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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: --Ratna--

Mari 🤗...loved all the poems but this was the best...If only you saw me touched my heart ❤️..simply awwwesome 👏

From behind that door, I peeked at you,
Days passed and then years flew,
While I silently and stealthily,
Enjoyed the beautiful view.


In all your glory, you sat unaware
Of what went through here and there,
Lost in your own bubble,
Unmindful of my stare.


One fine day,
Did my destiny sway,
Forced us together
And made you stay.


Little by little, bit by bit,
The path between us coyly lit,
A bond we formed,
In friendship we were knit.


In an instant so benign,
When your smile was ashine,
Did I perceive to myself
All my love was thine.


A million moments I tried to steal,
To have you by my side and listen to your laughter's peal,
To lay my heart bare to you,
To tell you how I feel.


A time did arrive,
When my courage did thrive,
I pulled you close
And I felt alive.


Whispered in your ear,
Clear, without fear,
Those magical words,
"Oh, I love you dear!"


My heart did break,
My form did shake,
When you refused my love,
But some decisions I did make.


To let you go,
Even if I love you so,
To turn away from you,
It did hurt though.


I realised with a start,
You were going to depart,
For an indefinite time,
We would be apart.


Forgetful of my word,
My thudding heart conferred,
To race after you,
To have your farewell deferred.


With you in sight, my running feet stopped,
Recalling your rejection, bitterness cropped.
But seeing you leave,
My heartbeats dropped.


My hand outstretched, which called out to thee,
The tear in my eye, you did not see.
How could you?
You would have seen it,
If only you turned around,
If only you saw me!
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Thank you so much, Ratna! 🤗 So glad you liked this poem. Feels like my effort of days was worth it. 😃
Can't take credit for the VM. My sister made it for me. :)
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Posted: 11 years ago
Mari 🤗...glad u liked my comment...thank u for taking the time to reply...so sweet of u...plz dont thank me...it was the least i could do after reading such a well written story...convey my appreciation to your sister for the lovely VM...you are all so talented...love u...tc 😊


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Posted: 10 years ago
i gasped.. as i read the note towards the end which mentioned about the end of the story!! I had no clue it ws 2 end dis way *sigh* while i read ws reading it i always had a smile on my face. The maan in this story was awesome so caring... at da end wen he was showing his anger it was a shock but i don't blame him guess its a natural reaction... geet i can't really say if her reasons for rejecting maan was... i don't know wat 2 say!! but i wud say i loved dis story very much. amazingly written :)
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: bina_a

i gasped.. as i read the note towards the end which mentioned about the end of the story!! I had no clue it ws 2 end dis way *sigh* while i read ws reading it i always had a smile on my face. The maan in this story was awesome so caring... at da end wen he was showing his anger it was a shock but i don't blame him guess its a natural reaction... geet i can't really say if her reasons for rejecting maan was... i don't know wat 2 say!! but i wud say i loved dis story very much. amazingly written :)


It's a pleasure knowing you enjoyed reading the story and the characters. Thank you for the compliment! 😳
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Posted: 10 years ago
Beautiful story👏
thank you for the link.
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: .CherryBlossom.

Beautiful story👏

thank you for the link.



Thank you! I'm glad you liked it. 😊
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Posted: 10 years ago
I dont know if this comment will make any sense now cos I have already read this story once n commented too few months back but not in a proper way as the story was a complete one. Plus I had just started reading FFs then n I was always hesitant of writing down my feelings or thoughts thinking my comment could hurt or offend the writer who take time out of their busy life n write something for us readers. But now since its almost a year to my reading FFs n also when I had decided to read the sequel of this story I thought it would be better if I go n read IOYSM again to get into the flow of wired hearts so that I dont miss anything in the sequel.


And frankly speaking m surprised with my own changed perspective after reading this story the second time now. First time when I had read it I was completely under Maan's spell n so I was only thinking from his POV, his feelings, his love, his pain, his heart break. I was even kinda angry at Geet for breaking his heart n even thought that she indeed led him on. But strangely after the second read I dont think that way anymore may be cos I could now see her POV too n understand her feelings n what she must have gone n felt. I was also out of that Maan spell this time n could read the story without being biased.

From the start of the story I had just fallen for Maan in the first read so much that I had ignored everything else. But now I can see it more clearly n also now I dont blame Geet for whatever happen like before. Or for the way his heart was broken so badly.

Maan had been infatuated for 3 long years, he had also followed her day to day n she had been on his mind for a very long time n yet he wasnt sure of his feelings until he read Geet's mother's letter where she had played that whole marriage prank on Geet. He never even tried a single time to make a move towards her or even start with a casual friendship cos she was the quite girl n he assumed she prefers that way which was true. But he got the opportunity of being her friend cos of the party of which they were asked to do the decoration. Else I even doubt if he had ever made any move towards her? Also not to forget even after being her friend he was on a sacrifice mode to let go of her when he assumed Ayush likes her. He was ready to let his feelings take a back seat n help Ayush. But fortunately for him Ayush was interested in Anaya n then the Geet's mother's letter played as a catalyst for him to know that his feelings for her run much deeper than a mere infatuation. So how can I expect her to feel for him just within 6 months of friendship? If he after being infatuated by her can think to let go of her for his friends then how can I expect her to agree to be in a relationship with him when she had just 2 months ago accepted that she is attracted towards him?

And before the attraction from Geet started, what followed in that small period of 4 months was a beautiful journey of Maan n Geet becoming great friends. So much that even Geet had started to feel for him something but she was in denial in the start. She was so naive n innocent towards his attraction towards herself that it was G who sow the seed in her about Maan's interest in her. Or else she would have always thought that he just sees her as his friend n nothing else. And when she had finally felt that he does feel something for her she never knew how deeper his feelings are. For her she n Maan knew each other only for 4 months then, she wasnt aware of the fact that for him though he is aware of her for 3 long years. And when she accepted her attraction for him it was only 2 months of her stay remaining with her friends n Maan after which she was to leave. So she never let her feelings for him come in forefront. She always just thought about it n later let go. But her being with him n be comfortable with him, show that side of her which she often shows to anyone made him think n assume that she too might be having feelings for him which was true n she even accepted it to him after his confession. But her feelings dint run that deeper like his did. Moreover it was only 2 months that she had accepted her attraction for him to herself and even to Raya. But she knew she was leave n she really cant keep him hanging. Plus if she had led him on somewhere then I would also say he was too late to confess his feelings for her. I mean that girl is to leave the very next day n you come to her n confess your feelings to her n expect that she would immediately agree, that too a girl like Geet how her character was in this story somewhere unfair of his part too. He just dint give her much time to think over his proposal/confession with clear mind n wanted his answers there n then which was slightly impossible for Geet when she knew she has to return to her parents the very next day. He himself gets late in expressing his feelings and then also gets impatient. He was so hurt n busy in his feelings being not reciprocated by her the way he wanted that he just dint give her chance to explain her point. He just assumed she led him on but he failed to understand n see that he was also a bit late in confessing. If he had confessed at least on his date then may be she would also have got the time to ponder over her feelings n not take any decision in haste n break his heart in such a way. He dint left her with much time to think over it n even broke his friendship with her. If she was a bit coward to run from this situation then even he wasnt strong enough to take the rejection or even try to think from her POV. I'm sure if he had given her some time at least n asked her that she can answer him a bit later since she is going tomorrow, think with a clear mind, she might have probably said yes or even if she would have refused later, she would at least have made him understand in a better way rather than him just breaking the beautiful bond of friendship just cos she doesnt reciprocrate his feelings. But the problem was they dint had the time plus both acted on impulse. In her cowardiness/fears she refused him n in his heart break, pain n rejection he dint let her explain n give that time. He was just not ready to listen to anything whereas she kept trying n trying to get into touch with him by calling him n sending sms. So if Geet was wrong then now I believe even Maan was wrong too. But I know that in real none are at fault.

And last time though I had said that the title itself said the end of the story. But even that made me change my perspective over it. She dint saw him cos he was always hiding himself from her. For 3 years he was hiding n silently watching her n observing her and even when she was to leave to her parents he was hiding behind the pillar. So if one chooses to hide n then say "if only you saw me" it would be a bit unfair on his part. After all how would she know that someone is expecting her to see him when he is hiding??

At the end I can only say that I had loved this story in first read, but in second I feel i love this story even more now. You are one great writer and m excited to read the sequel of it.

Hopefully I will soon be able to finish reading wired hearts n comment on it.


-Sanjana!
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Posted: 10 years ago
Oh btw m sorry about the length of my comment n also if I have in anyway hurt you.


-Sanjana!
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Posted: 10 years ago
Read it all in one go...That was just awesome story!!!!

I know that I dont like sad ending ones but still the way you wrote it, the way you described every detail in this ff...it was mind blowing...u r such a gifted writer!!!!!


i dont know if i like geet's character in this story or not...i had liked it all through the ff but the ending changed my opinion about geet
geet had from a long time known or i would say had an inkling about maan's feelings...she would have just made her stand clear then only...atlst maan wouldnt hv been hurt so much then
every person in her near periphery made her realize how much maan liked/loved her but still she never made an effort to stop it all
how could she have been so oblivious to his feelings when all his actions were pointing towards the same things...and that was his love for her

i really cnt blame maan for all he did...he was just trying to first make friends with her without any awkwardness so that he can make her fall in love with him and so that when he confesses it all...she wont feel uncomfortable being the loner she was
is it so wrong if a person is trying to go slow and steady so that there r lesser chances of rejection...is it so wrong to think about other person more than themselves?
he was just trying to follow everything step by step...as we all know friendship is the first step towards love...was it so wrong if he did that????


As much as I dislike it for its end, I like it for the way it ended...some lovestories r meant to be like this...some stories r meant to end just like that...but hey, u hv another sequel in which I hope you r going to make all my complaints vanish...so I hv a brighter side to look forward to after this

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