Hi Where do I begin? Actually I think I begin a lot of my comments on your story with that question. Hmmm... note to self... need to find something better than 'It was a dark and stormy night' beginning. But I digress... as usual.
Actually that was my way of getting my thoughts in order. In response to the quote that you began the chapter with ( which was beautiful by the way)...
'For trust not him that hath once broken faith'... William Shakespeare
You have done such justice to Arnav's state of mind Jigs. Frustration... Yes! that is what I can imagine him feeling. Frustration at being forced into a situation that he has no desire to be in. Frustration at being forced to handle an issue which, for all intents and purposes, is a non-issue to him. What Avinash did, Arnav can not be expected to forgive... no son should be expected to forgive. And yet that is exactly where he is being led. By the sweetest forces possible. Ari and no less... Khushi and Anjali. His edginess, the rawness of his emotions which can be overcome in the blink of an by Ari's innocent actions, the bitterness hovering at the periphery waiting for one optimal moment to burst out... something he can not afford anymore with Ari in the picture. This is masterful writing Jigs!
Then there is the child. That little slice of heaven. My favorite part... when Anjali opens the door and is shocked still seeing them there... In absence of her Zia lifting her up into an appropriate hug... she isn't deterred... she hugs her legs... Priceless! I know there are other beautiful scenes with Ari... her little pouting session while her hair is being fixed, to the throat clearing just to remind everyone that just because she isn't talking doesn't mean she should be ignored... They are all perfect but that leg hugging will have to be my favorite. You have created this child with such love Jigs!
And then there is the father. The guilty. I want to hate him. I have hated him throughout the story. I think I am as unwilling to forgive him as Arnav is. But that is where you have employed ramanchi, dear writer! You have given me, the reader, a glimpse of Avinash and his thoughts that Arnav is not privy to. I am sure Arnav knows that Avinash is sorry for his actions... but he couldn't care less... neither could I... But it is hard to kick a person that life has already beaten down. While I was reading this chapter, i was wondering... have you made up your mind about Avinash or is that still a mystery in your mind as well. You have presented both the sides of this issue so strongly... I am not so sure anymore.
All I am sure of is I love this story. Pure Perfection is what it is!
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