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Posted: 10 years ago
so abhay meet khushi and judging her nicely written
continue soon
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Posted: 10 years ago
Deepthi, If you can give me a schedule of your arrival time, I'll prepare myself to not miss the bus to reserve my spot, as there's way too much competition for seat reservation? So, please publish your ETA😊
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: bhavali4RR

Deepthi, If you can give me a schedule of your arrival time, I'll prepare myself to not miss the bus to reserve my spot, as there's way too much competition for seat reservation? So, please publish your ETA😊




Manasa, I should start posting in 30mins from now...i.e. @ 11.30 CST...😊
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Posted: 10 years ago

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Manasa, I should start posting in 30mins from now...i.e. @ 11.30 CST...😊


😭😭 I won't be able to make it. You guys enjoy
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: Srilathalolla


😭😭 I won't be able to make it. You guys enjoy

Most likely me either...Have fun grabbing my seat 😊
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Posted: 10 years ago
very heavy in emotions update...beautifully written..so much to grasp from it ...
Arnav's dhamakedar entry ,his concern for khushi at peek..but khushi on mission ignore him :)...abhey and khushi both seems pretty at ease with each other at the time of her leaving...and abhey noticing all with vision...not only he was understanding arnav condition there his accusing eyes there...but side by side he noticing khushi too...that how she was supporting arnav few mins back and how she now ignoring him plus she meeting abhey personally but she didn't shared this with arnav ...i guess abhey character is worth praising here...how he added 2 plus 2 here...and got the clear picture of wts happening around him :)

i loved the fact deeps that u have shown beautiful father son relation once again...instead of throwing bad words in doubts on his father that wt and y khushi there...he came and asked wt happened here dad...maybe his eyes saying something else to abhey but arnav question was pretty decent and respectful in my eyes...

so finally the truth is out in front of khushi and that also from the one whom it was not expected...infact he wasn't expecting that even :)...loved the way u have written angry khushi verses angry arnav...so arnav found her really irresistible in angry form :)...but poor he could nt drool much on her as her sweaty condition brought him back to earth...loved the way he wanted to talk to her but at the same time khushi's ifs and buts were irritating him lots too...not in office abhey in front there...and he just to make her easy took her to washroom...but poor nurse there had to run with soapy hands ...haha...DR ASR in action :)...

i loved her the way she reminds him of his words on friendship ..no secrets between ...and uff i loved the para where she talked about at receiving end always ...that was very painful...at the same time the way she wanted to know arnav's pain...that is beautifully written...loved the way he blurt out the truth in misunderstanding while trying to bring ease to her...and her simple reply ...i came to apologised for hospital closure...

the way realisation hit him...that he did big blunder...beauty deeps...the way her words sank into him later ...superb superb

her never dying spirit to be there for him also the way he always there for her...that finger weaving with his finger...that moment of reliving the promise ...she wanted to help ...but he avoiding the discussion...she was so worried about arnav's family...her words about loss...so true that either khushi or arnav side both sides having emotions involve completely ...saving one other is going to be hurt...and in this all efforts of her to convince arnav ...the cruel or brutal truth about signing the papers herself out too...so many things happened ...:)...and from here the way u have shown her guilt over coming her senses...her shattered form...her silence...her rotten state...that was very very painful...loved arnav reaction after seeing her condition ...after hearing her words...she blaming herself...simply fantastic writing...

it was simply awesome the way arnav felt bad ...wt he did...that anger on himself..loved that caring embrace from arnav side...those tears staining his white coat..his soothing and assuring words that its not ur fault khushi at all...simply awesome

and then the mutual agreement for going on bus...after considering all the options arnav final decision ,bus...how thoughtful of him...so he knew fully wt happened between khushi and shashi on the ph calls issue...and after that his conscious and careful steps...walking side by side to bus stop..and then the way u have written bus journey...simply wow...i guess if someone ask me to write a page on bus journey...i am going to pass now in flying colours now...lol...excellent writing deeps...starting from the traumatic entry in bus to the ambiance inside the bus...so real u wrote...its awesomeee...his observation...his experience ...all beautifully written...and in-between this all chiaos...he noticing her...and she though silent but her eyes delivering more than words ...she wanted that friendly warmth again...but he keeping the distance just to keep her safe from another problem ...although fully understanding her silent whisper but holding himself only and only for her...she lost in her shell of pain ...and he lost in her...i guess night is neither easy for her nor for him ...




Edited by lalarukh - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
I am at the station!!!
Is there a lot of traffic in the roads today?

I can see the bus arriving...🥳
Edited by albmum14 - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
As Jerry Maguire alluded to, you had me at the teaser. Just like an angry Khushi, this chapter was irresistible in so many ways.

Just when I thought all the speculations have covered every twisted angle, I admire your ability to still walk away with "Kahaani mein twist hai". I envy your knack of making your every chapter into a teaser for the many more to come. With you, it's always just about how big a margin you beat the expectations by. Kudos Deepthi👏

I have one question though - how do you pick the remotest places for romance and convince us that, "yes, you can"😃. Doctor's examination room, the dingy phone booth and now a women's washroom - I am sure a treatment from you can turn the stench of the sewer into the scent of a river or the feel of an evening sea breeze👏.

It is interesting that even in the heat of all those special moments, you still bring out the innate character of Arnav and Khushi. She is still confined by the rules even at the time of privacy, he still does not care about the rules of the ordinary, private or public. She wants justice not at anyone's cost and he wants justice, no matter the cost. The word "diverse" probably does very little justice in comparing their attitudes. But, the words "love" and "care" more than make up for whatever difference, "diverse" conveys between them.

For all the don't care attitude - your statement "I would never do that for what she has done to us..to you" - he did care to correct himself and still convey what he wanted to say. He (read as "you") my dear, know when to slip on purpose😉.

It is an interesting conundrum you setup. On one end you have Arnav who has made promises beyond his choice and on other end you have Khushi whose choice has a hard time even reaching the stage of promise. But, when does love ever give you a choice. You start loving, no matter what' and you keep doing it no matter what', until you reach a stage where the "what" does not matter anymore - no matter what'.

Here is my highlight though -"race", "war zone", "impatient", "fight", "hijack", "crushed", "yell", "choked" - all action packed and superhero movies consist of these words, but somehow all these words had nothing to do with the movie here and if you can believe it, they were all used in your description of a simple daily mundane routine we commonly refer as "commute"😊. Added to that the naivety and inexperience of Arnav, as you have aptly said, was a "priceless sight" and a "priceless read".

Lastly, as Arnav perceives it, crowd or no crowd, seated or footboarding, choking or checking out his girl, you don't want some rides to ever end. This chapter was no different. Already eager for the next ride😃.
Edited by bhavali4RR - 10 years ago

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