Broken Angel FF Update Pg 53- Complete!!!

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Posted: 10 years ago
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Hello my fellow Prajaians hope everyone is doing well and enjoying the action packed sequences we are getting in the show

My new story is here and let me tell you we are going to have a lot of FUN in this one😉

I had this idea crawl into my brain one night - what if JB found out about Ajabde and decided to teach DB a lesson- a lesson that would make all her grey cells turn into mush and also show the rest of the family their wrong doings- so I started writing

Broken Angel will have Adult Praja - separation has happened, everything is in ruins and JB makes a comeback to make everything alright
Ajabde will be seen in a different avatar- because I'm bored of the way they have been showing her in the show😛

PS: Some situations will have my characters do things/say stuff that might not be consistent with the times or their original character- so please remember that it is me enjoying my freedom to make them do all those stuff and Lastly it is all fiction meant for fun

Hope you enjoy my work


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Posted: 10 years ago
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Broken Angel

Prologue

Jaiwanta Bai Songara was a woman who was not to be messed with - she had her tricks that could make enemies weep like babies. She had always prided herself in being a calm and rational person but now as she faced the dark truth she realised that sometimes it is essential to use tricks to get the work done and she would do the very same

DheerBai Bhatiyani you think that you have won by blaming an innocent child for your own greedy sake but I promise you that when I'm finished with you- you would be a reformed woman

Chapter 1

The entire royal family of Mewar is seated in the court seeing the proceedings when a messenger brings a sealed letter for Maharani DheerBai who faints after reading it creating an alarm. Veer Bai the youngest wife of Uday Singh picks up the letter and has shock written on her face

US: Veer Baiji whose letter is this?

VB: Ranaji the letter is from Maharani Jaiwanta Baiji!!!!

Everyone is stunned - a letter from the real queen had arrived which meant that she would be returning as well. DheerBai had been taken to her chamber where she was resting but in reality she was thinking about the letter and its consequences

Pratap, US, Rawatji, Jagmal and the others come over for a visit when she twists the letter as a prank played on them but arrival of Guru Raghvendra and his confession leaves them shocked and sad

Guru Raghvendra was a man of principles so when he himself found out about the incident at Chittor palace he spoke to Jaiwanta Baiji about it as he believed that everything that happened with Ajabde was wrong and unjust. Jaiwanta Baiji had been so upset and ashamed at her family's way and felt guilty on learning about Rao Mamrakh's death that she decided to help her daughter-in-law in a way that would be remembered for years to come. So she came up with a plan - a plan to teach everyone especially DB a lesson and she prayed with her heart that it worked

Chapter 2

Guru Raghvendra rarely involved himself in familial issues but seeing the injustice happening to Bijolia and its residents he decided to help Jaiwanta Baiji in her quest which brings him to his current location - seated comfortably in the luxurious room of the palace he was waiting for his hosts to show up as when they did he (GR) was about to tilt their entire world on its axis

DheerBai accompanied everyone to meet Guru Raghvendra as she wished to learn the motives behind his impromptu visit. So after all greetings were done he (US) broached the topic of his visit

GR: I have come here to escort Kunwarani Ajabde Baisa to Maharani Jaiwanta Baiji so that her efforts to keep this family safe especially your son Kunwar Jagmal can be completed

US: Ajabde? Jaiwanta Baiji wants Ajabde of all people?

GR: Why wouldn't she want her Ranaji? As far as I know she has been singing praises of her daughter-in-law in all the holy places she has been visiting making sure that no harms come to the family

Everyone looks shocked at this revelation and DheerBai tries to steer them towards the lie she had created

DB: I apologise for interrupting but we were under the influence that it was because of Ajabde that Jija left all of us. She in briefs re-counts the entire incident

GR: I cannot believe it that you are saying this Dheer Baiji (making everyone stare at the woman)

DB: I don't understand Guruji

GR: I met with Jaiwanta Baiji very recently and she told me she has been in constant touch with you since her departure that all the messages she sent with regards to the puja, fasts and special rituals to be performed by Ajabde have been met with as per your responses

DB is stunned to learn this developing fact

US: What is he saying Dheer Baiji? Have you been in touch with Jaiwanta Baiji and not informed us about it?

DB: No... I never received any letters

GR: But she has been getting responses with your signature Dheer Baiji

Rawatji speaks up: Maybe someone did play a prank on us Ranaji - a prank that led to an innocent child being blamed for all the bad- a prank that led to the daughter-in-law of this family to be humiliated and insulted and thrown out like mere garbage and now with this new development we are again seeing a prank - someone is out to harm the royal family and succeeded in breaking it apart

Pratap's head is hung low realising the truth about everything - Ajabde was innocent and he blamed her for his mother's departure from his life. He married her took vows to protect and honour her in front of the sacred fire but he never fulfilled them at all

GR: Rawatji are you telling me that Ajabde is no longer at the Chittor palace

Rawatji: I'm telling you Guruji that mere 24hrs after her wedding Ajabde was thrown out of Chittor for making Jaiwanta Baiji leave

Chapter 3

GR: Hmmm then I need to leave and inform Jaiwanta Baiji about it after all only she would know on how to proceed with the puja

VB: May I ask about the significance of the puja Guruji

GR: Ji.. Jaiwanta Baiji was informed by an astrologer that the family would be facing a major crisis especially Kunwar Jagmal who would probably come face to face with death and not survive. Well as Rajputs we are not scared of death but his death would have been not in an honourable manner that would leave dark stains of shame and humiliation on the family and the entire Rajputana. The only way to counter it was to devote oneself in utter supplication to the Gods for at least 8years. Jaiwanta Baiji knew that Dheer Baiji would not have been able to do it as Jagmal at the time was a toddler and she was attached to him as any mother so for the betterment of this family she went to perform the rigorous task of devotion which included separation from one's family, renouncing every worldly luxury, fasting without taking a drop of water and holy pilgrimage. Unfortunately I have to be the bearer of the bad news that all her efforts had been in vain

VB: Why is Ajabde important for the puja?

GR: Well after Jaiwanta Baiji Ajabde is the only person in this family well in the entire Rajputana to be honest that can devote herself completely. Her virtues extol her to be the most blessed of us all but after what was done to her I would be surprised to know that she wants to even see Kunwar Pratap or anyone from this family

Everyone is in shock learning the truth about Jaiwanta Baiji's reason for leaving them except Veer Bai who was confused but GR had already placated her with his reasons. US, Rawatji and Pratap were all feeling guilty on their past actions and DheerBai well she was numb - her son's life was at stake and the one person who could save him was sent away by her own actions

DB: I will go to Bijolia. She declared as everyone turned to look at her when suddenly a servant runs in with the news of Jaiwanta Baiji's arrival in Chittor

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Posted: 10 years ago
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phaaasiii DBji Phasiii yeyyy

i feel like dancing ... GR bhi mil gaye wwah wahh wahh
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Lovely os 😛 Eagerly waiting for the next part
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Hey Garima I'm Aayushi aka aayu and I'm new in this forum.
I have read all your stories but couldnt reply due to 10th boards🥱
Coming to the story I must say you are a fantastic writer and your ideas are mind blowing. Your stories are lyk druge..full addiction👏
hope to read more from you😛😛
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Garima awesome start waiting for the next update eagerly
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Posted: 10 years ago
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You're back with a resounding bang !!!
What a beginning, Garima !!!! Man mein celebrations ki ghantiya baj rahi hai DB ki haalat ko dekhke 🥳... Jai ho JB ki !!! Jai ho GR ki !! VB ko zara kam sochna chaahiye 😆 I know, vo positive character hai, but apni chaturaayi mein kahi saare plan ka kachra na karde 😕😃😆...Anyway, continuing with the celebrations, I have a song dedicated to this situation😉... Actually, mera naachne ka man kar raha hai 😆

Chappan Taare Tod Naach Lu
Suraj Chanda Mod Naach Lu
Abb To Tabad Tod Nach Lu
Mein To Banjara Re


Ban Ke Awaara
Mein Kis Mele Mein Pahunch Gaya Hoon
Koi To Roko Kho Jau Re
Masti Ka Mara Mein Kya Bolu
Yeh Kisi Kahun Main
Dil Ka Main Hara Ho Jau Re

Dil Hara Re
Dil Hara Hara
Dil Hara Hara
Main Hara 🥳🥳🥳🥳


Can't wait for the next update !!!!!
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Posted: 10 years ago
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The egg is on Dheer Bai's face. Haha. This will be fun.

If not already, very soon you will have the most stories on this forum.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: pari0706

phaaasiii DBji Phasiii yeyyy

i feel like dancing ... GR bhi mil gaye wwah wahh wahh



aage aage dekho hota hai kya😉

naacho naacho khub naacho 😃
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: aayu_26

Hey Garima I'm Aayushi aka aayu and I'm new in this forum.

I have read all your stories but couldnt reply due to 10th boards🥱
Coming to the story I must say you are a fantastic writer and your ideas are mind blowing. Your stories are lyk druge..full addiction👏
hope to read more from you😛😛



Hi Aayu its nice to meet you 😊
Welcome to our lovely forum - please feel free to throw tamatar, joota, chappals everythinjg on our CVs when they irritate or try to distort history which they do often😆

Thank you loving my work and I hope your exams went well

I understand but check out the other stories as well in the forum and trust me those guys are like superb and amazing and just fantabulous😃

PS: Just saw your story - will check it out and leave some love for you 😊

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