could brush her arm if he wanted to. So close he could almost feel her warmth even though she was drenched. So close, he could hold her, secure in his arms, if she so much as faltered.

This reminded me of their first rain walk after their engagement. Once again I dreamt of him taking her in his arms . Haye... (Sighs...)

Lol! I can see why, though that scene wasn't in my head when i wrote it.

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6 - Inside the safe haven of their room, he got a towel and all but pushed her into the bathroom. As she changed inside, he quickly peeled off his wet clothes and drying himself, pulled on his favourite white kurta-pyjama.

She came out of the bathroom rubbing the towel across her long wet locks

Kat sometimes a writer leaves something's on readers imagination. This is what is did after reading this scene,

Ok here I imagined that Aarti came out in her yellow saree. Yash said that yellow suits her, so I went with that saree. 😳

She came out clad in his favorite color, drying her wet hair. Her tresses which are his weakness. Which makes him go weak in knees and forget the whole world. Here, Once again he is lost in her beauty.

There are two scenarios that broke his trance.

A - A loud thunder breaks his trance (this one is cliched) 🤔

B - She throws the wet towel on the stool near the dresser. I went with this one as this was like giving it to him, the most meticulous person. Oh the look on his face would have been priceless. Him raising his one eyebrow, knowing that she did it purposely to spite him 🤪.

At first he gets a bit angry then a small (very small) smile appears on his face when he realizes she did it purposely (Now I'm happy)

Ooohhh! Definitely #2! I can totally see it play out.

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7 - Tamping down the swirl of desire he always felt at the sight, he growled, "What did you think you were doing? Getting drenched in your condition? And you were sitting on an iron bench during a storm - don't you know iron conducts electricity? The lightning could have struck the bench. Do you even realize what would have happened to you and the baby?"

"You would have been free of us."

At her brutal words, the ice-cold hands of fear gripped him, squeezing out his very breath.

@bold..

🥺

I'm at loss of words to express how happy I was after reading this one line. So here is a special 🤗 for you.

A million thanks to you for writing this one line. He so needed this to realize what he could have lost. Had he lost her, this time there's no one he would have survived. 😭

I felt so bad for Yash. But I also know he deserved it. He deserved it so much.

Pay-back time for Yash. Subconsciously of course he knew what was at risk. But he needed that proverbial slap in the face - and it was almost a rejection of him and his concern as well.

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8 - Then she says all those things. Compares him with Prashant. That there was no difference between the two. 👏

But really, thinking of it as a woman - there really isn't any difference between the two men. Not in this instance at least. And Yash needed to realize that as well.

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9 - As he held her gently at the shoulders she roughly shrugged his arms away. "Don't touch me!"

Finally she did what I wanted to see. She pushed him away. Go girl. Show him that you are JKR. 👍🏼 What does he think? That he can hug you whenever he wants and push you away as per his wish?

Nope not gonna happen every time. 😡

YES!! Men! Jerks!

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10 - She had yearned to turn into his arms, secure in his warm embrace. She had wanted to believe her love would be enough for them both, her understanding and acceptance sufficient to carry them through life. But not any more. She was not going to play second fiddle any more. If he wanted her gone, she would go. But if he truly wanted her to stay, then she needed everything. His friendship, his love and above all, his faith in her. Nothing less would be enough.

Oh, how much she had yearned for his love. He too was now yearning for it. That's why he's hurting so much thinking that now that her past love is back, what if she wants to and goes back to him? 😭

Would he be able to survive this time? To live with another broken heart? 💔

Kat this is one of the reasons why I loved, still love PV so much. They both lost the persons whom they loved so dearly. After struggling so much and crossing so many hurdles they got true love, for the second time in their life. But it was not an easy journey for either of them.

And this is precisely what made the show so special.

@ underlined part...

This... This is now what they want and they both deserve. After all these sufferings, painful accusations and heartbreaks, they deserve nothing less.

Thanks for expressing their feelings so beautiful through those words. ⭐️

Another juxtaposition. Finally both are at the same place where they will not settle for anything less than complete and utter dedication.

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11 - He glimpsed the sheen of pain in her eyes before she masked them yet again. But that one glimpse was enough for him to finally understand. She wasn't rejecting him. Far from it. So he spoke to the fear in her, the pain she tried her best to hide from him and everyone else.

"I don't want you to leave Artiji". She turned towards him at those words, her face bland of any expression. "I don't know how to live without you anymore."

At that she lifted one eyebrow, just like he always did. "Really Yashji? You expect me to believe that after you told me I should go to another man?"

Kat here I want to appreciate the mind blowing acting prowess of both Gurmeet and Kratika. They were, are so GOOD in expressing, emoting through their eyes. ⭐️

@ underlined sentences.

And my friend, here you have used those skills of these two so perfectly. 👏

That one glimpse was enough for him to finally express his feelings.

And now the much needed confession begins. Let me take a deep breath and keep reminding myself that I have to keep breathing in-between, while reading the much awaited confession.

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