Teri Meri Maaneet FF ~upd 15 /16 @ 138 ~ link thread 2 in index pg 1

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Banner credit to kan .. thank u dear ,,

Hi guys .. some of u know me and who do not , i m amna here 😛 ... without much of the intro , i m here to post my first story... its not the first story m writing but first one which m posting ... though when i started i thought , will never post it ,... due to kan and sanjh motivation i started writing ... sweta was first one to read this story , and she appreciated me to post it in the forum .. i cant thank u enough guys 🤗

Posting my first story , there is no prologue ( i dont know how to write the gist of the story 😆) or character sketch , as m posting first part itself ... and characters will b revealed with the story ..
hoping to get a good reponse guys 😊
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. Part 1.

story is scene wise , not part wise so one part is linked with other as i typed all together
and its imaginary , so dont go into much logic 😉...

Maan singh khurana , declared as the 3rd richest man in india , he could kill with his looks ... he was giving tough competition to his rivals , n ' khurana construction'' was going up and up winning one project after the other ... there were competitors but at the end the deal was only his coz of his innovative ideas . no one dared to find any flaw in his team and work .. he hired the best team but he was serious threat to rivals ,as their work was always compared with his standards so one of them decided to clear the way ..

After getting another deal he came out with the victorious smile and started driving , on his way he decides to buy something for his family , they were his support all along and he loves them unconditionally... he always get something for them all , after winning deals ..he press the breaks but car don't stop .breaks were probably fail .. he moves his car towards the vacant road so that he dnt hit any other car ,and dials his guard's number who was no where to be seen... his guards were always with him but today there was no one in sight ...

He kept driving and was almost out of the city range when he noticed 2 cars following him , he sensed the danger ,it was not the first time he was getting followed and attacked ... but to his bad luck today the breaks were also fail or was the part of plan ... suddenly a bullet was fired which hits his bullet proof car , he knew escape is difficult this time , he is alone and breaks aren't working still he started driving faster m two more bullets were fired on tires and he looses control of his car and it hits the tree on the opposite side , he falls down n was injured too with two three pieces of glass in his chest ,when he heard some goons , who were reaching him very soon .. he picks his injured body up and tries to run ,goons saw him , he tries to run faster , the forest was thick and dense and it was so difficult to run .. they were firing bullets towards him , and he saved himself by hiding behind trees ... Once again he comes out from the back of tree when a bullet hit his leg , he looks ahead , it was huge pit if he moves forward , he will fall into it ... Now he had no choice , goons at the back and pit in front ... with the sound of one more bullet he steps ahead as a reflex and falls down,into the pit ...

His body hits few bushes, he keeps falling down and down , and then he feels himself in water ... death was the only thing he can think of , this time ... he was gonna die , his money and status didn't save him from dying ...

Goon 1 : ab isse koi nai bcha sakta , he is dead ... the water below looked so deep and no one can b saved specially when injured ...

Goon 2 : boss will b really happy ... he calls and says " boss kaam ho gya "

Boss : yaad rhe , koi nishani nahi rehni chaiye

Goon : hmm , ab to wo khud ko b nai dhoond sakta boss...

Boss : theek ha , tumhara share mil jay ga .. and hangs up

Goon 1 : ab jaldi se chalna chaiye , is ki gadi ko b gayab karna ha ..

Goon2 : looking down once again ,haan chal jaldi ... and they leave

She hears the sound of something falling in water and thinks : " lo phir se gir gya koi janwar paani main , yeh khai b na ... "she comes out to check in water ... there was blood oozing out and was coloring the water ... "khoon b nikal rha ha , jaldi kuch karna paday ga "

She jumps into water ... " oye ! yeh to insaan ha " " chal puttar roz janwaroon se deal karti ha aaj aik insaan ko b dekh le"

She comes towards him n try to pull his body up and shouts " oye , oye uth " before saying anything he loose his senses and start sinking again , water was getting into his body from nose n mouth ...

" lagta ha yeh to gya kaam se , main ab iss hatte katte ko kaisay nikalun yahan se " she starts dragging is body toward one edge ... He was not moving at all .. after the full effort of half an hour she succeeded in bringing him into her hut .. and make him lay on hay stack " is se to janwar hi theek ha , asani se nikal to jaata ha " it was late evening , " andhera honay se pehlay is ka kuch karna paday ga " ... she start pushing his chest as too much water went in his body ... , she checks his pulse which was beating so slowly .." abi zinda ha " , then notices the blood still oozing from his body ... she checks his leg, there was visible injury , moving the jeans a bit up she gets to know its not normal injury ..

" uh , lagta ha goli lagi ha , abi tak ander hui to ??"she had to check ... she runs out and lit the fire outside quickly , and burn the knife corner on it and then comes back , she enters the knife in and it hits something hard .. " goli to ab tak ander hain , nahi nikali to yeh mar jay ga , khoon b nai ruk rha " ,.. she again goes to burn the knife and comes back .. pulling in the knife again she tries to remove bullet , he moves a bit in pain .. " acha ha koi harkat to ki is ne , mar gya to bahar kaisay phekun gi , agay hi mushkil se ander laaya ha " .. "jhalli! Kya soch rahi ha ?? janwar thori ha k mar gya to farak nai paday ga " ...

she keeps moving the knife to take the bullet out and a small piece of iron move out with knife and falls at some distance ... " lo ! tu to doctor b ban gai ? aur pata nai kya kya karna ho ga tere ko is jungle main "... his leg was bleeding badly ... " ab is pe kya bandhun ? koi cheez nai ha " then she looks at the cotton sheet , she used to sleep on , she takes it and make pieces , after putting some herbal balm she ties his leg , and looks at other injuries ... he was still not conscious ...

she removes his shirt which was still fully wet , there were glass pieces stuck in his chest from where the blood was oozing out , she removed one by one , he was stirring a bit with pain . she puts the balm and cover the wounds ... " yeh b ho gya ! ab pata nai kab ankh kholay ga , itni chot lagi ha thora time to lag hi jay ga " ,

Hut was almost dark now , she goes to other corner , removes her inners which were wet and wear another set ... yes ! she was not in dress ,or suit , not coz she didn't like , but she didn't have one ... she had only one kurta that too men's wear which she used to wear while going out of this jungle ... and in her hut she always remained in her inners ... taking an apple she starts munching it , ... she checks him again , his breaths were a bit normal ... she goes and apply oil on her body and then lay down a meter away from him as the place wasn't too large , " subh tak uth jay ga ! abi raat ho gai ha kahin ja b nai sakta yahaan se , mere b sone ka time ha , so hi jaati hun " ,.. within few minutes she falls off to sleep ...



thanks .. thats it for now .. hit like and comment 😊 hope u guys like it 😊

Guys i wont be able to send Pms .. next update is ready will be posting on tuesday ... bookmark the thread and check for updates ...

I didnt copy any scene or anyone's concept , as i cant write like others , the writers r too good here .. so if there is any coincidence , sorry for that 😊
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part 1...
read again...still remember shocking expression of mine when i come to know u wrote story n sweta read it also n m nt in any scne😡😡
haha...loved this story n journey of innocence of geet...hope others to enjoyed the way v did...all the best dear fr ur story...😃



Edited by vandy28 - 10 years ago
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Congratulations for ur first official story posted by u amna🥳...I love ur writing style very much...It's different than others and that is why make It unique...This is just a beginning...waiting to read more and more work from u in future... keep it up...🤗
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awesome update Amna...although I have read it once still it feel awesome reading it once again... loved maans entry very much and about geet her entry is totally unique and different than any other ffs I read till now...Love her way of talking and dressing style too😆...now waiting for next one...
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congrats on ur FF! lovely banner! waiting 4 first part! update soon! waiting
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Originally posted by: vandy28





part 1...
read again...still remember shocking expression of mine when i come to know u wrote story n sweta read it also n m nt in any scne😡😡
haha...loved this story n journey of innocence of geet...hope others to enjoyed the way v did...all the best dear fr ur story...😃



haha i sent her mistakenly and she wanted next parts ASAP . 😆... u were busy those days

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