SwaRon Drabble: Through the Steady Beats

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Beep. Beep.

The steady beeping calmed her just as it maddened her.

Beep. Beep.

He lay there on the hospital bed, his head wrapped in a thick gauze.

Beep. Beep.

'Sharon!'

Beep. Beep.

All her fault, all her goddamn fault.

Beep. Beep.

She didn't deserve him, she never deserved him. She had stabbed him where it hurt the most and now he didn't want her. He told her he didn't want her. Why on earth did he jump in then? Why didn't he let the lightboard hit her, why did he push her away? Why was he lying in those sickeningly blue hospital clothes, his scent masked by the disinfectant? Why?

Beep. Beep.

To make her suffer, that's why. No, he loves her, that's why.

Beep. Beep.

She wanted to scream out loud, she wanted to embrace his lanky frame till he woke up, she wanted to kiss those pale lips and awaken him. All she did was sit by him, frozen, wondering what she had done to have this wonderful man in her life, wondering how he could love her enough to save her, after all she had done to him.

Beep. Beep.

'Smell the coffee Sharon, this is Swayam, your loverboy.'

Beep. Beep.

Her loverboy. She whimpered slightly as she remembered the pure love in his voice as he had said those words. Her loverboy; she wondered if he existed now.

Beep. Beep.

She cringed at the thought of it. He must love her even now, else why would he nearly sacrifice himself for her? For humanity's sake? You know how kind he is, a voice whispered in her ears. She shut her eyes and shook her head slightly, as tears stung the closed eyelids.

Beep. Beep.

No matter how he felt about her, she had still managed to hurt him. Again. She didn't want to, not anymore. He had had enough.

Beep. Beep.

'Swayam, I love you. Please come back.'

Beep. Beep.

'I promise to not hurt you anymore, I promise to stay away if that's what you want.'

Beep. Beep.

'Swayam.'


Beep. Beep. Beep Beep Beep

The machine beeped faster and she looked up, alarmed.


Beep Beep Beep Beep Beep

'Sharon.'

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Posted: 9 years ago
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NOTE

Yeah, another drabble-sort-of. 😆
Even this one was written in the spur of a moment, in about 15 minutes, to be precise. 🤡

My take on SwaRon after the 'kabhi jo badal barse' accident. That track had so much potential and though they did show some good scenes, Ruhi ruined it for me. 😳

The writing template is a bit different this time. Do let me know if you liked it or not. :)

Thanks.

Cheers
nerfherder
Edited by .nerfherder - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Mine. B|

^Unreserve^

Okay, I dont know why but I feel really funny right now and that has nothing to do with your writing. It has to do with the way thosd Beep. Beep. Beep.Beep. were playing in my head 🤣

LOL! This is so embarrasing!

Okay, lets just talk serious. I imagined Sharon sitting beside Swayam's bed and crying. That scene came swamming in my head. And you wrote her side so beautifully. Your take of what must have been the thoughts going through her head. She realising his extent of love even after staying apart and then the last scene where the okay, the beep beep goes fast and he comes to life and his first word is "Sharon" Aah. *sobs for a second*

Beautiful stuff.

Chitra :)
Edited by ..MiStLeToE.. - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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It was beautiful!
That scene was playing at the back of my mind.
I love your writing style.
Keep writing :)
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Posted: 9 years ago
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And I just thought you killed him 😆
I liked your style of writing. Subtle and brief but impactful.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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omg this was brilliant
i can feel that pain of sharon
awww she was frightened to d core of lost him n feeling guilty
awesomely written
yup that ruhi actually mde it irritating bt then we also got beautiful swaron scenes
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Wow! Its raining drabbles!

This scene was so powerful emotionally. It hurt bad, real bad to look at Sharon's plight..Honestly I had nearly forgotten Swayam that time, the pain she went through seeing him lying on the hospital bed was too much to look at anything beyond that.

I love it when someone highlights Sharon's character and brings out the different shades in it so beautifully!.. This was the perfect expression of her mind set at that point of time. Every single emotion was potrayed very intricately.

The beeps actually added a very strong feel to the scene,I could feel her emotions and that strong urge to see him fine as if thats all she wanted from life at that moment, with every beep.

Brilliant work as always ❤️

Love,
Shreya


Edited by Spark.Shreya - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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This was awesome. Beautifully described:)
Thanks for the pm
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Posted: 9 years ago
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This is wonderful. The pain Sharon felt was so beautifully described.
This was amazing like all your works.
I don't know what else to write, I suck at writing comments :/
Keep writing!

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