SS: Rays of Sunshine UPDATED LAST PART PAGE 7

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Posted: 10 years ago
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Hello people of Indiaforums! 😳
I'm Jabeen.. And I've had this idea stuck in my head for about a week, I just had to write it down. I'm a bit of a melancholic writer so apologies in advance.. 😆
This forum is full of writers who have inspired me to think of an idea.. and turn it into a story. This idea has been in my head for a week and today, I thought well let me try and start writing it down at
least.. 😳
Apologies for any mistakes.. again in advance LOL..
-Short Story: Rays Of Sunshine-
The wind blew the doors to the Mehra mansion wide open, causing the garland placed upon Supriya Mehra's picture to sway towards the right. It had been exactly one month. One month since Supriya Mehra had passed away. In her absence, there laid emptiness, confusion and change. When someone you are so close to goes, the pain is unexplainable. The truth remains, every soul shall taste death, every soul shall remain accountable for their actions and all will not be lost.

***

"Tanu, Will you just stop? Do you realise what you are saying? It has just been a month since Dadi has" Aaliyah croaked, before pausing and regaining her posture. Dadi's death had hit her hard. She was the only female presence in her life, someone who had always been there since the beginning. Someone who knew, someone who was family.

Tanu quickly rearranged her manner of speaking. "Aaliyah, I know what you mean. I'm really upset about what happened to dadi. But it was an accident. And such things happen in life. Look Aaliyah, I'm sure Dadi wanted your happiness, as well as Abhi's too. And Abhi's happiness is with me. Not that chashmish!"

"Look Tanu, I know you love bhai. I understand this is hard for you but you need to give him some time. It's hard on him, It's hard on all of us"

"Aaliyah, how much more time do I give him!?" Tanu screeched. "I have tried to cheer him up, he just isn't listening to me. He ignores me. I'm trying to divert his attention but no.. and not to mention marriage. He doesn't want to hear it.." Tanu yelled, walking along Aliyah;s room, up and down clasping her phone to her hand. "Tanu, I think he's fallen in love with Pragya. He must have. I can't do this. I need him Aaliyah. You have to talk about marriage to him, that's it. I know nothing"

***
Pragya was sitting besides Abhi on the bed. Her hand on his folded ones on his lap. She was rubbing his hand soothingly and another with a plate full of uneaten food. "Suniye, please have a little bit of food."

"I don't want it."

Pragya took a bit of roti and dipped it in the sabzi putting her hand out to his lips. "Abhi, you need to eat. Otherwise you'll get ill"

"Pragya, I've said I don't want to eat. Stop forcing me." Abhi replied, standing up and turning his face from her.

Pragya put the plate down and held his face making him look at her. "Abhi" she whispered. Her eyes reflecting her understanding. Her eyes expressing her sadness. Her eyes expressing the tenderness of her love for him. "She.. She.. I" Abhi gasped and hit his head onto her shoulders crying. He couldn't, it was too much.

"I know Abhi, I know.." Pragya whispered, rubbing his head soothingly. "Sshhh" she whispered. They stayed like that for a while.

"Abhi, you need to eat"

"Have you eaten?"

Pragya looked down as a response, her eyes suddenly fascinated at the bed pole.

"Eyy chashmish.. this won't work. Trying to make me eat when you haven't eaten yourself."

"How can I eat when you are hungry?"

Abhi just stared at her. Pragya. She was there, she existed. Everything else didn't matter right now. She was always there. Always there when he needed her. Always there when he was mean to her. Always there when he didn't even consider her his biwi. And she was always there for dadi. His beloved, beloved dadi. Without realising what he was doing, he unconsciously took his hands and cupped her face. She looked at him in surprise, her eyes staring into his. She trusted him. And he places a small kiss on her forehead, leaning his face against hers so their foreheads were touching and his nose was on top of hers.. Still touching.

***
There you go.. Looking back at this part, I feel it is a bit short. But hey, this is a short story LOL😆
Another thing.. Apologies about dadi's name. I wasn't sure what her character name was in the show.. so I named her Supriya Mehra.
Thank you for reading. 😳

Part 1: Page 1
Part 2: Page 3
Part 3: Page 5

Part 4 and EPILOGUE: Page 7
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Amazing!! Glad you posted it here.. I love this... The way you wrote this.. Amazing!! Do continue soon..😃
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Aww the sadness of Abhigya and Aliya was described nicely! So emotional! I think her name is diljeet (don't know how to spell it) I hope there is more to this!
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Great story! I'm glad I read it. I loved that you mentioned Aliya is feeling sad because Dadi was the only female presence in her life. And Tanu is as selfish as ever! 😡 But that Abhigya scene at the end was the best.
I loved the line when Abhi asks her how she can ask him to eat if she hasn't eaten. And then the moment when their noses touch. So emotional and cute at the same time!
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Posted: 10 years ago
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So beautiful 😭
I was on the verge of crying and you ended it 😆 😭
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Very beautifully written! what a gorgeous story :)
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Wow that was awesome.
loved it.
do continue soon.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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It's beautifu.. Soft corner to aliya's character... Plz continue..
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Posted: 10 years ago
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OMG!!!! JOLLY JABEEN!!! A STORY FROM YOU!!!! YAYYY!!!!! 🥳
I am so happy to read this Jabeen!! You have no idea!! 😃

Okay first of all! HUGS! And HUGS!! 🤗It's been so long!

And today for a change it's my turn to comment!! 😆

Jabeen I already know what an amazing person you are but never knew you are such an amazing writer!

Well, first part is too short for my liking coz I want to read more! But it was so amazing!

I love Aaliyah truly mourning Daadi's death. And AbhiGya! UFF!! No words!!! She is always there lines are nicely done! Their connection, love is so transparent and I am dying to read more!! Plz update soon Jabeen!!

Lots of love to you Jabeen!, ❤️
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Posted: 10 years ago
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First off Dhinglu (Diahh) thank you for bringing this to my attention...

Jabeen what a beautiful start! Love it...dealing with dadis death... I love how you've portrayed aliyah...atleast she cares about dadi! And abhi and pragya...ohh the feels!


Please update really soon!

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